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This is an alternate universe story that begins when Anakin is forced to choose between the Sith and Jedi destiny. Enjoy

AWSOME!!!

Good writing, but I doubt that Anakin would be able to hold his own versus Sidious. Good style though. Keep it up.

I'd say that Anakin could for some time if necessary. Anakin Solo entered a trance once before he died that basicly doubled his power for a short time. If Anakin did the same, which it looks like he did, he could take Sidious, especcialy since Sidious was just wasted by Mace before Anakin fought him.

Nice. . . Keep it up.

Well, it's my version of the Star Wars Universe, so Anakin totally can.
I mean he's the chosen one, it is his destiny, this is just my version of his "light destiny"

But I appreciate the critique

BUMP

I like it... Wonder where its going however, I mean what force user do they have to face? Still so far so good.

Hey man, just because there aren't force users to face doesn't mean bad @ss dudes like Boba Fett, Grand Moff Tarkin, and who's to say there won't be some force users...

I know, but i'm just wondering about that. Which makes the story good because if it sucked I wouldn't care.

lol nice

lol sorry dude, no jawa is going to step to him

*Gasp*

Who is this amateur?!

lol
Sorry man, this is a tale about Anakin reaching his full potential.

Jawas pwn all. . .

Janus, one thing. How can you customize the text above your sig?

Go to your profile and directly to the left of your signature box is a small linke for VBcode. Click it and it takes you on the merry path towards coding for sigs.

Thought so. . . Thanks.

just for that i'm going to make sure I kill off 100+ jawas in my story

... This is war.

*Goes off to write a story about Janus the half sith, half jawa god and his triumph over the Skywalkers and their leader, Darth Nefarus*

is there any more

sorry, dude, Darth Nefarus is eternal
for the next 80 years

keeps getting better and better.

I'll have the next chapter or two ready in a little while, I was distracted by the Little League World Series
Go Hawaii!

Lol.

is there any more haha like a whole book more

Soon...

A gun-saber? I'm not sure if I like that idea, but it's you story. Still liking it.


On a side note, maybe you could learn to type these a little faster. lol

when do you plan to have the next part out by? If all this asking about it gets annoying, just tell me, I'll stop.

hey, I don't mind having fans

Nice stuff. Dude, you have talent when it comes to story-writing.

Hey Nefarus, any chance you could rewrite TPM and AOTC? I'd like to see how you can improve them.

You know, honestly, I was thinking about that. But I'd also re-write Revenge of the Sith.

I only had time to read one an dtwo but those blew my mind man it is waesome I will definately read more tomorrow!!

Keep it up man!

Absolutely brilliant!

Originally posted by Dimmimar
Absolutely brilliant!


Hey, Dim, i never knew you were a certified Jawa!



And Nice story, Nef.

That's really good, Nef.

I already read a part of it but I'm going to print the rest to read it in the car on my way to the beach.

Keep up the great work!

You wouldn't mind putting all these Chapters in one file and uploading the file?

I suppose I could, but I'm going to wait until I'm done with the story to do that
sorry

Aswome story... and i will be awaiting the one file download. Gun saber(final fantasy 8 fan perhaps?) the only thing i disliked about it was the Anikan Palpatine fight( The part where pal was held in the air and all..just seemed to overpower anikan for my taste) but that is your writer's freedom. it Kicks @ss and keep it up! can't wait.

Originally posted by Sorgo
Hey, Dim, i never knew you were a certified Jawa!



And Nice story, Nef.

I have been certified by Janus. All hail Artoo!

I understand if people think Anakin may have been overpowered at that point, but it's leading to something.

Verily good. thnx 4 PMing me the link.

ya dude gnarley story. you're really good at writing.

Originally posted by xxxpoppunker182
ya dude gnarley story. you're really good at writing.

gnarley?

I dont think I've read THAt much in 3 months.

Killer story, man. punk

My story is gnarly? Boss.

here's ur sig. keep up w/ the good work on the story! thumbsup

would you like it better if i said rad story?

I just don't understand the word.

I do! It means good

Gnarley? Means good? Sounds like someone choking.

wow

next chapter shoudl be ready later this evening

Change of plans, no new chapter tonight. I was as good as finished when my comp froze and my work was destroyed. Sorry cats.

nice stuff, you are brilliant. but wouldnt anakin have to turn in his lightsaber. Good job.

Anakin left the Order, he wasn't expelled. Hence he can keep his lightsaber.

Or build a new one...

yea i think you have to turn it in even if you leave...did Dooku?

I don't believe so. I mean I don't see why you would have to. There's a lot more to being a Jedi than the lightsaber. Although you guys have raised an interesting point.
Luckily this is a rough draft

well even if you do have to turn in the lightsaber its not like you wouldn't know how to make another one.

You could try and make Mace take it off him. then we can see mace get all cross and ignite his saber and they duel. or not, but anyway i think its good you have said he cn keep it.

this is exactly why I LOVE feedback. minor details like this need to be addressed so that when I edit the story it will rock the casbah

i think a anakin fight with mace would be good, or Ben and Luke fight mace and almost win?

may i just have some details?

like hat form did anakin teach them, and what color sabers do luke and ben have?

Well, they are all practitioners of form 5, and Luke now has Anakin's saber which is blue (the one for himself is green) and Ben's is blue.

do you know when the next chapter will be up?

what do you think to fight the boys vs mace?

I know this chapter might seem weird and short, but that's because I'm going to try and pump out a large portion of the story during the week and I'm hoping to have it completed in the next week or two.

You just killed off the two most powerful Jedi. I'm liking it though. I also think he would hav had no problem killing those clones. Remember him in the Clone Wars? He killed dozen of supoer-battle droids with his hands.

Yeah, and the clones weren't doing shit to him, Boba Fett though....


Let's just say the Fett is going to get a lot more credit than the movies gave him.

I think this will get you some trouble with Janus, but he is thinking leaving for a while anyway. Still, those six clones would go down in three seconds tops.

i hope if he leaves he comes backl

I think he will. He hasn't left yet though. Pretty much, he is just going to monitor the SW Risk Game, but not do anything outside of that for a few weeks.

Was that a part of chapter 8 or chapter 9?

oops
lol
that was chapter 8

Ok, I needed to know as I am saving all the chapters in one file.

kool

i'm really likein the story. sofar i just dislike that yoda died like 10 years earlier than he should of. other than that bad ass and boba's gonna get lots of credit rad he rocks.

this is cool! where are the other chapters? this is GREAT! keep up the good work! is the bounty hunter boba fett?

yoda died a lil early here... 100 yrs gap

am i correct or my math is pretty bad?

or i really dont know the age when yoda died

Yoda died about 12 years before his time.

And when is the next chapter due for Darth_Nefarus?

I'm working on several so you prolly won't see anything for a while
and Yoda died when he was supposed to
I just figured he didn't have to survive to aid the defeat of the Sith, so I had him die earlier than he does in THAT version.

What about Mace? Was that just to make room for Anakin to become the leader?

Originally posted by Darth_Nefarus
I'm working on several so you prolly won't see anything for a while
and Yoda died when he was supposed to
I just figured he didn't have to survive to aid the defeat of the Sith, so I had him die earlier than he does in THAT version.

either way its your story and i'm lovin it.

No. I really enjoy Mace Windu and I did what I did because he got iced by Boba Fett. As I've said, Boba Fett is going to be quite powerful and have a great role.
Besides, Anakin can't be the leader, he's not a Jedi.

I love the story, my brain is getting excited more and more its about to blow up. PLEASE POST immediately!!!!!!!

yeah. i think your version is better than the real one!!!

YES, you're absolutely right..... they must make the movie out of this one.....

GO!

COM ON Darth_Nefarus, I'm dieing here,

Post. post, post!

what the..... this is taking too long for me..... post now please....

Post, damnit!

Sorry guys, I've been extremely busy all this week. Hella people dying and all

However, I should have the newest chapter on here tomorrow, along with a bonus chapter for all of the hardcore fans I have. Hardcore rocks! Thanks a bunch guys.

nvm thanking us. WRITE!!!!!!

Originally posted by Darth_Nefarus
Hella people dying and all

What?

i'm going to explode here... Please post!!!

sorry, my comp is having major malfunctions so I can only upload this right now

So u just skipped chapter 9?

it is chapter 10, i just have been numbering them wrong lol
sorry!

Nice. There is a big problem with Han in this though. He met Chewie only five or ten years before Yavin, I think. Isn't this like fifteen years before Yavin still?

So what was Chapter 9?

i don't get it... where is chapter 9??

so is that it? or when will their be another addition?

yeah... is there other parts???

we want more, we want more.

so, that's it..... we want more!!! where are the other parts???

Sorry kids, it's been a long time and I've been having a buttload of family troubles. I should have told you about this sooner.
Look for something special to come soon

Before u give us a new Chapter, give us or tell us where Chapter 9 is.

Originally posted by Darth_Nefarus
Sorry kids, it's been a long time and I've been having a buttload of family troubles. I should have told you about this sooner.
Look for something special to come soon

ok..... God bless and good luck!! hope to see more of this ->

Are you ok now?

hey darth nefarus how are you already??

hey, where You? and wheres the next
chapter?