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like em both. a lot. bring more, please.

lol.....you know what I think of your poetry man.....I think you need to post the rest of them....especially the patience one since I posted mine already.....so then ppl can compare those two....anyways keep writing and bring them here!!!!!!

hahah oh great, brothers... ahhahaha bring on your other stuff man!

yes I liked both of them Post some more please

This is a sonnet I wrote for my English class.

Pray My Little Warriors

As light of truth gives way to sins of ruin,
All saints must pray and to God's call be true.
It comes not now but maybe sometime soon:
A cry for darkness to o'ertake what's new.

Have all God's graces to this day been vain?
The world has chosen darkness over light.
The people have much blood with which to stain
The earth we walk without an end in sight.

If only all His people prayed alike.
The Lord cries out for all the earth to hear:
"Pray on my little warriors, drive this spike.
Let not the darkness drive you out with fear!"

This present darkness has consumed us all,
But through God's might, we shall come through withal.

Nice, and very true!

That was very well done I tried doing a sonnet once, lmao, and it turned out horribly

Originally posted by DreamingWarrior
Nice, and very true! Originally posted by Coldfire
That was very well done I tried doing a sonnet once, lmao, and it turned out horribly

Thanks a lot. I'll try to post more

Oooo yes yes post more

Originally posted by twin_soul
Thanks a lot. I'll try to post more
joo had bettur... ahah!

Like it? I love it!! You have talent

You got some more you can post??

ooooo.... that's a great poem

Very nice poems, Twin. Bring some more !

Thanks you guys!

Yeah, this is kinda old but...

Originally posted by Coldfire
That was very well done I tried doing a sonnet once, lmao, and it turned out horribly

Heh, I say keep trying... well, I guess you can't force it. Mine just kinda flowed out

Originally posted by twin_soul
Yeah, this is kinda old but...



Heh, I say keep trying... well, I guess you can't force it. Mine just kinda flowed out

Yeah I haven't really had time to try recently, but I will once I do have the time

Originally posted by DreamingWarrior
haha hey, to see my poems, just click my name and check my posts. is easier to just walk through there and then you can get past the many hi's and hello's that got on the thread. haha or, just sit at the comp for an hour and checkit all out! make sure to read Syren, Tassie, Prince of Blades, Coldfire, and Karmah's stuff too! some of my personal faves.

Lol yeah there seems to be a lot of chatter on our threads eh? Tis fun tho lol

..... cry That was wonderful... Lol I'm such a hopeless romantic

very enjoyable.

Geez that poem made me cry this time....

I would like to see some more twin

Twin, hurry up and post before I hit you up side your head (u know I will too)

Wow... i havent been here in a while... geez Blair... I gotta rewrite that poem... but anyway i found a poem.. well 2 poems, that i don't remember writing...

The first one I call Alone

They left me alone.
Ha... I don't need them.
Or do I?
It's pointless.
What could they ever do for me?
I don't know...
It's useless.
They were just a waste of time.
Or maybe... I'm useless.
It's hopeless.
They'll never come back.
They left me... they don't need me.
But I'm so lonely.
I feel useless...
Hopeless... pointless...
I find myself looking for them.
Watching, waiting.
Will they come back?
Somebody help me...
But how?
No one can help me...
I'm hopless.
Somebody need me...
But for what?
I'm useless.
Somebody give me a reason...
Reason to exist.
But why?
I'm pointless.
I sit alone in the shadows.
No one notices me.
I am invisible.
Is that why they left?
There they go...
They pass by me.
They don't notice me.
I run after them,
But they don't see.
They leave... again.
I never noticed before,
But I wanted them.
I don't want to be alone.
The tears... they sting.
I wish they didn't.
I wipe them away.
Crying is pointless.
It's hopeless, useless...
I return to the shadows.
I sit, waiting... but for what?
It seems like ages pass.
But then...
I feel a tap on my shoulder.
Is it them?
I look up...
No, it's not them.
It's someone else.
Someone... new.
He smiles at me.
I turn away.
I don't want to be with anyone...
Or do I?
He taps me again,
But I don't respond.
He sits next to me.
I don't understand.
Why doesn't He leave me,
Like the others had?
Inwardly I smile.
It feels nice
Not to sit alone.
I look at Him.
I see the same smiling face.
I smile back.
Suddenly I feel different inside.
Maybe I'm not so pointless.
Maybe He's my reason to exist.
Maybe I'm not so hopeless.
Maybe He can help me.
Maybe I'm not so useless.
Maybe He needs me.
Things have changed.
I have this feeling that He won't leave.
I know I won't.
I will stand by Him forever.


This one I don't remember when or why I wrote this one, and it has no title. So, here goes...

I thought that I
Knew you.
I felt like I
Loved you.
I tried to
Give you my heart.
But it felt like you
Ripped it apart.
Now I feel like I've
Wasted my time,
So I put together
This rhyme.
I thought that we'd be
Happy together.
I thought I would
Love you forever,
But I guess we'll be
Together fornever.
I'll always remember
How I used to feel,
But now I realize that
It coulda never been real.

nice...never seen those before....good job!!

Those are great twin!!

good job!

aight since twin is a duck who comes on forums then quits like two weeks into it, i will be posting his poems here....whenever i get the time...just bumping the thread right now....

ok . hahaha

well....umm....IM LAZY!!! so here is his site....just go here if you want to read it
fictionpress.com/~twinsoulice

thank you for your patience in this trying time of procrastination....

Awwww you're making us go find the poems in another thread instead? You ARE lazy haha I'll have to find time to do that lol

well its his own page on fictionpress, that has his poems...like you click on the poem title and it gives you the poem.....and yes....i am lazy...

hey blair, give us a hyperlink man... hahahaa!

Originally posted by Blair Wind
well its his own page on fictionpress, that has his poems...like you click on the poem title and it gives you the poem.....and yes....i am lazy...
lol I know that, but I'm too lazy to go find it right now
Originally posted by DreamingWarrior
hey blair, give us a hyperlink man... hahahaa!
yes

Originally posted by DreamingWarrior
hey blair, give us a hyperlink man... hahahaa!

wow... haven't been here in forever... man, i'm really bad at keeping up with forums...

http://www.fictionpress.com/~twinsoulice

Originally posted by twin_soul
wow... haven't been here in forever... man, i'm really bad at keeping up with forums...

http://www.fictionpress.com/~twinsoulice
omg hey!!! I missed seeing ya around! hug How ya been??

Its really good. Everyone goes through that awkward "spilling of guts", and I think you captured it very well. I also like how you left it hanging, letting the reader choose what comes next based on personal experience. Good stuff!