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ok, so one day i was feeling down, so i started writing this......hope you enjoy..




Remember the pain in your heart, the pain that will forever bind you to the darkness. The darkness that knows no fear, for darkness is fear itself, all but in a disguise, shielded from mortal eyes, to only show a brief danger, but revealing itself as a far greater terror. For within the minds of mortals, we all but know light, light that has guided us since the first of our days. But the light, although luminous and seemed to be thought everlasting, has now failed us, for it does not rule the darkness, as darkness rules light. And darkness we should fear, for darkness is death, and death is but a poisonous rose, tempting, but deadly.
Sadness can shield a mind from happiness, much as darkness shields the heart from light. This is what we crave, light, for this is what we do not have, and the ever watchful, eager eyes of the fallen shall now gaze enviously upon the followers of the light, for they are triumphant and valiant, forever walking in lights path.

We are lost. As lost as the fallen leaves of a tree. For eternity, floating across the winds. We wonder, wonder like an interested child, over come from the delights of the world. We shall grieve , grieve as do the lost souls of the fallen world.



(that was only about 1/3 of it.....if u wanna hear more of it, jus ask.. )

Maybe because I just came from the Batman threads... it kinda reminds of Bruce Wayne.

lol.....nah, but u right.....i recently watched de old batman, member batman forever?
well, i guess you are referring to the lonely life he has lead, and all the pain he has endured.....

Remember the pain in your heart, the pain that will forever bind you to the darkness.


The darkness that knows no fear, for darkness is fear itself, all but in a disguise, shielded from mortal eyes, to only show a brief danger, but revealing itself as a far greater terror.


For within the minds of mortals, we all but know light, light that has guided us since the first of our days.


But the light, although luminous and seemed to be thought everlasting, has now failed us, for it does not rule the darkness, as darkness rules light. And darkness we should fear, for darkness is death, and death is but a poisonous rose, tempting, but deadly.


Sadness can shield a mind from happiness, much as darkness shields the heart from light. This is what we crave, light, for this is what we do not have, and the ever watchful, eager eyes of the fallen shall now gaze enviously upon the followers of the light, for they are triumphant and valiant, forever walking in lights path.


We are lost. As lost as the fallen leaves of a tree. For eternity, floating across the winds. We wonder, wonder like an interested child, over come from the delights of the world. We shall grieve , grieve as do the lost souls of the fallen world.

wow, u really fit dat in perfectly....

hehe yeah, so, going to write more? I'll disect (sp) it all up again to find meanings

I write poems too, there's one in the Kill the person above u thread in the horror movie section, lol

oh, well i've already written heaps more, so heres bout 1/4 of it, i jus av to copy n paste it! ..so here goes.....



Forget all your once treasured memories of hope, you know that they will not return, so why do you continue with this slight hope. For you know that darkness rules all, it is forever tempting the weak at heart. Such as you, who could not withstand its temptations. You are weak, as weak as the moon, covered by cloud. You only see darkness, it is not easily escaped, you know that. These thoughts of yours, forever dark, never light, the thoughts of a fallen angel, for that is what you are. Fallen. In the deepest depths of your soul, you know that you are still some what strong, only your heart has been shielded by so much dark, so this is all what you see, darkness, forever searching for freedom, freedom in darkness, an impossible feet. Hold my hand so that you may feel my pain, I do feel your pain, I feel it as you approach, I feel it in my heart. I know of your pain I ,know of its existence. But help will not be found from within me, for darkness is a worthy opponent, and within my own mind, I only, just barely, withstand its harsh torments.

Where are dreams? Lost? Perhaps amongst the darkness that has corrupted your soul, you hold strong to your dreams, for these are some what important to you, perhaps due to your life, the life which you do not wish to lead, as it causes you much more pain to your heart, pain that you already have, pain that you can hardly withstand.

cool, me gun read it....

owz mine? ..iz it sh*t or what?

hey i jus read ur poem....
n it was a kik ass poem!
u described everything really well....
good job!

lol. Your writing doesn't suck.

Anyways, it really is like reading your thoughts, because its like a narration talking to the audience. More of a prose than a story or a poem.

Oh, and I RP too. I should really write a story of my own one of these days -shake fist at school- lol

And thanks, I write a lot of poems... if I could think faster, I'd be able to rap with multisyllable words, lol

well i'm glad it dont suk...i showed it to sumone else, n dey didnt really say neting..
yeh, when i feel down i write sh*t lyk dis, its ow i feel....
lol.yer, i hate school, i wanna quit.....but my good ol' parents r preventing me from doing so!


np

review for vera's poems: wow! that was amazing material and great use of metaphor's there. it made me think of people/characters in lotr. i was thinking, could you do one for me? one about immoratlity. examining it, what it means, what it brings to life, and how it can be a curse. how mortals wish for it, and how elves/immortals don't understand that wish compeletely. a selfish wish indeed for all you cherish, you get to see wither and die away like a beatiful flower against the winter. something like that. i need a good poem for i'm failing at coming up with a good one for my upcoming potc fic with an lotr twist. let me know what you think vera! *hugs*

u lyk it!?

tankies Boppy!!!.. *hugs*

sure i'd luv 2! !!
me get started on it ....
on immortality? no probs.

mostly referring to the people in lotr. elves. you don't have to specify them, who or what race of those people that you are describing. thanks so much vera! *hugs*

no problem Boppy my pal!!. *hugs*

i don't want you to spend or take up too much of your time working on this, so you don't have to make it too long. ^.~

nah, not at all.....it aint takin up ma time....

oh good! continue then! ^.~ that's better than saying "tallie hoe!" lol

tankies..me continue...
ha! tallie ho i shall go!!!!!........omg..how lame was dat...

yes, we both fall into that category. that poem above, was that a continuation of your other work or the one that i requested?

i meant the one on the previous page since you are posting so much so fast!

......oh, no...continuation.
u aint seeing urs yet! .....

alright. ^.~ a surprise then?

do you title your work?

yer tis surprise

nah uh.....sumtimes i find it hard to find such a word to title my work...

maybe 'grieven souls'

maybe like:

the fallen
no solice

but that one you said sounds good too.

dose titles sound good...!

tanks...

do you have anymore poems?

um, i can post more of de other one ....a continuation of de originally posted one.....

nani? (that means eh?)

um, i can post more of the one i was posting b4.......coz deres still more of it.

sure!

that one sounds suicidal. where you you get your inspiration from and when did you write all this or some of this?

*nods yes*

i wrote this all recently, ....
actually, some of this is how i feel.....sometimes i get really down, and i guess writing is what releases my despair

same with me, releasing my despair part. i could write poems like your's if i tried really hard, but they would sound pretty crappy. i can only do short sentenes.

nah man, dun say dat, your vocabulary is very vast, and could hold such amazing poems..i find its easier if you only pay attention to how you feel n ignore everything that is going on around you.....

i may have a good vocabulary, but i lack in using big words. tis' what i worry about at times. not always. yes, it would be nice to ignore things around me and to not fear of a letdown in my work.

true, do not hinder youself with problems that have not yet come to face you yet....not that such problems would face you as i am sure they would not.

um, i finished ur poem
wanna see it?

thanks for the support and reassurance. ^.~ *hugs*

sure, i would be most honoured. ^.~

i love it vera! *hugs* thanks! i'll be sure to use it in my ficcy! i'll copy it into the document now so it would be ready! *hugs*

awwwwwww....
i'm so glad u lyk it!
coolies!!.. *hugs*

i'll soon let you know what my story is about that i'm going to use your poem in. you should be the first to read it. i hope. right now, i must take my leave and get some sleep for i am busy and will be away for a day or so. i might get a chance to chat here when i'm over at my friend's house. not sure. later vera, mon ami! *hugs*

good night from sodapop allerdyce. ^.~

..catch ya mon ami!
*hugs*

cya sodapop!

do you want me to summarize my fic and spoil things OR just give you a quick outline w/ surprises to come until you read it?

ummmmm.....me lyks surprises...sp outline wud be good.... den me c de surprises.....

say what?! you want me to give you the spoiler?

no! datz not what i meant......k i prolly typed it wrong...

then what did you mean?

to keep de surprises........

so i'm guessing i can't say much about it? alright, then no spoilers...?

no spoilers.......

no spoilers means that i can't/not allowed to explain or mention the lotr twist within the potc fic.

Something perhaps a Dark Jedi would say to lurk a young impressionable padawn into the dark side hmmm. It's easier for me to understand texts by placing them in certain situations. Though most would think that the text above is having help through hard times, the following is another interpretation. A thought outside the box.


Forget all your once treasured memories of hope, you know that they will not return, so why do you continue with this slight hope.


For you know that darkness rules all, it is forever tempting the weak at heart. Such as you, who could not withstand its temptations. You are weak, as weak as the moon, covered by cloud. You only see darkness, it is not easily escaped, you know that.


These thoughts of yours, forever dark, never light, the thoughts of a fallen angel, for that is what you are. Fallen. In the deepest depths of your soul, you know that you are still some what strong, only your heart has been shielded by so much dark, so this is all what you see, darkness, forever searching for freedom, freedom in darkness, an impossible feet.


Hold my hand so that you may feel my pain, I do feel your pain, I feel it as you approach, I feel it in my heart. I know of your pain I ,know of its existence. But help will not be found from within me, for darkness is a worthy opponent, and within my own mind, I only, just barely, withstand its harsh torments.


Where are dreams? Lost? Perhaps amongst the darkness that has corrupted your soul, you hold strong to your dreams, for these are some what important to you, perhaps due to your life, the life which you do not wish to lead, as it causes you much more pain to your heart, pain that you already have, pain that you can hardly withstand.

bravo.!..
placed dat perfectly! good job Aesma.....

where are the batz poems that you were telling me about? not the ones by aesma.

um, here r two, altho dey short.......

In the memory of the past that brought sorrow and hatred, we shall grieve over the lost souls, and pity the lone soul that was deserted...
( can u guess what dis is exactly bout?)

and.......

trappedc in a world of grief, hope has not found his soul, for his past holds shadow ans sorrow. He only lomgs for freedom from his cruel life. As darkness falls, he shall protect the innocent fromthe evil at heart.
He is lone. His heart...it is broken

i like both, some of those lines can be useful for my potc fic. if you don't mind if i borrow some of your poems. of course, if and when i do, i'll get permission first and give/note your credit to work.

ey man o course i dont mind...u ma pal after all if anything i'm flattered... coz u wanna use my work.........

coolies...

i rather use yours than have my brain fried/die off when i make some sad attempts to make my own...

*squints eyes...*
Boppy......tisk tisk, such a doubt shouldd not be a thought, as it is not truth..

sorry. i'm just so critical of my own work and a perfectionist!

naw, dun b sorry, but you should not worry yourself with such degrading thoughts......

i know! but...can't help it!

lol.........yes u can...say it wit me....yes i can!

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lol....me jus jokin...sorry if i freeked u out.....

yah didn't ^.~ i've heard far worse! *grins*