Jamicus
My first attempt at an original movie script. Please tell me what you think.
FADE IN:
EXT. OUTSIDE "THE HOLE" - EVENING
RYAN, NOLLIE, STAN, KEVIN, STACEY, EXTRAS
The camera is high above the medium-sized crowd of people
It swoops down and eventually onto 3 teenage boys.
RYAN
When are they gonna let us in ?
STAN
The doors don't open 'till 8:30
RYAN
Dude, Its 8:45
STAN
What ?
When're they gonna let us in ?
RYAN
I don't know !
That's what I was asking you !
STAN
Well how am I supposed to know ?
RYAN
I don't know !
The camera turns towards another group of boys.
Nollie is doing some tricks on a halfpipe.
KILMER
Awesome, Nollie, man.
Awesome !
NOLLIE
Yeah.
See if you can't beat that ******* !
What a dick.
A skater grabs his board and goes to the halfpipe.
KILMER
Hey, man, when're they gonna let us in ?
NOLLIE
Oh, uh Kevin and Stacey are busy
inside, if you know what I mean.
The skater in the background falls.
2.
KILMER
Kevin ?
But we've been waiting 15 minutes !
He couldn't last 5 with Brianna.
NOLLIE
Yeah, well Stacey isn't as hot as Brianna.
KILMER
Yeah, shes got a nice ass though.
NOLLIE
There they are now.
KEVIN and STACEY walk out of the entrance to
"The Hole".
Stacey's hair is messed up and Kevin's T-shirt is
on backwards.
NOLLIE
Yeah !
The Hole's doors are open !
And so are yours.
CUT TO:
INT. THE HOLE - EVENING
RYAN, STAN, NOLLIE, KILMER, EXTRAS
The Hole is crowded. Loud Rock Music is playing and
people are in the pit. The room is dark and everyone is sweaty.
Ryan and Stan are standing at the bar. Nollie approaches them.
NOLLIE
Hey whats up Ryan.
RYAN
Hey Nollie.
Stan reaches over towards Nollie to
pick up his drink.
NOLLIE
WOW !
What are you doing ?
STAN
Getting my drink.
NOLLIE
Listen, Stan.
I don't swing that way, and I don't
want you feeling me up, especially not
in public.
3.
STAN
Nollie, just because I'm gay
doesn't mean that I want to **** every guy in this room.
NOLLIE
Well you're not getting your hands on me.
I am as straight as the day god made me.
Okay ?
STAN
Yeah, whatever.
Nollie walks away.
STAN
*******.
The camera cuts to Nollie and Kilmer talking
to some ladies, than back to Ryan and Stan.
RYAN
Yeah, he is an *******.
STAN
Well would you tell him that. Everytime
he starts talking to you, you look up at
him like a puppy. I'm starting to think
you're gay.
RYAN
What ? C'mon, I was totally backing
you up there. I know you don't like him.
Cos' I know that its not like gay guys like
every man they see.
STAN
Exactly, He's just so full of himself.
I hate guys like him
RYAN
So, did you always know you were gay or
did you just one day decide, Hey that guys
got a nice ass ?
STAN
I've known since I was about twelve.
RYAN
Really ?
I didn't even like girls when I was twelve.
STAN
Neither did I.
4.
The camera zooms out of Ryan and Stan to show
the whole set of The Hole. Everyone is still moshing.
A bell sound rings.
CUT TO:
EXT. NORTH RAINTON HIGH GATES - MORNING
RYAN, STAN, DICKY
The guys are walking into school, Its a nice morning.
There are a few people behind them.
RYAN
How come you didn't show up last night, Dick ?
DICKY
Well I had a prior engagement with my PC.
Christina Coxxx.
RYAN
You wasted you load on Chrisina Coxx ?
What about Candy Suxx ?
DICKY
No way !
Candy's boobs are tiny.
RYAN
So, Christina's ass is tiny.
DICKY
At least she's got one !
RYAN
What ?
DICKY
I don't know....
STAN
I'd just like to point out how sad I think it
is that you two are argueing over porn stars.
RYAN
Blackjack.
STAN
Is a machine !
I don't care what anyone else says !
DICKY
So, did you get anywhere with Michelle last night ?
RYAN
No...she didn't show up.
5.
DICKY
Mabye she's gonna break up with you.
Ryan laughs a bit.
RYAN
Nah, I don't think thats gonna happen.
CUT TO:
INT. SCHOOL HALLWAY - 10 MINS LATER
RYAN, MICHELLE
The hallway is quite busy, students are hurrying to
their classes.
MICHELLE
I wanna break up.
RYAN
What ?!
Why ?!
MICHELLE
I've found someone else.
RYAN
WHAT ?
You just told me you loved me yesterday !
MICHELLE
Yeah, about that.
I don't
Ryan looks devastated and skulks away into his class.
INT. CLASSROOM - CONT.
RYAN, NOLLIE
The class is half-full. Ryan sits down next
to Nollie.
NOLLIE
Why the long ugly face ?
RYAN
I just got dumped.
NOLLIE
Really ?
[laughs}
If you can't even keep a ***** like Michelle
happy, your screwed !
FADE IN:
EXT. OUTSIDE "THE HOLE" - EVENING
RYAN, NOLLIE, STAN, KEVIN, STACEY, EXTRAS
The camera is high above the medium-sized crowd of people
It swoops down and eventually onto 3 teenage boys.
RYAN
When are they gonna let us in ?
STAN
The doors don't open 'till 8:30
RYAN
Dude, Its 8:45
STAN
What ?
When're they gonna let us in ?
RYAN
I don't know !
That's what I was asking you !
STAN
Well how am I supposed to know ?
RYAN
I don't know !
The camera turns towards another group of boys.
Nollie is doing some tricks on a halfpipe.
KILMER
Awesome, Nollie, man.
Awesome !
NOLLIE
Yeah.
See if you can't beat that ******* !
What a dick.
A skater grabs his board and goes to the halfpipe.
KILMER
Hey, man, when're they gonna let us in ?
NOLLIE
Oh, uh Kevin and Stacey are busy
inside, if you know what I mean.
The skater in the background falls.
2.
KILMER
Kevin ?
But we've been waiting 15 minutes !
He couldn't last 5 with Brianna.
NOLLIE
Yeah, well Stacey isn't as hot as Brianna.
KILMER
Yeah, shes got a nice ass though.
NOLLIE
There they are now.
KEVIN and STACEY walk out of the entrance to
"The Hole".
Stacey's hair is messed up and Kevin's T-shirt is
on backwards.
NOLLIE
Yeah !
The Hole's doors are open !
And so are yours.
CUT TO:
INT. THE HOLE - EVENING
RYAN, STAN, NOLLIE, KILMER, EXTRAS
The Hole is crowded. Loud Rock Music is playing and
people are in the pit. The room is dark and everyone is sweaty.
Ryan and Stan are standing at the bar. Nollie approaches them.
NOLLIE
Hey whats up Ryan.
RYAN
Hey Nollie.
Stan reaches over towards Nollie to
pick up his drink.
NOLLIE
WOW !
What are you doing ?
STAN
Getting my drink.
NOLLIE
Listen, Stan.
I don't swing that way, and I don't
want you feeling me up, especially not
in public.
3.
STAN
Nollie, just because I'm gay
doesn't mean that I want to **** every guy in this room.
NOLLIE
Well you're not getting your hands on me.
I am as straight as the day god made me.
Okay ?
STAN
Yeah, whatever.
Nollie walks away.
STAN
*******.
The camera cuts to Nollie and Kilmer talking
to some ladies, than back to Ryan and Stan.
RYAN
Yeah, he is an *******.
STAN
Well would you tell him that. Everytime
he starts talking to you, you look up at
him like a puppy. I'm starting to think
you're gay.
RYAN
What ? C'mon, I was totally backing
you up there. I know you don't like him.
Cos' I know that its not like gay guys like
every man they see.
STAN
Exactly, He's just so full of himself.
I hate guys like him
RYAN
So, did you always know you were gay or
did you just one day decide, Hey that guys
got a nice ass ?
STAN
I've known since I was about twelve.
RYAN
Really ?
I didn't even like girls when I was twelve.
STAN
Neither did I.
4.
The camera zooms out of Ryan and Stan to show
the whole set of The Hole. Everyone is still moshing.
A bell sound rings.
CUT TO:
EXT. NORTH RAINTON HIGH GATES - MORNING
RYAN, STAN, DICKY
The guys are walking into school, Its a nice morning.
There are a few people behind them.
RYAN
How come you didn't show up last night, Dick ?
DICKY
Well I had a prior engagement with my PC.
Christina Coxxx.
RYAN
You wasted you load on Chrisina Coxx ?
What about Candy Suxx ?
DICKY
No way !
Candy's boobs are tiny.
RYAN
So, Christina's ass is tiny.
DICKY
At least she's got one !
RYAN
What ?
DICKY
I don't know....
STAN
I'd just like to point out how sad I think it
is that you two are argueing over porn stars.
RYAN
Blackjack.
STAN
Is a machine !
I don't care what anyone else says !
DICKY
So, did you get anywhere with Michelle last night ?
RYAN
No...she didn't show up.
5.
DICKY
Mabye she's gonna break up with you.
Ryan laughs a bit.
RYAN
Nah, I don't think thats gonna happen.
CUT TO:
INT. SCHOOL HALLWAY - 10 MINS LATER
RYAN, MICHELLE
The hallway is quite busy, students are hurrying to
their classes.
MICHELLE
I wanna break up.
RYAN
What ?!
Why ?!
MICHELLE
I've found someone else.
RYAN
WHAT ?
You just told me you loved me yesterday !
MICHELLE
Yeah, about that.
I don't
Ryan looks devastated and skulks away into his class.
INT. CLASSROOM - CONT.
RYAN, NOLLIE
The class is half-full. Ryan sits down next
to Nollie.
NOLLIE
Why the long ugly face ?
RYAN
I just got dumped.
NOLLIE
Really ?
[laughs}
If you can't even keep a ***** like Michelle
happy, your screwed !