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here is my version of the 7th book i dont know what to call it and its only the first chapter PLZ READ AND REVIEW !

Letters and Numbers


Harry awoke with aloud bang and a flash of light, it was raining outside his bedroom in the little suburban home on Privet Dr. Raining actually wasn’t word to describe it, poring would be acceptable. The loud pat of the rain hitting the home and trees could have kept Harry awake on one of his more “sleepless” nights but he was but was very tired and fell back into his warm bed. The events that unfolded towards end of his six year were catastrophic. Dumbledore had died and there was no reversing the impact that had on the wizarding world. Dumbledore was the most intelligent and talented wizard Harry knew, or rather know. The first part of his vacation, Harry spent wondering why Dumbledore let some ass get the best of him. It was true that dumbledore was not in his best state when they returned to the school, but he knew dumbledore could have taken them all down. Those events on that night bothered him physically and emotionally. Harry was in despair, dumbledore dead, spending some time with the Dursleys SUCKED, and he and Ginny broke up several weeks after end of term. It was July 27, about a week after his apparition test which he passed, and four days before his birthday. Harry was coming “of age” and he was a little pacified by this. Harry soon fell back into a deep sleep.

He awoke again but it was now morning and it was still raining. He could not escape the dursleys today, for he had to stay inside. He was hungry and went down to the kitchen to grab a bite to eat.
Aunt Petunia had given up on there diet for Dudley was only getting worse with sneaking things into his bedroom. Eggs and bacon were left for Harry though fairly burnt ones at that. Uncle Vernon and Dudley were gone shopping for his boundless supplies for school.
Harry was eating his breakfast and reading the muggle “news” paper which you could say it was like a muggle daily prophet. Aunt Petunia entered the kitchen and gave a sour look and said ‘Oh, its YOU”
“Yeah it’s only me” Harry responded bitterly (extremely annoyed by this)
“Listen” he began “Aunt Petunia, we need to leave the past behind us”
He had a sense of maturity which could probably be rooted to his mother.
“I’m going to be leaving soon an I most likely am not going to come back” he continued “ and I want to have as much as family as I can every where I can and I ask you to please stop loathing me and my parents and my friends”
Aunt Petunia had a shocked and startled look on he face but began
“U-uh, s-sure Harry”
“Thanks” he said before departing to his bedroom

He entered his bedroom felling shocked about the thing he just did, he just repaired a relationship with his Aunt that was broken for 16 years.
Immediately he notice pig was hooting and hovering near his bedroom ceiling and his beautiful snowy owl hedwig. He also saw several letters on his bed and with pig there he knew his best mate Ron had written him. He picked up the first letter which was written from Ron, he wrote:
Harry,
Hey mate how is your summer we have been traveling around and im currently in china, don’t worry I sent pig when I was at the burrow so just send him there bill and fluer and watching the house.
They will be getting married a week before term and your invited to the celebration at the burrow although I can’t come get you till then so ill send you more letters when I get in the area.
Your mate,
Ron

Harry was defiantly pleased by this letter from Ron.
He picked up the next one and examined it; it was only the regular letter from hogwarts which explained the schools condition. Harry was surprised that they were re-opening it.
The next letter was from hermione Harry opened it eagerly to read…

Harry,
HI! Harry how is your summer, mine is fine ive spent a lot in the muggle library near my home and studied the geography on earth. Very interesting.
My parents said you could come stay with us in the guest bedroom!, only if you would like of course. I will come to get you on the 30th at 6:00 pm
I can’t wait till the wedding and next term McGonnagle is the new headmistress.
I have attached a daily prophet that you will find amazing.
Please send a return letter
Love,
Hermione

Harry was extremely happy to hear this; He would be spending time at hermione’s house!
He quickly took out a piece of parchment ant wrote:

Hermione,
My summer is ok
I would love to come to your house
Thanks,
Harry

He gave pig the letter and a treat and told him to give it to hermione and then go t the burrow.
There were two more letters on his bed
One from hogwarts and one mysterious one
He opened the mysterious first it said:


Harry,
I wait for you in room not known
It hard to get here so help ill loan
The clue I left in room that gives
I still wait in a room that lives
Harry go back to hogwarts
And show hermione this although I know you will
ARES

Harry was so confused by this letter that he stared at it for a while until he finally notice the last letter on his bed and he opened it.

Mr. Potter
You will be joining us at hogwarts
You will need one last thing before you leave
Mr.weasly and Miss Granger may come to
I will speak to you in school
Ares is waiting
Headmistress McGonagal
Harry was in a state of confusion
He did not understand anything in those two letters, but as always hermoine would so he would just have to wait.

The next few days went on with nothing more interesting, than the 27th. Finally the 30th came, Harry couldn’t wait till 6:00. He rushed through dinner and sat on his bed waiting.
CRACK
Hermione appeared

Its good so far, I am wondering who ARES is and I am also wondering if that room that was mentioned was the room of requirements (sp?).So far its really good. I just think you might need to make it longer, chapters are usually 10 pages long or more. But keep up the good work. I hope you write more to the story cause I am interested to find out what happens

Its pretty good, but this should be in the HP Fiction.

it was SO boring!!!!
fell asleep halfway through, and barely managed to finish it after a long time, you need a break for every line to not die of being bored!!

the truth is; you will never ever become an author, and i can't really see why you wrote a so long text, unless you have totally lack of other stuff to do....

Come on sasee, its not the worst thing I have read, and it is intriguing.

ares99: Please continue, perhaps few tips that would make it easy for the readers:

-Wen you characters read write letters put the text in italic

Well, an actual TITLE would be nice...

Harry Potter and the Letters of Confusion

Originally posted by The Ones
Harry Potter and the Letters of Confusion

sorry, it is just not interesting to me.
if a fan fiction HP story shell be good, there have to be a lot of action, fighting and duelling, because people like ares99 just describe to boring, and usually just write beginnings with nothing interesting in.

well, fighting and action from the beging will look like " The Return of RAMBO", and you don't do that in the first chapter.Do you?

hey sorry the begining is almost always boring in any book, the climax of the story is the end and sorry that i had harry get alot of letters remember the time harry is currently is dangerous and harry really info, plus the one "mysterios" letter was supposed to be confusing
and this isnt just some constant battle that would just be dumb
also im not JK rowling nor any other author nor do i really aspire to be one its just for fun
But i do apreciate the review and do hope that the people who enjoy the story stick with it for it " will" get intresting

Originally posted by sasee tiin
sorry, it is just not interesting to me.
if a fan fiction HP story shell be good, there have to be a lot of action, fighting and duelling, because people like ares99 just describe to boring, and usually just write beginnings with nothing interesting in.
Some people like to start it off slow. Don't judge the entire book by its first chapter.

Keep posting please. and this should be in the HP Fiction I think.?

Pretty good!

yah sorry im pretty new to these forums so i screwed up i should have another post by 2marrow

Originally posted by sasee tiin
it was SO boring!!!!
fell asleep halfway through, and barely managed to finish it after a long time, you need a break for every line to not die of being bored!!

the truth is; you will never ever become an author, and i can't really see why you wrote a so long text, unless you have totally lack of other stuff to do....

Dont be so rude.

It's 2:30am and Harry is still awake. Blood gushes out of his scar from pain... something terrible is happening.

He looks around and observes his surroundings. He must be somewhere dark, as he cannot see a damned thing. Nope. Not a thing.

He shouts into the void, "lumios Or whatever!" no wand lights his way. He tries to lift his arms, but they either don't respond, or are so tightly bound they can't be moved. The same goes for the rest of his body.

Worry suddenly strikes harry. He realizes there is nothing he can possibly do to free himself, and it's very likely that if he has somehow found himself in this situation, nobody is coming to help. It is just him, and his toughts, for however long it takes for somebody to visit.

*drip*

What was that?

*drip*

crap...

The End.

Originally posted by Insomnia
It's 2:30am and Harry is still awake. Blood gushes out of his scar from pain... something terrible is happening.

He looks around and observes his surroundings. He must be somewhere dark, as he cannot see a damned thing. Nope. Not a thing.

He shouts into the void, "lumios Or whatever!" no wand lights his way. He tries to lift his arms, but they either don't respond, or are so tightly bound they can't be moved. The same goes for the rest of his body.

Worry suddenly strikes harry. He realizes there is nothing he can possibly do to free himself, and it's very likely that if he has somehow found himself in this situation, nobody is coming to help. It is just him, and his toughts, for however long it takes for somebody to visit.

*drip*

What was that?

*drip*

crap...

The End.

However funny, I dont thinks its polite to do that in ares's thread. He/She is trying to write a FanFic. Please dont ruin it.


Btw, if Harry was of age and passed his apperating test. I would think he could of apperated out of that situation.

Don't you have to walk a few steps?

Originally posted by Unicor777
well, fighting and action from the beging will look like " The Return of RAMBO", and you don't do that in the first chapter.Do you?

bur ares99 hasn't wrote any action at all, neither any fighting!!
of course i know that the first chapter not is supposed to contain those things, but look at it, very few people write entire books at a forum, you rather write short stories, and therefore there have to be action from the beginning!

everything action (movies or books) start of with a plot because if its all fighting and action (matrix 2 and 3) its not going to be good. there has to be a plot and a moderate amount of action to make a good action story

Originally posted by sasee tiin
bur ares99 hasn't wrote any action at all, neither any fighting!!
of course i know that the first chapter not is supposed to contain those things, but look at it, very few people write entire books at a forum, you rather write short stories, and therefore there have to be action from the beginning!
You think action right off at the beginning makes a story good? Oh, by all means, lets have half a score of Death Eaters come and storm Privet Drive!

are we allowed to post our own fan fics in here too??

i would like to post a "harry meets voldemort battle scene"

Harry crept up the slowly sloping hill and hid behind the nearest gravestone.He had worked hard , he had waited ,so long for this moment.over the last few months Harry had been many places none of which were Hogwarts school of witchcraft and wizardry.
Harry had been alone since the death of a beloved friend.This of course being harrys own choice.He was not prepared to lose another life to his cause, his friends where safest in the dark with no connections to harry any more it is how it had to be.
Harry heard that shrill voice he loathed so much and only experience told harry not to act now.This voice of course could only be one man , one thing .It was voldemort.Harry thought of the convenience of this meeting place.The very place where Voldemorts father was buried.
Although harry knew that this was not a family connection which brought voldemort here. The graveyard represented not voldemorts past , but a special moment in only voldemorts eyes.The night the Dark Lord rose again.
of course this has been a special place to voldemort ,and it was known mainly by harry that voldemort likes his trophies.
The reason for the meeting in the graveyard had been that the where abouts of the order had been realised,This information only known by harry due to the fact that wormtail had supplied harry with every crucial detail , of course under the influence of a dark curse.Something which struck harry as odd was the fact that wormtail had been left so vulnarable in snapes home as if on purpose,but these matters did not mean anything just now.
The point of the meeting had been for voldemort to arrange a mass attack on the orders headquarters by the death eaters , of course acting on instructions from voldemort.This was the reason Harry was here.
This was the point of which voldemort will be his most vulnerable and unprotected by his followers.Harry knew that even though Voldemort was mortal after the destruction of the horcruxes,a hard task at the least,he would have to get voldemort on his own if he was to have any chance to destroy him!

Harry waited through the meeting,Waiting for the moment to strike.The attack on the order was the least of harry's worrys as the actual place of the order had been changed,Voldemort had been given flase information so the attack was mean nothing,although the fact that there is no battle for the death eaters to fight may limit the time he has with voldemort which meant there was no time for sad stories,quick and painful was the way voldemort would leave this world.
He sat alone behind the grave stone ,going over the plan again and again inside his head.He did not fear Voldermort any more , He only had anticipation for tonight he knew it would all end.
Harry's thoughts had been cut short by the sound of a crack, a familiar sound to say the least .Harry knew that the Death eaters one by one where leaving,the first cracking sound followed by many others until the sound died out.It was between the three of them although atleast one would have to die before the plan advanced ,Harry had completed in destroying all the horcruxes except one.Dumbledore had told harry that making an animal a horcrux unlikely , but thats what made harry believe it to be true.Voldemort is far from predictable.
Before the plan commenced the Snake Nagini would have to die.This could be acheived from where Harry was positioned as voldemort and his accomplice were in full view.A sacrafice would have to be made in order to complete this task.Harry's position and presence would be given away the moment after he struck, though it had to be done.
Harry pointed his wand in the direction at the snake,he need not say the words as he had indeed mastered speechless spells,Although not a word was said at the sight of the snake the curse was obvious he had used the half blood prince's own spell not because he favoured it but only because he knew that even a feeble attempt could have precise and harmful effects.
It was done , at the second it happened a shrill scream, made harry realise that indeed his position and presence had been sacrificed for this attack.
Harry was prepared for what was coming...the gravestone had been blasted to peices but harry was no behind it anymore, he had apparated feet behind voldemort.Voldemort whipped around at lightning speed and was shocked to see his present ,past and future standing before him.Voldemort gave a sly smirk, "this my friend has been long awaited" he said evily"The chance has come for you to prove yourself against me! i could easily call back my faithful servants to deal with you,but i feel that i should be the one to rid you from this wretched place!"
Harry had been waiting for all of this ,he had it planned to the very last detail and although nothing had yet happened he had a deep feeling that he had already failed."I do not need to prove myself to anyone of anything,especially you!"said harry doubling up with rage"I alone know the information which you seek, The prophecy i have in my own head, i know how this must end but you shall have to find out the hard way"
"Harry you honestly feel that you can defeat ?, and even if you ever could ,i would return again to take your life!"these words seem to float out of voldemolts mouth.
"If that is what you believe then you are terribly mistaken,i know also about your past, i know the unthinkable things you have done, I KNOW ABOUT THE HORCRUXES!!"screamed a raging harry !!"Or atleast i knew about the horcruxes"Laughed Harry"You are just like any other wizard in this world , maybe even less,your soul is incomplete! you have a weak soul!!"
"This maybe Harry my young friend ,but i still cannot suppress my feelings that you are missing something very important"laughed Voldermort
" I honestly cant see what this is"said harry irritated"i have planned this for a long time theres not a detail i have yet missed!!"
"On the contrary , Harry you missed one important fact , you are not powerful enough to destroy me !, now Dumbledore is dead i no longer need the horcruxes ,there are no more threats to me! i am free "Yelled an excited Voldermort.
"Not quite i have a power so strong within me , i could over power you easily , not with spells or cantations but with the one for you fear the most , the power to love!"Said harry in a serious tone
"you honestly think that you can over power me , so easily using love?"Voldermort looked disgusted
Voldemort

"Voldemort , i do not think so . I KNOW SO , its the one thing i have that you do not its the only things which makes us different"Yelled Harry.
With that voldemort launched a command of many spells and curses but harry was prepared for all of these , he was prepared for the whole battle he knew Voldemorts style of battle , an his technique harry needed only one simple spell to finish off voldemort
"THE TIME HAS COME FOR IT TO END , YOU HAVE NO SAY IN THE MATTER , YOU WILL FALL BEFORE ME AND I SHALL PROVAILL OVER EVIL!ALL THE LIVES YOU HAVE TAKEN ALL THE PEOPLE YOU HAVE KILLED WILL BE THE ONES TO DEFEAT YOU !"harry yelled at the top of his voice.
With this Harry's plan was to be completed the effort would pay off , although it would not be harry who kills Voldemort it would be his victims, the same way in which Harry was freed the last time they met in the same graveyard! Harrys incantation met the tip of Voldemorts wand just as planned , and just as before figures climbed out of voldemorts wand , though many more than the last time. The figures rose out and surrounded voldemort forming a circle ,Although it looked like nothing was happening , Harry could tell what was happening from the expression on Voldemorts face, Voldemort was hearing the pain and screams of his past victims , their emotions their feelings the pains from their terrible deaths all combined into one to bring down the dark lord, the figures where forcing Voldemort to feel pain, hatred,and fear but most of all love he had been forced to feel the selfless acts of those who spared their lifes in an effort to save others.
Voldemorts was slowly getting weaker his soul was being demolished , the end had come for voldemort , there was no more soul for voldemort to return from this was at last the end of the Dark Lord...

I bet $10 this gets moves to HP Section.

I didnt read it cause i dont feel like it right now, but i wil.

ok kl thanks ur the only one tht responds ...i feel kinda guilty coz i stole sum1 elses thread ...sorry

div, this is gret and quite interesting. But I think that you should open a separate thread and post it cause its not fair for ares99, and if s/he wants to continue with the fic it will get messy. So my advise would be you pm Rogue, ask to delete your posts, and in the same time you open a separate thread

It's pretty rubbish to be honest.

Originally posted by TheSun
It's pretty rubbish to be honest.

couldn't possible agreed more. please stop write those ninteresting crap stories, unless you are a talented author. HP deserves better...

Originally posted by sasee tiin
bur ares99 hasn't wrote any action at all, neither any fighting!!
of course i know that the first chapter not is supposed to contain those things, but look at it, very few people write entire books at a forum, you rather write short stories, and therefore there have to be action from the beginning!

so it was the interduction to his/her story. You dont have fighting at the very beggining if you did the story would be to rushed!

Originally posted by sasee tiin
couldn't possible agreed more. please stop write those ninteresting crap stories, unless you are a talented author. HP deserves better... Hey, thats not nice. Nobody is asking for him to be a great author. At least he is trying and has the guts to post his story.

and those that think that these are rubish authors can as well decide not to read. I mean, don't get me wrong, I also have had a situation not to like some fics, then I considered them not worthy to comment. Cheer up guys. As to HP deserves more, I agree with you all, but HP deserves more then the way HBP was written as well

Originally posted by jlee17xoxo412
Hey, thats not nice. Nobody is asking for him to be a great author. At least he is trying and has the guts to post his story.

Guts to post the story? A lot of people do. Theres is a lot of story's in the Harry Potter Fiction area, which is where this will be moved.

But i dont think its bad.

I lliked it. Yiou could of went into more detail but it was good.

Originally posted by Unicor777
and those that think that these are rubish authors can as well decide not to read. I mean, don't get me wrong, I also have had a situation not to like some fics, then I considered them not worthy to comment. Cheer up guys. As to HP deserves more, I agree with you all, but HP deserves more then the way HBP was written as well

well said

glad we agree