when broken is easily fixed

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heavenablaze666
when broken is easily fixed

your broken promises are hard for me to fix
why do you hide behind your smile
your stupid lies are starting to make me sick
and i belived them for a while
you think it is so easy
to forget the pain
do you think i couldnt see
the headlight of your speeding train

chorus:
so this is what happens
when broken is easily fixed
just tape up the lose ends
never let anyone in
when broken is easily fixed

just tape and glue
to fix the broken
just a moment for
you just one small token
you just let it go ?
pretend its not there?
a moment to live for?
a new heart to tear?
will you run away again?
and just leave me here

chorus:
so this is what happends
when broken is easily fixed
so this is who your life is spent?
the screams of those voices egging you on?
the curse of your on lament
when broken is easily fixed

i break myself
slave to my weakness
choke on my words how
could you gage loniness
my ears bleed fo want of your words
oh **** the words i need action
you broke my world
destroyed my hope
i gave every inch of my soul
to what end?

heavenablaze666
so do you think i should show this to my band?

vaya_the_elf
I think you should. smile

heavenablaze666
um ...thnxs?ok then

heavenablaze666
love
is love real?
mybe, to the hearts it steals
or is love blind
mybe, to those who coulndt find it
is love true?
mybe, to the few who saw love through
or is love fake?
mybe,to the few who hate instead
is love right?
mybe for those who fight for it
is love a dream?
maybe, to those who dont seem to notice it
is the beauty of love in the eye of the beholder?
well, what was love when you told her
you loved her?
what is love?

DreamingWarrior
cool stuff.

Coldfire
Originally posted by heavenablaze666
when broken is easily fixed

your broken promises are hard for me to fix
why do you hide behind your smile
your stupid lies are starting to make me sick
and i belived them for a while
you think it is so easy
to forget the pain
do you think i couldnt see
the headlight of your speeding train

chorus:
so this is what happens
when broken is easily fixed
just tape up the lose ends
never let anyone in
when broken is easily fixed

just tape and glue
to fix the broken
just a moment for
you just one small token
you just let it go ?
pretend its not there?
a moment to live for?
a new heart to tear?
will you run away again?
and just leave me here

chorus:
so this is what happends
when broken is easily fixed
so this is who your life is spent?
the screams of those voices egging you on?
the curse of your on lament
when broken is easily fixed

i break myself
slave to my weakness
choke on my words how
could you gage loniness
my ears bleed fo want of your words
oh **** the words i need action
you broke my world
destroyed my hope
i gave every inch of my soul
to what end?
That's a great song cry You should definitely show it to them yes

heavenablaze666
uh thanks i was kinda shy about writing this stuff here ....:sad:

Elessea
you're stuff is really good- and no reason to be shy around us. We're all poetry junkies and its fun to read new stuff happy hope to see more from you in the future.

heavenablaze666
happy thanks i will try to post some more

Elessea
yey! big grin

Theres nothing like reading the work of others to inspire one to write big grin

heavenablaze666
i stared at you
tried to capture the simpleness
i htought you might see me to
my heart seem to get careless
i didnt want to let you in
i tried to hide
to love again would be such sin
i thought about your soft blue eyes
the image seem to burn in my mind
the feel of love seemed like a lie
tried to speak but only stuttered
again my heart seemed to flutter
to tell a lie would be the truth
if i could spend on night with you
the thought to think such stupid thoughts
made me want to leave
i guess it would be fine
if i just see you

Elessea
*claps* awsome big grin

heavenablaze666
happy thanks .....

heavenablaze666
i guess i was shy about writing here cuz i thought...hmm...i just thought it would get misunderstood ....

bartdude
hi

heavenablaze666
um hi?

bartdude
nice tread

Tassie

Oiram62205
Originally posted by heavenablaze666
so do you think i should show this to my band?
wow you're writing is good. I hope you do decide to go to NY!!!

Elessea
That's understandable...I mean, poerty is really personal...

But, aside from a few *cough* stupid people- most of the folks around here understand poetry, and can give you good constructive feedback!

heavenablaze666
thanx happy i like your writing to

DreamingWarrior
Hey, ignore the morons, and keep bringing us your talent. Very nice works all around.

heavenablaze666
thank you happy

heavenablaze666
have you ever

have you ever watched foot prints fade in the sand
or a that grain of sand fade into the sea?
have you ever took a moment to watch the sun set?
if not you should spend some time wiht me
have you ever watched a flower fully bloom
or a person fully flower?
have you ever thought of thinking?
are you thinking of that thought?
have you ever heard the wind blow
will you always be so difficult
like a mountain bowing to the wind
have you ever took some time
to breath and take it in
have you ever raised your face to the sun
and scream a thousand screams
let it all out take all the rest in
have you ever watched as the blood dropped
or as the water trickled?
have you ever just welcomed the pain
enjoyed that little tickle?
have you ever?

heavenablaze666
Originally posted by Oiram62205
wow you're writing is good. I hope you do decide to go to NY!!!
yeah i decided to go .......im not sure if we will win though
sad but ill go big grin

DreamingWarrior
very very cool poem. i hope you find all you look for in NY!

Tassie
Originally posted by heavenablaze666
have you ever

have you ever watched foot prints fade in the sand
or a that grain of sand fade into the sea?
have you ever took a moment to watch the sun set?
if not you should spend some time wiht me
have you ever watched a flower fully bloom
or a person fully flower?
have you ever thought of thinking?
are you thinking of that thought?
have you ever heard the wind blow
will you always be so difficult
like a mountain bowing to the wind
have you ever took some time
to breath and take it in
have you ever raised your face to the sun
and scream a thousand screams
let it all out take all the rest in
have you ever watched as the blood dropped
or as the water trickled?
have you ever just welcomed the pain
enjoyed that little tickle?
have you ever?

Loverly. happy *saves* Appreciating life? Something I need to stop and do more often instead of wasting time being down..

heavenablaze666
yep kinda the idea happy

heavenablaze666
noone really ever takes time to apprectiate what they have....not even me ........i was at the beach when i wrote this ...........

DreamingWarrior
ahhahaa.... well, i hope you appreciate it all now.

heavenablaze666
nope i prolly still dont thats the problem you only apprecitae it for a ittle while

heavenablaze666
the fault

it was my fualt
i didnt mean to hurt you
it was me it always is
i tired to stand still
keep it all as it is
i tired to keep you from me
but i only hurt you more
i didnt want you to love me
btu either way you did
you tried to tell me everything'
and i just shot you down
i didnt even give you a chance
to tell me how you felt
i tired to say im sorry
but you didnt want to hear it
you walked away from me
and left me ther , just standing
i wasnt sure what to do
i just started thinking
abotu what you said
and how i felt
if i felt
did i feel
was i feeling?
am i feeling ?
sorry ?
i know it dosent change a thing
i know it wont mend you heart
i know it wont drie your tears
but i should have said it from the start
im sorry

(dedicated to sammy ...you know what i did you know who i am i just hopeyou know im sorry )

heavenablaze666
empty bottle

drowning in a empty bottle
watching as the world goes by
leaving me at full throttle
straing at an empty bottle
trying to make sense of things
blinded by a drink or 2
thinking of past love ones
wanting to go back a few
to were this all began
holding on to this empty bottle
trying hard to understand
why i seem to let things pass me by
the things i wanted made me cry
wanted to let go of this empty bottle
but i couldnt let it go
like some forign memory
of some time long ago
i throw way the empty bottle
but in my mind it is still here
tuanting my dreams and fanticies
never truly letting me go
and now there is a second bottle
filling me with morbid feeling
felling mostly dead to the world
never truly feeling
im still holding on to that bottle
i dont think ill ever leyt go

DreamingWarrior
Originally posted by heavenablaze666
the fault

it was my fualt
i didnt mean to hurt you
it was me it always is
i tired to stand still
keep it all as it is
i tired to keep you from me
but i only hurt you more
i didnt want you to love me
btu either way you did
you tried to tell me everything'
and i just shot you down
i didnt even give you a chance
to tell me how you felt
i tired to say im sorry
but you didnt want to hear it
you walked away from me
and left me ther , just standing
i wasnt sure what to do
i just started thinking
abotu what you said
and how i felt
if i felt
did i feel
was i feeling?
am i feeling ?
sorry ?
i know it dosent change a thing
i know it wont mend you heart
i know it wont drie your tears
but i should have said it from the start
im sorry

(dedicated to sammy ...you know what i did you know who i am i just hopeyou know im sorry )
wow. now if only ALL females felt that way.

Empty bottle is a cool poem.

Got only one thing to say critically, and that is check on the typos everynow and then, but otherwise, good stuff! clap

heavenablaze666
some of us do feel this way happy and yeah i got to check my typos i have a lot confused

heavenablaze666
stupid typos....:sad:

Elessea
*nods* I like the poems big grin

heavenablaze666
with all this anger there is no time to inhale
try to catch the smell of something you once knew
if you stop to look around
what do you see rebuilt, renewed?
everything is so beautiful
if we just take the time
and if you blink you could miss so much
please don't ever close your eyes
and i forgot to breath for like the sixth time this week
maybe it was the pink saturated sky that brought me back from yesterday
and took me on another ride
away from all the materialism and trouble
reminded me from past illusions
then i realized i had my eyes closed all this time
and let it all pass by
i took on chance
and just blow it all away
i should have never blinked

heavenablaze666
Originally posted by Elessea
*nods* I like the poems big grin
thank you ..you inspire me to keep posting them *big grin*

punkrocker666
bravo bravo

heavenablaze666
YOU READ MY POEMS !!!!!!!! GET OUT OF HERE

Elessea
o.O blink what's wrong?

Tassie
Originally posted by heavenablaze666
with all this anger there is no time to inhale
try to catch the smell of something you once knew
if you stop to look around
what do you see rebuilt, renewed?
everything is so beautiful
if we just take the time
and if you blink you could miss so much
please don't ever close your eyes
and i forgot to breath for like the sixth time this week
maybe it was the pink saturated sky that brought me back from yesterday
and took me on another ride
away from all the materialism and trouble
reminded me from past illusions
then i realized i had my eyes closed all this time
and let it all pass by
i took on chance
and just blow it all away
i should have never blinked

happy You have a refreshing outlook on life. XD

DreamingWarrior
very cool poem, Blaze.

heavenablaze666
Originally posted by Elessea
o.O blink what's wrong?
mortal enemy

heavenablaze666
Originally posted by Tassie
happy You have a refreshing outlook on life. XD
thank you big grin

heavenablaze666
Originally posted by DreamingWarrior
very cool poem, Blaze.
once again thank you ..all of you happy

Elessea
Originally posted by heavenablaze666
mortal enemy
ahhh...I understand completly stick out tongue (m'new poem tis about that)

*nods* I likey the poem...s

heavenablaze666
thankies happy i like your peoms to ...blow me away ...really :big grin:

punkrocker666
Originally posted by heavenablaze666
thank you big grin sad im your mortal enemy cry

heavenablaze666
yes you are ...really i didnt think you would read my poems..i mean come on we hate each other

heavenablaze666
laying awake at night alone
wanting to know how you feel
if you even feel remotly the same
as i feel when im around you
i long to tell you how i feel
but the words wont leave my lips
i want to hear you say the words
that will set my soul free
the feelings inside me
incircle my heart
making it harder to breath
i long to tell you how i feel
but the words wont leave my lips

Oiram62205
I guess you didnt see my last post, hopefully this one catches your eye. We do have a similar poem!! lol Great minds think alike!!

heavenablaze666
i did see your last post...i think ...the one about new york?
any ways thanks happy

punkrocker666
ok

heavenablaze666
erm .....

punkrocker666
Originally posted by heavenablaze666
yes you are ...really i didnt think you would read my poems..i mean come on we hate each other that dosent meani cant read poetry

heavenablaze666
no duh i know you can read i meani didnt think you wouold read mine!!!!

punkrocker666
well now u no

heavenablaze666
arrrrrg !!!! get out please!!!!!!

punkrocker666
FINE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

heavenablaze666
FINE !!!!!!!!!!

DreamingWarrior
Punk, don't be a f@$#tard, or you will go the way of THE G.O.A.T.! and I will help them rid us of you.

Great poem, Blaze. bring more!!!

heavenablaze666
G.O.A.T? of course i will happy but what the hell s G.O.A.T?

heavenablaze666
its five in the morning
and i have been dreaming
but i haven't been sleeping
dawn seems to be arriving
the sunlight seeping through my window
i close my eyes and still see it
the last time i saw your face
i feel the emotions weld up in my eyes
even though none is around
I'm scared to cry
i don't think ill get out of bed today
just sit here and try to understand
you left without a word
left me here all alone
in a room full of deafening silence
i here the sounds of traffic
the people continuing their pointless jobs
arguing of pointless thoughts
life's to short to hold a grudge
i should take my own advice
but i cant forget that you just left
i don't think i ll get out of bed tomorrow
i don't think i will leave this room
i think about the time i spent with you
and the heart ache returns once again
the time i spent with you let me breath
but your memory wont let me live
all the sudden i smell your sent
the way an angel smells
i think about how foolish that was
to let you in my life, now i wont forget
i wish you wouldn't leave
i would wish upon a rainbow
just to see your face again
i wish i could have changed the words that i have said
but today i don't think ill leave this room
i wont get out of bed

DreamingWarrior
Originally posted by heavenablaze666
G.O.A.T? of course i will happy but what the hell s G.O.A.T?
a moron's sock account that got banned, again. haha

great poem, and now it is time to get outta bed!

Elessea
*nods* good poem Blaxe big grin

heavenablaze666
embarrasment aww thankies guys....maybe i will get out of bed......hmm...

heavenablaze666
sunshine through my window
but never in my thoughts
leaving me in darkness
just alone in the dark
i try to let the sunshine in
but it doesnt seem to reach me
i notice now its still to dark
to see around the corners
of my darkened mind
my thoughts invade
my shallow mind
and spread even more darkness
leaving me traped within my mind
and alone on a dark island
would you help me light the way
or leave me stranded here again
with not a single sparkle of light
to help me find the way
will you leave me stranded here
or help me up once again
from the trap
that is my mind

heavenablaze666
notice how most of my poems have no titles ...confused

Tassie
Originally posted by heavenablaze666
sunshine through my window
but never in my thoughts
leaving me in darkness
just alone in the dark
i try to let the sunshine in
but it doesnt seem to reach me
i notice now its still to dark
to see around the corners
of my darkened mind
my thoughts invade
my shallow mind
and spread even more darkness
leaving me traped within my mind
and alone on a dark island
would you help me light the way
or leave me stranded here again
with not a single sparkle of light
to help me find the way
will you leave me stranded here
or help me up once again
from the trap
that is my mind

clapping

DreamingWarrior
Very cool work, and they dont always need titles(Ihave a lot, and only like 10 have titles....) keep writing, and walk this way to the light! wink

heavenablaze666
aw embarrasment thanks dreaming warrior wink

heavenablaze666
you whispers bring
pleasant shivers
down my spine
and i feel like i could
drown in your eyes
slipping into and inevitable
crush
i just don't seem to understand
three days with out sleep
to busy thinking about you
wondering if this is more then another crush
but i don't seem to find an answer
watching you steady movements
making sure i remember
you smell the way angels smell
a heavens breeze, a clouds kiss
i watch you from a distance but
still feel very close
my knees feel weak, heavy breathing
ever time you come around
it hurts to know
that i cant tell you how i feel
or that you will never know
i feel to ashamed at what you might say
if i told you that i loved you

(dedicated to my crush ....he'll never know how i feel and i want to keep it that way)

DreamingWarrior
That poem ROCKS!!!! punk clap

heavenablaze666
thanks i just edit it wats up dreaming warrior?

DreamingWarrior
hey, n'much yo! just havin a great time for once, though I really wish this gal I know would see some things.... haha mebbe she will.. smile and you?

heavenablaze666
see what? ..........me i havent sleeped in 4 days....i really dont know how to feel :confuse:

DreamingWarrior
hahah yeah, I wish she could see I like her a good bit, but that may not be right for now. so, I am and always shall remain the gentleman knight, never pushy, and just awaiting my answers. Oi.... hahahaha it sucks sometimes to be a nice guy, but I am told it is wonderful in the end... I guess I will find out. If nothing else, she is a kick a$$ friend, and I will move heaven and earth to help her and her little one.

heavenablaze666
wink good for you
i havent sleeped becuase i have a crush ...maybe more then a crush i dunno but all i do is think about him and its driving me nuts !!!!!

heavenablaze666
torn between life and death
waiting for it to end
morbid poems
and wishes
fill my empty room
wishing of sweet silence
like the sweet solace of
an aconikroom
pure silence
and raw emotion
fill my thoughts
and piece of paper
i wonder how my pencil can process
my thoughts on this sheet of paper
i sit and stare in thought and confusion
at my life that i left behind
to try to hide it all way only to
return to me on paper
if i don't let them out
they overflow inside
my mind and take control
over my life
so i let them out and let you see
things none knows
a different side of me
so i hope you enjoy
my theater of the real
were you act out
what you can not feel
would you like something to drink?
perhaps black tears
of dead warriors ?
the shows about to start
so please stay near
watch in horror and amazement
at my morbid works of art
enjoy the show sit back, relax
at my theater of the real
enjoy my life and its troubles
enjoy the laughter i never had
release all your pain and anger
into this tiny stage and stand
so take the seat others will arrive
to join us on our magical ride
to my wondrous pathetic life
at my theater of the real

(those of you who have no clue what an aconikroom is PM me becuase you wouldnt belive this room its crazy (literally) )

DreamingWarrior
Originally posted by heavenablaze666
wink good for you
i havent sleeped becuase i have a crush ...maybe more then a crush i dunno but all i do is think about him and its driving me nuts !!!!!
Oh do tell!!! hahaaha smile
neat poem. Why not tell us all what an aconikroom is? wink

heavenablaze666
PM me and ill tell you ...not every one should know wink
do tell what? about my crush? confused

Tassie
Originally posted by heavenablaze666
you whispers bring
pleasant shivers
down my spine
and i feel like i could
drown in your eyes
slipping into and inevitable
crush
i just don't seem to understand
three days with out sleep
to busy thinking about you
wondering if this is more then another crush
but i don't seem to find an answer
watching you steady movements
making sure i remember
you smell the way angels smell
a heavens breeze, a clouds kiss
i watch you from a distance but
still feel very close
my knees feel weak, heavy breathing
ever time you come around
it hurts to know
that i cant tell you how i feel
or that you will never know
i feel to ashamed at what you might say
if i told you that i loved you

(dedicated to my crush ....he'll never know how i feel and i want to keep it that way)

nice, really captures what some of us are feeling happy

and yeah, what the hell is an aconikroom? stick out tongue

Elessea
stick out tongue I know what it is..I know what it is...smile

DreamingWarrior
well arent you special(ish) heh...

heavenablaze666
dont worry i just PMed you you'll know what it is ......its so beautiful *tear*

heavenablaze666
Originally posted by Tassie
nice, really captures what some of us are feeling happy

and yeah, what the hell is an aconikroom? stick out tongue
jusat PM me and ill tell you

Trigun King
Nice poems heaven I have a few but I am never going to post them on Kmc.

heavenablaze666
then you shouldnt have said you had peoms now every one shall bug you until you do ....your lucky that there is no one here wink

heavenablaze666
and thanx for commenting my peoms

Trigun King
Your welcome. I have only a few like ten I think but I got awards for them from school for having an interesting perspective on looking at things.

heavenablaze666
yep and thats what they keep telling me ...i have no out look on life...yet they persist...........

heavenablaze666
hey elessea doesnt this song rock
cada dia pienso en ti
pienso un poco mas en ti
despedazo mi corazon
se destruye algo de mi
cada dia pienso en ti
pienso un poco mas en ti
cada vez que sale el sol
busco un algo de valor
para continuar asi
y te veo asi no te toque
rezo por ti cada noche
amanece y pienso en ti
y retumba en mis oidos
el tic-tac de los relojes
y sigo pensando en ti
y sigo pensando...

heavenablaze666
if you dont know spanish then ill translate it for you .......

heavenablaze666
anyw ats im off to NY i wont be on for like a week or so i guess see ya'lls later bye bye wink ill miss ya'll

Elessea
messed *doesnt know spanish* sorry

DreamingWarrior
Come back soon,yo! big grin

justjakk
babel fish translator says this means:

every day I think about you I think a little but in you I break my heart destroys something of my every day I think about you I think a little but in you whenever it leaves the sun I look for a something of value to continue asi and I see asi you does not touch to prayer by you every night to you amanece and I think about you and resounds in the my oidos tic-tac of the clocks and I continue thinking about you and I continue thinking...


not too good translator...but you get a picture of what was said

heavenablaze666
......cool...thanx for translateing..i am in new york peoples and the time here is very confusing confused...but i missed you all

heavenablaze666
gutted like a pig ll you want is the world to bleed
someone some where stole your desire
the pain akin to being punched in the throut and stabbed in the chest
you would rather bleed then be with out her gon are the tiny whispers dancing in your ear replaced with lackluster that will make you cry
your screams play in your empty room
your bed swallows you holw as the days bleed togather
you slowly drown in your regret
if you try hard enough you can almost taste her feel her pass and scream
OH GOD WHY ME
you would rather bleed then be without her gone are the tiny whispers dancing in your ears
replaced with lackluster memories you cry
your screams replay in your empty room

(this peom is form me to my bestest friend whom i saw go through the worst break up ...i have ever seen ...and fro MD i dunno why kind thought about him when i wrote it )

Oiram62205
moi. I guess I did feel that way about my ex, but those days are over.

heavenablaze666
from darkness i have emerged
to rip my heart out and hand it to you
to watch you as you slowly say
the words i wanted you to say
only to be rejected and pushed back into darkness
alone again, just lonly and cold to numb for life
but still living ,lashing out fro someone to take my hand
and pull me from this night mare
i thought it might be you
how wrong i was
i let you in wanted you to take me away
a stupid mistake
and here i lay alone and cold
wanting so much to never feel like
this again sick inside
and barley concious
wanting sweet words of promised love
only to get my the sound of my thoughts
echoing through out my mind
curling in to a ball
watching shadows play on the wall
feels like the only thing worth living for
my heart lies on the floor next to me
in a puddle of tears
i cry sweet tears of blood
and drown once more in darkness

heavenablaze666
Originally posted by Oiram62205
moi. I guess I did feel that way about my ex, but those days are over.
yup always better to let go....doesnt work tht way for me though .....
...its hard to forget

Oiram62205
I havent forgotten anything it just doesnt affect me the way id did b4

heavenablaze666
talking about me love ...never mind so hows you ?

Oiram62205
I'm okay just confused by your recent PMs to me

heavenablaze666
belive it or not so am i ..............

heavenablaze666
...................

Oiram62205
well I'm sure you'll sort things out

heavenablaze666
:big grin: sure i will dont worrie about it .....

DreamingWarrior
nice work, yo!

heavenablaze666
thank you dreaming warrior havent been on in a while i missed you happy

heavenablaze666
you show to much emotion
potential to hurt
give up to easily
and cry till it bruns
framed in the colorful
pian of emotion
enjoying the stay
no matter how much it hurts
staring into the eyes of desire
watching
your self slowly bleed
kn owing that this will break you
you do it and ignore my plea
ignore me whne i wisper to the wind
how much i undoubtably love you

heavenablaze666
arent you tired of being week such rage thaqt you could scream all the stars right out of the sky
and destroy the prettiest starry night every evning that i die

DreamingWarrior
Originally posted by heavenablaze666
thank you dreaming warrior havent been on in a while i missed you happy
Hey baby, only 10 digits away... hahahhaAHAHAH! J/k, yeah ditto. have fun whilst you were bounding through the ether?

Neat stuff, just typos that are easily fixed. very very cool and please write some more!

heavenablaze666
and the 10 digits are? * holds pen and paper in hand * jk jk hahaha

yeah thanx i really dont care about the typos i was just venting when i wrote it i was angrey i guss and i didnt get the whole bouding thing

DreamingWarrior
hey, however you wanna do it. haha just a bit o' C>C> con crit... you knwo? hahahha my digits are ... heh.... pm me baby and you'll get em! hahahahahah! devil

heavenablaze666
*wink* sure thing boss happy

heavenablaze666
okay right now im just really bored so here are some random comments from some pins i bought yesterday
sex is my religon...let us pray :: and..i dress this way to bother you happy no you cant buy me a drinkbut ill take the six bucks

heavenablaze666
alright people (by people i mean elessa and dreamin warrior)
alright i have been meaning to do this fr a while i guess i should have done it sooner but anyways i really have noo reason to be here s i guess i just wont come here anymore ...maybe just to post here ut other then that im otie so see yall

DreamingWarrior
Originally posted by heavenablaze666
alright people (by people i mean elessa and dreamin warrior)
alright i have been meaning to do this fr a while i guess i should have done it sooner but anyways i really have noo reason to be here s i guess i just wont come here anymore ...maybe just to post here ut other then that im otie so see yall
WTF? why are you feeling like leaving? You have plenty of reasons to be here. You have a great ability and I quite frankly enjoy reading your work. I dont give a damn what anyone else thinks or says. I know awesome when I see it. so please, dont up and leave.

heavenablaze666
hey i wont leave completely ..i mean ill still post here dont worry about me happy there are lots of other writers here for you to enjoy

heavenablaze666
my hearts been taken away

i waited for you
and here you are
but you say things
that i dont want to here
i scream distress
and wish you were gone
(whisper) my hearts been taken away

chorus
so here i am what are you waiting for
look me in the eye and tell me you dont love me any more


i watched you leave
with no remorse
left me standing here
cold and a lone
the staples that held my heart broke
(say normally) my hearts been taken away

chorus

here i am what are you gonna do
come on tell me that you hate me to
what are you waiting for
come on tell me you dont love me anymore

my heart ripped at the seams
and i bleed deep inside
but tears never left my eyes
i watched you tak it away
you left without a word
but i wanna know why
(say out loud) my hearts been taken away

chorus
come on look me in the eye
tell me i have no emotion
i still wont cry
come one wat are you waiting for
tell me telll me you dont love me any more


sewed my heart together
broke my self outside
tried to hide the pain and thought
of my social suicid
cuz you took it away
black hole were i should be
(yell) my hearts been taken away

chorus
look at me tell me
tell me tell me
i really wanna know
what are you waiting for
tell me you dont want me any more


tell me you hate me
i wanna hear this from you
you say you do but your eyes
say you dont so i wanna hear it
tell me the truth
you lier i wanna know
if we have anything real
(roar it out ) MY HEARTS BEEN TAKEN AWAY

(repeat until song is over )

heavenablaze666
ok im really not sure what the hell i felt when i wrote this but it seems good so anyone else have a question comment rude remark?

heavenablaze666
i sit and watch the tv news to see if i can find some clues i know the world is all ****ed up but it looks so slick in a one minute spot wanna die i don't wanna live i go to school - what a ****ing joke tellin me things i don't wanna know they don't give a shit about me at all my teachers have got me by the balls there's no reason to live anymore we're all gonna die in the third world war they try to train me by society's rules well **** em all and **** you too

Naib
Originally posted by heavenablaze666
gutted like a pig ll you want is the world to bleed
someone some where stole your desire
the pain akin to being punched in the throut and stabbed in the chest
you would rather bleed then be with out her gon are the tiny whispers dancing in your ear replaced with lackluster that will make you cry
your screams play in your empty room
your bed swallows you holw as the days bleed togather
you slowly drown in your regret
if you try hard enough you can almost taste her feel her pass and scream
OH GOD WHY ME
you would rather bleed then be without her gone are the tiny whispers dancing in your ears
replaced with lackluster memories you cry
your screams replay in your empty room

(this peom is form me to my bestest friend whom i saw go through the worst break up ...i have ever seen ...and fro MD i dunno why kind thought about him when i wrote it ) I pray that while I can't be bothered to read the rest, that you've at least learned how to spell correctly. It is, to say the least, quite distracting when reading poetry.

With that I cannot say if it's worthwhile to read such as yours if you cannot take the time to edit your work before posting them.

so, like the lackluster memory you so wrote then I so deem this also

Coldfire
Originally posted by Naib
I pray that while I can't be bothered to read the rest, that you've at least learned how to spell correctly. It is, to say the least, quite distracting when reading poetry.

With that I cannot say if it's worthwhile to read such as yours if you cannot take the time to edit your work before posting them.

so, like the lackluster memory you so wrote then I so deem this also
Ok so are you just going to go around and make fun everyone's poems now????

Naib
To make of fun of someone's poetry would be demeaning and without just cause. But to point out the truth of what is lacking is more to the point.

If I seem overly harsh, or my words without reason then so be it. But what is the point of posting your work if you cannot take criticisism for what it is and nothing more.

Coldfire
Originally posted by Naib
To make of fun of someone's poetry would be demeaning and without just cause. But to point out the truth of what is lacking is more to the point.

If I seem overly harsh, or my words without reason then so be it. But what is the point of posting your work if you cannot take criticisism for what it is and nothing more.
I simply asked that question because the first two comments I've seen you post weren't exactly flattering. Didn't mean it to sound so rude and all so sorry....

DreamingWarrior
Originally posted by heavenablaze666
hey i wont leave completely ..i mean ill still post here dont worry about me happy there are lots of other writers here for you to enjoy
true, yet i enjoy all not just the few. it is everyone here that makes this so awesome, not just one or two. so write some more!!! haha i should talk.... hahahha

Coldfire
Originally posted by heavenablaze666
alright people (by people i mean elessa and dreamin warrior)
alright i have been meaning to do this fr a while i guess i should have done it sooner but anyways i really have noo reason to be here s i guess i just wont come here anymore ...maybe just to post here ut other then that im otie so see yall
I think you have every right to be here with the rest of us poets yes I haven't gotten around to reading a lot of your stuff, but what I have read is good smile

Naib
Originally posted by Coldfire
I simply asked that question because the first two comments I've seen you post weren't exactly flattering. Didn't mean it to sound so rude and all so sorry.... if i were to flatter, then what exactly is the point of a truthful review? would you rather i lie and say what a wonderful poem this is, then regretfully allow said artist to continue on his merry way writing awful poetry?

or perhaps, in the hope of lighting some spark of creativity brought on by harsh, but truthful words they will see their not-so-obvious mistakes and learn from it, thereby becoming better in the end.

i should hope with all reason and good mental faculty it is the latter. how sad should it be the former, all for the enjoyment of feeling good temporarily

heavenablaze666
alright then let me start by saying
to naib i except your criticism but i was to angry to care when i wrote that poem and besides when i am writing something that means anything to me i could care less about anything else but your right i should try to spell better i guess

to cold fire
I'm glad you think of me as i poet i mean i don't even think i am as good as anyone else here (mostly because most of my poems are dark)
its OK if you only read a few I'm glad that you read them at all ...so thanks


dreamingwarior
yeah i know that its better with more people writing their work here but i dunno just the fact that all i do when i come here is post here and read PMS really is kinda boring but i love posting my poems and hearing what you all have to say about it

heavenablaze666
i wanted to tell you how i felt
but i didnt
i let you go and never said a word
i think about it everyday
wondering what you would say
if i had told you anyway
that i loved you
my thoughts are turning me insane
and blood stoped flowing to my brain
i felt dead no longer living
i was to scared to tell you
but now that your gone
i wishh i had told you
how i felt about you
i think about what could have been
but the pain inside wont let me live
im drowning in my own regret
forget the words i ment to say
i wish i could have thought this through
becuase now im just a jaded fool

Pandemoniac
Time is a frog, sitting still when boring but jumping out of reach when it's fun...

For Heaven

heavenablaze666
ahhhhhh your so cute thankies pende hug

Pandemoniac
De nada mon chere

heavenablaze666
thank you again you have made my day .........happy

heavenablaze666
ok i feel asleep and i had like the weirdest dream so i wonder if any of you know what it means
theres this guy and hes sitting in a chair in a bruning house i call to him telling him to get out and instead he tells me to go with him and no matter how much my body screams no i go into the fire with him and even though my body is burning i dont feel anything but my mind is telling me its supposed to hurt so try to leave and the man say to come back to stay with him not to leave to be with him forever and never leave he strecthes out his hand and as i reach for it i wake up so.......any one know what it means cuz its creeping me out thats the 6th time

heavenablaze666
free train memories
long time friendship
missing you already
wonder were youve been
the news that you are gone
begining to sink in
you left me her on earth
with out you by my side
you left me cold and alone
hungry for your touch
missing you already
wonder were you've been
i never thought id lose
but i guess i already did
the tiny bullet in your chest
ruin my life and yours
i never thought you'd leave this way
i never thought you would
im missing you already and wonder were you've been

(to todd...........R.I.P )

Coldfire
Originally posted by heavenablaze666
ok i feel asleep and i had like the weirdest dream so i wonder if any of you know what it means
theres this guy and hes sitting in a chair in a bruning house i call to him telling him to get out and instead he tells me to go with him and no matter how much my body screams no i go into the fire with him and even though my body is burning i dont feel anything but my mind is telling me its supposed to hurt so try to leave and the man say to come back to stay with him not to leave to be with him forever and never leave he strecthes out his hand and as i reach for it i wake up so.......any one know what it means cuz its creeping me out thats the 6th time
Wow.... I have no idea what that would mean... but it definitely is creepy....
Originally posted by heavenablaze666
free train memories
long time friendship
missing you already
wonder were youve been
the news that you are gone
begining to sink in
you left me her on earth
with out you by my side
you left me cold and alone
hungry for your touch
missing you already
wonder were you've been
i never thought id lose
but i guess i already did
the tiny bullet in your chest
ruin my life and yours
i never thought you'd leave this way
i never thought you would
im missing you already and wonder were you've been

(to todd...........R.I.P )
Very nice cry

heavenablaze666
Originally posted by Coldfire
Wow.... I have no idea what that would mean... but it definitely is creepy....

Very nice cry

yeah i know it bothers me maybe ill just stop sleeping



thank you i wrote it for todd........cry

Coldfire
Originally posted by heavenablaze666
yeah i know it bothers me maybe ill just stop sleeping



thank you i wrote it for todd........cry
Well that might not be the way to do it, but I don't have any suggestions for what else to do.....

I'm sorry to hear about Todd hun hug

Oiram62205
Originally posted by heavenablaze666
ok i feel asleep and i had like the weirdest dream so i wonder if any of you know what it means
theres this guy and hes sitting in a chair in a bruning house i call to him telling him to get out and instead he tells me to go with him and no matter how much my body screams no i go into the fire with him and even though my body is burning i dont feel anything but my mind is telling me its supposed to hurt so try to leave and the man say to come back to stay with him not to leave to be with him forever and never leave he strecthes out his hand and as i reach for it i wake up so.......any one know what it means cuz its creeping me out thats the 6th time
damn. maybe he is a bad influence on you. maybe you need to save someone in your life?

DreamingWarrior
Originally posted by heavenablaze666
ok i feel asleep and i had like the weirdest dream so i wonder if any of you know what it means
theres this guy and hes sitting in a chair in a bruning house i call to him telling him to get out and instead he tells me to go with him and no matter how much my body screams no i go into the fire with him and even though my body is burning i dont feel anything but my mind is telling me its supposed to hurt so try to leave and the man say to come back to stay with him not to leave to be with him forever and never leave he strecthes out his hand and as i reach for it i wake up so.......any one know what it means cuz its creeping me out thats the 6th time

welll...... if you can deal with a spiritual standpoint, could be a demon tempting you into the flames that eternally devour... or something else... hmm.... i'll see what my aunt says. she can do the dream thing better than me. great poems babe. sorry bout todd.

DreamingWarrior
Originally posted by Naib
To make of fun of someone's poetry would be demeaning and without just cause. But to point out the truth of what is lacking is more to the point.

If I seem overly harsh, or my words without reason then so be it. But what is the point of posting your work if you cannot take criticisism for what it is and nothing more.
be nice and constructive dude, or you and I WILL meet. I am sick of assholes on this forum. so watch it.

DreamingWarrior
Ok, and on a postnote..... hhaaha... Blaze, I love just to read your stuff, and you should definitely check out the rest of the forum, it is a great place.

To Naib, i am NOT trying to be a jerk, but rather tell you (in a bit of anger) that CONSTRUCTIVE criticism is the way to go. you nearly had it but the tone of your words was a bit offensive. Be nice to these ladies here. Too many guys are being jackwads to em. Doesnt mean you lie, just be nice. Yeah, blaze may need to check some spelling every now and again, but unless it is killing the poem, dont say much more than " hey, try to spell check every now and again, ok?" let em know how you feel in a positive, not degrading manner. I am sorry for my anger and did not mean to bust up on ya, but i am sick and tired of sorry f#@Kheads messing with women. period. online or in life, i am sick of it. This is a warning to the guys of KMC. treat women nicely, you never know when I or one of the Final Knights are around. And we do NOT take women in pain lightly. You will pay if you hurt a woman, in this life or the next.

Anyway.... sorry for the diatribe..hahhahah.. more please! ahhaha

heavenablaze666
coldfire:its not your fualt dont worryabout it

MD:i dunno i guess so its really confusing me


dremingwarrior: eek! were have you been hug

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