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No.3
I dont understand,
why hand in hand they separate,
and leave us bleeding,
undoubtless sorrow,
needless pain,
mounts,
creeps upon,
surprising and unnerving,
I want to go and hide,
sobbing stops,
but restarts soon,
unbeknowst to one who dies,
resurrection is far from close.

No.4
Dont stare at me,
just leave me alone,
inside my head,
I need to breathe,
legs are lead,
hold me back,
left alone,
in freezing cold,
and night to dark,
for me to see,
cloudy vision,
sacrificial piece of dirt,
I am unknown,
I knew the sacrificed.

No.5
Underground,
cant see where I'm traveling,
blinded by the darkness,
reflected,
evil breeds evil,
being followed,
slowly will it catch,
me,
slipping into slime,
bury me,
without you,
dont watch me,
let me sleep,
please,
let me leave,
I need to be,
alone.

Ooooo..... Those had some real good imagery in them

Thankies.

Its always nice to see that people show an interest.

Neat poems you are really gifted.How long have you been writing poems?jm

ey Kharhmah!

i don't know much about poetry but yours is nice to read...
my fav 'til now is the No. 5

Originally posted by Jackie Malfoy
Neat poems you are really gifted.How long have you been writing poems?jm
Thanks Jacks. I've been writing for over two years I think.


Originally posted by Maya Zurak
ey Kharhmah!

i don't know much about poetry but yours is nice to read...
my fav 'til now is the No. 5
Ey Maya!
I like No.5 as well.

Yay! keep writing!
was a good idea to open your poem thread, i'll check it

No.6
Five minutes 'till the bell,
dont worry go to hell,
then you'll be right unless your wrong,
and do not know of all,
the things that boil inside,
you cannot hide,
the pain will be inside,
forever,

undying sorrow,
only hate will bring it back,
underneath the fate and glory,
bugs of love will die,
in agony,
above itself,
translucent glow engulfs,
you cannot tell if you dont know,
what the hell is wrong,

I need to leave now,
need to hide,
from everything that grows inside,
the pain will mount and then envelop,
entomb and so devour,

you,
or me and anyone can see,
that if you bleed,
you bleed and die alone and,
wondering if you should live,

or if the world should let you breathe.

is perfect for a lyric ^^
i like it

I like it too

Nice work K. bring on the rest!

Nice stuff, I really like. No. 3's my favourite.

Thanks guys.

No.7
Unable to proceed,
I need to leave,
I have to vacate,
my own head,

I might be dying,
might be dead,
without knowing,
I have bled,
to many times,
to count,

closing down,
I wont return,
you wouldn't miss me,
I realise,
I wish I could,

but I dare not.

Ooo nice

Very good poetry I must say.

Nice ^^

Thanks you.

great stuff, K. Good stylizing with the freedom in your poems. bring on the morrow and more of em!

No.8 a.k.a. Wincing.
Under floor,
and bloody bones will crack,
under pressure from drowning seas,
that submerge themselves underneath the world and follow,
the death that comes across and sees us laughing,
undying if not,
only distinctively foul and elusive,
though we are all living,
if not quietly,
undecided and not willing to comply,
with feelings met by another,
unwitting soul,
of which their lives eat,
but not consume,
the only vacant one will come and let you loose on the Earth,
you must run if you desire to live,
to see the next hour alive you must die alone.

No.9
Slip into the mud under my shoes,
your already decomposing,
dont cry at me,
beg me to cease,
the relentless suffering,
tears help no one,
but let me see them once,
before you go,
I need to know your pain,
you make me smile as you writhe,
dont be scared,

I've always liked the blade with which I hurt,
I'll not loosen the ropes,
till your gone,
you'll leave me here as I laugh,
I have not lost it yet,
but soon it shall be gone,
as you also will be,
call me what you like,

kick and scream at me,
dont suppress it,
watch me carefully,
as the fire goes out,
and the sun goes down,

I like it when you scream,
I like it when you cry,
I like it when you bleed,
I like it when you die.

Wow those poems are deep, loved No.9, tell me how long have you been wrighting poetry?

Thanks. I wrote No.9 on the spot just before I posted.

I think I've been writing for a little over two years.

Nice work!!! Can you tell me how long have you been wrighting poetry?jm

^ LOL

nice nice ^^

the're kool!they r all on pain,suffering,or lonliness.so much emotion!

I'm not so sure about this one.

No.10
A cavalcade of waterfalls,
drop down and blow asunder,
the bleeding hearts,
and dreary starts,
of one left by another,

the hate will flow,
and pain will follow,
death's not far behind,

the sun will set,
upon life's doorstep,
I'm leaving you alive,
I wish to leave you here,
you have no more to give.

very awesome K.

Thanks

No.11
Only four hours of sleep last night,
I have one heart to break,
conversed with my father,
my best friend too,
on what they suggest,
this poor fool to do,
cant write an email,
too afraid to say,
what on this earth made me feel this way,
I did not intend for this to continue,
this rose has just wilted,
the penny has dropped,
if you are reading this,
I wish it would stop,
I don't know how to tell you,
I don't love you anymore.

^^^ ouch. yeah, not that easy. ^^^

These poems are all so awesome..... yeah and in that last one, that can't be easy at all...

The last one served its purpose.

Did it now?? Well that's good... I think...

hahah well, if it works, use it...

WOW Kharhmah. GOOD stuff!!

More please

I like that last 11, is sad. Good poem

Your poetry is amazing. Imagery is really spectacular. Keep up the good work

Kharhmah we need to see some more poetry!!!!

I'm working on it, dont worry.

I want to read something new!! Hurry!!!

Keep your shirts on.

No. 12
Life fades away from me,
into an unknown existence,
the world hates me and lets me know it,
only shielded from me,
I am numb,

bring unto me your suffering,
let me feed upon you,
and know the deaths of many,

bloodless feelings,
of hatred and loneliness,
boil within this shell,
of me,
of what I used to be,

drained of an emotion,
of which I never owned,
I lay waste to the silence of you.

wow. thats a little depressing (I like it). Do you really feel that way?

I dont really know.

When I'm writing, I dont think about it, I just write.

It may be how I feel subconsciously.

I sometimes write about a type of feeling or how I might feel given a certain situation.

Originally posted by Kharhmah
I dont really know.

When I'm writing, I dont think about it, I just write.

It may be how I feel subconsciously.
I think that's how it works with me too yes

Good poem

Originally posted by Naib
Of all the poems in your thread, i found this one to be the least mundane. It's short, quick to the point and shows some imagination. As for the others, it has no life, the imagery is a common trend among those who's feelings of depression is put to paper.

A worthwhile attempt, but lacking in your desire to convey beyond the drab lines of words that is quite literally bland and without colour. To say life sucks goes without saying, but to put it in a different perspective, e.g. "Life goes on and I the baggage left behind for no one to claim" says the same.
Wow... and you would know a lot about having imagination wouldn't you? If you can do better, then bring it on.

Originally posted by Coldfire
Wow... and you would know a lot about having imagination wouldn't you? If you can do better, then bring it on. while i can understand you're reasons for such a trite challenge, i fail to see how THAT would impress upon you whether or not i have an imagination or lack thereof.

i spoke the truth of what i read, if truth is not what is sought or looked for, then what is the purpose in asking to review said poetry?

Originally posted by Naib
while i can understand you're reasons for such a trite challenge, i fail to see how THAT would impress upon you whether or not i have an imagination or lack thereof.

i spoke the truth of what i read, if truth is not what is sought or looked for, then what is the purpose in asking to review said poetry?
Though that's what it looks like, I didn't mean it as a way to see if you have imagination or not....

You sound a lot like OBLH..... But seriously if you have some poems then post em, cuz I wouldn't mind seein how you write... And if you don't write em, then forget I said anything towards that effect.

OBLH? hopefully that was a compliment of sorts, otherwise i would much be offended i should say. however i was only pointing what I thought were mundane and lacking colour

thereby hoping against hope that the artist in question will therefore scrutinise the work to see if the validity of their emotional outbursts are justified in such a way as to create the world they visualise for all us readers to see, other than mere trappings of words

13
I dont want to be,
a famous poet,
I dont bother with effects,
they get written as they come,

spur of the moment,
emotional coverage,
for myself,

I dont write for you,
dont write for anybody,
I dont write for no one,
but myself,

I have no reason,
to wonder why,
I wrote them how I did,

these writings are MINE,
not yours to tamper with,
my work is perfect,
as I see it,

I feel no need,
to judge my feelings,
this is how I am,

if you dont like it,

tough.

This does make sense doesn't it? I do like them but some bits I'm confused...

I'm confused about certain segments of this thread as well Dom.

Originally posted by Kharhmah
13
I dont want to be,
a famous poet,
I dont bother with effects,
they get written as they come,

spur of the moment,
emotional coverage,
for myself,

I dont write for you,
dont write for anybody,
I dont write for no one,
but myself,

I have no reason,
to wonder why,
I wrote them how I did,

these writings are MINE,
not yours to tamper with,
my work is perfect,
as I see it,

I feel no need,
to judge my feelings,
this is how I am,

if you dont like it,

tough.
Nice

Originally posted by Coldfire
Nice
Thank you very much.

Originally posted by Kharhmah
Thank you very much.
Your welcome

No.14
I see you walk away,
then wonder if you'll turn back,
to look at me once more,

before you leave my eyes completely,
let me look upon your face again,
so I can love you in my dreams,
please say you'll think of me,
I will of you,
even if it makes me die inside,

I never want to let you go,
despite the fact,
your heart's not mine.

Me likes

coolness K.

Thanks.

Originally posted by Kharhmah
No.14
I see you walk away,
then wonder if you'll turn back,
to look at me once more,

before you leave my eyes completely,
let me look upon your face again,
so I can love you in my dreams,
please say you'll think of me,
I will of you,
even if it makes me die inside,

I never want to let you go,
despite the fact,
your heart's not mine.
That's beautiful.

Thank you.

Originally posted by Kharhmah
I'm confused about certain segments of this thread as well Dom.
But you created this thread...

I know.

Aahhh you confuse me!

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No.15
Do you know how much I want to hurt you?
because you looked at me like that,
I want you to feel my pain inside,

your eyes burn through me,
and there's nothing I can do,
You make me want to rip my heart out,
and leave it by your side.

You want to hurt me now...?

That's good!

awesome dude.

Wow. So who's this one about? I like it. You dont usually write about this kind of stuff.

Originally posted by ShapedByWords
Wow. So who's this one about? I like it. You dont usually write about this kind of stuff.
I have no idea.

I just spontaneously wrote it last night before I went to sleep.


I know. Dont know what's happening.

You are definitely changing.

Good stuff

ha... being haunted by a dreamlover, dude?

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No.17
Boredom releases me,
only to be ensnared by hate,
of you,
of what you cease to do,
and how I wish upon you, conflict.

my unhealthy state of mind,
in which you leave me,
alone,
without purpose I shall truly suffer,
although this means nothing.

cry

What happened?

Absolutely nothing.

koolness K. hahaha nice...

Originally posted by Kharhmah
Absolutely nothing.
your subject matter various frequently.

I know. I think I may be having an odd few months.

Originally posted by Kharhmah
I know. I think I may be having an odd few months.

heh... did ye now laddie??? heh...

Those poems are good, you'll have to give me some ideas.

hey K any new ones?

No. 18
I'd lived in Hell for an eternity,
until you left me screaming,
left me bleeding,
lain across the floor,

the times I'd run to you,
seem to be so far, so distant,
but feel closer than before,
the moments I'd be in your arms,
the world would melt away,
my senses would discard me here,
I'd let them have their way.

neat dude.

"neat dude" (how very original)

Kharhmah I like No. 18 but it feels incomplete to me

Originally posted by ShapedByWords
"neat dude" (how very original)

Kharhmah I like No. 18 but it feels incomplete to me yeah, bite me! i was tired man..... hahah. well fine, K, it is a really nice piece, I like the whole poem, but i agree with mar here, seems incomplete somehow...

I have agree with both of you. There is something missing.

I agree with all of you yes But it's good so far

Originally posted by Kharhmah
I have agree with both of you. There is something missing. hey bro, no sweat... just try to finish it. hrmmmmm if you want anyways... lotta poets end up with frags that dont end... some just... well, WE just cant do it.

Originally posted by DreamingWarrior
hey bro, no sweat... just try to finish it. hrmmmmm if you want anyways... lotta poets end up with frags that dont end... some just... well, WE just cant do it.
ummm bro? lol

Originally posted by Coldfire
ummm bro? lol ahhh shaddup! evil wench! hahaha! ( yeah, i DO like it anyway! hahahahahha!)

Originally posted by DreamingWarrior
ahhh shaddup! evil wench! hahaha! ( yeah, i DO like it anyway! hahahahahha!)
Again with the evil wench LOL. Don't make me come over there... you might be taller but I still have my ways.... heh heh heh

Originally posted by Coldfire
Again with the evil wench LOL. Don't make me come over there... you might be taller but I still have my ways.... heh heh heh yeah come on... hahaha you gotta be pretty damned good to get a: past the slooberdog, b: past me unc and auntie, and c: actually into my room, on me, and have me tied down before i awake and .... well.. hahaha . and outside? you better hire the biggest baddest mofo available, and make sure he dont mind getting hurt. NO i WONT make it easy for ya woman! hahahhaha!

Originally posted by Kharhmah
I have agree with both of you. There is something missing.
I have a lot of works in progress. lol

I've got some short ones for you.

No. 19
When I look up,
I dont see the sky anymore,
just a wave of blackness,
that wasn't there before.

No. 20
He found her there dead,
she'd hung by the head,
unable to move nor to speak,
he cut the wretch down,
before he could drown,
in the tears he proceeded to weep.

No. 21 (my favourite)
Red Ribbon sewn through my skin to make me well,
I cannot compete with thee,
my ultimate relief.

I wrote No. 21 this morning, because on Friday night I cut myself to dull a depression.

gdgd. I heard a poem that was 2 words, so I really can't complain about length anymore.


I LIKE THEM!!!

You cut yourself!? Kharhmah don't do that! I'm worried....

Originally posted by Kharhmah
I've got some short ones for you.

No. 19
When I look up,
I dont see the sky anymore,
just a wave of blackness,
that wasn't there before.

No. 20
He found her there dead,
she'd hung by the head,
unable to move nor to speak,
he cut the wretch down,
before he could drown,
in the tears he proceeded to weep.

No. 21 (my favourite)
Red Ribbon sewn through my skin to make me well,
I cannot compete with thee,
my ultimate relief.

I wrote No. 21 this morning, because on Friday night I cut myself to dull a depression.
Those are really good.. but I'm sorry to hear you cut hun hug

who here senses stalker?

Originally posted by T.V.O.T.I.
who here senses stalker?

dude.... soo not the way to go K. gonna kick yer ass if you dont stop!!!! (seriously though, dude... go talk to a counselor man. please.)

Originally posted by T.V.O.T.I.
gdgd. I heard a poem that was 2 words, so I really can't complain about length anymore.


I LIKE THEM!!!
Thanks Mario.

Originally posted by Blue Dragon
You cut yourself!? Kharhmah don't do that! I'm worried....
Calm down woman. hug

Originally posted by Coldfire
Those are really good.. but I'm sorry to hear you cut hun hug
Thanks. I'm fine now though. hug

Originally posted by DreamingWarrior
dude.... soo not the way to go K. gonna kick yer ass if you dont stop!!!! (seriously though, dude... go talk to a counselor man. please.)
I'm okay now.

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Gosh that was a long post.

Sure was. Sorry but I just feel uncomfortable when people do that. I suppose at our age you just feel really down, I know the feeling, but I have never done that before.

I have to ask; you weren't going to take it too far were you? I mean what does cutting you wrist do to you? I hate to ask.

That is so beautiful, i can so hear what u are saying, some of my friends were cutting themselves, they had nowhere to vent nefing, keep up the writing cos it's therapy too, more healthy than cutting (or smashing up ur hand on walls - my trik, i went 2 far once and only once).

Anyway, Its really good that ur are open about it....... may the scars last 4eva to remind u of the hells of ur past.nopity

Thanks hun.

Originally posted by Blue Dragon
I have to ask; you weren't going to take it too far were you? I mean what does cutting you wrist do to you? I hate to ask.
I dont think I have the guts to go that far.

I was planning the whole thing out so I think I did it to be able to gain complete control over something because I can't control anything else.

I don't know if that made any sense or not . . . .

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No. 22
Pain I feel,
from one week,
without my addiction,
is immense,
unbearable,
my addiction breathes,
I hope,
He never leaves me.

No. 23 a.k.a. Silent Suicide
Stop me now,
through your relentless haunting,
so you will understand,
my reasoning,
for being,
who or what I will not be,

after now,
before today,
all I ever have,
and wont be,
will be dismissed,

for you are my reason for not being,
my loving pain and suffering,

My eternal Silent Suicide.

Originally posted by Coldfire
hahahahaha....

Originally posted by Kharhmah
I dont think I have the guts to go that far.

I was planning the whole thing out so I think I did it to be able to gain complete control over something because I can't control anything else.

I don't know if that made any sense or not....
It didn't, sorry. Good poems.

wow! however im really sad to hear that you cut yourself it makes me really sad to hear about it when people do that to themseelves because my friend used to do that than eventually hung himself.he was 15.
r.i.p. jeff cry

its all right it happened last year and ibe gotten pretty much over it.

Thanks Coldfire.

Originally posted by bloody bows1
wow! however im really sad to hear that you cut yourself it makes me really sad to hear about it when people do that to themseelves because my friend used to do that than eventually hung himself.he was 15.
r.i.p. jeff cry
Oh I'm so sorry. hug

No. 24
Painted lips and Blackened eyes,
enough to make you mine,
Painted lips and Blackened eyes,
enough to hypnotize,
Painted lips and Blackened eyes,
I thought I'd crossed the line,
Painted lips and Blackened eyes,
You saw through my disguise.

No. 25 a.k.a. Damn You
Haven't been to sleep all night,
I cant keep my eyes open,
immense pain running through my head,
please leave the casket broken,
eyes of bloodshot, teary red,
not wanting to surprise,
the owner of this ready bed,
with her own slow demise,

Please smile at me and tell me that,
the pain will be okay,
cease my eternal solitude,
please help me hide away,
from Evil eyes, Angelic lies,
and words which should not be,
I need you here, come with me now,
come hide away with me.

No. 26
I hate everything I stand for,
I am unknown to everyone and me,
God damn the things I need to live,
and make them burn for me.

No. 27
Destruction is my middle name,
there is now nothing sacred,
I spin out lies,
confuse thine eyes,
and say it doesn't mean a thing,
and say it doesn't matter,

I wish for you to understand,
the causes for my reasons,
but I am weak,
deprived of sleep,
and the torture never ceases,
and my pain will never stop.

Originally posted by Kharhmah
No. 25 a.k.a. Damn You
Haven't been to sleep all night,
I cant keep my eyes open,
immense pain running through my head,
please leave the casket broken,
eyes of bloodshot, teary red,
not wanting to surprise,
the owner of this ready bed,
with her own slow demise,

Please smile at me and tell me that,
the pain will be okay,
cease my eternal solitude,
please help me hide away,
from Evil eyes, Angelic lies,
and words which should not be,
I need you here, come with me now,
come hide away with me.
I love this one

(^^I like that one too. )

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Wow I haven't posted in here for ages.

Anymoo... back with the biz

No. 28
I can be talking,
then they turn around
and talk to someone else,
like I'm not there,
it makes me mad,
'cos they know I'm wrong somewhere,
inside my head,
that's why I cry and hurt inside,
when no one else is there,

I'd like to see you try,
and make me better,
make me.... me,
before I let the blood run free.

I wrote this one on my Birthday.

No.29
Leave me alone,
'till I have grown,
and I have no more to say,
show me how,
to kill you only,
without causing any pain,
I sleep alone with the lights on,
and think of you with me,
opened eyes unveil the lies,
of which you told to me.

No. 30
My scars are itchy,
don't scratch them,
it hurts too much,
to think about,
what I did and how I let you down,
as you cried to me,
on the telephone,
and all I did was put you down,

I don't know why I made you cry,
or why I told you "no"
I couldn't see you anymore,
because you were alone with him,
you thought of me the whole time through,
and even then I said no to you,

I cant think why I said goodbye,
to you,
the only one who stayed,
I must be mad to let you go,
without your goodnight kiss,

lay me down,
put me to rest,
just let me know,
I didn't break your heart too badly,
collect up all the fractured pieces,
and I'll make them whole for you.

No. 31
Leave me alone,
I want to play by myself,
on this cold stairwell,
I dont want you to see me,
even though,
I'm sitting in plain view,
I like it here,
though I'm hungry and sick,
dont make me move,
from this quiet solitude,
of this cold stairwell,
it's my favourite place in the world,
and I found it today,
it was hidden from me,
as I wanted to be,

but they made me go,
they made me move,
to a park,
on a wall,
by the church,
away from my most favourite place in the world,
with ladybirds,
and daffodils,
and everything I hate,

I'm walking through the graveyard,
and there is no mistake,
that it was my favourite place,
now I'm sitting on a bench,
under shadows,
trying to replicate the stairwell,
that I sat on and was happy,
'till that demon harlot came,
and I had to move my body,
she took away my solitude,
my only place to be alone,
she made me sit with mortal souls,
and I hate them all quite rightly,

those goddamn birds up in the trees,
leave no silence,
but the breeze,
broken glass and broken loneliness,
lay trodden underfoot,
't is cold in the shadows,
but coldness still was warmer on the stairwell,
on my stairwell,
where I was moved,
where no humans dare to tread.

No. 32
Have you ever felt so sad,
that all you want to do is cry,
and cry so hard,
you only stop to bleed inside,
as the pain you feel inside you burns.

And It Hurts.

It hurts so bad you wish you'd die,
to stop the crying in your mind,
your eyes can stand no more,
acid substituted tears,
your guts begin to lurch,
and you do nothing more but wonder,
how you came to be like this,
what heinous crime your body did,
to make your head behave this way.

Well have you?
Tell me,
tell me all I need to hear about,
your pain,
your tiredness and suffering,
the sadness felt,
because you were unable to feel anything else,
remember it and ask me, Why?


Because I feel that way.

aww I love your stuff!

Thanking you.

You're quite welcome

No. 33
Tears are stained,
all down my face,
for I have cried,
the day you died,
I held you there,
on the table,
morphine injection,
to make you retire,
to the back of your box,
where you lie,
and slowly die,
as I'm crying,
in the corner,
such a loner,
I wish you'd never go,
my cat,
I love you too much,
to let you leave,
please stay,
don't go away,
or leave me crying,
watching you dying,
in your box,
on the table,
I am not able,
I know,
your not coming home with us,
anymore,
you'll go to sleep,
and be the quietest,
I've ever seen you be,
you will not move,
again forever,
will not purr,
if I touch your fur,
but I'll hug you till the end.

Originally posted by Kharhmah
No. 33
Tears are stained,
all down my face,
for I have cried,
the day you died,
I held you there,
on the table,
morphine injection,
to make you retire,
to the back of your box,
where you lie,
and slowly die,
as I'm crying,
in the corner,
such a loner,
I wish you'd never go,
my cat,
I love you too much,
to let you leave,
please stay,
don't go away,
or leave me crying,
watching you dying,
in your box,
on the table,
I am not able,
I know,
your not coming home with us,
anymore,
you'll go to sleep,
and be the quietest,
I've ever seen you be,
you will not move,
again forever,
will not purr,
if I touch your fur,
but I'll hug you till the end.

kitty! crybaby