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Did the second wall of text really need its own thread? I mean, it isn't terrible (you do seem to be able to use the English language, which is always grounds for hope) but... Unformatted wall of text is eyerape.

Gee thanks, how about telling me what you thought of the story instead and next time, I'll double-space. Ps. Did you even read the prequel to this?

I did read the 'prequel.' I would advise against trying for double-spacing; use paragraphs instead.

Elaboration about the fight itself might be a good idea too, you can add detail to the moment to make the story more engaging.

OK Thanks, I'll try. What was not-engaging about the fight?

It wasn't not-engaging, but it was a bit low on details.



That is a bit less interesting to read than:



Don't tell us that Fett is outmatched, show us that he doesn't stand a chance. Details will always be more interesting than statements.

Fair enough. I'll remember that. I'm doing a story of Boba Fett hunting down Mace Windu and killing him

Originally posted by DarthDaniel1001
Fair enough. I'll remember that. I'm doing a story of Boba Fett hunting down Mace Windu and killing him

You mean Boba finding Mace and getting his head cut off?

Uh no. Mace Windu DIES

Sorry, I jusy wanted it to sound good