Stupid computer died while I was trying this and thus part of it got screwed up...grrr.
1. Please feel free to personally attack me and say my writing sucks. BUT, you have to give a reason why it is bad.
2. Please feel free to suggest things I could do differently in my writing to make it better.
3. I took my writing and had to KMC-ify it so that it would be readable on the forums, so there may be mistakes in the spacing, italicizing, etc.
4. I have changed some stuff (went revising last night), so, if there are a number of people bitching about a certain area of my writing, it is likely that I have changed it.
5. Be cruel, be merciless...make me cry like a little girl (well, you can try, but I won't).