Trapped
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bordom
Okay well ummm... my friend told me to post my poem on here sooo..... here it is... it's not really that good but o well....
Trapped
Why must you look at me?
Must your eyes stare at the body that encloses my internal and emotional insecurities?
Am I the one who you feel needs this punishment after I abandon my life just for your perfect 30" waist and cleavedged breasts to judge.
I gave up everything I had..... my love from my family which was taken for granted, my long lasting health, and most of all my self esteem.
All this was captured from me, all for you.
Do you not see my body deterriating infront of my deceiving eyes?
Can you not fell my pain and frustration?
What have you done to me and why?
You can't see this can you? You're only a mirage, a figment of all teenagers' minds.
Do you beleive I deserve this... this... this horror?
The horror th not know if I'm going to make it to my next birthday.
Must I relive a nightmare most would only need to open their eyes in order for you to disappear.
Why am I the one to be tortured of your presence?
But I am the only one aren't I?
I'm your main target, a target that can't save itself from your claws of illusion.
I'm trapped.
Ya so there it is... tell me what you think and please be honest
rodeoangel
WOW. That was really good. I wrote a poem but it was about a dog. Urs sounded professional.
bordom
HA! it's not professional! It's totally ME lol Thanks Kelly
rodeoangel
well I consider it professional. it's better then mine.
bordom
Well thank you! And I bet you could write WONDERS!
Elessea
i like it
keep writing!
bordom
Thanks
I'll try... but I gotta be in the mood ya know lol
Trickster
I like it too.
But I getcha - gotta be in the mood to write, or it feels crap.
Coldfire
Good one bordom!!
Hopefully you can do some more for us!!
bordom
Thanks... I'll try.....
peterKSL
HOLY CRAP... This is awesome... damn you made me feel guilty...
lol just joking...
bordom
Wow.. thanks... never thought anyone would like it...
Dwarfdude
Very nice, very deep. Not quite sure who the audience is, though I think I have a general idea. Good tone, good writing.
But I speak in analyzation.
In short, very nice.
bordom
Well thank you very much
Coldfire
You'll have to post the ones we're doing for English, eh? I'm gonna put mine up when they're done
Tassie
That's really good, bordom.
I want more!
bordom
Thanks Tassie!
NO WAY AM I PUTTIN UP THE ENGLISH ONES!!!!
bordom
they will be REALLY bad, pluse I haven't done them yet lol
Coldfire
They won't be bad! And even if they were, it don't really matter to anyone!
bordom
okay well here's the Metaphor one: (NOT GOOD)
My mother, brother, and I are a family of mirrors, different sizes, and in different environments.
My Mom is the classic livingroom mirror. Etched in beauty and elegance, framed perfectly, and chrystal clear.
My brother is the smaller dresser mirror. Cracked, but not broken, also framed well, and misleading at times.
And I am the mirror that, during a conflict, was thrown against the wall, and is now shattered, at the base of the destroyer.
VERY DEPRESSING!
Coldfire
That's a good one bordom!! My metaphor one is TOTALLY different than that! I'm gonna post it in a bit here....
bordom
Ya I saw that lol Well I told ya I can't make HAPPY poems lol
Coldfire
Well you can always try, like I'm gonna here sometime
bordom
I try but like ew they sound like Kindergarten work lol
Coldfire
Lol, so do mine!! Which is why I'm not gonna rhyme yet... wait until I improve some more first
bordom
I COULD rhyme... but not pronto lol
Coldfire
Lol, I can rhyme too, but they tend to be really simple ones
I tried to do a sonnet once!!
Can you guess how that turned out?? rolleyes1
bordom
I would be on the floor wouldn't I??!! lol
Coldfire
Yeah you would!! And they were the sappiest things ever!!!
bordom
I bet! I try..... but how bouts.... NO! lol
Coldfire
Prolly better than mine are!!
Ou Be Low hoo
Originally posted by bordom
tell me what you think and please be honest
I'd rather eat a piece of cardboard covered in sand-paper than read either of them again. I think I'm going to go and head-butt the wall a few times now for some pleasure...
Coldfire
Just ignore him bordom; he's only looking to get some attention.
Ou Be Low hoo
Originally posted by bordom
GO AWAY!
Contrary to what Coldfire said, I was actually doing what you asked. I really think your poems are boring and are crying out for some imagination...
Find the key, unlock the door...
bordom
How bout you go and f*ck yourself and leave me ALONE! I don't like you and you ALWAYS sit there on your "high pedistal" and say that you are better. So, do us ALL a favor, and GO THE F*CK AWAY!
Ou Be Low hoo
Woah! If you simply want people to say nice things about your poems you shouldn't ask people to be honest!
Allow me to enlighten you. You originally asked this:
However, it seems apparent that you actually intended something like this:
Is that more like it?
bordom
For one thing... I NEVER wrote that second "quote" so therefore you cannnot quote me on that. Another, I don't care if people don't like my poems, but you come on my poems thread, and my chat thread and you sit there and bash me and what I do. Why can't you just f*ck off and leave me alone
Ou Be Low hoo
Originally posted by bordom
For one thing... I NEVER wrote that second "quote" so therefore you cannnot quote me on that. Another, I don't care if people don't like my poems, but you come on my poems thread, and my chat thread and you sit there and bash me and what I do. Why can't you just f*ck off and leave me alone
Well, if you can read English then, perhaps you will have noticed that I typed this before 'quoting' you...
Pay specific attention to the words 'apparent' and 'intended'.
As for me 'bash(ing)' you...I am merely stating my honest opinion regarding your poem. It's what you asked for...Do you want me to quote you again? Ok, here you are:
My friend, 'SIZE=20', has made things a little easier for you...
Welcome.
Coldfire
Ok, can you please not be like this OBLH?? I mean, everyone is allowed to voice their opinions and all, but don't you think you take it a little too far sometimes???
Ou Be Low hoo
I was simply giving my honest opinion. If you bordom didn't want honesty, he/she/it shouldn't have asked for it...
bordom
For your info I am a FEMALE.... I asked and yes you did give me your "honest opinon" but you don't have to be such a f*cking inconsiderate a55hole about it. So just leave my thread and keep your opinions about me or my friends to yourself!!!!
Ou Be Low hoo
"Opinions need to be shared, otherwise they are merely thoughts"
-Ou Be Low hoo, May 12th, 2005.
bordom
shut up and go away! What did I ever do to you for you to be a f*ckin a55hole to me?
Ou Be Low hoo
You need to see someone who uses the title 'Dr.' before their name. I haven't said anything to you personally. I have simply said that I think your poems are rather dull. Get a grip! I even offered you some advice on how to expand your imagination! You should be thanking me!
Coldfire
OBLH do you like being condescending?? Cuz thats what it sounds like... we get your point all right??
bordom
so shoe fly, don't bother me
Ou Be Low hoo
Originally posted by bordom
so shoe fly, don't bother me
What's a 'shoe fly'? Is it like a normal fly only it's SOLE -get it?- attraction is feet?
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ahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahaha, etc.
Fin.
Ou Be Low hoo
*starts playing 'keepy-ups' with bordom's rolling eyes*
Coldfire
Keepy-ups??? Oh dear....
Tassie
Guys, just ignore OBLH, and carry on, and s/he'll go away.
Coldfire
Yeah, it'll go away eventually...... Cuz if he doesn't get a reaction, he won't have no reason to be here.....
Ou Be Low hoo
Originally posted by bordom
keepy-ups??? wtf
As The Dude would say: "Obviously you're not golfers..."
bordom
hmm... to take out my frustration on how much of a dumbass OBLH is I will write a poem... yes, a poem
Coldfire
Originally posted by Ou Be Low hoo
As The Dude would say: "Obviously you're not golfers..."
Nope, I'm not a golfer
Tassie
Coldfire, that's not exactly ignoring lol
Originally posted by bordom
hmm... to take out my frustration on how much of a dumbass OBLH is I will write a poem... yes, a poem
Go for it,
bordom
haha it may be rude and crude... but he's rude and crude
Ou Be Low hoo
Ooooo...I can't wait! It's so exciting. You do write so well...
bordom
Originally posted by Ou Be Low hoo
Ooooo...I can't wait! It's so exciting. You do write so well...
F*ckin shut up!
Ou Be Low hoo
My dear, bordom...
I have never insulted you personally, yet you are the one calling me crude and rude. Have you learnt about a thing called 'irony' yet?
bordom
F*CKIN LEAVE ME ALONE AND DO NOT CALL ME MY DEAR!!!!!!
belly_jeans349
bordom is kool hug OBLH can go to hell
Ou Be Low hoo
I'm sorry, my dear...Love can build a bridge, between your heart and mine...You shall ride a river to ruin unless you control your anger.
belly_jeans349
ew imma guy dude....(starts telling in KMC OBLH is literally gay)
bordom
Originally posted by belly_jeans349
bordom is kool hug OBLH can go to hell
Thanks
bordom
Originally posted by Ou Be Low hoo
I'm sorry, my dear...Love can build a bridge, between your heart and mine...You shall ride a river to ruin unless you control your anger.
O yes control my anger... when all you do if f*ckin PISS ME THE F*CK OFF! GO TO F*CKIN HELL!
belly_jeans349
lol only been friends with u bordom for wat 3-4 hours n already know too much bout u
where's the anger hiding
bordom
Originally posted by belly_jeans349
lol only been friends with u bordom for wat 3-4 hours n already know too much bout u
where's the anger hiding
Man I just realized that it's been that short of time lol... the anger is from F*CKIN A$$HOLES LIKE HIM! lol
*total angel* lol
belly_jeans349
lol total angel when talking to me
bordom
of course lol
belly_jeans349
lol
belly_jeans349
yay he's gone
bordom
Until tomorrow
Phoenix
Guys, calm it down a bit, or this thread might get closed. As my mother would say: I don't care who started it, I'm finishing it!
Big hugs for all if you play nice! hug
belly_jeans349
feel so loved
lol
Ou Be Low hoo
Originally posted by belly_jeans349
ew imma guy dude....(starts telling in KMC OBLH is literally gay)
Despite the fact that I wasn't even talking to you, the people who believe calling someone 'gay' is an insult are generally between the ages 10 and 14. Also, if I was 'literally gay', then I would be a pink book with a limp binder. Thanks for not making sense. Please foot stop head lick.
Oh, and Bordom...Take some Vicodin to relieve yourself from yourself.
I'm still waiting for the 'Anti-Ou Be' poem that you promised...Does it really take DAYS to write it? Wow, I guess it's going to be good!
Ou Be Low hoo
Originally posted by bordom
SHUT THE F*CK UP!
Is this the poem that you promised? It's a little short, don't you think?
Paola
why do poor Ou Be Low hoo always gets those reactions? down
Coldfire
Why??? Because he just reeeeeally rubs some people the wrong way
Ou Be Low hoo
Originally posted by Paola
why do poor Ou Be Low hoo always gets those reactions? down
I know! I'm like a little, floppy bunny that gets savaged by these rabid, wild beasts! It's so disheartening...
I blame their parents/park rangers...
Coldfire
You are a bunny??? *blinks* Ummm ok then..... more like you're the weasel.....
Ou Be Low hoo
Originally posted by Coldfire
You are a bunny??? *blinks* Ummm ok then..... more like you're the weasel.....
You must have something in your eye...It would explain your blinking...Look at these ears for Allah's sake! You don't get ears like this on a weasel...Plus, check out my tail and...oh, look!...I'm eating a mofo carrot. Rabbit. Bunny. That's me.
Ou Be Low hoo
Originally posted by bordom
O just SHUT UP!!!!
This is so similar to your last poem! Come on, bordom! Think of something more interesting...
Paola
Oh my! Ou Be you're the most annoying person in the world!
you insult ppl and what do you want in return? flowers?
Report someone again and YOU'll be banned.
Thank you
lil bitchiness
And also, watch your language bordom. Vulgarity is not allowed or tolerated. Also, don't write in capitals.
bordom
Well... I served my "time" lol
I am no longer going to acknowledge the fact that oblh is on here
If he has something to say... I WILL ignore him
As for the capitals... I have used em to say to ppl... but I will not use them alll the time
Sorry for not controling my anger, but u have to admitt that he IS annoying n I don't like ppl that insult me
sorry Lil Bitchiness
Ou Be Low hoo
Originally posted by bordom
Sorry for not controling my anger, but u have to admitt that he IS annoying n I don't like ppl that insult me
Welcome back! I hope you learnt a lot from your time in isolation. Let's hope that you can practice what you preach...
DreamingWarrior
My friend bordom, you have learned a great deal with this simple phrase: I am no longer going to acknowledge the fact that oblh is on here
If he has something to say... I WILL ignore him
now please, post more of your poems!!! I am waiting! hhaha
bordom
lol Thank you DW...
I am tryin to make more poems.. but all of them r crap.. n filled with hate lol
DreamingWarrior
haha hey man just bring em here. if it is you lets here it!
bordom
meh... maybe later
Coldfire
Did you not read some of mine bordom? lol. Just post them please!!
DreamingWarrior
Originally posted by bordom
meh... maybe later
Meh?? MEH????? You dare MEH the mighty... oh wait... wrong personality.... darned MPD.... hahahaha yeah man, just post. If worse comes to worse, you can always edit and delete em!
Coldfire
Lmao
Just post them and if some people don't like em then that's just too bad for them
bordom
Originally posted by DreamingWarrior
Meh?? MEH????? You dare MEH the mighty... oh wait... wrong personality.... darned MPD.... hahahaha yeah man, just post. If worse comes to worse, you can always edit and delete em!
Ya well there is a few that me n Coldfire did... but they r mean.. full of hate as I said n I don't think that someone would want me to post them
DreamingWarrior
*lol* haha.... well if you're gonna hurt someone's feelins on the site, mebbe not. or you could change the naming to protect the guilty! ahhahaha!
bordom
yes I suppose
Coldfire
Well they don't even have names in them lmao. So you want me to post them for ya bordom??
bordom
nah it's okay... not right this min lol
bordom
What is life?
Is it something for us to feel alive?
Something that will help our pain and sufferring become minimized
Or will it escalate into an excruciating tragedy
Who decides what is to fall in our paths?
Who makes us feel like we should be doing something with our lives and situations
Why must people trample on one another for their own life to be okay?
We are taught to care, love, feel, and yet some people seem to ignore those facts completely
Life is filled with HATE... ANGER... PAIN... SUFFERRING... GUILT...
Yet it is also blessed with LOVE... HAPPINESS... and TEARS OF JOY
Everyday, people become friends
And everyday, people become enemies.
Coldfire
Ooooo its got lots of feeling in it... I like it
bordom
thanks... totally depressin as I said lol
DreamingWarrior
Originally posted by bordom
thanks... totally depressin as I said lol
Nice work man. love the truths; ie, life has hardships, but as night has day it also has great events that make (sometimes) it all worthwhile.
bordom
ya i was in a strange mood when i wrote that
bordom
well now I'm not in that kinda mood nemore
bordom
Sure is... I have more lovey dovey kinda poems right now lol
DreamingWarrior
glad o that. gotta take life a little less serious at times.... hahaha!
bordom
totally
Coldfire
Originally posted by bordom
Sure is... I have more lovey dovey kinda poems right now lol
Lol I looked at my love poems the other day and was nearly sick
bordom
Originally posted by Coldfire
Lol I looked at my love poems the other day and was nearly sick
haha I totally burned that other one I showed you
Coldfire
Did you really? lol
bordom
hells yeah
DreamingWarrior
why do that? jsut send em to a family member or somethin. haha i do that with my crap poems. send em to my aunt linda. she keeps em and can see all the misery i put myself through. helps her get me better. hahah a
Coldfire
Originally posted by DreamingWarrior
why do that? jsut send em to a family member or somethin. haha i do that with my crap poems. send em to my aunt linda. she keeps em and can see all the misery i put myself through. helps her get me better. hahah a
Lol yeah as much as I don't like some of them (*cough*like the love ones *cough*) right now, I'm gonna keep em and perhaps give them to someone who actually appreciates them yes
bordom
Originally posted by DreamingWarrior
why do that? jsut send em to a family member or somethin. haha i do that with my crap poems. send em to my aunt linda. she keeps em and can see all the misery i put myself through. helps her get me better. hahah a
yeah no I can't do that lol
DreamingWarrior
Originally posted by Coldfire
Lol yeah as much as I don't like some of them (*cough*like the love ones *cough*) right now, I'm gonna keep em and perhaps give them to someone who actually appreciates them yes
hey hey!
hahahaah! Originally posted by bordom
yeah no I can't do that lol
just a thought. well, hope you can find some way to deal with em. hahaha
Coldfire
Originally posted by DreamingWarrior
hey hey!
hahahaah!
just a thought. well, hope you can find some way to deal with em. hahaha
Well I didn't mean you guys of course, just a certain someone who passed out of my life whistling
DreamingWarrior
ha... yeah.
bordom
Originally posted by DreamingWarrior
just a thought. well, hope you can find some way to deal with em. hahaha
yeah I did..I burnt them to a CRISP!
Coldfire
Originally posted by bordom
yeah I did..I burnt them to a CRISP!
Well if it made you feel better... then I guess it's a good thing
bordom
haha funny how I'm back with him... guess I'm lucky I had 2 copies of it
Coldfire
Originally posted by bordom
haha funny how I'm back with him... guess I'm lucky I had 2 copies of it
Funny how life works
DreamingWarrior
hahaha well, yeah. is kinda weird sometimes. hahahah
Coldfire
Originally posted by DreamingWarrior
hahaha well, yeah. is kinda weird sometimes. hahahah
Oh definitely
bordom
okay well.. it's been a LOOOONG time since I've posted a poem so here goes nothing... it's only as far as I've gotten but o well
You're taken,
Yet you tell me you like me.
All I hear are promises,
Promises that fade into lies.
The phone rings and it's you,
you telling me that "it's all going downhill",
Giving me false hope.
I try to be a good friend,
Try to comfort you,
I listen to how you feel,
And yet I try to be distant,
Try not to let my feelings show,
Feelings of being played,
And let down.
DreamingWarrior
Ouch..... ouch... and yeah frikkin frakkin time! hahaha good work.
bordom
thanks
like I said.. it was a long time since I posted anything
Coldfire
Originally posted by bordom
okay well.. it's been a LOOOONG time since I've posted a poem so here goes nothing... it's only as far as I've gotten but o well
You're taken,
Yet you tell me you like me.
All I hear are promises,
Promises that fade into lies.
The phone rings and it's you,
you telling me that "it's all going downhill",
Giving me false hope.
I try to be a good friend,
Try to comfort you,
I listen to how you feel,
And yet I try to be distant,
Try not to let my feelings show,
Feelings of being played,
And let down.
I like it yes
bordom
thanks and you also know what it's really bout
Coldfire
Originally posted by bordom
thanks and you also know what it's really bout
Lol I know exactly what its about
DreamingWarrior
hahah great, more "secret girl stuff.." hahaha...
Coldfire
Originally posted by DreamingWarrior
hahah great, more "secret girl stuff.." hahaha...
No it's more of "you have to live here to know what we're talking about stuff"
DreamingWarrior
Originally posted by Coldfire
No it's more of "you have to live here to know what we're talking about stuff"
haha whatever..... hahahaha!
bordom
Originally posted by DreamingWarrior
hahah great, more "secret girl stuff.." hahaha...
Of course...
Originally posted by Coldfire
No it's more of "you have to live here to know what we're talking about stuff"
naaah... it's more like "OMG KILL ME NOW!" stuff
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