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Fools....can it be anymore descriptive?
A fine line we walk throughout our lives.
We live for it unknowingly as our blinded eyes search
in the dark for some shed of light.
Only to reach out and fall face first into the mud and
dirt that has become our daily existance.
We deny with every fibre of our being that we cannot
and should not fall prey to the herd mentality of human life.
Fools...can it be anymore descriptive.

Good job Feanor! And its so true unfortunately...

...thanks cold

love yours too

there are no titles to any of this....just: mind babble

HA! Can it be that the mind of a genius is prone
to spew babble and sound like an idiot?
Or is it, that in truth an idiot that speaks thus, and we
percieve it to be a wellspring of knowledge?
Alas, could it be truthfully an idiotic genius that we
see and hope it is otherwise. I cannot say. For I am
neither idiotic, nor a genius for my mind cannot
concieve such notion as to warrant conceit on my part.

Wow... that's deep.... you're gooood

One word. One word...is all that it takes to pierce
our paper hearts, and cause so much joy or pain.
How is it, that that one word can do so much, or that we
even allow it to do just that? Are we, as humans wrought with
fragile emotions and our thoughts filled with chaotic
memories of the past, so easily waylaid with one word?
A word that can, if allowed, uplift us soaring
beyond the clouds or bury us deep within the
muddy ground. Is this then, the sum of our meager and
mundane lives? To be forever bound and enslaved to one word?
How then do you justify, that one word?

Originally posted by Coldfire
Wow... that's deep.... you're gooood thanks again, but such praise is not worthy of me....really

Yes you are! I'm totally serious; I don't lie about stuff like this.

Originally posted by Ou Be Low hoo
You're right. Most of what you have posted is dull and derivative.



thank you....but coming from you i half expected more than a futile attempt at criticism, even if you've somewhat watered it down so as to not hurt what feelings i may have had

but the fact of the matter is...i've generated some sort of response from you which is, ironically better than no response

so in a sense no matter how dull and derivative you say my babbling prose is, it at least affected you...to a degree

From out of the mouths of youth come words fraught with uncertainties.
But what then comes out of the mouths of supposedly wiser, more mature adults
who claim such absurdities? Perhaps insecurities? A fear of knowing academics but
to not know anything else but to spit venomous volumes of gibberish in the
hopes he considered something else other than a fool? I claim no such outward
trappings of intelligencia as some would, therefore I cannot say that I am wise.
But wise enough to know that when I do speak, and not necessarily from the heart or
for that matter from my mind, I speak softly and carry with me nothing. I strive at nothing
to stir the ire of others, nor seek to whet their emotional outbursts, no less so
their psychoanalytical perception of unwanted and unperceived conceits.
No. I desire none of that. Does this then mean I search for truth, though
vain in the attempt? In truth, if you wish to inspire me; not with words or
actions or for that matter inaction and wordless thoughts, but rather
through simplicity of offering nothing.

Pity the one who raises himself above all others
For simply doing so.
Pity the one who seeks comfort unsought
For simply doing so.
Pity the one who reeks of staleness and
ambiguity
For simply doing too much of nothing in the
hope of rising to comfort his bruised and wafer thin ego.
Think for a moment, and you'll have spent a lifetime on
a wasted effort.
Act, and your behaviour will seem uncouth, unkind, and filled
overmuch with rancor.
By the gods...is there nothing of great will that is beyond
your sanctity of mind and body to consort with
whoremongering, desperate, by and large spineless
men?
Pity the one who reads this and thinks it is his life.

An ode, for the muse that doth inspire
Prithee, Lo! with bemused ire
Forsaken thus, e'er he sat
Birds doth fly, thus to shat
And did he so with fingers found
Towards his mouth, the taste abound
Shameless levity, O' happy days
For this, I often say:
Off thy knockers, lest you dismay.
Of the man who often mock
And yet adorned with garrish frock
Behind gelid walls thou hast hid
A fool with ne'er to bid
Come one, come all
Let us not dally, nor stall
For the road that leads
Tis but the one he pleads.
An ode...an ode I beg
Smirksome, loathsome dreg

Originally posted by Ou Be Low hoo
You're right. Most of what you have posted is dull and derivative.

As for Coldifre...Her platitudes are empty and available to everyone.

My platitudes are empty, are they??? Well at least I don't tell everyone that they suck, just because I can. I happen to mean it evertime I say I like someone's poems.

Originally posted by Ou Be Low hoo
No criticism is futile as criticisms are based on opinions. However, everything else you said is true. I'm just trying to get people to be a little more original, that is all. on that point, we are on agreement....yet with the profusion of rap and so called alternative music, sex saturated media, and with no new talent in the finer form of poetry and prose, how can one be 'original'...and with so many other influences that abound?

and please...i care little for those supposed modern day poets of which i give no more than a passing glance....call it what you will but i find it, bland

Originally posted by Ou Be Low hoo
I feel that the true modern poets of our times are the rappers who's lyrical dexterity is mixed with potent political comment. Obviously, I'm not talking about 50Cent here...But check out anything by The Roots, K-OS, The Beastie Boys (amongst others...) and you'll see the poetry is as alive, fresh and brave as it was in the times of the Romantics... HA! you mention The Beastie Boys the most underrated rap groups to have come out...none have yet to match their style and wit...but then since i am a fan of theirs, my opinions are - well, mine

yet you can keep gangsta rap and the lyrical rhymes of wannabes to those that want it...

Originally posted by DreamingWarrior
funny how this describes you OLBH.

How beautifully ironic! The blind labelling the seeing what they fail to recognise in themselves!

I like it! It's original, amusing, yet slightly melancholic and it has a good structure. Most importantly of all, it's not boring!

something nonsensical...but

Hey! Hi! Dwelleth I
This place named: forever sigh
Let loose upon my sated girth
Of noble son, nobility birth
No to woe! Forever low, I go to show
To somewhere snow
Say what? Say what? Said the mocking bird I heard
A prisoner, a slave, a gaoler, the master, whence the laird?
Mistaken for lightness, my brightness dimmed
A cup of java, please to the brim
Hey! Hi! Dwelleth I
This place named: forever sigh

Originally posted by Ou Be Low hoo
I like it! It's original, amusing, yet slightly melancholic and it has a good structure. Most importantly of all, it's not boring! whoah! dude...that has got to be a first....*takes note*

thanks!!!

I like them all So keep on doing your thing

Ooooo I like the alliteration (?) in it. I hope that's the right term... I'm not so good with poetic terms

nice work Fea

thanks laurie blushing

Lol. What's with you and Laurie and the Gettin married things??? lol

watcha talkin' bout willis?

Originally posted by Coldfire
Lol. What's with you and Laurie and the Gettin married things??? lol
wuh.. where did you hear about that?

I see it in your Location and under Feanor's name..... was just wondering, that's all....

hmmmm.....WE wonders too

shifty Niiiice, lol. Post more stuff please.

soon....very soon

as of now, i'm in a weird mental state

Originally posted by DreamingWarrior
hahah I'd guess so with the gettin married and all... ahhahaha! how'd you know?!?

actually it's more chaotic than that...and the ones i did came out as drivel(sp)...made me wanna gag

hahahahah!

Originally posted by DreamingWarrior
hahahahah! case in point:

I gave my love a cherry
That had a lovely stone
She took said pit
And blindly spit
Directly at my bone
I winced with pain and agony
For the love of my life you see
Had hit the spot, that was so hot
So thus the wenched has damaged me


need i say more?

haahhahahhahahahrotflmao!!!! hahahahahahahahahha!!!!!!

....smod you're too much

Lol I wanna hear some more please!!

as soon as my mind is out of it's chaotic state

Oh mines like that too right now so don't worry

and the last one... hahahaha....hmm...

Originally posted by Coldfire
.... ummm.... And that's all I have to say .....and yet you've said so much

shifty So I have....

weird how we know so much from saying so little

Lol all those layers of hidden meaning aren't so hidden after all

..... wow......

haha *stomach roils at the botox and gelatinous comments...*

lol Niiiiiice. You should've seen the comments Feanor had on the OTF last night... yeesh.... gross....

this is what happens when your mind is in a state....

Yeah sounds like its just horrible

not to worry tho - i've somewhat tamed my next one

as soon as i can get out of my head and onto paper....

Ooo can't wait then!

as long as no goo hits the net i am ok with that, but let us keep from making such revolting comments OK>???? ahahahhha!

Yeah no more revolting comments

nope....nada one

but i've come to realise that my stuff is very very different from what's in this forum....yes, yes...i know

we all have our own style, but for some reason mine looks - archaic

archaic makes your stuff unique, a quality to be cherished like a fine wine, a good woman, and a precious jewel. keep em comin!

Originally posted by DreamingWarrior
archaic makes your stuff unique, a quality to be cherished like a fine wine, a good woman, and a precious jewel. keep em comin!

Lol nice comparison But yeah post some more for us soon if ya can

Originally posted by DreamingWarrior
archaic makes your stuff unique, a quality to be cherished like a fine wine, a good woman, and a precious jewel. keep em comin! you've just listed two of my favourite things in life Originally posted by Coldfire
Lol nice comparison But yeah post some more for us soon if ya can and i shall do that asap....

oh most definately the wine and woman

haha yep! *nudges with elbow* sometimes more the wine than the women ! hahahahaaha!!! j/k gals...

Originally posted by DreamingWarrior
haha yep! *nudges with elbow* sometimes more the wine than the women ! hahahahaaha!!! j/k gals...

Niiiice

Originally posted by DreamingWarrior
haha yep! *nudges with elbow* sometimes more the wine than the women ! hahahahaaha!!! j/k gals... wine and women: a deadly mix *winks* if you know what i mean...hehehehe Originally posted by Coldfire
Niiiice COLD!!! didn't see you there....

disregard what i said bag

Originally posted by Coldfire
Suuuure you didn't.... shifty lol

Where's that poetry stuff you promised us?? shifty

Originally posted by Coldfire
Where's that poetry stuff you promised us?? shifty i'm workin' on it....sheesh

between you and laurie, i swear i'm gonna go nuts...AGH!

Originally posted by DreamingWarrior
hahahahahaha! take no shame brother.....
haha what women will do to us .... oi.
Haha Just goes to show who holds the power

Originally posted by Coldfire
Haha Just goes to show who holds the power yes....flaunt it why doncha.....schmoll

Originally posted by Coldfire
Wow.... That was great hun aww.....blushing you're just saying that....

No she's not, that's great!

Originally posted by alcoholicpoet
No she's not, that's great! and this is coming from one whose work is far better than mine....i am flattered

listen to the Lady and the drunk. hahahaha good stuff man!

Originally posted by DreamingWarrior
listen to the Lady and the drunk. hahahaha good stuff man! the drunk??

dude...i almost choked on my chip when i read that

Fea! I didn't know you wrote poetry

These are really, really good...keep writing

Originally posted by DreamingWarrior
listen to the Lady and the drunk. hahahaha good stuff man!

you know... for some reason I take that as a compliment.

Originally posted by alcoholicpoet
you know... for some reason I take that as a compliment.
Good. SO NOT serious about that, just a joke man/lady/whatever.... hahahhaa see now why my basic training nickname is Joker? hahahah!

cool.

Originally posted by DreamingWarrior
cool.

Agreed.

WRTIE MORE POEMS NOW!

Originally posted by Elessea
WRTIE MORE POEMS NOW!
ditto!!!

last one....short and bitter and full of hope easily shattered by the gods whims as we are nothing but a thing to be played....

Upon a shadow that benights my soul
Dark and brooding, alive it is
The burden weights a thousand fold
Respite denied, twas but a wish
The heart grows fallow as the night-bird sings
A song of dismay and woe
The salted tear sheds, the water stings
Where then does my love go....

very cool man! clap

^ Ditto, kickass!

You wrote more poems

touched Those were sweet and very well written. Yay for Feanor

I like your silly poems Fea yay!

hahaha goofballs!

Originally posted by DreamingWarrior
hahaha goofballs! that just inspired me to write....more?

very cool. haha!

shocked wow Feanor, that was beautimos

they're beautiful

heh.....

well it's true....

hahahaha poor fea, write some today !

Awww...touched

embarrassing....id'nit

not so much...its sweet

Dang man... haha nice.

Originally posted by Coldfire
Wow..... I don't have anything to say to that.... well this might do: jawdrop ..........bag

Originally posted by Coldfire
Shit man I thought I was nearly reading something I'd written there

hey amber....laurie text me the other night, i was soooo happy

haha your real name's amber? ha wow.

Originally posted by Coldfire
She did?! Awesomeness!! i know!!! nearly had a heart attack i did.......sadly, i couldn't text her back Originally posted by DreamingWarrior
haha your real name's amber? ha wow. let's keep that on the low pro mah bruthah

sorry coldfire bag