Through the Barrier
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Corran
Is anyone going to comment on what is wrong or right with this?
Syren
I think I may have seen this piece before... I can't recall my exact reaction but I still think it's wonderful.
I really like the consistent rhythm, although I personally prefer poems with a more jagged flow to them. I think it's a great effort and it's really good to see you sharing it with everyone. I'd like to see more, if you have any
Coldfire
I agree with Sy; great effort!
I'd also like to see some more
Corran
Originally posted by Syren
I think I may have seen this piece before... I can't recall my exact reaction but I still think it's wonderful.
I really like the consistent rhythm, although I personally prefer poems with a more jagged flow to them. I think it's a great effort and it's really good to see you sharing it with everyone. I'd like to see more, if you have any
Awww thanks, you always make me feel special and wanted
bogen
yeah, nice ryming man.
and did you keep all the lines roughly the same length on porpose?
Syren
Originally posted by Corran
Awww thanks, you always make me feel special and wanted
Long time no speak cry
It's a beautiful piece... and where have you been? hug
Machete_Guy
kisssadwalkweepwinkissinlovein_love
Coldfire
Originally posted by Machete_Guy
kisssadwalkweepwinkissinlovein_love
MG!
Long time no talkie! hug
Corran
Originally posted by bogen
yeah, nice ryming man.
and did you keep all the lines roughly the same length on porpose? Nope not on purpose, it was just how it flowed in my twisted head.
jlee17xoxo412
nice stuff. i like how it's sort of two faced because the person seem really happy and like he has it together when really he or she is falling apart.
Nice.
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