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i started writing a jazz song and wrote these lyrics and i was wondering what you think of them and what i could do to make them better...
its a slow lullaby type song, very breathy and calm, itll make you sleep:

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My fingertips are tingling
Goosebumps on my skin
My mind is racing, through the stars
Awaiting her sugar lips
My body’s trembling all night long
From my head down to my toes
And I furnish inside those chestnut eyes
Oh- and yeah, ayeah e yeah, ayeah e yeah, ayeah e yeah- yeah

Underneath the willow tree, weeping through the night
And the moonlit clouds, the cityscape, twinkling like fireflies above

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its not quite finished though

good lyrics- be great in a little smoky jazz club- piano and double bass maybe? Can just imagine it...

Kate xx

thanks; the smokey jazz club feel is kinda what i was longing for.

oh this sounds very jazzy! i am a big jazz fan....this sounds good! keep writing!

thanks guys!

very nice

By "furnish inside those chestnut eyes," do you mean you're decorating the interior of her eyeballs?

Maybe you're thinking of a different word.

-Smitten Kitten-

wel the explanation of that comes later in the song