Originally posted by NewOne
I already started a love poem and I would like you folks to tell me if it is a good start:
Each day I always see you're wonderful face
It will be an image that I could never erase
Each night you're appearing in a dream
It will be a memory that will always make me deem
That's it for now
First line- "You're" should be "your"
"Deem" is not used correctly, as Ken said.
Yeah the whole AABB rhyming scheme doesn't seem to be working well for this one hun. Maybe try something else like ABAB or just free style
Originally posted by NewOne
Next paragraph:
When I look deep into your eyes
I know that you're thinking about something nice
When tears are falling down your eyes
I know that the cause of this was filled with lies
Please add some replies about the poem and some correction if possible especially for the last sentence "I know that the cause of this was filled with lies" because I am not sure.
Thank you
Not sure what you're trying to accomplish with this stanza... It doesn't seem to fit with the other one... were you trying to do ABAA rhyming?