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Chiki (minie), Surreal, and Kate, here is our paradise where we can work on our new fic. I think I'll start just so we can get that out of the way and because I have some time on my hands for once.


(We are on a distant island in what looks like the New Zealand/Australia region. We narrow in to a small chapel next to the pier. Footsteps are walking into the chapel.

It is Barbossa, opening the door where we see Elizabeth and Will at an altar with a minister.)

Minister: Ah, another witness. (Barbossa sees Gibbs, Cotton, Pintel, Ragetti, and Marty standing behind the couple) Let us continue. Do you, William-

Will: We said no last names.

Minister: My apologies. Do you take this woman to be your lawfully wedded wife, to have and to hold, in sickness and in health, to love and honor her in all the days of your life?

Will: I do.

Minister: And do you, Elizabeth, take this man to be your lawfully wedded husband, to have and to hold, in sickness and in health, to love and honor him in all the days of your life?

Elizabeth: I do.

Minister: By the power invested in me, I now pronounce you husband and wife.

(Will and Elizabeth share a tender kiss)

Barbossa: Now can we get movin?

Elizabeth: One would think, Barbossa, you were reluctant to see me married off? (smirks, still not crazy about being with him)

Barbossa: Cute. Let's move out.

(Will places his arm around Elizabeth.)

Will: I'm sorry it's not the right time for a honeymoon. I promise you we'll have one later.

Elizabeth: (smiles) It's the least of our worries. (Kisses him) Will? There's something you need to know...

Will: Elizabeth, we've been through this. I know already.

Elizabeth (waits for crew to go): No, you don't know! (looks down at the ground) I didn't only kiss him. (waits for Will to respond. He doesn't.) I killed him.

Ooooo... dun dun DUN!!! Elizabeth marries Will and THEN tells him??! That seems so like her!!!! Brilliant start, this has me so excited.

Willo, I didn't get the forward with the plot line idea... could you try and resend to fill me in???

(is this thread only for chiki (minie) surreal or kate to post in here?) well lol ive posted tht sounds so kl for a start!, i agree tht is a bit like here- rebel!!

Anyone can participate. Kate, I'll PM you my idea.

CUT TO...

(Tia Dalma's shack. She's still there, alone, her crab legs dispersed on her table. She arranges them in a special way and then takes her locket and unfastens it from the chain. She dangles the chain over the legs and the chain begins to drift left, the west side of her shack. She is very surprised by this. She drops the locket. It falls open and plays its song. A tear drips down her cheek.)

Neighbor (one of the women we saw at the end of DMC outside the shack): Madam?

(Tia wipes her face)

Neighbor: We was wondrin', madam, if ya learned a thing about...

Tia: Yes, there be nothin' for ya to worry 'bout der.

Neighbor: Everybody gonna want to hear dat, madam! (pause) What's wrong?

Tia: (points to the locket) Der is some-tin to worry 'bout, for William Turner and his crew to worry 'bout.

Ah, I see you guys started Awesome. Who's next?

Whoever is inspired.

I'm totally into it. I just don't want to post a story when you or Surreal post another at the same time lol. I'm writing now.

CUT TO...

(the ship Barbossa is captaining. I know Tia said "Will and his crew." Just roll with it)

(Barbossa is studying a map. It is a day later and Liz comes out of the cabin.)

Barbossa: Throwin' all caution to the wind, are ye?

Liz: Pardon? (takes over for Marty at the helm)

Barbossa: We both know how long it's taken already, Miss Swann.

Liz: Mrs. Turner.

Barbossa: Back to that name again, I see. We both know how long we've been out here...

Liz: Looking for this man who knows how to get into the Locker was yours and Tia Dalma's idea and you aren't going to blame anyone else for not being able to find him, Captain.

Barbossa: A thousand apologies, Mrs. Turner. I only thought you might be interested to know just how far back your elopement set us.

(shows her the charts)

Barbossa: This is where we was 'sposed to be, ON LAND. It'll take a half day's journey now.

Liz: You made it sound as if we were weeks behind schedule.

Barbossa (long pause): Hard to port.

Liz: Now?

Barbossa: Turn it, girl! (Liz turns the wheel. Everyone runs on deck) Your little promise to marry the boy before the both of ye died just cost us this mission.

Will: Barbossa! What... (sees what Barbossa sees)

(Liz turns. Three ships that have Royal Navy insignias are close behind them)

Woo hoo, glad to bring Jack in early. I smell tension.

(Jack walks up the steps to the helm, a little drunk and a little mad and starts steering it.)

Jack (Captain): Wherever this may take us, boatswain! (whips out compass. It only spins in a circle, never stopping. Jack is disturbed and quickly closes it)

Jack (Boatswain): What was that heading, sir?

Jack (Captain): Never you mind. Just go!

Jack (honest nice guy): You really shouldn't talk to a crew like that, mate. Might want to make them mutiny against you.

Jack (Captain): (points pistol at him) Say that word again.

Jack (Boatswain): I believe it was mutiny, sir. We're coming up on some shoals.

Jack (Captain): That's a good man. Head for land.

Jack (Boatswain): How's that?

Jack (honest/nice): You're dumping the slaves off! Earn you a spot in Heaven it will.

Jack (Captain): I don't need you making passes at me. Retrieve them from the brig!

Jack (Boatswain): Aye aye, sir.

Jack (honest/nice): But there's no one down there. It's just us and the swain.

Jack (Boatswain): I don't see a soul, captain.

Jack (Captain): I figured you might not, half drunk all the time and just stupid and gullible the other half.

Jack (Honest/nice): That wasn't nice. Perhaps you should make it up to him?

Jack (Captain): That's the kind of thinking that lost us the Pearl! Got us here in the first place! (shoots him. He calms down a little. He knows he's only one)

(Jack heads back down the steps, crosses the deck and back out into the sand. He begins pounding his fist into the side of the Pearl, harder and harder until he nearly collapses against it. We hear faint sounds of crying.)


Cut To...

oh im liking the fic ladies...love it love it!!

Ah, this battle is going to be challenging Poor Jack...

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Will: They are all behind us!

Gibbs: I reckon this is the best time to use our heads, not loose it.

Elizabeth: We either fight or surrender. I'm not going to leave Jack behind.

(Will looks at Elizabeth and sees her determination. He is willing to do the same.)

Will: We have to fight.

Barbossa: Who made ye captain, boy?

Will: I will not stay put and watch us surrender.

Barbossa: If ye want to survive, ye have ta go by my plan.

Pintel: But sir, we can't out run them. We are not in the pearl.

Barbossa: Don't remind me!

Will: Load the cannons!

Barbossa: With what?

Will: Anything! Everything that we got!

Gibbs: But...the rum!

Will: (Gets close to Gibbs face) Everything...

Cut To...

lol i love this!!!!! what kind of fic is it?

i guess whatever it turns out to be....remember there are like 3 ppl writing this fic....so we'll see where it goes

Keep going ladies....sounds good!!

We know, we just won't tell

Well, I'm waiting for the next person who's gonna take over

I like that, mina. Builds suspense and is a callback. Fun.

(Liz runs below decks and helps Gibbs load the cannons)

(Will, Barbossa, and the rest are preparing weapons)

(A few cannonballs whip into the sides of the ships)

Will: How did they know we were on this ship? We've been switching ships.

Barbossa: Methinks they got wind of our plan to see the man with the Locker information. Someone musta' told.

Will: A traitor?

(Before Will can respond, a voice booms)

Voice: If William Turner or Elizabeth Swann is on board, you are to come within sight.

(Gibbs and Liz run up)

Gibbs: The Commodore?

Liz: James? (calls to him) James! We're both here.

Pintel: Now's not the time to be switchin' sides, poppet.

Liz: No, it's all right. He has the heart. (calls to him) It's so good to see you! Please, have you heard from my father?

(The men are kind of stunned at this small talk)

Norrington: Elizabeth, I must tell you, your father is on this ship.

Will: Finally, some good news.

Norrington: He is unfortunately, my prisoner.

Ragetti: What did he say?

Pintel: Ask where the heart is.

Liz: Prisoner? (to Gibbs) Treacherous...we'll blow his fleet to smithereens.

Norrington: Elizabeth! For God's sake, no more cannonballs!

Will: Why should we trust you?

Norrington: Because this small fleet...and I...are here to help you.

Ah, willo returns

CUT TO--

(Jack is lying right next his pearl. Eyes closed, gun in hand, memories still burning him than the hot, steamy sun.)

Elizabeth: I'm not sorry...

Jack: Pirate...

(Flashes his eyes open. He searches through his effects and grabs the compass. The compass is still spinning.)

Jack: My soul I do swear, for a breeze. A gust. A whisper. A kiss ...

CUT TO---

(In Tia Dalma's Hut. She wouldn't keep her eyes of her locket. As the music plays, memories haunt her...)

Tia: I fear for our heroes.

Neighbor: In what way, madam?

Tia: I fear that there'd be betrayals, upon betrayals...

Neighbor: What be the point in staying together.

Tia: That'd be something fer them ta discover.

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Will: How sure are we in trusting you?

(Norrington pulls his sword and lightly presses against Will's chest.)

Norrigton: You think I would have killed you by now, Turner, if I wasn't on your side.

(Will swallows)

Will: What's your action?

(Puts away his sword)

Norrington: Beckett still believes that I'm taking the crew as prisoners.

Elizabeth: I still believe that we should fight.

Norrington: Are you in a suicide mission, Miss Swann--

Elizabeth: --Mrs. Turner.

(Clears his throat)

Norrington: Mrs. Turner, you know that there are hundreds of armed men out there. They have you and your crew mates surrounded.

Will: Are you suggesting that we surrender, Commodore?

Elizabeth: That's absurd!

Norrington: It's the only way, for now.

Barbossa: (chuckles) Think of it as a reunion with yer father, Mrs. Turner.

(Elizabeth glares at Barbossa)

Gibbs: Who'd be the first to surrender?

(dead silence)

Mr. Cottons Parrot: SQUAWK not me!

love it....Love it!!

Well, I'm off to bed. Someone take it up from here

Good night!

Keep the faith

How about some love for Norrington this time around, eh? I'll try a start there.


Cut to Beckett's ship. He's eyeing the goings on from a fair distance, with a telescope in hand. He turns to Mercer.

Beckett: I think I may have been right about that one, Mercer. One sight of the lady and he's lost his backbone.

Mercer: What's one more man to kill?

Beckett: Unfortunately we still need him... alive. Or have you forgotten the other half of the plan?

Mercer: (looking annoyed) No. You forgot to TELL me the other half of the plan.

Beckett: So I did. Let's just say it's a matter of leverage.


Back to Will's ship (or Barbossa's, whatever).

Will has pulled Elizabeth aside.

Elizabeth: Will, I'm sorry I've dragged us into this.

Will: You haven't. We all chose willingly.

Elizabeth: But what are we to do? We must abandon the mission...

Will: (pulls her closer, looks into her eyes) I know your heart, Elizabeth. You would torment yourself with this forever, if we didn't make every effort to save Jack. I've pledged myself to you--- I will do what it takes to bring you peace, no matter what the cost.

Elizabeth continues gazing in his eyes, and leans forward, kissing him lingeringly.

Elizabeth: I don't deserve you, Will.

Will: None of that matters. I'm yours, and you're mine. Does that poor band of soldiers really think they can stop two people in love?


Cut back to Beckett's ship. Beckett is discussing plans with his officers. Suddenly, a guard approaches, dragging a young lady by the arm. She is rolling her eyes and appears completely unruffled. She looks to be in her early 20s, pretty, with strong features, dressed in men's clothing. Beckett looks up, annoyed.

Beckett: What is it, Carson? If you haven't noticed, we're on the verge of an attack.

Carson: I'm afraid we have another stowaway, my lord.

Beckett: I thought we got rid of all the rats the last time the ship was cleaned.

Carson: My apologies. We found her sneaking around the storage holds.

Lady: (shrugging casually) Even a rat has to eat.

Beckett: (in disgust) Don't address me in that manner. (To Carson) What's her name?

Carson: My lady, what's --

Lady: I heard the question. Anne Sloan. Don't you remember, Beckett? My husband sailed with you on your last mission and was killed. You refused to give me the compensation due to a widow of the crown, and I was forced to give up my land and title. I'm here to collect my compensation.

Beckett: Ah... Mistress Sloan. Your husband was a very poor sailor.

Anne: But he was human nonetheless, and served you faithfully.

Beckett: I don't have time for this. (To Anne) There will be no compensation, Mistress.

Anne: No wonder half of your empire has turned to piracy.

Beckett: Yes, and will hang for it. That's half as many mouths to feed.

Anne: (glaring at him) I take my leave, then, gentlemen.

Anne wrenches her arm free of the guard, and climbs overboard, swimming with strong strokes towards Will's ship in the distance, which is clearly flying pirate colors.

Ahhhhh, Ilove this fic guys! It's fantastic, I can't wait to read more! Well done!

I have writer's block. Someone else go.

Mmmm I'll go again. We need to mix things up a bit.

I take it back. I'm getting nothing. Someone come up with something exciting, and I'll try to take it from there. I'm a bit confused on where this stalemate is supposed to go, tee hee.

I'll be posting, don't worry. I've just got to find some small amount of time where I can actually write something more than a small post like this one.


But I'm confused....how many ships are there? I thought there were three, but now there's Beckett and his armada out there too? And Elizabeth is in love with Will at this point, right? Not Jack? I'm a bit confused about that.

Ah, I'll go next. Elizabeth is still loving Will. About Jack is still undecided at this point .

I'll continue when I get back from work.

I think I took it all as, Elizabeth has made a decision to love Will, even though deep down in that heart, she has some major feelings for Jack she is squelching. Of course, Will is wonderful and there is no reason she shouldn't love him, so in the crisis of heart and the confusing of mind, she made a choice to marry him and commit herself to him. Think how vulnerable she was at the end of DMC--- she needs protection right now, she needs to be with someone who supports her 100%, ya know? Seeing Jack is likely to rouse other feelings back up though.

I thought Norrington said something about how they were all surrounded by Beckett and his men. That's what I was going off of. That, and a desire to introduce a Norrington love interest.

Cant wait to read the next bit!

If you want kate, I can try to play around with your recent post. My recent post was for the crew to surrender.

And Norrington is on their side and he has a plan on helping them escape.

OK, I'm probably going to be hated by doing this. But we have start over from where I last posted. I'm gonna give this a shot then I have to go to church.

(The crew are still undecided on who will be the first to surrender. There is a lot of tension within the room.)

(Foot steps are heard coming down the steps. Norrington lowers his head)

Beckett: Commodore, I assumed you were bringing them in with irons grasped around their wrists. What has taken you?

Norrington: The wench was stubborn.

(Beckett stares at Elizabeth up and down. Her hair is a muss, her face covered with dirt. Clothes almost shredded. And her eyes shows of that of a determined woman. Correction, pirate)

Beckett: (walks towards Elizabeth) Your father doesn't know on your whereabouts. I would hate for you to miss what's little time left with your father.

(Elizabeth grabs Beckett from the collar)

Elizabeth: You leave my father out of this!

(Beckett slaps Elizabeth across her cheek)

(Will pushes Beckett)

Will: Keep your hands off of her you bastard--(gets hit with a rifle)

Elizabeth: (runs towards Will) Will!

Beckett: Now, are you going to do this my way, or the ugly way?

(Barbossa sneaks the chart in his coat)

(The crew stays silent)

Beckett: Commodore.

Norrington: Sir?

Beckett: Make sure they all are tied together. Like slaves should be.

(Norrington slightly nods to Beckett's orders and proceeds. Beckett turns around and trusts Norrington to do his work...)

Elizabeth: (whispers to Norrington) I thought you were on our side!

Norrington: (whispers back) Iam! But for now I have to follow his orders! It's the only way for a chance of survival for you and your crew mates.

Elizabeth: What about Will?! He has been hit!

Norrington: He will regain consciousness.

Barbossa: So I suppose we have no choice but ta trust ye?

Norrington: That's all I'm asking you.....for now.





OK. I hope that works. I have to go to church. I hope someone can take it from here.

By all means, Chiki. I'm off to bed.

nite-nite!

Actually, chiki, the scene works fine because Kate had it cut to Beckett and the next thing we know, Norrington and Liz are on board. It fits in fine. Hmm, let's see...

(The crew is in the brig. Elizabeth is fiddling with her bonds, just rope instead of chains. Most are tied or shackled to the wall. Most of them are asleep. Finally, she breaks free)

Elizabeth: (whispering) Will! (he sees she's out) Keep a look out. (she crosses over to him, kisses him chastely, then starts untying him)

Will: The others are shackled. We'll need to find a key (he's freed) Thank you.

Gibbs (waking up): Miss Elizabeth! Will! Hurry. See what's happened to the ship.

Will: They've probably either destroyed it or plan on using it for their own shipping routes.

Gibbs: I knew we shouldn't have commandeered that one. Bad luck that one.

(Will and Liz look at him)

Gibbs: T'wasn't named for a lass.

Will: Halcyon? That seemed fine (kind of laughs it off)

Elizabeth: The Black Pearl isn't 'named for a lass.' (goes over to inspect his shackles)

Gibbs: But sounds more like a woman than a man, don't it? No! No, hurry on up and get out of here.

Elizabeth: We can't leave all of you behind.

Gibbs: The Commodore'll help you. Besides, these waters needs those that are daft like Jack to get through.

Will: What do you mean?

Gibbs: The sea goddess Calypso.

(Barbossa wakes up)

Barbossa: What's the old man ramblin' on about?

Gibbs: (ignores him) They say she exists in human form, but every 100 years, returns back to this sea.

Will: For what?

Gibbs: Since Odysseus left her, she left the Med. Sea for eternity and journeyed down here, takin' a lover every few years or so, hopin' for the one worthy of immortality...and the stories say she found one. You know him. Davy Jones.

(Will and Liz look shocked)

Will: Tia Dalma never mentioned...

Gibbs: It wasn't the information we came lookin' for.

Will: (remembering) as harsh as the sea...

Elizabeth: What does this mean for us?

Gibbs: Legend has it Davy Jones fell in love with the sea, or a woman as SHE says. After she saw the monster he became after she left him, she manifested into a human form, only comin' here every 100 years to find the humans she needs for whatever plan she's concoctin.' You'll want to be seein' the condition of the sea up there, ye two. We'll be wantin' to steer clear of her plans.

(Elizabeth looks down at the ground. The only thing resembling a weapon is a bottle, most likely filled with rum. She picks it up.)

Elizabeth: I have an idea. We need to go up there and find Norrington.

Barbossa: I think that's what he was sayin' all along, missy.

Elizabeth: Will, I need your help.

Oh, me next! Me next! I have to go take a nap, per doc's orders, and then I'll post. Please, please, please let me post next???

We're waiting for ya

Alive and well, surreal?

Surreal: I see you shiver...with an....tici......pation.

YES I DID JUST QUOTE ROCKY HORROR

Ok, here I am...sorry it took so long.


For purposes of this post, Beckett and his men are no longer on James' ship, which I shall name The Intrepid. So Beckett is back on his own ship, along with all his men.

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ON DECK --- AFTERNOON


(Norringotn is on deck with various EITC sailors. A few recognizable faces are among those gathered there; Groves, Murtogg and Mullroy. They are staring at the drenched, exhausted form of Anne Sloan.)


Norrington: (looks pained to be dealing with such a situation) Do I even want to know about this?


Murtogg: Probably not sir.


(Mullroy elbows him and quickly speaks up.)


Mullroy: Found her floating in the water, sir. Said she came from The Endeavor.


Norrington: (purses his lips and looks irritated) I see.


(He kneels down beside Anne and speaks sharply, though it isn't without concern.)


Norrington: Are you quite well, madam?


Anne: (glares at Norrington) Not more you lot!


Norrington: (politely, but with an edge) I'm sorry?


(Anne sits up, but the sudden movement seems to be too much for her. Lack of sleep, food and the long swim to the ship over-comes her, and she starts to slump back onto the deck in a near-faint. Norrington manages to keep her head from colliding with the decking.)


Norrington: (sighs) I know I'm going to regret this...


(He gently lifts Anne up off the deck and cradles her in his arms, ignoring her feeble struggle to free herself.)


Groves: She can have my cabin, sir. I don't mind bunking with the men.


(Norrington nods and looks a bit relieved that he won't have to put her in his cabin.)


Norrington: Good man. I knew I promoted you for a reason.


(Groves give a toothy grin to Norrington.)


Groves: What shall we do with the prisoners, sir?


Norrington: (smiles faintly) Oh, I'm sure by now that they have managed to formulate an escape plan. Did you have the corridors unmanned?


Groves: (grins) I did, sir. That way they won't have to maim, injure or kill anyone to find you.


Norrington: (snorts, but looks concerned when Anne goes limp in his arms) Send for me if they manage to make it to the deck. And send for the surgeon and some hot tea, please.


( Norrington nods at his men and then carries Anne to the second level of the ship, where the officer's cabins are. Murtogg and Mullroy jump to do Norrington's bidding. Murtogg heads to the galley, Mullroy goes to the surgeon. )


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--- BELOW DECKS ---


Will: (speaking softly) Do you find it odd that we haven't found one man on duty yet?


(Will and Elizabeth are making their way through the bowels of the ship, working their way upwards.)


Elizabeth: (looks confused) This isn't like James.


(Will and Elizabeth exchange glances.)


Will: Or is it? Maybe he really is telling the truth.


Elizabeth: Well then...


Will: It's probably safe...


(The two of them look furtively at each other, then share a passionate if brief kiss.)


Will: Barbossa will kill us if he ever finds out about that.


(They share a quick grin and continue walking. They are still cautious, but are a bit more relaxed. )


Elizabeth: Then I guess we should never tell him about it.


( Will is about to reply when he suddenly grabs Elizabeth's arm as they hear footsteps. He steps in front of her and plucks the bottle from her grasp. Mullroy rounds the corner with the surgeon. Mullroy stops while the surgeon continues on his way.)


Mullroy: Thought you'd be here, we did. The commodore's busy with a woman, but I'm sure he can find time to fit you two in.


( Elizabeth and Will gape at him. Mullroy pauses, considers and turns red.)


Mullroy: I think I had better rephrase that...


Will: Please, do.


Mullroy: Er...we found a woman floating in the water. The commodore is seeing about getting her some treatment. He'll meet with you as soon as he's done...er, just follow me.


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SECOND DECK --- INSIDE GROVES' QUARTERS


(Norrington is standing off to the side while the surgeon helps Anne to drink a glass of brandy.)


Surgeon: This should help revive you, lass. (to Norrington) She seems fine, aside from over-taxing herself. I recommend quiet rest for today and some light food. We don't have much good for patients on board right now, but I think we can spare a chicken to make some broth for her.


Norrington: (nods, his thoughts obviously not entirely on the situation) Thank you. I will see to it that she follows your instructions.


Anne: (is pale but now fully conscious, narrows her eyes at that remark.) I don't think --


Norrington: (sharply as the doctor leaves) What you think doesn't matter.


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All right, I leave it up to you guys to pick up where I left off. Not sure about how to characterize Anne, Kate, so I figured you could pick up on what is bound to be an amusing exchange between James and Anne.


Hope this is ok with all of you.

Okay, so Beckett's ship is The Endeavor and Norrington's is The Intrepid?

(Below deck in the brig)

Barbossa: Where are they? Should have been back by now.

Gibbs: Outrunning the navy might take some time.

Barbossa: No doubt they're off enjoying marital bliss again.

Gibbs: I'll not have ye sayin' such filth about Ms. Elizabeth and Will! (takes a swing but is still chained to the wall)

(Barbossa laughs at him)


CUT TO Mullroy, Will, and Elizabeth

Will: Are you taking us to his cabin?

Mullroy: Something like that.

(enters Groves' cabin where Norrington and Anne are. Anne has passed out.)

Norrington: Good. You're here.

Mullroy: I brought them here.

Norrington: Thank you, Mullroy (dryly)

Elizabeth: James, to tell you the truth, I didn't have much of a plan- incapacitate the guards and get to you to take the ship to our destination.

Norrington: Where is it you plan on going?

Elizabeth: Barbossa has the charts. We're looking for a Sao Feng.

Norrington: You have to be joking.

Will: The only lore that has any living person knowing anything about Davy Jones' Locker is Sao Feng.

Norrington: But he's a pirate!

(Will and Elizabeth look surprised, but not necessarily shocked)

Elizabeth: How does a pirate have dealings with Davy Jones and survive?

Norrington: I don't know. He's only been the most feared pirate on this side of the world, surpassing even names like Hector Barbossa and Jack Sparrow.

Will: We still have to go to him. Release the others and we'll make our way to him.

(Suddenly, Anne summons all her strength and springs from the bed. She pulls out the sash attached to her belt and holds it over Norrington's neck)

Mullroy: Sir! She's alive!

Norrington: I can tell.

Anne: I think this ship is going to turn around and attack the Endeavor. Right now.

Elizabeth: What are you doing? We're on a rescue mission! We can't turn the ship around.

Anne: Suit yourself. (she starts to tighten the sash. Norrington gags slightly)

Will: Why?

Anne: To kill Cutler Beckett and all those who serve him, including this clown here.

Oh, fun! Surreal, that was a really lovely post. I really liked the exchange between Groves and Norrington-- it was very witty.
Willo, you already know I'm your biggest fan. I think it's hilarious how Barbossa is always annoyed at them "enjoying their marital bliss". hahaha

is someone working on a part or may i post next?

Go ahead.

okay give me a minute. working on it.

CUT TO: Davy Jones' Locker. An endless white desert. Jack is sitting in the sand next to the Pearl, leaning in the shade of the ship. Elizabeth is next to him.

Jack: So then I sailed to the Mediterranean.

Liz: (mocking) to forget me?

Jack: Have you ever been to Alexandria? That's the place to forget women.

Liz: But you didn't.

Jack: For a week or two, maybe. But you can only stay in Alexandria so long, especially when you've been pilfering every establishment and corrupting all the sheik's daughters. (pauses) I figured you'd be married to the whelp by the time I got back.

Liz: And that would stop you from wanting me?

Jack: I've fought Mr. Turner once before and I've no intention of doing so again. At any rate, I thought maybe your marriage would turn you back in to the boring (though beautiful) stuck-up society lady.

Liz: You thought wrong.

Jack: Lizzie, Lizzie, why can't we ever just have a nice conversation without you arguing with everything I say?

Elizabeth just smiles at him.

Jack: You know the rest of the story, love. I came back to Jamaica, and was promptly caught up in a mess. Then you came along, unmarried and desperately in need of my services, and what could I do?

Liz: You could have kissed me on the Pearl, that time, instead of giving in to the good man inside.

Jack: I thought I was doing the right thing...

Elizabeth leans in, poised to kiss him, and Jack gazes into her eyes. He leans closer, and just as their lips are about to meet, she vanishes into the air. It was merely a hallucination.

Jack sprawls onto the sand, pounding it with his fist.

Jack: Damn that wench. Always disappearing just when we're getting somewhere.


CUT back to Norrington's Ship. (The Intrepid, ?)

The moment is still tense--- Anne has Norrington on his knees, with the sash around his neck. Elizabeth and Will are frozen.)

Elizabeth: It's impossible to kill Beckett now. He has a host of ships at his call. We have one ship and no plan. If you attack him now, we'll all be killed, and you'll be no closer to your revenge.

Will: Come with us! We'll take this ship and escape for now. We've got a friend who can help. (glances at Elizabeth, she catches on).

Elizabeth: A great pirate lord. Several, in fact. They hate Beckett as much as you do. If we convince them to join us, then we'll have a chance to defeat Beckett.

Anne has loosened her grip on the sash. She considers their words.

Anne: You aren't just making this up to save your friend?

Elizabeth: We know what it's like to be hunted and alone. We have our own vengeance to take against Beckett.

Will: Just wait for the opportune moment!

Anne considers another moment, then nods. She loosens the sash entirely, catching James as he slumps forward, breathing hard. She smiles wryly.

Anne: Sorry there, sir. I didn't mean any harm to you. A girl learns to look after herself in whatever way she can.

James: (with sarcasm) Apology accepted. It seems it's not difficult for women to use me for their own purposes.

Elizabeth blushes and Will smirks.

Anne: We'd best get away from here, then. Something tells me Beckett and his men won't wait around much longer for your decision.

James: Ah, Elizabeth. I was about to tell you--- a clever sailor payed a fortune to a certain voodoo mistress for something that should make this ship the fastest in the Caribbean.

Elizabeth: (smiling) Then we have a chance to outrun Beckett and find Sao Feng...

Good job. You always make things interesting.

Well, I'll try to post soon, but I can't help but wonder at how easily an exhausted woman could manage to take out a six-foot, two-inch tall warrior so easily while holding others at bay when they could have easily tackled her.

Picky picky picky. She's angry and fit and desperate. She summons strength. This would look very realistic on film....about as realistic as say, undead pirates and squid-people.


CUT TO...the Locker

(Jack is messing with his charts out of boredom and insanity. He hears a sound outside. Intrigued and still hopeful, he runs out only to see two small crabs scurrying along the sand.)

(He peers into the horizon and sees a small pack traveling in a line, each about two feet long and slightly cuter than "real" crabs.)

Jack (to the maidenhead of the Pearl): Stay here, darling. (follows them)


CUT TO....the Intrepid

Norrington: We'll have to gain speed gradually to throw Beckett off. We have to looks as inconspicuous as possible.

Anne: How do you know this pirate lord will help us? Pirates aren't known for their trust.

Elizabeth: We have our ways. (pauses. Runs down into the brig)

CUT TO...the brig

(Elizabeth enters)

Barbossa: 'Bout time, young Mr. Turner must have some skill in the satisfyin' department, methinks.

(Elizabeth ignores him and frees them)

Gibbs: We seem to be speeding up.

Elizabeth: Only a little. We have to lose Beckett.

Pintel: Why we just not attack? With us free, I figure we outnumber 'em by now.

Ragetti: How could you know that?

Pintel: I don't. I just wanted to fight.

Elizabeth: Will and Norrington are in charge of this right now. If you really want to fight, I'm sure they'd be happy to drop you off.

(Pintel and Ragetti look at each other and then shake their heads at her)

Gibbs: Get me on deck. We'll go with the wind and then we can go faster without him worryin'.

Barbossa: And just what's to happen when we land and Beckett lands not far behind?

Elizabeth: We'll figure it out when that happens AND we'll be watching you extra closely. (turns to go)

Barbossa: At this rate I'll never get back me ship.

Elizabeth and Gibbs: It's not your ship!

Who's Anne?

Kate invented a stowaway. I believe they pick her up on pg. 2 of this thread. I don't know what her backstory is, though, just what she says to them.

"it's not your ship!" hahaha. oh gee.

So Jack isn't rescued yet. He is still at DJ's locker hallucinating. I think I'll leave Anne to kate because that character just appeared out of nowhere and confused me.

CUT TO--

(At the Empress, we see Sao Feng and his crew following Barbossa's crew..)

Cho: Where'd they be headed?

(Sao looks into his telescope)

Sao: (chuckles) Looks to me they are finally heading to the rescue.

Cho: Aye. Sparrow.

Sao: They possess my charts and we still have a deal to finish. (smirks)

-CUT TO-

(Jack is still chasing after the two crabs. Mischievous little guys, somehow they seem to fascinate Sparrow. Or was this all in his mind?)

Jack: Fascinating creatures. I don't know if to play (Stomach grumbles) or to eat them...

(Jack tries to sneak up behind them. But they manage to escape two seconds away from Jack's grasp.)

Jack: You want to play, eh? If that'd be the case (pulls out his gun), you best know how to run.

(Suddenly, the crabs turned around facing Jack. Morphing into giants. Turning the tables of the food chain.)

Jack: Did I ever mentioned how much crabs fascinate me?

(One crab gets closer)

Jack: Ye don't want to chew me. I'm so hard to chew. (Chews his arm)

Jack: See? Hmm, so that's how I taste like.

(Both crabs steps another step closer.)

Jack: Methinks, I should start running and screaming. At least no one is looking. AAHHH!!!! (starts running)





I hope this works. I wanted to add Sao Feng .

I'm sorry if adding Anne in confused people. That wasn't my intention. I don't generally write things with a huge plan attached--- i just throw out ideas and see where people take them.

Essentially, we've written AWE like 4 times now... so I just want to make sure we're not re-writing the same thing over and over. There's plenty to explore and invent and see where we can take things. I felt a bit stale writing Will and Elizabeth, so I figured I would throw in a new character. You guys can do whatever you want to her... i think my thought was, it's always hard writing fanfics when there is only one girl and you have to disappoint the rest of the men. lol.

huh? Kate did you get offended by my last post?

No! of course not. ahhhh. i just wanted to make sure you weren't upset about my adding a character. lol. i'm sorry. just trying to clarify.

hunny, I'm not saying to get rid of Anne, if that's what you're thinking. I could be wrong, anyways.

I'm the only idiot who's confused here.

EDIT

I also added a new character. So it's no big deal. I'm the only idiot who is confused so don't worry about it

Well, ahem. I hoped my story helps somehow . I wanted to add Sao if that's ok. Just because he kicks ass and I love Chow Yun Fat

wow you guys are great!!!! i like this story alot!!!

Originally posted by Minie Mina


Jack: Did I ever mentioned how much crabs fascinate me?

(One crab gets closer)

Jack: Ye don't want to chew me. I'm so hard to chew. (Chews his arm)

Jack: See? Hmm, so that's how I taste like.

(Both crabs steps another step closer.)

Jack: Methinks, I should start running and screaming. At least no one is looking. AAHHH!!!! (starts running)




lmao! i love that!!!

(A little bit of time has passed and the gang is coming closer to Singapore. Barbossa is at the helm)

(Will and Gibbs are next to him. Liz is in the crow's nest)

Will: Is that Singapore straight ahead?

Barbossa: That it is, lad. Sao Feng should be easy to find once we land.

Gibbs: Easy to deal with be another question.

(Camera floats up to Liz looking out to sea. An unreadable expression is on her face. She sees something in the distance. She peers out)

Liz: There's a ship behind us!

Will: What? (crew runs to look)

Barbossa: Who they be?

Will: Flying a black flag.

Gibbs: Saints preserve us. That's Sao Feng there.

Will: Prepare for, well, negotiation?

Gibbs: Aye. Prepare for negotiation.

(Norrington sees Barbossa at the helm)

Norrington: What is HE doing there?

Will: Would you rather have him there or about to address that ship over there?

Gibbs: Besides, Commodore, he's got some eyes on him.

(Norrington looks back, sees Elizabeth at the edge of the deck preparing to yell across to the ship)

Norrington: Wonderful.

Elizabeth: You there! State your name and purpose for riding so close.

Sao Feng: The Empress, and I am Sao Feng. I believe you are looking for me?

(Our heroes edge closer)

Elizabeth: We are. I trust since we've piqued your curiosity, you'll let us dock and meet you in Singapore then?

(both ships are close to pulling in to a harbor)

Sao Feng: What do the men of the ship say?

Will: We have something you want and you have something we want. I think she's correct in assuming you want to know more.

Sao Feng: (laughs) What do I want with a team of misfits on an English military ship? (has an idea but wants to hear their interpretation to get a better idea of them)

Elizabeth: We want a way into Davy Jones' Locker.

(Norrington's crew that hasn't heard that before gasp and act shocked)

(The ships dock. Everyone starts to gather their belongings and Norrington goes below decks to get Anne. Sao Feng calls to them as he steps off his ship)

Sao Feng: Welcome to Singapore. Now. Let's hear what it is you think I want.



CUT TO...the Locker


(Jack is running from the small pack of giant crabs. He does his little lizard run up a sand dune and loses them. He catches his breath quickly and looks utterly confused.)

Tia: I don't tink dey'd be wantin' a low life like wicked Jack.

(Jack looks at her with an almost murderous glance, but collects himself)

Jack: If you're here for another monkey, I can direct you to two delightful creatures in that direction...

Tia: When you goin' to trow away de act?

Jack: Scuse me?

Tia: Can't even tell old Tia Dalma you terrified.

Jack: I'm not terrified.

Tia: Can't even tell old Tia Dalma you lonely.

Jack: I'll tell you what. Spring me out of here, find me a crew and a nice bottle of rum and I'll moan and groan to ye about how lonely I am for as long as you want.

Tia: What about William?

Jack: I'll take anyone who can sail, frankly. (knows she means something else)

Tia: You know a little of his touch of destiny and yet you are here.

Jack: Not by choice, mind you!

Tia: If you aren't der to protect William Turner, fate will find him.

Jack: What do you mean....?

(but Tia vanishes. She was another hallucination)

Jack (lies down in the dune and rubs his eyes): All right, went from slightly mad to starkraving mad now! I think I can go!

(snaps up. The giant crabs are underneath the Pearl and carrying it around as if they are ants)

Jack: Stop! (chases them again)

Oh, man...I have writers block...

well, drink some Dr. Pepper and unblock it! i want more!! lol

Moving along quite nicely--- I really like this so far! Well done!

I am working on the next part, so if you could all bear with me while I pick it apart, I think I can get the story moving again. Just give me a little time, because I have another fun James/Anne scene, and a bit of Will, Elizabeth and Barbossa in mind, as well as Sao meeting up with all of them. It just needs a bit of fine-tuning, and unfortunately I have to go before I can type it up. It'll be up soon though, I promise.


Cheers!

I'm not sure to wait on Surreal, or willo...I have to admit I'm a bit lost. And the worse part is that I have writers block.

We're waiting on Surreal. What are you confused about?

Okay, so far, we have written 25 pages according to Microsoft Word. I think it's time for a summary.

Will, Elizabeth, Gibbs, Marty, Pintel, and Ragetti and Mr. Cotton have gone off to search for Sao Feng, the only living man who knows how to get into Davy Jones' Locker to rescue Jack. Meanwhile, we're all having a hell lot of fun torturing poor old Jack. On their way, they are picked up by Norrington's ship. He has decided to help them, however, and puts on an act of capturing them for Beckett to see. They have also picked up Anne, a stowaway who wants revenge on Beckett for her husband's death. Finally, they realize Sao Feng has actually been following them. They tell him they have something he wants (we haven't said what that is yet) and he has something they want- the way to get into the Locker. They dock in Singapore and are ready to negotiate. PS: Will and Liz decided to elope and are presently husband and wife.

Things that need explained/resolved/done:

1. Where is Gov. Swann?
2. What's happening on the Flying Dutchman?
3. What does Tia mean by her conversation with Jack? (NOTE: THIS IS NOT THE REAL TIA. SHE IS A HALLUCINATION MADE FOR JACK TO THINK ABOUT HIS FEARS. FOR SOME REASON HE IS FEARING WILL IS GOING TO REALLY REALLY BE IN A PICKLE)
4. What is it the crew has that Sao Feng would want?
5. How can Anne contribute to the story besides providing some sexual tension for everyone's favorite versatile Commodore?

My head is clear now. I'm waiting for Surreal. I want to post after her.

if no one else minds, can I actually be the one who sends someone into the Locker? I have a really neat idea for it.

I don't mind if you sent me so I can be with Jack

Sorry, kidding!

Sure, willo. I don't mind.

Looking forward to reading the next bits! haha. you guys are great.

Ok, I ran out of time again. The post is already five or six pages long, so I should post this soon. Sorry for the wait.

lopl every time i see ur siggy i laugh kate!

(Sao is shocked.)

Sao: Murderous British dog! If you spill his blood...

Norrington: Nothing would stop me, would it? Another wretched pirate apprehended. The world will praise me and all those who helped me catch him.

Sao: It brings me much shame to consider helping you.

Norrington: Then I'm sure a nice hanging will brighten everyone's spirits.

Sao: I concede to your demands. Why on earth do you wish to go into the Locker? Most can only dream of getting out.

Anne: (to Norrington) Why did no one say it was to get to the Locker? You're all mad!

Barbossa: Rescue mission. Top secret rescue mission.

Sao: Well, I don't believe I can be of any help to the victim you are trying to save...unless, you know if he or she has a Piece of 8?

Elizabeth: The coins of the nine pirate lords? Is that what you demand from us?

Sao: It is what you need.

Will: Is Jack a pirate lord?

Sao: Jack? Jack Sparrow? (laughs) One would not have thought you would be wasting your time on him. Being trapped in the Locker serves him right.

(Will points a gun at him, Elizabeth has drawn her sword. The crew looks ready to fight.)

Sao: Needless to say, you are passionate about your mission. You must simply rub two Pieces of 8 together to take you in and out of the Locker. Pirate lords hardly ever see one another, so two coins touching is a rare occurrence.

Elizabeth: Barbossa, you have one. I've seen it.

Barbossa: Bloody impossible wench. (smacks coin into her hand) I'll cut your throat if you don't bring it back once you're done.

Sao: Now, now. I believe I should ensure myself...and my brother's welfare (glares at Norrington) Let's see. You (stops at Will) You will go alone. Have your woman give you the coin.

Elizabeth: He can't go alone.

Anne: You're sending him to his death!

Sao: If you want my coin, he will go alone AND the rest of you will stay with me.

Norrington: What?

Sao: Fair bargain is it not? We have use for strong men of pirate ships (eyes Elizabeth and Anne) and for beautiful women who know their way around the sea. As for the Commodore, I think we can find a pirate or two willing to take on their revenge. They will all serve me until you come back. The Locker is vast, boy. It may take you a long while.

Ragetti: We're not as strong as all that.

Marty: Do you accept parley?

Mr Cotton's parrot: White flag of surrender! White flag of surrender!

Will: Enough! I'll go. (Elizabeth gives him the coin. She shakes her head at him)

Anne: The hell you will. I've wasted enough time already. You're going to just let everyone be trapped here until the off-chance you come back?

Elizabeth: Negotiate. Let me go with you. You can't go in there alone.

Gibbs: There be no sense fighting it, lass.

Will: I won't be alone. Jack's in there. (takes Sao's coin. Rubs the Heads sides together. In a flash he is gone)

CUT TO...The Locker
(Will lands face first onto the vast, sandy wasteland. He stands, brushes himself off, and looks around.)

Will: Jack! Jack Sparrow!

(marches along)

Will: Jack! (to himself) Anybody?

(sees two little crabs scurry by. He looks out in the distance and sees larger ones scuttle past. He keeps one hand on his sword. He walks along and sees the silhouette of the Pearl. He grins and runs toward it.)

Will: Jack!

(Jack is sitting underneath the maidenhead, his back against the ship. He does not look surprised to see Will.)

Will: Jack, it's Will. You remember me, don't you?

(Jack stands and gives him an inspecting look. He pokes him hard in the shoulder)

Will: It's me. (sees two crabs close by) This wasn't what I expected.

Jack: Have you met Clive and Roland? (nods to the crabs) Hard workers they are.

Will: Are you all right? I thought you would be glad to see me.

Jack: Everyone else came to see me. You might as well be the next. (pokes him again)

Will: What are you talking about?

Jack: You're the most boring one yet. (sits back down)

Will: Stand up! We have to get out of here.

Jack: What's this we business? I'm not interested in going up in a puff of smoke like you will.

(Will gets it)

Will: How can I prove to you it's really me?

(Jack stands again and pokes him)

Will: Why do you keep doing that?

Jack: I like it. If you can prove you're flesh and blood...

Will: I know! Ask me a question. One you don't know the answer to. If I know it, you'll know you couldn't have thought it up. (makes a face on how Jack-like his logic was there) Jack, I've been looking for you for a long time. Please humor me and do this.

Jack (thinks for a second, look of madness is fading): Where's Elizabeth?

Will (trying not to make much of that): She's in Singapore with your crew, held hostage by Sao Feng until I bring you back. Couldn't have imagined that, could you?

(A look of realization comes over Jack. Will is real. He edges very close to him)

Jack (intensely): Get me out of here.

Will: Take out your Piece of 8.

Jack: Whatever for? (almost back to his old self)

Will: Well, according to Sao Feng, two need to be joined together to get in and out of the Locker.

Jack: Won't do, mate. The Pearl.

Will: We can come back and we'll find a way to get it later.

Jack: Not me. I'm not coming back here.

Will: (losing his temper) Fine! I'll come back here and retrieve your bloody ship...(stops. Sees the crabs trying to pick up the Pearl.)

Jack: That Roland. He's a weakling. Eunuch crab.

Will: Never mind. You want to get out of here. Pull out your coin. (Jack takes it out) The heads go together. That's how I got here.

Jack: Don't tell me Sao Feng was stupid enough to give you his Piece of 8.

Will: No. (pause) Barbossa was.

(Jack is about to speak but the coins do nothing)

Jack: How useful. Now. Why don't you go back and send someone who knows what they're doing and knows for a fact who is alive and who is dead?

Will: They're supposed to work! (sees crabs get out from under the
Pearl) Maybe we have to say something.

Jack: (waves arms) Abracadabra! (nothing) Bugger.

Will: Back to Singapore! Alakazam! (nothing. Looks over to the Pearl) The ship. Get on the ship.

(they hurry on board and put their coins together)

CUT TO....Singapore harbor

(Will and Jack plop to the deck of the Pearl, safely docked on the pier)

(Jack leans over the railing. He looks at the ocean almost as if it were a woman. He runs off the ship and steps onto the pier. He lets his hands briefly glide in the water. Will hurries to catch up to him. He collects himself)

Jack: Stop wasting time. What all were you saying before?

Will: You have a crew waiting for you. (Jack looks a little touched) Sao Feng has them until I get you back.

Cut to.... Sao's house/palace thingy.

Sao and his newly recovered brother are presiding at the head of a very loud, raucous dinner party. Elizabeth, Anne, and the others are serving the food and wine, which is proving to be a real challenge considering the drunken state of the guests. Elizabeth looks extremely anxious. Norrington looks exhausted. Anne looks disgusted. Gibbs is the only one who seems to be having a good time, since he's been invited to the table and is sharing an exciting story with a crowd of beautiful Asian women.

Gibbs: So there we were, on the very edge of the world, with nothing to our name but a quill pen and me old mother's prayer book...

The Asian girls gasp with excitement.
Elizabeth makes her way over to Sao, filling his glass. Sao's brother grabs her waist and pulls her down onto his lap, with clear intentions. Elizabeth's temper flairs up (surprise surprise) and next thing you know, she's got him on the floor, straddling him with a napkin around his throat, ready to snap his neck and kill him.
The dinner party has gone quiet, as everyone stares at the scene in shock.

Anne: (muttering) you stole my trick.

Norrington: This could get bad...

Sao: Be careful there, missy. I wouldn't want you to do anything your friends would regret.

Elizabeth: (breathing harshly) Listen to me, Sao Feng. Pirate Lord or not, you have a responsibility to the protection of us until our bargain is complete. I am a governor's daughter and one of the most feared pirates in the Caribbean. I refuse to be treated this way.

Sao: (standing) My brother meant you no harm. In my land, it is customary for a woman to show her host appreciation by making friendly with the guests.

Elizabeth drops the napkin and stands up, facing off with Sao while his brother gasps on the floor. We get a brief shot of Elizabeth's hand sliding into her tunic, and pulling out a dagger.

Elizabeth: In my land, it is customary for a woman's honor to be respected.

Sao lifts a hand to brush Elizabeth's face and hair, obviously taken with her.

Sao: Your honor is safe in my hands, milady.

Elizabeth: I've known your type before, and I'd sooner trust a wild dog.

Sao: Harsh words! But then, you have been in the company of Jack Sparrow... no doubt your honor was handled carelessly by him at one time or another, the blaggard.

He's hit a nerve- Elizabeth's temper snaps and she attacks Sao with her dagger. Sao is quick to respond, whipping out his own sword while Norrington jumps into the mix, sliding his sword into Elizabeth's hand so they're evenly matched.
Barbossa rolls his eyes and looks annoyed, but turns around the room, spotting the guards. Casually, he jams a thumb into both of their windpipes, knocking them out while he grabs their swords and pushes through the guests to join the fight. It's just Anne, Barbossa, Elizabeth, Norrington and Gibbs against 50-odd trained fighters. It's not looking good.

Barbossa: Couldn't you have just grit your teeth and held your temper, wench? Now look what you've done.

Elizabeth: (as she battles Sao) Jack Sparrow never mishandled my honor! He was a good man, not to mention a far better pirate than you!

Jack: Oy! Hear that Barbossa? I'm a better pirate than you!

The group turns in shock, the where Will and Jack, swords out, have entered the room. The dive into the fray.

Will: (shouting across the fight) Elizabeth! You're safe!

Elizabeth: (as she dodges a blow from Sao) For now! (takes out a pair of fighters by the trip and stab method) Jack! You're alive!

Jack: (as he gives one of the fighters an interesting haircut before dispatching him) I am indeed, thanks to dear William. Did you miss me, darling?

Barbossa: (while shoving Elizabeth out of the way so he can fight Sao himself) She missed you so much, she got married while you were away.

Jack: (a brief look of pain/shock flitting by his face, quickly replaced by his dangerous grin) Well, that's to be expected then. She was SO READY to get married, and all. Lizzie, was it as good as you'd hoped?

Will: (probably the one doing the most actual fighting) Ten times better than she'd hoped, Sparrow, and she was everything I'd ever dreamed of and more. But then, you won't ever know what that's like.

Jack: I've had a taste or two.

Elizabeth: (shoving Barbossa back out of the way and re-attacking Sao) Can we argue about this later?

The group had managed to cut their way to the door, which Barbossa wastes no time in breaking down.

Sao: You could have just used the handle!

Barbossa: Sorry, mate. Old habits and all.

Sao and his men redouble their efforts, but they are still too drunk to match the heroes, who finally turn and run out the door. Will stays to hold them off as the rest run towards the docks.

Just as they round the corner, however, they are suddenly met by Cutler Beckett himself, standing in front of several hundred EITC men...

Dun dun dun!

"Jack: (a brief look of pain/shock flitting by his face, quickly replaced by his dangerous grin) Well, that's to be expected then. She was SO READY to get married, and all. Lizzie, was it as good as you'd hoped?"---Kate

Holy Cow, Kate! That was a great reaction line there. Done torturing Jack and moved on to Liz, have we? hee hee

EEK! someone continue you guys are killing me here. I agree willo that reaction line is awesome. Go Kate!

Beckett: Greetings again, Commodore. I see we've taken a little side trip. (sees Jack. The coolness disappears. He tries to play it cool) I had it on very good authority you were dead.

Jack: You forgot very important thing, mate. (pause) I'm Captain Jack Sparrow!

Beckett: Be that as it may, your small band might have done well against a pack of vicious pirates, but had you come to where you were supposed to be taken (look at Norrington. Norrington looks back unphased) you would have seen this.

Voice: Let go! (the crew peers into the group of soldiers. Gov. Swann is being led to the front in chains)

Elizabeth: Father!

Beckett: You were scheduled to hang, Miss Swann, along with Mr. Turner over there.

Elizabeth: Mrs. Turner now.

Beckett: (smiles at her) Fate intervened again then, didn't it?

(Elizabeth says nothing)

Swann: Leave her alone, Beckett! She's done nothing wrong.

Beckett: Nothing wrong?

Swann: Only escaped from a bloodsucking tyrant.

Beckett: Round them up, men. There's a stench in the air in this place.

Jack: That it? (Beckett turns to face him) Round them up? As if you could. Don't you see where we are?

Beckett: What are you talking about?

Jack: The great pirate Sao Feng's house, his home you've managed to invade. You can't be talking about our 'small band' when there are dozens upon dozens of young chaps behind us who would love to get their hands on the East India Trading Company.

Beckett: You wish to make a bargain? (likes where this is going) I have you, two fugitives, a traitor, a nasty widow, and God knows what else. Perhaps you would all like to sign some kind of contract?

Barbossa: (touches his sword) Let me get out me stabbin' pen then. (soldiers move closer. Barbossa reconsiders)

Jack: What the hell are you doing here?

Barbossa: Came to clean up your mess you got in with these two (nods to Will and Elizabeth)

(Jack gives him weird look)

Beckett: What do you have to offer, Jack?

Jack: Well, there is me own self of course, and the brave, daring soul over there (points to Will)

Will: Jack.

Beckett: (laughs) You want me to only take the two of you.

Jack: Why take the rest? They're surrounded by pirates. If I were you, I'd just shoot the old man now.

Barbossa: He's come back madder 'en ever!

Beckett: Something tells me you'll tell me exactly what to do with all of them. What of the governor? How does he fit into your plan?

Will: Leave him here. Pirates all around. You can't expect some of us to last long.

Beckett: Very well. Release Governor Swann. (Elizabeth runs to him and he catches her in his arms) Put the boy in shackles. With me, Sparrow.

Jack: Come on, Beckett. He's a married man now. He's already shackled.

Beckett (not going for it): You'll return with us, decide what's to be done with your crew and until then Will Turner is my prisoner as he always has been.

Elizabeth: You won't leave us here! (breaks from her father to reach Will but he's being dragged away)

Beckett: Move out, men. We have a long trip back.

Elizabeth: Jack!

(Jack doesn't answer her.)

Jack: Come on, Beckett. He's a married man now. He's already shackled.


Brilliant abso brilliant. god i'm still in stitches.

Hahaha that was brilliant!!!! Oh gracious. this is fun. It's gotten really intense. I always like it when things are intense.

I hope someone is working on a bit! I cant wait to read more. Its so tragic, starting tomorrow I will be traveling the next 2 weeks so I'm at the mercy of internet cafes to keep me up to date with this story. lol.

I'm working on it.


Any requests on what should happen? I figure a little Norrington torment, some snarky Anne, a daring escape plan and someone dies. Then I'll have Will find out some startling news about Davy, and ponder his destiny.


Sound good?

I'm about half-done with my post. I'm pretty tired though, so I will finish the rest up tomorrow and post it altogether. It's fairly long again, so please be patient. I think you'll like what I'm doing.

well hurry!! i need more of my jackiepoo! theres not enough!

oo! that was good! yay! i cant wait 4 the next part!

I would like to tell the forum what is happening between Jack and Beckett right now.

CUT TO...Beckett's cabin/office on The Intrepid.

(Much like the scene between Jack and Barbossa in COTBP, Jack is seated, without bonds, across from Beckett. He stands up and starts spinning a globe. He taps it with his fingers.)

Beckett: I would assume you have something else to offer me, or else you would be joined with Mr. Turner in the brig. Do tell me you have something else.

Jack: Oh, I do. I don't suppose you've heard of Tia Dalma?

Beckett: The name doesn't sound familiar.

Jack: I thought it might not. When one decides to ship people, it's better to not learn their names.

Beckett: You think you can entice me with the mentioning of a slave you lost? I'm disappointed in you, Jack. I'll have Mr. Mercer help you take your leave now.

Jack: I suppose you don't want to know her connection to Davy Jones. (sees the heart on his desk) Don't you want to know the way to a man's heart?

(Beckett leans forward in his chair. He remembers who he's talking to, though)

Beckett: Please continue.

Jack: What you say if I told you that this meaningless, sub-human, degenerate slave caught the eye of the most powerful, skilled sailor in all of Amsterdam? And she broke that dear heart of his you have there.

Beckett: I'm not a fan of romantic love, Sparrow...

Jack: (cryptically) I always suspected so.

Beckett: Get to the point!

Jack: Very well. You have the heart. What do you plan to do with it?

Beckett: Control the ocean.

Jack: All right. That sounds like a plan. Forget the fact I'm well acquainted with Tia Dalma. Forget the fact she can see the future. Forget the fact that Davy Jones loves her still as much as he did the day he realized he did.

Beckett: It sounds as if you have a plan.

Jack: Take us back to the Caribbean. We'll send Mr. Turner to bring Tia Dalma to us, you, actually, and you can summon Davy Jones and he'll do whatever you say. After all, what good is having that heart when in truth someone else has had it all along?

Beckett: And in exchange. (sees Jack pause) You can't expect me to not think you want something in exchange. That brand on your arm is there for a reason.

Jack: Excellent point bringing that up. It's part of what I want. Send me back to me crew. You'll give Mr. Turner my regards and when he's delivered Tia Dalma to you, he'll come report back to me. Savvy?

Beckett: You and William Turner and your crew all get off Scot-free?

Jack: British-free.

Beckett: Let me see, you want me to spare James Norrington, military deserter? Joshamee Gibbs and Hector Barbossa, veteran pirates, and Elizabeth Swann, newest, deadliest edition to all this...madness?

Jack: Yep. I'm glad you agree that it's a good plan. (extends his hand, exposing the P on it) Don't mind the brand.

(Beckett shakes it)

Beckett: William Turner won't want to go through with this.

Jack: I don't think he has a choice.



Surreal, this shouldn't change any plans you made for Will since he obviously won't want to play a part in this little plan of Jack's. Remember if it's a plan, it doesn't actually have to be implemented. Good post, btw.

oo! more!

Kate, Surreal, Mina? Anyone?

I shall be posting shortly. Hopefully. We're having company over tonight, but I plan on getting my Will and James posts up at some point today.

yay!!

Okay, summary time.

Everyone is up to speed on the fact that the gang's in Singapore? Norrington has a prisoner on his ship. It is Sao's brother, whom they plan on using for a bargaining chip. Sao is pissed, but relents and decides to help them...under his terms. He decides who will go into the Locker and picks Will. The rest will stay with him until Will returns. The way to get into the Locker is simple if you have two Pieces of 8. You have the two head-sides face each other and touch them together. Will takes Sao's and Barbossa's and goes into the Locker. He uses Sao's and Jack's to get out.

Meanwhile, Elizabeth and company are servants to Sao and they don't like it. When Sao insults Jack, they fight him and his horde of pirates. Of course, Will and Jack walk into the middle of the chaos and during all this, Jack learns what all he missed, specifically Barbossa being alive and Will and Elizabeth's marriage. The crew escapes but is cornered by Beckett. Jack negotiates to take himself and Will as prisoners. He takes off with some ships and the crew decides to split up. Norrington, Elizabeth, and Anne will go after Beckett's ship. Gibbs, Barbossa, and Marty are a group and Cotton, Pintel, and Ragetti are a group (guess which one will get lost first). Norrington, however, decides to stay behind as a prisoner to appease the Singapore pirates to give the others a chance. Elizabeth and Anne plan to rescue him.

On the Endeavor, Jack talks Beckett into changing his plan. Beckett thinks Tia will be a powerful bargaining chip to lure Davy Jones. He may have the heart, but is led to believe it is no good if he doesn't have the person who really holds Davy's heart (Tia). However, Jack plans on just getting Will off the ship since Beckett will kill him. Jack wants to go back to the crew and then to pick Will up. However, Will is in the brig, about to learn a vital secret that will spell success or doom for our heroes.

i think i got it all. lol this all does get a bit confuzing huh? lol

CUT TO...The Endeavor

(Will is dragged up to the deck by the two guards. Beckett meets him. It is remniscent of his earlier dealing with Beckett. Jack is nowhere to be found.)

Beckett: I have a proposition for you, Turner.

Will: The last time I listened to you was more than I bargained for.

Beckett: Although you failed to bring me such a small trinket, I still have faith in you, as I'm sure your wife does. (Will grits his teeth)

Will: Where's Jack?

Beckett: (trying to be sneaky) Fate intervened, it seemed. Your main concern is what's to be done with you. You are acquainted with Tia Dalma?

Will: (surprised to hear the name) What do you want with her?

Beckett: She sent you to find Jack did she not?

Will: You never ask a question you already know the answer to.

Beckett: Here is one I don't know the answer to-- what did she tell you about Davy Jones? Be as specific as you can.

Will: I barely have any memory of that meeting. I was aboard the Dutchman after that, almost drowned, was in a horrid kraken attack. I'm afraid I have nothing to tell you.

Beckett: Then you will be taken to Port Royal, hanged as a pirate, and parted from your dearly beloved wife until I find her and do the same thing to her.

Will: What is it you want me to do about Tia Dalma?

Beckett: Just bring her to me. Find her, return with her to Port Royal, and I will grant you full pardon and you will never see me again.

Will: Agreed.

Beckett: Thinking rather hastily, aren't we?

Will: I would rather work for you than never see my wife again.

(The guards escort him to a longboat.)

Beckett: Stop at the nearest port and give them this (hands him a letter with Beckett's seal on it). They will grant you passage to the Caribbean. Oh, and Turner. Your time is running out.

(Will rows away. Fade to black. We cut to the same scene only it is later. Will is rowing back to Singapore.)

CUT TO....The Endeavor

(Jack isn't as comfortable as he was last time. His hands have been tied just to be on the safe side)

Beckett: You're free to go. I'll soon have what I want.

Jack: Not what you really want.

Beckett: I'm through listening to you, Sparrow. The only reason I'm not hanging you is because I want to catch you with your entire crew so you can see every last one of them die before you do.

Jack: That would be a fascinating story to tell your friends. I trust, then, that Mr. Turner took his leave?

Beckett: Bound for a port even as we speak. (unties him, a smirk comes across his face) Amazing what one would agree to do for love, isn't it?

Jack: I think it would be better if we just stayed enemies, mate.

Beckett: Will Turner did not hesitate to cooperate, all out of concern for his new bride. (looks at Jack to read his face)

Jack: I concur. Good talk. (starts to walk out, then stops. He has his "I'm having a thought" face) Out of concern for his wife? What method did you threaten said woman?

Beckett: Simply that I would kill her right after him.

(Jack knows exactly where Will is going. He turns, and mouths, "shit" to himself)

Jack: Well, I'm off. (the ship has docked back in Singapore. The Pearl is tied behind it. Jack coolly walks down the dock, strutting/staggering as usual. He looks behind him. The Endeavor is pulling back out. As soon as it has made a full turn, Jack breaks out into a run.)

Okay, sorry to hog. I'll take a break for a few days after this. You did say to me on IM you wanted me to rescue James, right?

CUT TO...Cotton, Pintel and Ragetti

(They are on a dock, thinking about which ship to steal.)

Ragetti: It still don't feel right, leavin' the others.

Pintel: It's what they wanted, ain't it, Cotton. (Mr. Cotton shrugs)

Ragetti: I want to go back!

Pintel: Go back? To Sao Feng? To all those pirates just to save some of the crew? (Ragetti nods). You want to be trapped back there with them exotic bottles of opium, lovely lady-maids, and....treasures?

Ragetti: Now I really want to go back.

Mr. Cotton's parrot: When do we leave? When do we leave?

CUT TO...Barbossa, Marty, and Gibbs

(They are on another port, about to steal a ship)

Gibbs: It don't feel right leavin' Miss Elizabeth and the Commodore and that girl still there. (Barbossa rolls his eyes) Well it don't!

Marty: What about Jack?

Gibbs: Aye, Jack. The whole reason we came back was for him.

Barbossa: If ya want to go back, we'll go back.

CUT TO...Sao's palace. Anne and Elizabeth are edging closer to James.

Elizabeth (whispering): James?

James: (coughs, whispers) Elizabeth? You need to leave right away.

Elizabeth: I'm too busy rescuing people lately to do that. Cover me, Anne. (Elizabeth hops over to James and begins to free him)

Anne: Hurry up, will you? They can't all be passed out drunk, even though they're pirates.

Sao: You there!

(Anne draws a sword)

Anne: Go! Take him and go. (Elizabeth shields James as he struggles to stand up)

Sao: What do you ladies want, back here again?

Anne: I want nothing more than to ram this into your throat. We're taking the Commodore. You've had your fun with him.

Sao: (pulls out his gun) The British have taught me one thing, woman. Gun always trumps sword.

Anne: Touche (she runs back to Elizabeth and James. They roll to the other side of the platform. James gets to his feet.)

Elizabeth: Do you have a gun on you?

James: Yes, of course. I was just biding my time to use it!

Elizabeth: Stop shouting! (Other pirates wake up. More gunfire is heard)

James: I'm not shouting! (pause) You shouldn't be here. (to Anne) You either.

(Anne is crawling over to a discarded gun.)

Anne: I can't hear you, Commodore, I'm too immersed in staying alive. (Fires into the crowd. She uses the platform for cover) Get out of here! I'll be right behind you.

(Elizabeth helps James to his feet.)

Elizabeth: Come on.

(Sao runs towards them. )

CUT TO...

(Jack is approaching the palace. He hears gunshots. He prepares his own gun. He runs in, only to find the palace empty. The party is out in the courtyard. Jack continues to run)

CUT TO... Sao, Norrington, and Elizabeth

James: Anne! (she turns and fires, but her gun is out)

(Sao raises his gun. In a split second, Elizabeth and James pull out their swords and slam them onto Sao's hand. In pain, he drops the gun. It fires into the crowd. He draws a sword and is about to strike.)

Jack: This isn't much of a party. (The three strike Sao at the same time, but he's good. He dodges them.)

Will: Elizabeth! (sword is ready. He starts tearing into the other pirates)

(Anne runs over to him. She picks up a sword on the way)

Anne: I'm not as good with these, so I'm staying next to you. (Will leads her to the others. As soon as he gets to Jack, he strikes him)

Jack: What the hell?

Will: Got off free and easy once again! You left me to deal with Beckett of all people! (Jack meets Will's blade with his)

Jack: I think you're forgetting who's side you're on.

(Sao takes advantage of this and knocks Elizabeth down. He almost stabs her, but James cuts him first. He plunges his sword into Sao's back. Sao coughs. Some blood squirts out. He falls. James falls, but Anne gets to him. Elizabeth rushes to Will and Jack, her sword drawn.)

Elizabeth: Stop! (meets their blades)

Will: Stay out of it. You weren't there! (she blocks him)

Jack: Thank you, love. (She turns and takes a swing at him)

Elizabeth: This is all your fault! You left us here with him! (Jack blocks her and looks at her strangely. He shrugs and goes on the offense.)

Jack: I think if you think about it hard enough, you'll realize this is all really YOUR fault. (Will blocks him) And I've had just about enough of you.

(The three of them continue to parry. Anne begins to look at James' wounds.)

Anne: They've branded you!

James: (dryly) Yes, I know. (looks up and sees Jack, Elizabeth, and Will fighting. He rolls his eyes)

Anne: Do you think I should leave you to stop them?

James: You were done up as a servant so you missed dinner. Now here is the show. (places his hand on top of hers) Thank you.

Anne: (taken aback) No. Thank you. I don't come across heroism that often.

Elizabeth: You son of a b*tch! (slides closer to Jack to get him. He blocks and pushes her down.)

Will: I told you to stay out of it. (Elizabeth clangs at his sword)

Elizabeth: Somebody has to stop the two of you from making complete idiots of yourselves! (it's a complete 3-way fight between them)

James: (laughs) Idiots.

Anne: (still trying to bandage him) Hold still!

(The rest of the crew runs up and looks at the sight in confusion. Barbossa kneels down beside Sao. He holds up his gun and fires into the air. Everyone stops.)

Barbossa: Looks like I missed out on somethin.' Can't ye see the man's dyin' over here?

Sao: (dying) You (he points)

Elizabeth: Me?

Sao: (beckons her over. He puts something into her hand. He struggles to twist to see James. He looks at both of them) Both of you...use... (he sputters out more blood. His eyes roll back. He's dead)

(Elizabeth opens her hand. He has given her his Piece of 8.)

Shit, guys. Liz's dad got returned to her. Okay, so we don't have to go back and edit, Beckett returned him, took Will and Jack away, and turned and shot Swann. Liz is devastated but hasn't had time to grieve. Okay? Unless someone really really was dying to write him in?

Hmm? I'll go back and read.

Originally posted by willofthewisp
(Jack knows exactly where Will is going. He turns, and mouths, "shit" to himself)

i dont know why, but that made me laugh SO hard!

Willo, the pirates never got around to branding James. That was the next part I was going to post, remember? The pirates were in the middle of a party, not sleeping.

When did Swann get shot? I had him go off with Barbossa, Gibbs and Marty. So where did he get shot and killed? And I think that Elizabeth's reaction to his death needs to be written out. It's too big to just gloss over.


At least, that's my opinion. Since I have the branding scene and such written out, maybe we can insert it later, right? Since I spent so long on the darn thing, I'd hate for it to go to waste.

Ok, brief update for the summary:


Willo and I talked about it, and Governor Swann is NOT dead!!!


Since I had the dear Governor go off with Barbossa and company, I will work him into the next scene.


Now that we have totally confused our readers....


My next post should be up later on this evening.

I was going to post but I'm completely lost.

postpostpostpost!!!!

Dude, mina, that's my fault. Gov. Swann is alive, but I missed a lot of detail on him, but he's there and all is well...as well as it can be right now. You can PM me your email if you want and I'll send the edited script to you. It makes so much more sense when you can read it straight through.

lo just someone POST!

Hey Mina, if it's ok with you, I was going to post next, but I have a throbbing headache so I'll have to wait until morning. I'll get everyone back onto the ships and on their way, and then we can have tons of fun character interaction.


I hope that's ok with you, and I'll even make up a new summary.

i cant wait!!!

hello everyone!!! WOW this story is going GREAT!
fav line so far probably "scot free" no, english free!" hahahaha so funny.
i'm sorry i havent been on at all--- in the middle of traveling. hopefully i'll get back in time to contribute some!!! you guys are doing amazing. im loving the story. please take your time. i want to get in on some jack/liz action when poor will goes. lol. XOXOXO!

Originally posted by Surreal_44
Hey Mina, if it's ok with you, I was going to post next, but I have a throbbing headache so I'll have to wait until morning. I'll get everyone back onto the ships and on their way, and then we can have tons of fun character interaction.


I hope that's ok with you, and I'll even make up a new summary.

You go ahead. It's quiet alright. It would be a great deal of help. I'm a bit lost.

Originally posted by katelovespirate
hello everyone!!! WOW this story is going GREAT!
fav line so far probably "scot free" no, english free!" hahahaha so funny.
i'm sorry i havent been on at all--- in the middle of traveling. hopefully i'll get back in time to contribute some!!! you guys are doing amazing. im loving the story. please take your time. i want to get in on some jack/liz action when poor will goes. lol. XOXOXO! cant wait till you add some! your a genius too!

o! that was good! im egregiously awaiting the next part!!

psst, IBD: egregious is only used to describe something bad.


Your work in here has been brilliant, ladies, I've been lurking all along, it's really good.

*mumbles* fine... lol
its egregious that we ave to wait for the next part...i wish it was here now!!

Same scene

(Jack starts eyeing the other ships. He begins to walk towards one of them.)

Will: Where are you going?

Jack: I'm taking Mr. Gibbs and am captaining this one. You can take the Intrepid and our new pirate lords can take the Pearl before Barbossa does. (hesitates) Oh, yeah. (throws something to him)

Will: (catches it. It is the compass) Fine time for you to give this to me now! (starts talking like Jack) William, I shall give you my compass in exchange that you battle Davy Jones for me! (ends impression) Do you expect me to give this to Beckett now?

Jack: First of all, I speak more from the diaphram than the throat. Second of all, I don't expect you to take it to Beckett. I expect you to use it if you need.

Will: It doesn't point north. It's useless.

Jack: Yes to the second, but not so much anything else.

Will: What?

Jack: Open it.

(Will opens it. The arrow points towards the Intrepid.)

Jack: It points simply to what you want. You will want to find Beckett since Beckett has the heart of Davy Jones, and your ship there will lead us to him.

Will: I don't want a ship. It doesn't work.

Jack: Think of who's inside the ship, mate. It's all about imagination.

Will: You'll want it back?

Jack: Take as long as you need with it. Mr. Gibbs!

Gibbs: Aye, captain.

Jack: The one looks like a beauty does it not? Not one to equal the Pearl in any respect...

Gibbs: She'll do fine, Jack. If you don't mind me sayin,' though, I feel t'would be better to all stay together. The Commodore's going to have to make a quick recovery as it is and Miss Elizabeth's never captained a ship before.

Will: Maybe we should all stay together.

Jack: So no one wants to try this lovely lady on for size with me? Is that what I'm hearing? (taps the ship) Solid.

Mr. Gibbs: Captain's orders, Will. (pats him on the back and boards with Jack right behind him. Will is left alone on the dock to board his own ship. He pockets the compass.)

CUT TO...the PEARL

(In a few chaotic moments, Will switches captainage of the Intrepid and the Pearl. He gives Elizabeth a brief kiss as she runs down, turning to assist in helping James onto the Pearl. Swann is close behind them. Groves runs up behind them.)

Groves: Commodore Norrington's not going anywhere without me.

James: Bloody hell, always moving. What's wrong with Turner?

Anne: Methinks it wasn't his full idea.

(Elizabeth turns back to look at Will and sees a familiar object attached to his belt.)

Elizabeth: Will?

(But they're too far away. They board the Pearl and Anne immediately takes James below decks. She sets him down and he passes out almost as soon as he hits the floor.)

CUT TO DECK OF THE PEARL

(Elizabeth sees her new crew all lined up, knowing she won't be able to trust at least some of them.)

Elizabeth: We'll be leading the other three ships along with the Intrepid to Lord Cutler Beckett himself. (is glad to hear grunts of disdain at the mention of Beckett) Our mission is to recover the heart of Davy Jones.

Pirate: It's a dangerous object to crave, Captain.

Elizabeth: I thought it best to be honest with all of you. (sees them nod in agreement. Maybe she can trust them) Cast off! (they cheer)

(Elizabeth gazes out at her other ships when she sees several approaching. Getting out a spyglass, she sees they are the remainder of Sao's men, faithful to Cho.)

Elizabeth: You there.

Li: Me?

Elizabeth: Who was first mate of this ship?

Li: I was, captain.

Elizabeth: Go down and wake the Commodore. It doesn't matter how. Go.

(Li rushes below decks)



Fun post, Surreal. Now you or Kate or whoever can give James some fun and create a great battle scene. As for who's captaining each ship, about everyone has switched which probably wasted their time and allowed Cho to catch up to them.
Will: The Intrepid
Elizabeth and James: The Pearl These two ships are in front
Barbossa: His own, Marty, Cotton, Pintel, and Ragetti are with Barbossa
Jack: His own. Gibbs is with him
Someone else can captain the remainder.

Oh, I'm sorry. I forgot the Pearl got dragged off. Okay, just substitute. Jack doesn't want to be on the same ship as Barbossa anyway, so he's still on his regular ship and Liz and James are still on theirs The Empress. How's that? Sorry. I keep forgetting the tiny details of this story. The dialogue still fits if you sub things. The one on fanfiction.net will be edited and make tons more sense.

who's Li? just new character?

brilliant job, as usual. lots of fun. keep going!

Willo started a new thread for the fic, although I'm not sure if we're going to be posting here and moving it to the new thread or not. I forgot to ask her.


But if you want a straight read-through of the fic, with no comments, the new thread is the Surrealkatewillowmina Project.

Consider this thread dead. I want to just move on to the next one. I would delete the whole thread if I could.

y do u want it on a new thread?