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feel free to give comments and suggestions, i welcome them.

OK, the first of many.

lady midnight comes and visits me.
we talk, we play. until im me

when im me we fight, we battle.
she knows im storng enough to make her rattle
but am i strong enough to let her win
i don't know you tell me?

she comes on rainy days tho te power of three
and makes me feel prehaps i should flee
i thought i knew her, thought i did
but she changes like the wind at sea

she sings me songs, all night long
i don't know why i just hear them ring

You do need to work on your spelling and grammar some hmm? Otherwise I think it's a pretty good start.

ya damn right im shocking, insulting to my mother

Originally posted by bogen
ya damn right im shocking, insulting to my mother
lol

true though, she used to give me a hard time but i think she just gave up, the poor thing

the trees are tall
but now it's the mall
we plunder and pilage, and wonder
why it is that the earths falling asunder

we've been trying to fix it
for at least ten times six
though i think i have to say


were getting better, much better at cleaning
but in fifty years time will it have any meaning?

true that, quite true yes

like your pomes yea spelling and grammer really grammer becuase with out it you wont make sense

im so sick of all the lies, of all the politics that i despice
all i want is the truth
it's simple, it's easy
it's better than all the shezy that makes me quezy.

im done sadangel

good job on your poems, I liked em^-^

why thank you, but i think im outa steam for poetry.writers block is killing me badly.

coolspark i.e. coldfire HELP!!! wallbash

no problamo^-^

lol...dw bout it..happens to a lot of writers

so damn anoying everynight i get these great one linners, like really good rymes that i know i should post but never do.
and sometimes i get ideas for a huge saga poem like 1000 words long.
i just wish i could follow through on my ideas cry

omg im like that too!!! i think about a great poem right when im falling asleep... it really sucks...

great poems, some were even awsome. i enjoyed that

i thinks it's funny but SO sad at the same time im like, MY GENIOUS IS WASTING AWAY!!!! mums like " wat genious!??!"

lol

a motion so pure it's almost sweet
it darlin and strong, but o so weak
hard, unwaivering like steel
flows like water, blows like wind

makes me strong, makes me hard
makes me soft, makes me weak


it gives me strength wen times are tough
ot makes me hard, it makes me rough
it is so soft and often so cold
but then how is it welcoming and really so bold


i fend it of with a mental bif
but it's to fast and far to swift
it covers me twice then once more times two
all i can do is pray to you

Originally posted by bogen
why thank you, but i think im outa steam for poetry.writers block is killing me badly.

coolspark i.e. coldfire HELP!!! wallbash
I would, but I have some writer's block myself *sigh*
Originally posted by bogen
so damn anoying everynight i get these great one linners, like really good rymes that i know i should post but never do.
and sometimes i get ideas for a huge saga poem like 1000 words long.
i just wish i could follow through on my ideas cry
Awww poor you hug
Originally posted by bogen
i thinks it's funny but SO sad at the same time im like, MY GENIOUS IS WASTING AWAY!!!! mums like " wat genious!??!"
lol

ya poor me cry

Originally posted by bogen
a motion so pure it's almost sweet
it darlin and strong, but o so weak
hard, unwaivering like steel
flows like water, blows like wind

makes me strong, makes me hard
makes me soft, makes me weak


it gives me strength wen times are tough
ot makes me hard, it makes me rough
it is so soft and often so cold
but then how is it welcoming and really so bold


i fend it of with a mental bif
but it's to fast and far to swift
it covers me twice then once more times two
all i can do is pray to you


clapwow, great job on that...I really loved it

Originally posted by bogen
a motion so pure it's almost sweet
it darlin and strong, but o so weak
hard, unwaivering like steel
flows like water, blows like wind

makes me strong, makes me hard
makes me soft, makes me weak


it gives me strength wen times are tough
ot makes me hard, it makes me rough
it is so soft and often so cold
but then how is it welcoming and really so bold


i fend it of with a mental bif
but it's to fast and far to swift
it covers me twice then once more times two
all i can do is pray to you
omg you posted at the same time so I didn't see this LOL!

it's good... but the rhyming scheme kind of stops at this:

hard, unwaivering like steel
flows like water, blows like wind

makes me strong, makes me hard
makes me soft, makes me weak

and then continues on after that... dunno if that was intentional or not lol

all in the plan, sok though i like it.
thanks for ya opinion

hmm, outa ideas.
oh oh!, read this book IRELAND a novel, frank delany.
it describes the irish tale of the beginings of poetry. it's quet good.

WOOOT GO BOGEN WOOT WOOT

THANK YOU

its cool ...i gots a giant wagon wheel he he

Originally posted by bogen
all in the plan, sok though i like it.
thanks for ya opinion
As long as you like it, nothing else really matters

some very interesting stuff here....

thank you!

more!

can do! , just give me a mo.

omg I haven't talked to you in forever! hug How ya been???

im gud!, got disconnected from home, (DAMN NETWORK CARD!) so im back at school and posting from school so i might be a bit slow replying.
im still trying to keep my good name up with like 2 posts a day.

Originally posted by bogen
im gud!, got disconnected from home, (DAMN NETWORK CARD!) so im back at school and posting from school so i might be a bit slow replying.
im still trying to keep my good name up with like 2 posts a day.
What?!?! Awww that sucks

might be bak now, as soon as i replyed i went home and hasseled my mum so things might get better.
ill chat to you tonite

Originally posted by bogen
might be bak now, as soon as i replyed i went home and hasseled my mum so things might get better.
ill chat to you tonite
I hope so!

wow, intence avi CF, i likes it!, ^.^

ok, news for all my fans, iv'e got something good in the making

bogen your poetry or should i say peotry is pretty good, but watch your spelling, and oh ya guess who this is

oh, hey man. that was intentional! so if some1 seached "poetry" i wouldn't get heaps of n00bs

Originally posted by bogen
wow, intence avi CF, i likes it!, ^.^
Thankies
Originally posted by bogen
ok, news for all my fans, iv'e got something good in the making
Yay

lol!

r u ever gonna post again?

lol he'd better!

dude post!

Indeed!!

yeah, looks like we have a no show!

lol post something already!!!

bogen, you better post something or i will kill u at school!!

Originally posted by pezza
bogen, you better post something or i will kill u at school!!
haha you'll have to get him for me then

i sure will!!, post dammit!

*sigh* Guess he's too busy with his website lol

Originally posted by Coldfire
*sigh* Guess he's too busy with his website lol

too busy with his website!!!!, i doubt it.

he apparently has writers block

*or maybe he's just lazy*

He's prolly got writer's block lol

fine ill just post what i put on the forum

it's funny i used to remember these streets i walked
i used to remember the faces talk
they'd tell me storys, make me laugh

they're all dead now

it seem like silence knows, all my secrets
all I'm for, all i apposed
so quite the winds a crowd, of bustling thoughts that seem foreign

i look at me though all i see is....what you make of me
it's so hard to see past all this flesh
to see whats growing inside the tall dark sprawl

you think you know what you might just see
but I'm all right hear, i just haven't given you the key.

B

Try it, i dare you
go on, whats holding you back?
is it fear?
pain?
anguish or just plain
envy?
it's all layed out infront of you
do it, it's all there
all you need

Find it, search
it has to be somewhere
it's near i can see it
taste it
feel it
it's so sweet, almost divine of make, godly or form
so small and precious
tiny as awareness
yet rich as dimention
calm as the cosmos

try it, it's not hard you can do it

B

got u post at last.

Originally posted by bogen
Try it, i dare you
go on, whats holding you back?
is it fear?
pain?
anguish or just plain
envy?
it's all layed out infront of you
do it, it's all there
all you need

Find it, search
it has to be somewhere
it's near i can see it
taste it
feel it
it's so sweet, almost divine of make, godly or form
so small and precious
tiny as awareness
yet rich as dimention
calm as the cosmos

try it, it's not hard you can do it

B
clapping

Yeah forgot to quote the other one but the same smilies apply lol

fanks luv

Your in my head
your on my mind
your all around me,
from time to time.

I know you well,
enough to talk about the triangles i see
and the one that holds my key.

I feel you flow through me,
my spirit, my soul
only apart from me, but still all myne.

Im sad when you leave,
but happy to feel you still binded to me
like vines
so strong and clear
but dark and now were near.

thanks alot, means heaps.

so far iv'e stayed away from the dark stuff i think it's time to show my talents if i have any.

daggers of ice
straight through my heart

im sinking too deep
you have no idea
it's soo very cold im growing into darkness

We are worlds apart but o so close
why can't you feel what i need the most?

i can't sleep now
cause im thinkin of you

i can't breathe now
cause im thinkin of you

i can't get you outa my head
cause im thinkin of you

i love your face
cause im thinking of you

im the tormented party
cause im thinkin of you

i hope your near
cause im thinkin of you

don't leave me now
cause im thinkin of you

it's all become clear
cause im thinkin of you

am i the guilty party
cause im thinkin of you


i just died
cause was thinkin of you.

Originally posted by bogen
daggers of ice
straight through my heart

im sinking too deep
you have no idea
it's soo very cold im growing into darkness

We are worlds apart but o so close
why can't you feel what i need the most?
This I like
Originally posted by bogen
i can't sleep now
cause im thinkin of you

i can't breathe now
cause im thinkin of you

i can't get you outa my head
cause im thinkin of you

i love your face
cause im thinking of you

im the tormented party
cause im thinkin of you

i hope your near
cause im thinkin of you

don't leave me now
cause im thinkin of you

it's all become clear
cause im thinkin of you

am i the guilty party
cause im thinkin of you


i just died
cause was thinkin of you.
I'm not quite sure what I think about this one *thinks*

the depths of my mind shudder with the thought
what i did to you, was not what i meant ofcourse

so long since we spoke
do i remember how?

save me from this fate
all you have to do is, take me out on a date

Originally posted by bogen
the depths of my mind shudder with the thought
what i did to you, was not what i meant ofcourse

so long since we spoke
do i remember how?

save me from this fate
all you have to do is, take me out on a date
Hey hun!! I so missed talking to you :hug: How you been???

sweet, im gud gud you?

sorry i haven't been on msn or DA but iv'e broken my wireless card so im doing most of my posting from school or my dads comp.

yeah, but gud y'know getting by i guess

My body sizzles, heat begins to rise
feeling very faint, when I look into your eyes
yet now is not the time, for we are not alone
so I shall eat a sinful treat, oh yes, an ice cream cone

You squirm uncomfortably as you watch me eat
holding the cone firmly I try to be discrete
twirling it around and around on my tongue
a wayward drip on my chin has clung

My sweet eyes fixed on yours for now
beads of sweat form on your brow
faster and faster my luscious lips smack
as upon my sensual treat I snack

Are you having trouble breathing, baby?
blushing and coughing, you stammer, "Maybe"
in and out of my mouth the ice cream slides
my now frozen tongue offers it a magical ride

Faster and faster my tongue starts to twirl
I am such a naughty girl
for your body begins to rise
as the ice cream drips upon my thighs

An impish giggle, a winking eye
my finger gliding along my thigh
the white gooey mess will get sticky if it lingers
a quick lick of the cone, then I suck off my fingers

There you sit in a sweaty daze
as I continue sucking the sugar cream glaze
the soft cone has melted, I am satisfied
leaving you breathless, reckless inside

nice poems

nice poem and nice hijack, but i insist you post your own poems on your own thread.

Originally posted by bogen
sweet, im gud gud you?

sorry i haven't been on msn or DA but iv'e broken my wireless card so im doing most of my posting from school or my dads comp.

yeah, but gud y'know getting by i guess
I'm pretty good hug

Aww that sucks! Yeah my computer was just in to be fixed so it had BETTER behave now lol.

happy b'day.
i tried to make a thread but storm shut mr down.
it's the thought that counts, i hope.

dont get all bent out of shape

what does " bent out of shape" mean?

Originally posted by bogen
what does " bent out of shape" mean?


It means dont take everything soo seriously.

ok, thanks.

letting all my fans ( where?) know im working on a short story thats keeping me busy so i expect ill post it soon, that us if i don't throw it out in disgust ( kidding).
Also that when i do post it id like so serious feed back cause imthinking i might get into story writing.so i need as many comments as possible

Originally posted by bogen
happy b'day.
i tried to make a thread but storm shut mr down.
it's the thought that counts, i hope.
Thankies hun hug
Originally posted by bogen
ok, thanks.

letting all my fans ( where?) know im working on a short story thats keeping me busy so i expect ill post it soon, that us if i don't throw it out in disgust ( kidding).
Also that when i do post it id like so serious feed back cause imthinking i might get into story writing.so i need as many comments as possible
Sweet! I'd love to read it when it's done hehe

Originally posted by Coldfire
Thankies hun hug

Sweet! I'd love to read it when it's done hehe

hopefully it will fill my expectations and rouse yours and others intrests and minds into activity

Originally posted by bogen
hopefully it will fill my expectations and rouse yours and others intrests and minds into activity
hehe well hop to it; I want to see this!!!!

ok ok,im in the final stages of editing.
this better be good, for all the effort iv'e put in.

Originally posted by bogen
ok ok,im in the final stages of editing.
this better be good, for all the effort iv'e put in.
Oh I'm sure it will be hehe

zomg, im hating it now.
taking up too much time and no matter what i write im never happy with it.
maybe i should just post it and be done with it

More

Originally posted by bogen
zomg, im hating it now.
taking up too much time and no matter what i write im never happy with it.
maybe i should just post it and be done with it
I know, that's what I keep doing with my stories... at this rate I'll never complete them haha

Originally posted by Coldfire
I know, that's what I keep doing with my stories... at this rate I'll never complete them haha
hehe, i think you passed the curse to me at one point , take it bak, take it bak

Originally posted by bogen
hehe, i think you passed the curse to me at one point , take it bak, take it bak
Sorry about that *takes it back*

Originally posted by Coldfire
Sorry about that *takes it back*

hehe thanks, my usual brilliance has returned, my latest brain child is this; me learning guitar, i think it would be fun to explore my musical side, providing i have one

i came up with ONE single line today but i can't remember what it was.

ill think on it then getback to myself

Pushing me farther
knowing i'll crack
Deeper you slice, tearing me open
Know not the damage you cause
You plunder my soul, Slash and burn becomes your pattern

Blood and tears become my solice.
Praying for your demise

You left me no option
you left me no choice
Im dead inside anyway

I slice deeper into my flesh, tearing the veins.

Praying

Hoping

For my quick demise

consumed by fire
till death i scream
burning your ears like you burned my soul

Flame engulfs all thought

thought becomes rage


rage becomes action

Deaths slime covers us both
the snot pulls us down
resistance is futile, prayer is hopeless
The darkness erodes my sanity

Becoming a thing of pure rage i die in my anger
Fighting against the mucouse that fights back

All hope is drained from my soul as you and i pass into the abyss
The clingy, dark abyss

slashing
cutting
peeling your skull
hacking your brain

these are my thoughts, these are my dreams
follow me, come hither
i will show you

blood

pain

death
Bursting eyeballs
extracting fluid
choping limbs

These are what i have planned
come closer, listen
I can hear your death aproaching
I can feel your life being smothered by my curiositys
You are Jakel and I am Hide,
watch me tear you apart

I want death
I need death
I want to snatch life
I need your snatch your life

I want blood
I need blood,
more blood

wow definitely graphic stuff you've been doing hun lol.

Originally posted by Coldfire
wow definitely graphic stuff you've been doing hun lol.
why thank you

lol you're welcome!