Paradigm: Odd Company

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EDIT

I suck.

killamikeyd9898
how u goin just ignore me like im a busted daytona stripper

RE: Blaxican
It's been four days.

I DEMAND MORE.

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Originally posted by RE: Blaxican
It's been four days.

I DEMAND MORE.
Heh, no problem, glad to know someone's been reading it and appreciates it. big grin

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*A note for those interested:

The Kovic language is identical to the real world Ukrainian language, while Orcish is French, Imperial is Latin, Alfurtunga is Icelandic, and Galaronian is of course English.

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http://fc08.deviantart.net/fs70/i/2011/056/9/1/paradigm_map__political_by_omega_vision-d3aepdk.png

RE: Blaxican
AND THEN?

toonbat
I created a user account with the sole purpose of telling you that I love your story. I love Roy. I love Varina. I love Blasedir. I love Tobias. I even love Chylla a tiiiiiny bit, but shhh! She's not supposed to know that.


I really hope our vampire friend will show up again soon.

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Originally posted by toonbat
I created a user account with the sole purpose of telling you that I love your story. I love Roy. I love Varina. I love Blasedir. I love Tobias. I even love Chylla a tiiiiiny bit, but shhh! She's not supposed to know that.


I really hope our vampire friend will show up again soon.
Wow that's quite an honor.

It really helps to know that I'm posting these updates for more than just stroking my ego. stick out tongue

Just wondering, if you didn't have an account her before how did you come across my story?

toonbat
By googling 'orc girl', plus some other stuff that was also included in your story but in a totally less alarming context than it would have been on its own. big grin

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Originally posted by toonbat
By googling 'orc girl', plus some other stuff that was also included in your story but in a totally less alarming context than it would have been on its own. big grin
Heh.

Well glad you stuck around and read it. smile

toonbat
Wow, things have turned so serious all of the sudden! I mean, I'm totally loving this, but still I fear we may never find out whether or not Roy and Varina will ever get it on. :P

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Originally posted by toonbat
Wow, things have turned so serious all of the sudden! I mean, I'm totally loving this, but still I fear we may never find out whether or not Roy and Varina will ever get it on. :P
Heh.

toonbat
I placed some comments here, looked again, and decided is was probably a better idea to mail them to you, as they would probably disrupt the story flow. Even moreso than this here message. Ahem.

toonbat
Was that... was that a Deux Ex Machina right there? But.... it was so good!

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Originally posted by toonbat
Was that... was that a Deux Ex Machina right there? But.... it was so good!
More like a Deus Ex Utero smile

And thank you.

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I won't be posting the final chapter here.

starlock
After i start reading from the beginning and enjoying it, you are gonna hold out on me...lol. Sorry i have not posted before, i have been reading it though.

toonbat
Is the final chapter too racy? Or do we need to resort to our wallets to see it? Or both?

Omega Vision
Originally posted by starlock
After i start reading from the beginning and enjoying it, you are gonna hold out on me...lol. Sorry i have not posted before, i have been reading it though.
Lol thanks. smile

And I'm sorry. sad
Originally posted by toonbat
Is the final chapter too racy? Or do we need to resort to our wallets to see it? Or both?
Nah you don't have to pay me or anything. It's not that it's too racy (it's not really racy at all), its the same reason why Google Books almost never posts entire books.

I intend to actually publish this one.

A friend of mine even suggest I have the story removed from this site if I really want to play it safe.

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I might make the last chapter available by request though to those I can trust.

starlock
Originally posted by Omega Vision
Lol thanks. smile

And I'm sorry. sad

Nah you don't have to pay me or anything. It's not that it's too racy (it's not really racy at all), its the same reason why Google Books almost never posts entire books.

I intend to actually publish this one.

A friend of mine even suggest I have the story removed from this site if I really want to play it safe.

I am one step from sending my book into an editor, all i am doing now is getting all the illustrations together... i have never posted one story here or anywhere.....if and when i do, it will be for the site and it will be unique for the site.... i would never post something i intended to actually publish.....unless i wanted to get noticed, and then i would have to understand it can be stolen ..be careful, i think its great that you post your ideas and have done so, but do it to get exercise and let it flow....but if you care about something, you might want to only post something, if you already have the copyright. i copyrighted the idea behind my world and the characters i created a year before i finished the first book in the series. BTW i have decided to self publish....if you have any questions about the process, i can go through them with you, this will be the first book i have published,a and everything is a first for me, i will be glad to keep you posted.

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Originally posted by starlock
I am one step from sending my book into an editor, all i am doing now is getting all the illustrations together... i have never posted one story here or anywhere.....if and when i do, it will be for the site and it will be unique for the site.... i would never post something i intended to actually publish.....unless i wanted to get noticed, and then i would have to understand it can be stolen ..be careful, i think its great that you post your ideas and have done so, but do it to get exercise and let it flow....but if you care about something, you might want to only post something, if you already have the copyright. i copyrighted the idea behind my world and the characters i created a year before i finished the first book in the series. BTW i have decided to self publish....if you have any questions about the process, i can go through them with you, this will be the first book i have published,a and everything is a first for me, i will be glad to keep you posted.
Yeah. That's all good advice.

I think I'll ask a mod about removing this then.

Once I'm finished (and that should be very soon) I'll definitely look into self-publishing as an avenue.

starlock
Posting here has made me make my own thread, feel free to participate in any way, if you like the idea...keep writing...never stop!

Omega Vision
Originally posted by starlock
Posting here has made me make my own thread, feel free to participate in any way, if you like the idea...keep writing...never stop!
Yeah I saw that.

I've been writing since I was in Elementary...but I only got serious about it in High School, and I finished my first full book (which was kind of crappy in retrospect stick out tongue) in the summer of 2008.

But yeah...you think to protect my ideas I should have the thread removed? I'm honestly unsure. confused

starlock
Originally posted by Omega Vision
Yeah I saw that.

I've been writing since I was in Elementary...but I only got serious about it in High School, and I finished my first full book (which was kind of crappy in retrospect stick out tongue) in the summer of 2008.

But yeah...you think to protect my ideas I should have the thread removed? I'm honestly unsure. confused

I would not worry about it, just keep the rest back.....if you are serious about the idea or worried they wont take it down fast enough, print up what you have here, and send it to yourself in the mail...DO NOT OPEN THE MAIL...it is good proof the idea is and was yours effective that date...it is a way to try and safeguard the idea cheap, or you could submit the idea/summary of the book and copywrite it asap.


The likely hood of someone stealing your idea and forcing you to prove it is yours is minimal in my opinion. Can it happen..Yes!...likely...No!

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Originally posted by starlock
I would not worry about it, just keep the rest back.....if you are serious about the idea or worried they wont take it down fast enough, print up what you have here, and send it to yourself in the mail...DO NOT OPEN THE MAIL...it is good proof the idea is and was yours effective that date...it is a way to try and safeguard the idea cheap, or you could submit the idea/summary of the book and copywrite it asap.


The likely hood of someone stealing your idea and forcing you to prove it is yours is minimal in my opinion. Can it happen..Yes!...likely...No!
Well it's not that I'd lose my work if I deleted this topic. It's just I know there are people who are still reading it who haven't finished yet who'd be disappointed if I had it deleted.

But thanks for your advice...I'll have to think this over.

starlock
Originally posted by Omega Vision
Well it's not that I'd lose my work if I deleted this topic. It's just I know there are people who are still reading it who haven't finished yet who'd be disappointed if I had it deleted.

But thanks for your advice...I'll have to think this over.

No problem, but I did not mean for that as a way to save your work, if you print it up and send it to yourself in the mail( and never open it)....that is to help you prove you own the material, if someone were to try and steal your material while it was left up here, just to clarify lol.

Omega Vision
Originally posted by starlock
No problem, but I did not mean for that as a way to save your work, if you print it up and send it to yourself in the mail( and never open it)....that is to help you prove you own the material, if someone were to try and steal your material while it was left up here, just to clarify lol.
Ahh. I see.

Oh and just out of curiosity, did you have a favorite character in the story? A favorite part?

starlock
Roy and the bond with the fairy are my favs, i really like the chapter when the wizard Polidor is introduced at the doorway.

I like allot of the characters, they all for the most part feel real and alive, something that in my opinion is very hard to do. To be honest, the only gripe i have with the story, is the the fact that almost everything we see or hear, is mostly referred to us by one character. Like a old detective novel..."it was a cold dark night, and i knew it would be an long one"....i felt at times the story needed to be set up with no first hand reference......however, even though it is not my favorite way to read a fantasy novel.....I did enjoy your story, and it kept me interested and excited to see where it was headed.

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Originally posted by starlock
Roy and the bond with the fairy are my favs, i really like the chapter when the wizard Polidor is introduced at the doorway.

I like allot of the characters, they all for the most part feel real and alive, something that in my opinion is very hard to do. To be honest, the only gripe i have with the story, is the the fact that almost everything we see or hear, is mostly referred to us by one character. Like a old detective novel..."it was a cold dark night, and i knew it would be an long one"....i felt at times the story needed to be set up with no first hand reference......however, even though it is not my favorite way to read a fantasy novel.....I did enjoy your story, and it kept me interested and excited to see where it was headed.
That's good to hear. I'd hope that Roy and the soul-link with Chylla would be a good reading experience what with it being the most important part.

I was actually worried when I wrote the part with Polidori that the plot was moving too fast if you catch my drift. That they went from guests to hunted fugitives in a snap. But glad to know it didn't throw you.

I've had trouble in the past writing vibrant characters, I think Roy in particular is a massive step up from the protags of my previous attempts, with the amount of change he undergoes and the amount of little nuances and imperfections he has. Though my favorite character in the story is Dark Lord Golgar, especially considering I've only scratched the surface on him.

Yeah, there's the limitation of first person right there. I'll confess that when I began Odd Company I was busy devouring the excellent Dresden Files series of Occult Detective novels by Jim Butcher, and a good deal of Roy's style of narration is at least partially influenced by the character of Harry Dresden.

I really appreciate your...I guess I'll call it a review, if you really want to see how the story ends I can PM or E-Mail the last chapter to you. I have no reason not to trust you. stick out tongue

starlock
Originally posted by Omega Vision
That's good to hear. I'd hope that Roy and the soul-link with Chylla would be a good reading experience what with it being the most important part.

I was actually worried when I wrote the part with Polidori that the plot was moving too fast if you catch my drift. That they went from guests to hunted fugitives in a snap. But glad to know it didn't throw you.

I've had trouble in the past writing vibrant characters, I think Roy in particular is a massive step up from the protags of my previous attempts, with the amount of change he undergoes and the amount of little nuances and imperfections he has. Though my favorite character in the story is Dark Lord Golgar, especially considering I've only scratched the surface on him.

Yeah, there's the limitation of first person right there. I'll confess that when I began Odd Company I was busy devouring the excellent Dresden Files series of Occult Detective novels by Jim Butcher, and a good deal of Roy's style of narration is at least partially influenced by the character of Harry Dresden.

I really appreciate your...I guess I'll call it a review, if you really want to see how the story ends I can PM or E-Mail the last chapter to you. I have no reason not to trust you. stick out tongue

Sure, i would be honored smile

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Sent it smile

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The voice of Dark Lord Golgar (more or less):
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Tazgul Arcanum:
http://fc06.deviantart.net/fs70/i/2011/142/4/d/tazgul_by_branflakes2_by_omega_vision-d3gynav.jpg

starlock
Thanks BTW!...i am almost done, and i like it so far!


Nice pic...You know the artist?

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Originally posted by starlock
Thanks BTW!...i am almost done, and i like it so far!


Nice pic...You know the artist?
Thanks.

And yes, here's his DeviantArt page: http://branflakes2.deviantart.com/

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More or less what the Dark Lord looks like:
http://fc04.deviantart.net/fs71/i/2010/343/e/1/rasputin_by_oyciecpiotr-d34jc2w.jpg

REXXXX
Removed by request. Let me know if I missed anything!

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starlock
Ah..a Prologue..very cool...I like it.

Something about the first paragraph seems off..hmmmm.i am not an expert lol, give me some time to think it over.

starlock
Hey there, thinking more, i really cant put my finger on it, maybe the description of Boris, seems a little to long for the first paragraph, just a thought.

Omega Vision
Originally posted by starlock
Hey there, thinking more, i really cant put my finger on it, maybe the description of Boris, seems a little to long for the first paragraph, just a thought.
I'm considering changing it to present tense, since I'm toying around with the idea of making all flashbacks present tense since. Present tense because all flashbacks are there because they're incredibly important to Roy emotionally and memories that he recalls more vividly than the normal narration.

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