Asajj vs. Darth Bandon

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Otaku_Sith
This is a little story it probably sucks.(its my first StarWars fic,finally)
The point is ...eh..i don't know what the point is and i don't know why i used darth Bandon probably because he's bald.


''She was running from a fight,probably the first time in her life.No,she wasn't afraid of the Sith but for what would happen if she killed him,she thaught.''There a gap in the wall.'' she hid behind the wall then she saw Bandon walk further.''Suddenly she was lifted up in the air and hit against the wall the she was thrown out in the open.''You really think that would work?''Bandon said with a grin on his face.''You crazy b***,hahaahahaha.''now Asajj had it.''Betraying the Sith is a stupid thing to do Asajj'.''Bandon said.''I did not betray the Sith.''Asajj stumbled.''Yes you did.When?''Asajj asked.''Yesterday,i saw you posting Yoda pwns Sid on a Yoda vs. Sidious thread.Damn ya got me there Bandon but now your gowing down!"She turned here lightsabers on and attacked Bandon.He grabbed his lightsaber and could just in time parry her attack.''You've gotten better Asajj,but i'm afraid it's not enough.''Then he struck her with force lightning.''Asajj fell on her knee's letting the blue lightsaber fall out of her hand.''Bandon laughed so this is how far your power goes!"Muwahahahahahahaha..ahum..ahrg...ahum.''But enough with the talk time for you to die!''Then he attacked.Suddenly Asajj flipped over his attack and stabbed him in the neck.''Hmmm not that smart after all.''She said with a grin on her face while turning her saber off.Then she picked up the blue saber and walked away.Thinking:i'd better force that admin. to delete that post.

Fishy
To short, makes no sense, Bandon dies and why the hell did Bandon say

"Bandon laughed so this is how far your power goes"

Why would he say that he is laughing???

But hmm seriously it really is to short ends without reason and Bandon dies...

Otaku_Sith
that was a little mistake and i already told you it would suck and it was a little story and fic don't have to make sense thats why they're fics

Fishy
Yeah okay, it would be nice if it made sense however stick out tongue

Otaku_Sith
Of course

Otaku_Sith
I think this said enough about my writing skills.

Otaku_Sith
Actually my first intentions where to let Bandon win,but with Asajj chasing him but that would make less sense then it already does.

exanda kane
Im still confused

Otaku_Sith
me to muwahahahahhahahahahaha...

Darth_Glentract
that sucked

Otaku_Sith
yes i said that,but you suck even more.

jackstain
Nah, no one could suck more than that story.

I'd rather read Exanda's jango vs maul story.....and thats pretty bad...no offense exanda.

Fishy
Are you insane? I'd rather read this then that

Otaku_Sith
yes i hate this story i just had this f.u.c.k.e.d up idea and i wrote it down.but your right it sucks donkey balls.

SithKiller
Dude you been sippin off my whiskey bottle havent ya....lol

Otaku_Sith
jep now that i see it is written terribly.I will let you torture me for the next ten minutes.And it is now 03:30 that means the torturing will end at 03:40 at may 16tnht

Fishy
How come its 3:30 where you live and its 5:35 where i live, and you only posted this two minutes ago and we live in the same time zone?

Explain that to me please

Otaku_Sith
because i don't know what tim it is in Amerika.and it would suck if american people would want to torture me.(because most of the visitors of this site are american)but don't know when they can or not.and it is 5:39 where i live.

jackstain
the jango vs maul idea and story sucks more, but it is written better than this crap.

YoshiSlayer
Dumb idea you can't have star wars without lightsaber battles and you can't have star wars without story combine the two b****

Otaku_Sith

Darth_Janus
Well, watch Fishy. He can do it. He speaks better English then half of the Americans and Brits and Canadians on this site.

Fishy
And i'm still in high school smile Just like you Otaku...

but really why are we talking about spelling here... We should talk about the story

Darth_Janus
We did. It's over. Let's discuss some quality writing now. I have a label from a Mountain Dew here...

Fishy
Lol

Otaku_Sith

Fishy
My english teacher does though, well maybe he doesn't I wouldn't know never show up. I just learn English from playing games watching movies and posting on forums...

Otaku_Sith

Fishy
You can't... You need a mod for that...

Otaku_Sith
Nooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo
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oooooooooooooooooo!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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