The 4 Mages: short story

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lady_yuna

lady_yuna

Be@st
I like this story; I hope you'll post more of it 'cause it's great.

lady_yuna

PadfootsPyrefly
Wow, Yunie, your story ish awesome yes Write more soon! Write more soon! *chants*

Be@st
Story is great; but everything is too simple. You should describe characters a bit more; and make fights more complicated.

PadfootsPyrefly
I think she did well on describing the characters, but the fight prolly should be more complicated...

lady_yuna

PadfootsPyrefly
*claps* Great chapter ^^

lady_yuna
*Thanks* I'll post more tomorrow.

Be@st
The fourth chapter is awesome. Keep up with the good work (I hate that phrase)

lady_yuna

PadfootsPyrefly
Queee! Awesome ^_^

lady_yuna
*It's almost finshed too.

PadfootsPyrefly
Aw, really?

lady_yuna
I can make a 2nd one with my friend. That may take a while. Who do you like better Nicole, Kiari, Alice, or Heather?

Be@st
I like Kiari. She is a spoiled brat so she reminds me on me big grin
BTW 5th chapter is good; but the 4th is still the best

lady_yuna
Nicole's my favorite because she is brave and is a leader so I want to be like her.

lady_yuna

lady_yuna
That's the end for now.

Be@st
I don't like the end; it's happy; I hate happy ends

lady_yuna
It's not truly the end because of the 2nd story. Just think of it as like the middle or something.

Be@st
OK; I hope someone dies in the second part (if you kill Kiari I'll kill you)

lady_yuna
No Kirai won't go. It wouldn't be any of the four mages because they're way to important.

Be@st
Can they at least break a part or even better...start hating each other?

lady_yuna
Maybe.

Be@st
Wheee!!! Can Kiari throw Nicole off the cliff

lady_yuna
Let's not get to far. Maybe something like that.

Be@st
Ok; I'll be happy even if Kiari just throws her from the cliff in water and then shark finishes her off big grin

lady_yuna
*No mages are killed.

Be@st
Can sharks at least bite her legs off? She would survive.

lady_yuna
*They'll have a short of magic fight.

Be@st
Don't make it too simple

lady_yuna
Gotcha.

Be@st
So...when are we goin' to see a story?

lady_yuna

lady_yuna
What do u think?

Be@st
I like it but it's a bit too short...and you haven't explained how come a teacher has powers...shouldn't they be sort of just for 4 mages?

lady_yuna
*It wil continue and maybe it isn't a teacher but Gigi?

Be@st

lady_yuna
He can have other names.

lady_yuna
I'm currently fixing up the story.

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