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Here is the first chapter of my FanFic. If you read it I hope you like it!

Click on this link!

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3335603/1/

Oops, I forgot to mention - it's POSTCOTBP, so DMC never existed, lol!

Wow! That was amazing. It's so original, too. Hardly anyone does anything with Gov. Swann other than make him the comic relief. I think from the movies he's actually a fairly smart man. You had to be to be a governor back then, and he's so devoted to Liz. You really captured that.
I didn't like at first when she calls him Daddy, it didn't really belong, but when I read on, I saw how much it did fit. I think in AWE if Gov. Swann really dies (don't tell me!) she needs to really break down. She seems so cold to her father sometimes. Honestly, if I had almost drowned, even if a hot Jack Sparrow saved me, I would probably hug my father and be grateful to see his face again. But whatever. I love what you've done with Liz. You kept her strength and her vulnerability, and that's a tough thing to do.

And best of all, I have no idea what's going to happen next! You left me wanting more! Please post when you've continued.

really, really lovely. It's clear you put a lot of time into crafting this piece, with your word usage. It was very poetic, very dark.

i'm very, very pleased, it was very entertaining to read and as Willo said, I am looking forward to the next part!

Thankyou guys so much, what you have said really means alot and I'll take into consideration everything you have told me. Thankyou guys, I really appreciate it! I hopefully will have the next chapter within the week cuz they're long chapters ... the first one isn't too long is it?

I'm working on the next chapter as I speak ... write this!

Okay another Chapter is added, sorry it took so long but on the good news it was because I got a little sister ! YAY! So here is the second Chapter: The Passing of Light Between Shadows

Hope you like it!

AH isn't anyone else gonna check it out?

Wow surfchik. that was AWESOME! i was so captivated i could almost feel lizzie's pain. i'm reading the second chapter now. Please write more.

I loved it

Im writing one myself at the moment, but yours just takes my breath away!!!

Wrong forum. Maybe try the fiction forum, slyly entitled, "General Fiction".

Where's that Barker? Thankyou guys. I'm definately gonna write some more and I'll check the ones you guys wrote out for sure. Happy writing and reading everyone!

Where's that Barker? Thank you guys. I'm definitely gonna write some more and I'll check the ones you guys wrote out for sure. Happy writing and reading everyone!

I read it and left a review.

Thankyou and sorry about the double post ... don't know what happened there ...

Ahhh I'm stumped for the next chapter. I'm gonna have to knuckle down today and write something.

Yeah, speed it up! Lol. I really do want to know what happens.

Sorry I've started.

Hey surfchik have ya finished the next chapter i really wanna know who spoke at the end of the last one.

I'm going, lol. I'm writing a script for a film my friends and I are shooting this year, so other than school starting up again, it's taking up spare writing time. But it will be up within ummmmmm, maybe two weeks, considering how long the chapters are, sorry guys ... not tht anyone is probably gonna keep reading it, lol.

But what to write, what to write. Now I know how Shakespeare must of felt at times!

surf, that was pretty good. You're very good with dialogue. This is a pretty dark story so far, too! Keep it up.

Thankyou very much I thought I sucked with dialogue ...

AHHHHHH is anyone else gonna review or will I just keep trying to make this thread bigger!

wow that was really good! Great how you explained the details

THANKYOU very much!

i loved it surfchikpir8fan!! its very good!

wow forum is empty today!!

sorry edit! stupid computer!! i have no idea what its doing!! sorry

Lol, thankyou so much! Next chapter will be up in a week max!

cant wait!!

Funnily enough I think I'll be calling this chapter Port Royal Massacre or Port Royal Battle Sketch. I don't know, something along those lines. But it is far from being the end chapter!

Do you use the same name on fanfiction that you do here in case I want to just look up your story without coming here first? I'm so ready for another chapter.

Yep, same name. Lol, I'm so creative - not!

YES it is uploaded! Finally, sorry. I just like to make sure I'm absolutely happy with a chapter before uploading it. This is my shortest chapter, but I'd say it's the most violent/horrific/poetic. I like what kate said about being dark and poetic so I hope I have kept that idea and maintained it, lol.

But here it is - Chapter 4 - Blood-Red Ink Sketch of Port Royal - http://www.fanfiction.net/secure/live_preview.php?storyid=3335603&chapter=4/

That is reallyl dark. I'm looking forward to more.

Thankyou!

Alas, I have finished another chapter. So sorry it took so long, but I hope you like it -

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3335603/5/

Thankyou for reading!

Ahhhhh does anyone care, or do I delete the story?

Hmm, that was interesting. You're really good with descriptions. Lots of vivid imagery.

Thankyou, is it too descriptive?

No, I think it's a good balance of description and action/dialogue.

*blushes* Thanks!