James & Devon.. (Sons of Harry and Draco)

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daeri
I don't really got a title..

Plot:

It's like 20 year later since book 6. Harry has a son, James, who's 16. Draco also has a son, Devon, also 16. James is in love with Devon, and Devon doesn't know he's in love too :')

Rating: I have no ****ing clue, but it's boy on boy, so I think R?


Chapter 1 - "I love you"

Chapter 2

Phoenix
I think its really good! big grin My only constructive criticism is that its going a bit swiftly, its a bit confusing. Maybe slow it down a little, cut big sentences into shorter sentences, have some internal monologues going on...

daeri
Thanks Phoe.. finally some criticism big grin .. I already noticed that I have too little talking going on.. I'll try to change that in the next chapter.. but I'll go to Berlin first, get some new ideas and stuff, because I really do not have a clue how to go on after what Devon said.. is he going to be a daddy or not? I don't know.. depends on Felicia.

DarkCanadian
Hey, why not just copy and paste onto here?

daeri
Originally posted by DarkCanadian
Hey, why not just copy and paste onto here?

This looks better big grin

daeri
No one else wants to read it? sad

DarkDethbringer
I can't please put it on this site....

DarkDethbringer
oh I read it and who is pregnant?

misslilsweetie
its great! even though i was bit disgusted about james being Gay

sniper135
its abit disturbing but yeah it quite good

misslilsweetie
when are u gonna post more

DarkDethbringer
took the words out of my mouth............

DarkDethbringer
OH FELECIA!! I did nto know who was preganant........damn starting off early.

daeri
Originally posted by misslilsweetie
its great! even though i was bit disgusted about james being Gay


Did you read it well? he isn't gay, he's bisexual.. smile

daeri
Originally posted by DarkDethbringer
OH FELECIA!! I did nto know who was preganant........damn starting off early.


Yeah Felicia smile

daeri
Originally posted by misslilsweetie
when are u gonna post more

I'll try to post more this week wink .. still don't know how to go on.. embarrasment

daeri
Ok, chapter 3 is done now! big grin

Chapter 3 - Not ready

Oh, it's rated M, because there is a little bit detailed stuff in it..

DarkDethbringer
DAYMN!dude alittle graphic there....

daeri
I'm a girl.. wink and if you don't like it, just don't read wink

DarkDethbringer
I didn't say I didn't like it dude I just said it was a little well.....(and i call everyone dude)

DarkDethbringer
whenn are you gonna post more?

daeri
Originally posted by DarkDethbringer
whenn are you gonna post more?

You're addicted? big grin


Well going to try to make a new post at the beginning of next week.. maybe sooner, depends on how bored I am wink I don't want to write too quick after each chapter, I don't want to make it sucky.

misslilsweetie
Originally posted by DarkDethbringer
I didn't say I didn't like it dude I just said it was a little well.....(and i call everyone dude)
u remind me of this person i no his name is Cory..he calls everyone "dude" i hate it... lol


post more whenever u can!

daeri
You're lucky.. got bored too soon!

Chapter 4

Very detailed now, so beware..

DarkDethbringer
not bad still really graphic though.....

daeri
Originally posted by DarkDethbringer
not bad still really graphic though.....

You don't like the graphic?

DarkDethbringer
it is a little nasty.......but it is ok....

daeri
Originally posted by DarkDethbringer
it is a little nasty.......but it is ok....

I know it's nasty.. cool

DarkDethbringer
ew........

misslilsweetie
it was well yeah what he said..nasty...

daeri
Chapter 5

R rated, because of sex. It's the final chapter also.

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2528220/1/

OJCrush
who did harry ron and draco marry any way

daeri
I have no clue, Draco with Pansy I guess, Ron with Hermione, but Harry, no ****ing clue

OJCrush
think it was ginny

daeri
Originally posted by OJCrush
think it was ginny

You may think that wink personally, I dont like Ginny, she should have stayed Ron's sister, and not some main character

danagrint
It's.... kinda freaky! But I like it, it's just that THERE GAY

danagrint
I like it, but I imagine stories so this was really disgusting

div
LoL i agree , freaky stuff gd story but maybe a little tooo graphic

daeri
Originally posted by danagrint
I like it, but I imagine stories so this was really disgusting

I do that too Happy Dance

danagrint
Originally posted by daeri
I do that too Happy Dance


Happy DanceHappy Dance lol Happy Dance wow.

danagrint
but I like it

hey dudes
how do ya read it

Sirius_Rulez
hey every one i cant read chapters 1 & 2 only the rest and i really want to read them, someone plz tell me?

Sirius_Rulez
cant u plz write da first 2 chapters on here plz?

iluvhpsomuch1_7
so they are gay?!?! Nope i dont like it already sorry it just too weird.

manu_13
it IS weird and gross!!!

iluvhpsomuch1_7
how do you read it?

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