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dat was kik ass! congrats Boppy! twas a fantastic read!

vera: really ^.~ thanks *hugs* what do you think i should call it?

!!!! np .........hmmmm.......the perils of a broken world...... k datz shit

no no no! it actually sounds pretty cool! ^.~

...oh....k..tankies den!

you got any ideas or pointers for that one about beauty and vanity that i put a sample of at the end of "the blind men's scorn"?

A desirable escatasy.........um, ........

hmmm...do i really want to this word "escatasy" in my poem?

...soz, it was in a quote i saw bout beauty.....

Beauty is an esctasy:uit is as simple as hunger. There is really nothing to be said about it. It is like the perfume of a rose, you can smell it, and that is all.....

that's good. i'll think about incorporating some of those words in!

coolies.......

got anymore quotes about that or about things relate or can relate to nightcrawler?

hmmmm..i av to think bout dis.....

since we were talking about inu yasha earlier, maybe i can do one with demons!

!!!!!

um, i got one...but its reaaaaallllllllyyyyyy shit....


No one could ever understand his hurt. He remains a lone being, still searching for love, a desired yearning that could pull him out of his pit of despair.....

whose that about? kind of sounds like it's about miroku or inu yasha...not that you know who they are...

well, it was originally bout me, but o course i changed de gender to make it bout Kurt........

wow, it's really great how you two are alike! lol

lol.....i dunno, dat was a close call to kurt, so i typed it....

thanks vera. i took notes of the ideas you gave me and the lyrics we did by pm.

np ......

i'm not going to be working on any poems for now, just chillin' and working on my fanfiction before the break is over. (sorry for that end break reminder.)

datz cool......

oh that's right! i still need to give you the summary for my potc fic! i'll send it by pm, perhapes.

Nice, what happened to your Outsiders sequel

er...writer's block? had this other story that i really wanted to do...i'll try to get back to outsiders soon. it's just that i'm better at writing fantasy stories, esp. with my oc meta=humans!

lol, I understand!

dark is the hour that i reach for something that is not even there
then why do i go to hope when my mind is so clouded?
fog settling over me of things that once were
long are the hours of everlasting life that i hold within me
many flights to experience and feeling
some emotions that reach to the sky and depths of the ocean
seeing the world around you alter for the better or worse
people losing honor and strength of valor
nothing is what it used to be nor was it acknowledged
i am not one to say that i'm perfect or superior
i have my own scars that increase as sun rises and sets
some reopen and i bleed out to only regain the darkness
darkness i try to hard to hide for who i am and what i stand for
many shadows cling to me, haunting as i go
all the one's that i held dear all those lifetimes ago, are now gone
i only get to know another, a life, for such a shortime
the past i knew, was comforting and honourable
people did things for the sake of good and not glory
i'm not saying all people have lost their senses
some just need to find it, others just need to show it
all that glitters is not gold and shouldn't have to amount to it.

(tba)

*thinks*........hmmmm.......i no ive heard sum of dese lines from LOTR....

but...*claps* dat was graet Boppy!........excellent job!

yup! i took "dark is the hour" from whomever said it in the lotr movies. who was it? gandalf? anyways, i gave references to that b/c i want to make it themed lotr.

i'm not getting anywhere these days
with paranoia on my shoulders and hate before me
lashing out without a moments notice
why,why must i hurt the ones that are near me?
oh, no, why must i take things the hard way?

(in the style and play on nickelback's "learn the hardway" song from the daredevil soundtrack. this is not part of the poem above!)

please go to this link to check out some of my original work at fictionpress.com: Sodapop Allerdyce

my user profile there includes a poem that i co-wrote with vera, a poem from this thread, and a song that i wrote last week. nuff said and enjoy!

OMG BOP! i love them!

which one do you like best? and what do you make of my song called "stay gone"?

Very nice

You have an interesting style--very unique, more realistic than many poems. A lot of poetry is almost hard to understand because it's so... Figurative. It's quite refreshing to see somebody who just wants to get an idea across. I'm a little like that but I try to be somewhere in between the two...

Psst guys I made a poetry thread of my own...

why thank you for such a lengthy and positive review. i am most honoured of your praise. i have read some of your poems also, and they are nice and to the point. the words flow nicely and have a calming effect upon one's soul. i'll be sure to check out your poem thread!

Eternal Struggle

guilt and depression
both equally weigh down upon weary shoulders
weary of this broken life that they lead
minds heavy with tragic images
hearts filled with grief of lost love and chances
bodies pained to go on
do they ever find their soul purpose and place in life?
much have they wandered off their path, their sense of purpose
no can lend them help
even if they desire so
and so, the weary trudge on
along a never ending path
a path that is as bearen as a desert
desert of lonliness and dispair
the hot sun beating upon them cruely
like their cruel conscious scorning them all the time
life can be so harsh for the restless
restless who are hopeless, aimless, and cannot sleep
some find that sleep is no longer necessary
not as long as their past haunts them
following like a black cloud whereever they go
and wondering why
they may sit to take the time to see
see what a beautiful life they once had
they have all been on the upside of down
desiring to see a rainbow's smile
take a tip in the ocean
to take their time for them to heal
in reflection and dreaming, they think they can wash it away
bleeding scars of massive darkness
maybe tommorrow
maybe tomorrow, they'll find their way home?
maybe tomorrow

(half way through this, i played the lyrics upon stereophonic's "maybe tomorrow". i love that song and vid!! )

Boppy! i luved it!!!! bravo mon ami!......*claps*....

thank you thank you! *bows* here's a sample of the commentary that i provided in my user pro at fictionpress.net explaining the poem...

the newest edition to my poems is "eternal struggle". i have just wrote it at the spur of the moment and just a few seconds ago. this one was based on how i kind of felt today. also, to make it more general and not so focued upon me alone, i made the grief topic more general. i know the lines sound depressing, in all honesty, i'm not depressed to that level. i just felt crappy today. lack of sleep and getting a little cranky. just had to get it out in words. half way through the poem, i played off the lyrics from a fave song of mine. "maybe tomorrow" by stereophonics. they are a great band and have such wonderful and peaceful songs that i've ever heard. i'll soon post the link to the music video for you all to see. ^.^

Fictionpress.net eh? Looks like a cool place... I just joined it

sweet! what's your user name there, raven?

...twas kik ass Boppy! ......excellent!.....

i'm glad you liked it so much, vera! *hugs* ^.^ it's my best sounding song by far to my first one and other sloppy attempts. writing a song and poem used to be so hard until i really tried last weekend and posting here at kmc.

Well, there's a problem... There was something wrong with my activation email, so I emailed some person who's supposed to help with this probably a little over a week ago, and the b!tch hasn't responded...

wait...do you mean that you emailed the site...?

I think it was the admin... Or... Something...

if you e-mailed the site, don't bother. they never answer, as far as i know of. which really pisses me off when ff.net is going through some sort of shit. ack!

Oh... Then I guess I'm pretty much screwed ... Unless I can figure out how to sock...

what do you need help with?

Figuring out how to activate my stupid account at ff.net... When my activation email doesn't work...

gosh, sorry about that. it's been so long since i joined ff.net, so i can't remember how to do that part. as for the activation e-mail, maybe the site doesn't accept what your addie is from or you just need to wait until the registeration data sinks in and gets accepted by the site. maybe it works like when authors upload new content to stories and stuff, it takes 24 hours to show up on site for others to view and read.

your love is so devine, but the consequences are high
nevermind 'cause all the while my fortune faded

(a play on red hot chili pepper's "fortune faded. bit of a remix. hard to remix songs sometimes.)

here are the real lyrics that i changed:

so devine, but all the while my fortune faded
nevermind...

(my take above, was kind of how i thought the words went, but i was wrong when i looked it up.)

Damned To Feel

long nights of weary soul searching spent
finding reason to the clouds and wind
to clear a way in the sky to an open mind
the attempt to achieve a peace of mind
searching for ways to find that rainbow smile
to find a sun that won't set upon a perfect day
where the sky is clear and feeling free
no more whinding roads to overwhelm the mind
no more hot days that can break the will
no longer necessary to crawl to the pillar
to breath in the fresh air and let all be well
storms of the damned fading away to nothing more
presssure of gravity no longer a concept to concern
consequences at a high price go to the insane
midguided ones with their fortune faded
support for their limbs become fragile
the desire to find the next best thing
the great journey to the treasure
to seek more of the golden life
so rare a find to those whom struggle
everlasting attempts to survive within' an unkind world
for that we must suffer to earn
life is not easy nor is it compassionate to all
we are all damned to feel such pain and crulety
for the golden sunrise never smiles for us anymore
we are the sinners and to that our fate is
all must walk the path and bear it
there's a difference between knowing the path
as to walking the path
everyone has a unique way of grinning to bear it

Source of Inspiration: Maybe Tomorrow by Stereophonics, a Yu-Gi-Oh manga riddle, lord of the rings, the matrix, the outsiders, and ella enchanted.

..*rolls on ground*.....*claps*...dat was mad boppy!..good job as usual.....

uh... rolling on ground is a good thing or sign? wow...ppl still use "mad"....hippies! lol thanks, vera! means alot! *hugs*

good! good!........
......dats jus a saying over here....
*hugs bak* no prob boppy!....

no one uses it here anymore. it's 70's slang, more say. lol

........i see........what words u use for 'cool'?

slang for cool around these parts are: sick, sweet, tight, bitchin',...

ohhhhh.....yer, we use sik too...

heh.....bitchin....

i think sweet and sick have been around longer than i thought.

guys used that one more than we girlie girls!

Stolen Summer

Remembering of a life that once was
A life filled with sunsets and love
Warmth and passion for those around me
Walk upon this green Earth without a care
Never to linger and left to be forgotten in the darkness
To turn silver and cold like lifeless souls
Winter taking over the perfect summer
Stealing the light of my heart and being

excellent as always mon ami!.....i wuved it! ...

thankies vera! ^.^ *hugs* it was originally going to be about vampires...but it didn't quite turn out that way...sorta...

no prob.....*hugs bak*...


heh....lol.....

how the hell did we start talking about kurt and whose kurt?! damn! i'm so lost!

ga?.....kurt?.......omg.i av absolutely no idea what u r talkin bout....lol....

gosh! we have the worst short term memory in the world!

...agreed!.

*cries*...why dont i know....things...

we're almost as bad as lewis and oswald on the drew carey show!

......we're like ppl!....

Eternity is Agony

growing so sick and tired of wandering this earth in lonliness
never to be young and full of life again
everyday feels like a burning hell
to be damned from a love that was once so warm and comforting
to know that i'll survive after all this
history and life passing me by
life and time have no meaning to me anymore
never to take it's toll on me
the price of being an immortality is too high
what a fool was i to accept this offer
when i didn't have much to live for
darkness of heart and mind have befallen me greatly
to be taken from the path of life
not a loss i would've wished for
if i were thinking clearly at the time
at the time that the life was sucked right out of me
too young was i to know any better
forced into a life of hiding and great evil
causing death all around me
red and black were those nights i spent
by the side of someone who didn't cherish mortality
who would do anything to keep the very few companions he had
filth is what i feel upon me as i aide this brutality
the extinguisher of life
the fire of the soul is so fragile
yet he doesn't care

(note: not finished! incomplete poem! vera: three guesses whose this about! *wink wink* )

*claps* bravO!.excellontair!...

.
very well wriiten mon ami.......

*thinks*.,........Louis?......

by george, i think she's got it! yes louis from interview with the vampire. in one line of the poem i could've said or worded it differently:

to forever remain at the side of a murderer

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wow! im so cool!.....i got it! yay for me.....lol.

ooooo...i like dat line..

to taste the blood that he offers me
i gringe back with disgust in my mind...

i could've called this poem: Life is Agony

i got that name from a name of a band that i randomly saw on a cd as i browsed through tower records for a particular cd.

tiz coolies Bopster!

thankies, vera! *hugs* please go check out my hp/lotr story! i just finished the first chapter. i'm so happy!

Forever in the Dark

forever in the dark
never to see the light of day again
to wander about with no sense of direction
utter feelings of loss and chaos fill the mind
wondering of purpose on this earth
to take his loss as a sin to his life
never to understand such trechery
fear fills the heart at times
times when the sight of color and life seem to fade and allude the mind
detached from what made life wonderful to bear
although this lifetime was dark and not a happy one
to have the last hope taken away burns
shot down and left to die during battle
the heat attacking skin upon stone
searching for strength to go on
when not having anything to live for
no one to touch this dreay soul
to bring it back to life and peace
although peace was something never truly known nor owned
adjusting to a life without love and sight
bits of sanity seem to fade
regrets pulling at the heart strings
life and warmth bleed out from the battle wounds
feeling faint and to wonder about death
will death be wonderful as one imagined it to be?
swift, soft, fast, and yet relaxing
finally to leave from here and never look back
if that what fate has intended
senses seem to blur and intensify with the loss of sight
lights seem to flicker about and taunt
anger and vengence seems to come to mind
only thing that made one feel alive again
that feeling of adrenaline and excitement
having to be on guard for one's life
not much it seems but it would have to do
until one can think of something, of a purpose
might as well get used to the fact
the fact that that this one would have to carry for the rest of his life
sheldon jeffery sands must remain forever in the dark
with a soul so dark, how long can he truly last?

ooooo! tres bien! marvellous!...me luved it.....

glad you liked it, vera! *hugs* ^.^ have you seen "once upon a time in mexico"?

*hugs bak*.........but i wanna

is it out yet in theaters or on dvd yet in down under?

here's a song!

"don't tell me what to be or what to say until i make up my mind..."

oops! that was short and all i got for now!

Yo homie.

hey leather! what's crackin'?

Nutthin much. Im about to attempt to rap.

why on earth do you wanna do such a thing? *mock horror*

Yo Ive got gold crowns on my teeth
airforces on my feet
bling blings piled up to da ceiling
yo you dont know
how many hoes
Ive gots wit me everwere I go

Well Ive g2g right now so bye.

wow, that was good, for an amateur! lattah, leath!

Well see ya.

see ya around the bend...what the hell am i talking about here?!

Mortal Love

he loved the untouchable dearly
she was beautiful beyond compare to anyone he's met
she is an angel to him
for she makes him feel normal, bringing sanity back into his life
that and what it's like to love and be loved in return
she does not question of where's he's been
only cares for what kind of person he is
she knows how to soothe his pain
make him forget the scars of the past
his love has scares too
so with ease it is to help heal her in return
to understand her, you must understand her strong will
and what estranges her from the rest
for others to touch her soul had been stolen from her long ago
to which no mortal should have to go through
her uniqueness made her suffer and desire
the deep desire for true solice and love
these elements have been denied to her for so long
it hurts him so to see her in pain
of something that will never go away
but with good fortune and finding the time to care and open up
they find she can touch again
only catch is that it can only be the undead
the immortal blood drinkers of the earth
vampires can be ruthless and violent
to which makes her wonder and fear
but she does not fear her love
for she knows that his feelings are true
and his intentions are pure of heart
traits to which are rare amongst the immortals of earth

vera: this poem goes with my "interview with the vampire" story that i told you about earlier. the poem sounds a bit crappy and needs work in some places, but at least i tried. let me know what you think when you get back to kmc!

A Love For All Seasons

a rose that flourishes by night
if the sun were to shine
the petals turn to ashes
water does not make this flower grow
only to wilt and falter
a rose very delicate in the making
life sustains in the shadows
treat the flora with care
for it has emotions just like us
petals bloom when the flower is shown love
thorns will prick if betrayed
to stand out in the bouquet
to be seen and tended to is wonderful
the skies and the heavens are such a long ways off
the rose desiring to meet it
yet, the safe haven can wait another day
for the comfort of spring
and passion of summer are devine
throw caution to forthcoming autumn and winter
for they don't look kindly upon the warmth
meaning theft to the cold, harsh winds it blows
winter threatening summer to let the rose go
alas, the snow falls during sunny days
neither side giving in nor victorious
an almighty battle between the polar seasons
a great war rages of a heart much desired
sadly, the rose will never return to winter
flora would rather wilt than live to see another storm
too many days remembered of those
thorns raised high when in the presense of jealous winter
nothing to be done about the polars
to end this would mean death
the rose ever wonders if this life had all been worth it
to struggle for a love so great with summer
but knowing at the same time
that it couldn't last this lifetime
what is this flora to do?
caught between envy and the flames strick the rose
mother earth has made her choice
do what the others could not
many heavy rain clouds fill the skies above
to shower the water of their grief
summer and winter must now suffer the consequences
the rose's color fades like rushing water
nothing they can do to turn back the tide
once this flower wilts to ashes
their lover would be gone as they know it
a breeze flows by to whisper final farewells to the dearly cherished
petals and thorns scatter across the earth
somehow, the rose manages to forgive winter
and vows to never forget her summer's love
with the rose finally out of their lives
summer and winter will continue to resent each other
for they must spend their reign in dreary weather
sunny days and clear skies would be difficult to find within' them
will their hearts close and rage go on forever and never to end?
never will there ever be a rose quite like this one
no other flowers could compare
oh, why must the cherished by wasted upon the insolent?

to vera when you read this: this poem here has a lot of metaphors. the seasons and weather all symbolize themes and characters in my forthcoming vampire story. which is the prequel to van helsing fanstory. here are the translations:

rose: cassandra black/illyria (mind assassin)
summer/spring - gabriel van helsing
winter/autumn - count dracula
mother earth - fate
weather and the descriptions of types of weather - emotions occuring
thorns - negative emotions
petals/bloom - love and happiness (duh! lol)

well, i hope you and everyone else loves and reviews this poem! it's great insight into my upcoming vamp. story. i can't wait to get to work on the real story and include the poem as a header/starter for it.

see ya around later tonight,

Sodapop Allerdyce the Sane Psycho

p/s: i came up with a wonderful title for the vh story yesterday. tell you later, also!

ooooo!..i jus read 'a love for all seasons' and 'mortal love'!!.....wowies!!! i luved em!!!!....you show such deep emotion in ur works...a complex story to tell in each word you write.....excellent work boppy!.......

p.s, i jus posted another poem in my thread.if ya wan chek it out...

really? my "mortal love" poem was that good? wow...and to think that i thought it came out crappy. also, i needed a great way to express and explain my synopsis to my van helsing story, so "a love for all seasons" covers it quite beautifully. i'm very proud of that poem, one of my best since "forever in the dark". i'll most likely include that poem in my story. as a lil lead in. yea!

sure was!!! i loved it! i loved both of em..

....coooool.

i'm not sure if i'll use some of the lines from the poem within' the story or as title for chapters....hmm...*shrugs* anyways, i found out earlier that there's a christina aguilera song called "love for all seasons". i just happened to look it up on my copy of her first cd when i was trying to make a list of songs that i could use for my van helsing story. as background music and/or songfic chappie.

...ur choice.....altho sum of de lines wud make great for de story.........up to u booooooopy...

i know! but need time to incorporate and plan it out...hmm...btw, hey! lol

lol....heya...*smiles*...

heya....*twithces* oh the horrors of remembering that damn outkast song!

the title mortal love could also mean a love that cannot last under certain and extreme circumstances...another poem about that....hmm....*thinks*

This poem is a sequel to "Forever in the Dark"

Under Lock and Key

in denial of the truth before him
never wanting others to see beyond the cold mask of a killer
so much dignity and pride to burden
an egnima amongst society
much desire to be left alone in peace
but never taking much joy in being a lone wolf
to why he had to lead a life where he kept everyone at arm's length
he'll never know but will regret it dearly
in his youth, peers were most unkind
scorn him for what he was
different from the rest and having such a strong sense of purpose
sense of already knowing of what and who he was to become
no one able and ready to understand him
defenses held strong in his mind and aura
never to let anyone get past the barriors
get to the side of him that he wasn't proud of
over time of such a strong ego
made him hard and cold to the world around him
being quite aware of the darkness in mans' heart
their true nature yet to be unleashed upon the earth
coming to an understanding that keeping the balance was vitle
between peace and what society could not obtain themselves
to assign himself to such a duty
another sense of his purpose in life
placing his dark view and calibur into this goal
serving out what he believes is right
no matter if it involved pain, torture, and murder
let his skills as an agent to guide
and his gun to do the talking for him
so many faults within' our society
many sins to correct
so little time to get to them all
to be disgusted by the many flaws in this world and man
much disappointment in himself also
a never ending battle to right
determined to never give up
he prefers to lone his lifetime quest
never finds partnership of any use
only to be a burden and a great annoyance
drag him down in the process
can't get anything done the way he wants
not like there's many who would lend him aide and heed
perfect and all the better to his soul
the owner of a lonely heart
to wander forever in the dark
with pride and beliefs to show him the way
the key to his survival and longtivity within' a harsh world
unrelenting denial of the truth well under wraps
under lock and key

That was a good one Soda! So here is where you are all the time! cool!

hey lava! *hugs* how are you? wow, i've never seen you on this early before.

yeah, i do spend tons of time here, the rpg section, and the x-men, movie discussion, trivia, and celeb section of kmc.

The Golden Skies

the sun's warmth burns the flesh like fire
fire of one not meant to see the light of day again
to bask in its glory and joy
oh, how one misses the simplicities of nature and awareness
to never feel alone and always be at ease
does the cheery day bring during its reign
the phases of the inferno orb fascinate the sky reflecting it
a dark immortal denied the sights of its aura
the gold and collages that smear the heavens with wonder
makes one wonder if they are better seen from above
below does not seem all that much better
when a summer's breeze can no longer reach the soul
the earth and shadows seem so barren and cold
during the darkest nights of this cursed life
to wonder for eternity of what the sun is like
to feel what a day and rise is like without worry
oh, how one can miss these sort of days full of such beauty
and of much promise to forthcome
no immortal of the damned can stand
but this one loves to remember
but sadly can only watch and remember from afar

A Semi-Sequel to "A Love For All Seasons"

To Fly or Die

the rose is gone
summer is to forever grieve
everything in nature
just seems like a constant reminder
the sky enveloped by shadow and stormy clouds
clouds filled with so much pain
pain in the form of water
and days of neverending rain
spring brings forth the flora and fona once more
offering it to summer
but the warmth seems to have vanished from summer's heat
the aura of nature no longer appeals
summer feel like it's dying on the inside
like the life around him when exposed to winter's presense
screaming to the heavens to be set free
to die or fly
to end a annual reign and be numbed of all emotion
to be damned to the firy bits of hell
than to suffer one more day of loss and misery
the desire to assend to the atmosphere
where summer knows that his rose is waiting for him
so, why must these cycles of seasons go on?
does mother nature indend him to grow so cold
to have no love behind his fate?
the longer summer remains on earth
without his rose is living torture
could make this season turn into autumn and perhapes winter
yes, winter seems to not take heed of the harsh hails from the skies
does summer dare to make a change
just so that one can feel?
becoming so dead on the inside and out
can be more than any mortal can bare
the quick elimination of summer sounds nice
spring can take over
to leave burdens behind
to then finally have a chance to rest in peace
reigning earth and nature for so long
tending to it's every whem is demanding
to just have one chance of letting it all go and fade away
summer desires to fade into nothingness and be no more
this great earth and life does not deserve this one
the heavens and rose are waiting
for the final desicion the season will take the plunge for
summer will soon return to his dear rose
to live happily ever after amongst the skies above

to vera and all whom are interested in this poem and the story that will soon be provided along with these two poems - translation/synopsis: gabriel van helsing is greiving the death of his beloved, cassandra and ponders death. (post-Love After Dark)

Oh Soda, I loved the sequel even more that the first! I loved the flora and fona incorporation too - nice come off!

Is it blank verse?

i called "to fly or die" a semi-sequel because it's post my van helsing fic but won't happen in the story until like after the movie sort of event. the story will explain this better for i don't want to spoil the story further just yet. lots of metaphors to add such a nice contrast to van helsing setting.

nani? blank verse?

Excuse me for being so nosey but why is it SODAPOP Allydyce poems? Whats up with the sodapop?

leatherface12: sodapop allerdyce is my alias and my pen name at the fiction sites that i submit my work to. i love the names that i combined to make this one great pen name! sodapop is the name of a character that i based off and thought was most like me. sodapop curtis from s.e. hinton's famous novella "the outsiders". and allerdyce comes from the x-men movies. savvy? lol

Oh I thought it was the coke kind of sodapop.

i'm not that twisted and obsessed with drinks. although i love to drink sodas. i'm guessing you have never read the book. best book of all time in my opinion.

Nope.

i really do reccommend that you read it, if you are into reading books and such.

Im sorry but I hate reading. IMO its boring.

man.....you suck! :P expand your mind while you still can before the crack and psychotics get to your head!

Nah reading is boring.

glory...than where do you get your creativity and imagination to come up with poems than?

I randomly make up stuff.

got any new raps today?

Not yet but mabey later.

have you heard "broken" by seether f/ amy lee? it's a good song. from the punisher soundtrack.

Nope

check it out: Music Video of "Broken" at MTV.Com

Broken

i feel like i am broken
down on my knees and my luck
the heat searing all of my open wounds
the wind thrashing harsh words by my ears
my mind feels so numb to everything around me
not deft enough to hold me
nor protect me from the brutalities of the world
i feel like i don't have purpose here anymore
for i am broken
broken beyond all repair
for i have been shattered too many times
all of my thoughts are conflicted with one another
i just can't decide things for myself anymore
but i don't want others to attempt the impossible
they can only understand but never truly there
where i am now
i rather hold people at arm's length
than to load my burden upon them
and drag them down with me
to wherever i am heading now
i just feel broken
no one else deserves this depression
i must do this alone now
so long my friends and leave me in peace
until i can find what i have been missing out on
or what i lost so long ago after i was broken
you may all fear that i'm asking for death
but i would never wish that
i just need my space to clear
and make my own in the world
so it would be kind of you to just leave me alone now
i'm just too broken to care now
if i die from this crusade of mine
if darkness is the result
than i'm just fine with that
no more feelings to cut and stab away at my esteem
feel my battle wounds come undone
like my seems are unraveling
i don't want anyone to see this
it's not their place to judge me
i can handle this on my own now
no thank you to the elders
i'm a survivor that will be broken no more

Writer's Note: This poem/song is a play on "Broken" by Seether f/ Amy Lee. I had that song stuck in my head all day and sung the lyrics to this poem i wrote the same way the song is sung. not out loud of course, in my head! btw, this poem isn't all about me. it's general and i hope that people can relate. ^.^

I'll put this poem, "Broken", into song format later! Enjoy everyone!

Aw Soda, I thought it was about you, and i got so sad!

Cool poems Boppy

I have a new poem in my thread...

i'll check it out later. wow, i'm impressed that i have enough brain power to write nearly a song a day! lol

I write things v e r y sl oooo w l y... Well not really... Just that I'm busy these days so I don't get a chance to write as much as I probably should.

i always have loads of time on my hand before i do hw or when i'm supposed to do it during school and at home. most of the time the words are easily flowing.

Yeah, I'm weird that way... I can't think of anything for a long time, then I'll wake up in the middle of the night or be really bored in French class or something and I'll get some burst of inspiration out of nowhere...

when i feel it, i write it.

booooooppy.i luved ur broken poem!...heh...so much emotion..
its as though they were your own thoughts....excellent work!

some of them were. dramatic and over taxed thoughts and much inspiration from the song i based it on. singing the song in my head helped forged the words to it.

.....sik........song help..they inspire moods....

have you heard of the songs that they were inspired by? like with "hate myself" was with "rexall" by dave navarro and "broken" was with "broken" by seether f/ amy lee of evanesense from the punisher soundtrack. btw, have you read my new song, hate myself?

.......i dont no any of those songs.....

again...heh..i havent...

check out the link under the song "hate myself". for broken, look for the post with the link to mtv vid of broken. should be there. great, great songs!

Sodapop? Heheh... I've noticed that you guys talk alot, but Darth Revan is never in your sig. Why?

I've heard "Broken" before