chapter 1:The long endless summer
Harry is once again back at the derslys for summer , he has only been back there for a week and he is now living back under the stairs as his unwelcoming aunt is coming to stay.
“Harry get up , were going to pick up aunt Marge “ said petunia
“alright I’m up “ said Harry in a angry voice
“ right im warning you now boy any magic used you will not have any food for 2 weeks, do you understand “ said uncle Vernon
“yes uncle Vernon” said Harry with a smile on his face .
“ come on move get in the car” said uncle Vernon
Its now 5`oclock and the have just arrived at the train station waiting, for aunt Marge.
yes, the story has its potential but im gonna have to give u some criticscim
1. Reread your stories. Make punctuation, grammar, and spelling right
2. Make the quotations right
3. Don't rush! Its better if you slow it down, add a ton more detail
4. Don't use numbers, instead spell it out; two instead of 2 and so on
Hey, plz dont feel bad, i want to be an editor or author some day, so i go around here and criticize just about everyone. The story has potential, just bulk it up!