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So this is a thread for me to display my poetry. My poems aren't great, inspirational works of art but whatever. I don't mind criticism but don't be a complete ass. I'll probably post other things like little phrases and thoughts too. Anyways, here's the first one...

The Shoe Box

I was cleaning out my room one day,
When I came upon a box.
'Memories', it was labelled,
It was from when I was a child.
Inside were so many things,
That I had completely forgotten about.
It had notes my friends and I wrote to each other,
I can't believe we had our own secret language.
There were love letters I dreamt of sending to the boys I had a crush on.
A smile came to my face when I came upon a tiny album filled with photos.
We were so crazy back then.
I miss being a child,
So carefree,
Always having fun,
No worries...
I continue to search through the treasure chest I had left for the future me.
Pictures I drew of animals and cartoons,
Paper airplanes,
Hair clips,
Everything you could possibly imagine.
I put everything back into the shoe box of memories,
Along with a necklace and a few other trinkets.
I close the box and put it back into the closet,
Hoping to fall upon it once again,
Eight years from now.

Be nice bag

I love it!

really?

My Love Story

This is a story
About the love of my life
And how angry I was
When I found out he loved someone else

We were having a great time
Long days and late nights
The hugs and the kisses
It all felt so right

I told him my feelings
I told him I cared
All the same emotions
He told me he shared

It was going so great
Until that one awful day
He loves someone else
He led me astray

He loved her for so long
And still feels that way
How could he not tell me
I now cry every day

I really did think
We had something going
I guess I was wrong
Am I better off knowing?

Originally posted by Ladyluck
So this is a thread for me to display my poetry. My poems aren't great, inspirational works of art but whatever. I don't mind criticism but don't be a complete ass. I'll probably post other things like little phrases and thoughts too. Anyways, here's the first one...

The Shoe Box

I was cleaning out my room one day,
When I came upon a box.
'Memories', it was labelled,
It was from when I was a child.
Inside were so many things,
That I had completely forgotten about.
It had notes my friends and I wrote to each other,
I can't believe we had our own secret language.
There were love letters I dreamt of sending to the boys I had a crush on.
A smile came to my face when I came upon a tiny album filled with photos.
We were so crazy back then.
I miss being a child,
So carefree,
Always having fun,
No worries...
I continue to search through the treasure chest I had left for the future me.
Pictures I drew of animals and cartoons,
Paper airplanes,
Hair clips,
Everything you could possibly imagine.
I put everything back into the shoe box of memories,
Along with a necklace and a few other trinkets.
I close the box and put it back into the closet,
Hoping to fall upon it once again,
Eight years from now.

Be nice bag
Ahhhh sweet memories...
Originally posted by Ladyluck
My Love Story

This is a story
About the love of my life
And how angry I was
When I found out he loved someone else

We were having a great time
Long days and late nights
The hugs and the kisses
It all felt so right

I told him my feelings
I told him I cared
All the same emotions
He told me he shared

It was going so great
Until that one awful day
He loves someone else
He led me astray

He loved her for so long
And still feels that way
How could he not tell me
I now cry every day

I really did think
We had something going
I guess I was wrong
Am I better off knowing?
Who says you're not good I like them both

Thunderstorms

People with newspapers over their heads
run for shelter.
Middle aged women pull out their black
umbrellas so their hair doesn't frizz or
their makeup doesn't smudge.
Young clean cut men in their expensive
suits dash for their cars.
Old ladies run for the nearest coffee shop.
Little children put on their rubber boots
and scream whenever the sky explodes with noise.
Me, I embrace the magical shower Mother
Earth gave us.
In playful laughter I run out to the middle
of the street not bothering with shoes or
a jacket.
I spread my arms and look up to the sky
only to see it light up with a single bolt
of electricity.
I see a semi-circle of colors in the distance.
The grey sky begins to clear.
The clouds drift.
The rain lightens.
The sky becomes blue once again.
And just as quickly as the storm came, it was gone.

I write a lot of really dark stuff too but I think it might be a bit too graphic for KMC so you guys are stuck with all the heartbreak poems and such.

Will I love Again?

I don't think
I'll love again
My heart was broken
Time, time, and again

But everytime
I feel yout touch
I grow to love you
So very much

I don't want
To feel this way
And have my heart crushed
Like yesterday

But I just can't help
To feel like this
Every night and every day
It's you I miss

I can't control
The way I feel
Do I take a chance
And hand love the wheel?

I'm afraid to love
I'm afraid to get hurt
I'm afraid to fall
And land in the dirt

I'll give it a try
I've got nothing to lose
Just make me one promise
My fragile heart, don't abuse.

Those are really good!

wow. very nice stuff. i'll critique it when i have a bit more time than 30 seconds, but i am gonna add you to my subscribe list.

and nightwish is very cool band, btw. love bless the child, and the rest of that cd.

Originally posted by Ladyluck
Will I love Again?

I don't think
I'll love again
My heart was broken
Time, time, and again

But everytime
I feel yout touch
I grow to love you
So very much

I don't want
To feel this way
And have my heart crushed
Like yesterday

But I just can't help
To feel like this
Every night and every day
It's you I miss

I can't control
The way I feel
Do I take a chance
And hand love the wheel?

I'm afraid to love
I'm afraid to get hurt
I'm afraid to fall
And land in the dirt

I'll give it a try
I've got nothing to lose
Just make me one promise
My fragile heart, don't abuse.
I love it!

Originally posted by Ladyluck
Thunderstorms

People with newspapers over their heads
run for shelter.
Middle aged women pull out their black
umbrellas so their hair doesn't frizz or
their makeup doesn't smudge.
Young clean cut men in their expensive
suits dash for their cars.
Old ladies run for the nearest coffee shop.
Little children put on their rubber boots
and scream whenever the sky explodes with noise.
Me, I embrace the magical shower Mother
Earth gave us.
In playful laughter I run out to the middle
of the street not bothering with shoes or
a jacket.
I spread my arms and look up to the sky
only to see it light up with a single bolt
of electricity.
I see a semi-circle of colors in the distance.
The grey sky begins to clear.
The clouds drift.
The rain lightens.
The sky becomes blue once again.
And just as quickly as the storm came, it was gone.

I write a lot of really dark stuff too but I think it might be a bit too graphic for KMC so you guys are stuck with all the heartbreak poems and such.

This is gorgeous, the imagery is extremely effective and it helps that I can totally relate... I love thunderstorms, the noise terrifies me but I get the urge to race outside and frolic in the wetness. Beautiful.

Very beautiful, very simple, too, I might add. And it's not like the usual poetry about pain and tears, etc.. it's so real.

Originally posted by DreamingWarrior
and nightwish is very cool band, btw. love bless the child, and the rest of that cd.

I look into your eyes
For the very last time
They fill up with tears
But things will be fine

I swear I'm not leaving you
I promise you this
Only for a while
Will this be our last kiss

I get on the bus
And walk up the aisle
Sit by a window
And wave for a while

I am coming back
Don't give it another thought
We'll be together again
Though I'll miss you a lot

There is still one thing
I want you to know
I must say it once more
I do love you so.

I hate you when you're sober
I hate you when you drink
I hate you more than anyone
Way more than you think

The pain you've caused is going to stop
I can't take anymore
I'm leaving and never coming back
I'm walking through the door

These eyes won't shed another tear
These wrists won't bleed another drop
I'm through with you and your drunken ways
All this nonsense has to stop

My bags are packed it's time to go
I never will return
I'm leaving you forever and ever
From this I hope you learn.

These are excellent. I love how you are taking things that some people take for granted like thunderstorms (i love them) and writing about them. Thats my favourite poem by you so far. I really like how you included all age groups and their different reactions to the storm. I think they're great I really do. Carry on writing I'd love to read more! Well done. And the words you use to conjure up imagery are great. The little things you include in youre poems like how you walked up the aisle of the bus means you can really picture it.wow! And this last poem, I feel as though youv'e written it for me about my last boyfreind and it has actually helped me realize my feelings about him...HATE! lol!I know you didnt but thankyou for writing it anyway!Would you mind if I print you're poem off??? Id like to carry it round with me!

haha thanks... and no, I don't mind

Well.... ha... had problems with a drunkard... *sigh* sorry babe. Is unfortunate that guys are a-holes at times.... very nice poetry, though-provoking... makes me search inside to see if I can be a better man. I like it.

Maybe I should explain... the poem isn't about a guy I dated who drank a lot... it's about my mom... just to clear that up.

Ouch. sorry.

OMG, they're awesome. I have a hard time saying which is my favorite. I love them all so far. Ok, I think Thunderstorm is my fave.

wow uv written loads, thyr really good i think!

Great stuff hun

SO awesome.. I feel everything you right.. hug Your really great lea

thanks guys

more coming soon...

Yay!

these are all very wonderful....

Originally posted by DreamingWarrior
Yay!
That's what I was gonna say!

Originally posted by Ladyluck
thanks guys

more coming soon... Oh yay! I really hope to read more.

Wow. I completely forgot about this thread

Anyways, a new poem, just like I promised

It doesn't have a title... it's just a cheesy love poem

There is something so timeless
About the love that we share
All of our feelings
Nothing can ever compare

I can't even remember
How things were before you
And I don't want to think
How they would be without you

The way that you touch me
And sweep back my hair
When you look into my eyes
I know you'll always be there

Nothing can ever take away
All my feelings for you
There is one promise I have made
To you I'll always be true

I will love for the rest of my life
For forever and a day
We will always be together
We'll never fade away.

Originally posted by Ladyluck
Wow. I completely forgot about this thread

Anyways, a new poem, just like I promised

It doesn't have a title... it's just a cheesy love poem

There is something so timeless
About the love that we share
All of our feelings
Nothing can ever compare

I can't even remember
How things were before you
And I don't want to think
How they would be without you

The way that you touch me
And sweep back my hair
When you look into my eyes
I know you'll always be there

Nothing can ever take away
All my feelings for you
There is one promise I have made
To you I'll always be true

I will love for the rest of my life
For forever and a day
We will always be together
We'll never fade away. I cant believe you forgot ..... LOL!

YAY!!! and, COOL. I like it... I like it alot. a bit jagged on rythm, but cool nonetheless.

Originally posted by DreamingWarrior
I cant believe you forgot ..... LOL!

YAY!!! and, COOL. I like it... I like it alot. a bit jagged on rythm, but cool nonetheless.

I know bag

Thanks ... I know... the last 2 stanzas. It was the best I could do

Originally posted by Ladyluck
I know bag

Thanks ... I know... the last 2 stanzas. It was the best I could do hahahaha nice to see you around here again too.

Thanks, it's nice to be back around here

Originally posted by Ladyluck
Thanks, it's nice to be back around here

Originally posted by Ladyluck
Wow. I completely forgot about this thread

Anyways, a new poem, just like I promised

It doesn't have a title... it's just a cheesy love poem

There is something so timeless
About the love that we share
All of our feelings
Nothing can ever compare

I can't even remember
How things were before you
And I don't want to think
How they would be without you

The way that you touch me
And sweep back my hair
When you look into my eyes
I know you'll always be there

Nothing can ever take away
All my feelings for you
There is one promise I have made
To you I'll always be true

I will love for the rest of my life
For forever and a day
We will always be together
We'll never fade away.
And I still love cheesy love poems

Originally posted by Coldfire
And I still love cheesy love poems

Originally posted by DreamingWarrior

hehehehehe

I have been so uninspired lately. I can't seem to write anything more than three lines...

Originally posted by Ladyluck
I have been so uninspired lately. I can't seem to write anything more than three lines...
Same with me! It's soooo horrible

hey..... would one or both of ya write ME a poem? on an evil faery, if you would. call it a christmas gift to your favorite warrior!

Originally posted by Coldfire
Same with me! It's soooo horrible



Originally posted by DreamingWarrior
hey..... would one or both of ya write ME a poem? on an evil faery, if you would. call it a christmas gift to your favorite warrior!

I'll try. But I can't make any promises

Originally posted by Ladyluck
I have been so uninspired lately. I can't seem to write anything more than three lines... inspiration can come from anything...not necessarily the whims of life. a flower, the smile of a child. the wind blowing from the east....all that can inspire. you just to look without looking.

Originally posted by Coldfire
lol I'll try too... we'll see what I can come up with lol

well it's not really even the inspiration that I lack... ok well maybe it is... just that I have no time either... gahhhhhhhh..... but what is time? a moment? a day? a year? it's unimportant. you can be sitting on the potty for all i care, ya can still write....

thanks gals! ya'll both need some cuddle time. Trust me, that WILL inspire you.... if you can separate long enough to write... lol....man it is difficult... *shakes head* anyways... lol! yeah thanks!

Originally posted by DreamingWarrior
thanks gals! ya'll both need some cuddle time. Trust me, that WILL inspire you.... if you can separate long enough to write... lol....man it is difficult... *shakes head* anyways... lol! yeah thanks!
Hellz yeah... cuddle time sounds heavenly.... *sigh*... lol I tried writing one... got about 4 lines done

Originally posted by Coldfire
Hellz yeah... cuddle time sounds heavenly.... *sigh*... lol I tried writing one... got about 4 lines done



Same.

Originally posted by Ladyluck


Same.
lol no ideas yet I see... me either though haha

LOVE IT! MUUUUUUAHH! *Blows a kiss at poetry*

A dream I had.... The best I could make of it...



I want to drive away
Into the California sunset
No worries
No fears
Just me and the open road
Brown aviator glasses on the crown of my nose
In every direction my long black hair flows
The sky is a multitude of colors
Blue
Pink
Purple
Orange
Into the welcoming sunset
Is where one day I'll drive away.

I used to believe in fairy tales
I used to believe that every girl had a night in shining armour
I used to believe that every family could live peacefyllu in harmony
I used to believe that everyone lived happily ever after

I've grown up

I now know there is no such thing as a real life fairy tale
There is no knight in shining armour
There are no happy families
There is no such thing as happily ever after...

So she draws and writes good poems...I tip my hat to you mam.

Originally posted by Cyber Ninja
So she draws and writes good poems...I tip my hat to you mam.



Did you read them all?

Originally posted by Ladyluck


Did you read them all? I cried on the last ones cry

There is something so timeless
About the love that we share
All of our feelings
Nothing can ever compare

I can't even remember
How things were before you
And I don't want to think
How they would be without you

The way that you touch me
And sweep back my hair
When you look into my eyes
I know you'll always be there

Nothing can ever take away
All my feelings for you
There is one promise I have made
To you I'll always be true

I will love for the rest of my life
For forever and a day
We will always be together
We'll never fade away.


i love it.

Thanks

Do you have any more??

I have a couple but they aren't finished. I'm stumped for the endings.



I wish I could go back in time
To yesterday's today
To change the things that I've done wrong
And make them go away
I'm aware of what I've done
I just want to take it back
I know I hurt you really bad
With guilt my sky is turning black

That's all I have for that one

Originally posted by Ladyluck
I have a couple but they aren't finished. I'm stumped for the endings.



I wish I could go back in time
To yesterday's today
To change the things that I've done wrong
And make them go away
I'm aware of what I've done
I just want to take it back
I know I hurt you really bad
With guilt my sky is turning black

That's all I have for that one
Ooo me likes so far! And I know that feeling all too well, unfortunately.

Originally posted by Ladyluck
I have a couple but they aren't finished. I'm stumped for the endings.



I wish I could go back in time
To yesterday's today
To change the things that I've done wrong
And make them go away
I'm aware of what I've done
I just want to take it back
I know I hurt you really bad
With guilt my sky is turning black

That's all I have for that one Exellent and dark. I love poetry droolio

I love poetry too droolio

Speaking of which, got any more Lea?

Originally posted by Revernd Maynard
Exellent and dark. I love poetry droolio



Originally posted by Coldfire
I love poetry too droolio

Speaking of which, got any more Lea?

I've got a few more unfinished ones but I seem to have misplaced my notebook.

Originally posted by Ladyluck




I've got a few more unfinished ones but I seem to have misplaced my notebook.
Oh I did that... made me soooo mad... hope you find it soon!

Found it



It's not quite done but I don't know what else to write...

I just might be okay today
If only you were there
If only you had tried to listen
If only you had tried to care

I suffer every night and day
Tears flowing all the time
I blame you for all the blood
I lost and should be mine

Your foolish ways will never stop
This I know is true
It seems that making me happy
Is too much to ask of you

Originally posted by Ladyluck
Found it



It's not quite done but I don't know what else to write...

I just might be okay today
If only you were there
If only you had tried to listen
If only you had tried to care

I suffer every night and day
Tears flowing all the time
I blame you for all the blood
I lost and should be mine

Your foolish ways will never stop
This I know is true
It seems that making me happy
Is too much to ask of you That was so sad cry. it was really good but so depressing cry *Hugs lea*

hug

More shock

I'm working on it.

Originally posted by Ladyluck
I'm working on it. Lol do Poem Fridays About dreams Damn you lea

I can't just be given a topic to write about. I need to write what I feel.

Originally posted by Ladyluck
I can't just be given a topic to write about. I need to write what I feel.

Originally posted by Ladyluck
Found it



It's not quite done but I don't know what else to write...

I just might be okay today
If only you were there
If only you had tried to listen
If only you had tried to care

I suffer every night and day
Tears flowing all the time
I blame you for all the blood
I lost and should be mine

Your foolish ways will never stop
This I know is true
It seems that making me happy
Is too much to ask of you
Nice one! hug
Originally posted by Ladyluck
I can't just be given a topic to write about. I need to write what I feel.
lol I used to be like that too, but now it gives me a challenge to work under pressure and to be given a couple limitations

Originally posted by Ritoshi


Maybe

Originally posted by Coldfire
Nice one! hug

lol I used to be like that too, but now it gives me a challenge to work under pressure and to be given a couple limitations

Thanks hug


I don't do well under pressure.

I'm thinking about doing drawings to some of my poetry hmm

Originally posted by Ladyluck
I'm thinking about doing drawings to some of my poetry hmm
hey, that's a good idea I tried doing that, except drawings with a story I was working on... but the drawings sucked

Aww.

I just wouldn't know what poem to do.

Originally posted by Ladyluck
I hate you when you're sober
I hate you when you drink
I hate you more than anyone
Way more than you think

The pain you've caused is going to stop
I can't take anymore
I'm leaving and never coming back
I'm walking through the door

These eyes won't shed another tear
These wrists won't bleed another drop
I'm through with you and your drunken ways
All this nonsense has to stop

My bags are packed it's time to go
I never will return
I'm leaving you forever and ever
From this I hope you learn.


Lea.. face it... you have talent

Originally posted by Death_Stalker13
Lea.. face it... you have talent

Thanks

Originally posted by Ladyluck
Thanks

lol nothing 2 b embarassed abt but u have the gift alright. n ur welcome.

Thanks again

More?

Soon

Originally posted by Ladyluck
Soon
Better be soon!

Originally posted by Ladyluck
I hate you when you're sober
I hate you when you drink
I hate you more than anyone
Way more than you think

The pain you've caused is going to stop
I can't take anymore
I'm leaving and never coming back
I'm walking through the door

These eyes won't shed another tear
These wrists won't bleed another drop
I'm through with you and your drunken ways
All this nonsense has to stop

My bags are packed it's time to go
I never will return
I'm leaving you forever and ever
From this I hope you learn. Sober is a Tool song


props

Originally posted by Revernd Maynard
Sober is a Tool song


props

Cool shock

Wow. I haven't updated in months.

Anyways, here's a new one.


Strings
Controlling us
Every move
We're so powerless

They
Forcing us all
Hi there
Face here

New ones
In the time ahead
Paving
We will be free.

DANCE PUPPETS!!!! DANCE!! I new Lea was the Puppet Qeeen. goodies

lol

One more before I go for the night...


What could this be
Do you want to feel
The way I feel
Don't do this, baby
A loss
The moon without the sun
Dusk to dawn
Never again
Done
Too bad, world

YAY!!!

Nice one Lea

Originally posted by Ladyluck
Wow. I haven't updated in months.

Anyways, here's a new one.


Strings
Controlling us
Every move
We're so powerless

They
Forcing us all
Hi there
Face here

New ones
In the time ahead
Paving
We will be free.

A drawing for this poem...

Ooooh!

Originally posted by Ladyluck




A drawing for this poem... Is that you

I fixed up the letters..

Originally posted by Ladyluck



I fixed up the letters.. I could see the words now

Originally posted by Ladyluck



I fixed up the letters.. The best part of that whole poem is "Hi there; Face here".....Thats what really cought my attention. Great art to go with it. I'd hit it.

Originally posted by ~Da Rev~
The best part of that whole poem is "Hi there; Face here".....Thats what really cought my attention. Great art to go with it. I'd hit it.

You're the 4th person to say that.

w00t

I forgot about this thread. I was reading all the poems and I realized I posted here last year. paperbag3 But I promised you I would take a look at the thread.

You're ah-mazing with the heartbreak poems.

lol

Why thank you

Grrrrreat stuff lea!

Originally posted by Ladyluck
lol

Why thank you I hope you find the time to write more. You're probably busy lately though.