I made some poems. comment them

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Justbewithme221
Suicide

Sitting in here,
Thinking how horrible life is.
Crying with all her mite,
Trying to fight the pain.

She takes it out,
Thinks to herself.
Closes her eyes,
Thinks about him.

As she opens her eyes,
She see's his face.
He's saying,
"Don't do it"

It was just her imagination,
He was never there.
She walks out of her bathroom,
And throws the blade in the garbage.

She finally realizes,
Life is great.
Be happy,
And live life like it's your last day.

Tell Me

Tell me you love me,
Tell me you care,
Tell me you'll always be there.
Kiss me softly on the cheek,
Hug me as tightly as you can,
Why don't you just be my man?

True To Yourself

There's that 1 special person out there 4 u,
Who will always be there 4 u wen u're blue.
Right now u may not kno who that person is,
But just wait there's a guy out there who wil call u his.

Think of all those guys u've been threw,
Half of them didn't even respect u.
Think of the person u love right now,
Maybe u will forget all about them sumhow.

Just stay happy & be true to urself,
B/c every1 shud respect themselves.
Even if u have a heartbreak & ur heart's in pain,
Just remember ur love isn't some game.

These last two poems that I'm about to show you...I wrote them for my ex-boyfriend whom I'm still in love with.

He doesn't want me anymore

He doesn't understand,
How much I love him,
I'd wait forever,
Just to be with him.
He doesn't want me anymore,
I feel empty and heartbroken.
I wish I was dead,
I can't help crying.
I can't do anything anymore,
Just cry and hurt myself.
Maybe I should kill myself,
I don't deserve to live.
He doesn't want me anymore,
And I don't want anyone else.

I remember

I remember when we were together, we'd hold hands, and kiss all the time and everytime I was with you I'd get chills down my spine. Now that you don't love me, my heart hurts so bad, I wanna go back to when I was with you and never sad. I don't regret losing half my friends over you, you're love was worth it, I just hope we can make it through. I want you to love me again, I'm sorry for everything I've done, Do we have to be just friends?


I know my poems aren't good..but whatever...I have over 90 poems.

DreamingWarrior
Hahaha.... jeez. weiber! I enjoy these. Break em up one to a post, though, if ya would. keeps it easier to read. hah. I'd like to see more, if I may.

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