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Think this would make a good character for x-men


Real Name: Jamal Jones
Aliases: Mr Powerhouse
Notable aliases: Dominance Tusk, J.J. Powerhouse, The Paragon
Identity: Secret
Occupation: Adventurer
Legal Status: Citizen of the United States with no known criminal record
Place of Birth: Buffalo, New York
Marital Status: Single
Known Relatives: Steve Jones (father), Anita Jones (mother) Maggie Jones (Sister) Robert Jones (brother)
Base of Operations: (current)Professor Xavier's School for Gifted Youngsters, Salem Center, Westchester County, (former) Massachusetts Academy (Part Time) X-Force headquarters,
Group Affiliation: (current) X-Men (former) New Mutants (PartTime) X-Force
First Appearance: NEW MUTANTS

History: Jamal Jones is young mutant alpha level mutant with paragon like abilities. When Jamal was a senior in high school his powers manifested after two bullies pushed him into the road unknowing that an 18 wheeler was coming towards him. The 18 wheeler crashed into Jamal's body, however when the semi crashed into Jamal's body the semi crumbled into pieces. Several people were stunned at jamals unharmed body. However as the sun continued to radiate, jamal felt enriched with power. The crowd however feared that jamal was a mutant and a mob formed. The mob attacked jamal and as the mob piled on top of him, with a simple shrug several people as many as thirty were thrown several distance and later hundreds of people began to storm towards jamal, with jamal analyzing that his strength was super human he pounded the ground causing it to cave in with shockwave energy collasping several walls and shattering several glass windows. As people fail into the ground jamal ran for cover after being chased by the authorities. As jamal ran he was cornered by two people from the mob in cars, as jamal jumped in the air he realizedd that he was floating in the air. He then realized he could fly but not control his speed and crash lands in a park playground with a bunch of kids surrounding him asking if he is a mutant. One of the children then coined the name yelling "bye Mr. Powerhouse". Jamal from then on kept a low profile by wearing hats and shades daily. Jamal was unaware he was being watched by professor x. Also jamal was monitored by a sentinel sent by Bolivar Trasktha t determained he was an alpha level mutant.

Sometime later but not to distant jamal had finished college near westchester. After his graduation he found himself in an unexpected battle fending off a powerful enemy however jamal was in for the shock and fight of his life when the enemy was revealed to be the hulk. As the x-men were alerted by cerebro of high level energy surrounding the area. A breaking news report comes on showing jamal holding his own against the hulk surprising the x-team. As the professor sent the team to break up the disturbance , xavier uses cerebro to speak with jamal telepathically helping him use and realize his powers. As he mentioned to jamal what to do, jamal is startled by xavier as to how he knows him and about jamals abilities. The x-men arrive and finally come the hulk as he returns to his banner form. The x-men take jamal with them to the x-mansion after he questions who they are and why the hulk was in westchester. After awhile of training with the x-men and accompaning them on some small to moderate missions involving one where jamal comes into direct conflict with the brotherhood of mutants and jamal finally comfronting the master of magnetism himself magneto to save one of the x-men members. As the fight moves outside the complex jamal is furthermore powered by the moonlight radiation which allows him to stalemate magento and the brotherhood. Jamal later is made an offical member before going undercover to investigate emma frost at her Massachusetts Academy.

During his early training with the team, professor x explains to jamal that his abilites are super-strength, flight and physical invulnerability and shockwave generation. Professor X explains that jamals x-gene allows him to utlize the radiation from the sun and the moon to grant his powers and that his powers increase the closer he is to each making him almost impossible to defeat. Xavier also explains that his body is still human and can suffer damage. A full eclipse would render jamal powerless and he would become like a normal human. Jamal's powers are also drained if underground to deep as when accompained to storm to the morlock tunnel. With his extreme strength jamal has to endure heavy stress to keep his strength in check.

Height: (6 ft. 1 in.)
Weight: 200
Eyes: Brown
Hair: Black
Distinguishing Features: His signature Tan long coat with brown jeans a tight fitted black shirt with a black X across the front middle and stealtoe brown boots.

Strength Level: Superhuman Class 100 (with potential unlimetd strength due to exposure to the sun and the moon)

Known Superhuman Powers: Mr. Powerhouse is a mutant who possesses super-strength, flight and physical invulnerability and shockwave generation. Mr. Powerhouse is imune to all physical attacks and external attacks. Mr. Powerhouse has been known to fly at speeds of 1000 mph and survive a brief misson to chernobyl to neutralize a disturbance before the radiation could affect him because of his invulnerability however he still went through the cleanse process to be decontaminated from nuclear poison and sickness.

Weakness: Extreme levels of nuclear radiation, Lighting/Electricity, certain viruses, toxins and dieases. Mr. Powerhouse is vulnerable to telepathy attacks with only mild resistance. Telekinetic attacks can be effective if the mutant is strong enough as in Jean Grey being of the few that can actually stop Mr. Powerhouse.

Personality: Jamal "Mr. Powerhouse" Jones is a young black american male college graduate with a technology degree. Unlike most mutants even though Mr. Powerhouse is one of the strongest mutants he is very gentle by nature and often feels very nice even when dealing with enemies like the brotherhood and Mr Sinester who are very evil and vow to destroy or turn jamal to the side of evil. Jamal has many friends and is considered one of the friendlist of the group dispite his large intimdating statue. Though he is a very private person he is often seen lending an open ear to other x-men who need to vent. Also his nice spirit brings him to conflict with team members such as wolverine, warpath, cyclops and sometimes emma frost. Although he respects wolverine.

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Simply put. He wouldn't be a good character for X-Men. Too powerful. Too perfect. Too much of a Gary Stu.

Who is gary stu

Gary Stu and Mary Sue is way of calling a male or female character perfect. He has no personality flaws. He's powerful enough to fight Hulk and be okay, he's powerful enough to take on not just the entirety of the Brotherhood, but Magneto at the sametime and stalemate them on his lonesome.

He's a private and quiet person, but is friends with everyone and always has time to lend an ear or shoulder to cry on.

His backstory is the same as hundreds of others. There's nothing original or interesting about him. You just made an uber strong character who has no challenges and can solve most of the X-Men's problems by winning a fight with no problem.

Him being so powerful and amazing and perfect would make him an extremely boring character.

So he is a goody toshu basically. At least he can die unlike some

Not just a goody two shoes. A goody two shoes who is apparently as strong and durable as he needs to be because he's powers infinitely by the sun and moon.

As for killing him, it seems like it's damn hard and would take some huge amount of power to do it.

Lol yeah killing would be hard. Thanks for responding and i like that you were honest

nah just wait for the new moon and sick ol wolverine after him or have doc strange portal him to an abysmal plane of no light and let him eek out an existence in total anonymity, and isolation.

Ok^ but do you have a more serious opinion

Originally posted by rox
Ok^ but do you have a more serious opinion
Those things COULD kill him, how more serious do you want?
Maybe silver surfer can absorb the solar energy from him and kill him or hit him with a bombardment Of cosmic radiation.. Or the leader can trap him in a 'gamma works MkII' or just make a serious Gamma cannon/Gamma room and trap him in it. Really who cares. No way to handle him If you don't know his weakness and he is boring. His history, personal life and anything else about him is boring. I wouldn't read a comic in it if he was in it..

If he was some sort of bubble boy who ventured out into the world because some accident claimed the life of his parents and no one knew he existed because they moved around alot and/or were ashamed.. He has to venture out then almost dies until the sun comes up granting him super powers (lesser version of what you have going on here where its more 30-80ton range so he is strong but not punkin the hulk unless he is grey or is part of a well planned and coordinated strike with the other x-men.. Dialing him back makes him actually fit into the story you want him to take part in)
He figures out he has powers but is all alone and really doesn't understand how the world functions or the prejudice Ppl have toward mutants. He only knows his comics and maybe the sheltered television they allowed him to watch (older shows like I love Lucy) so he has a unique outlook and quirky personality. Eventually given his lack of control of his powers he can hurt someone trying to be a hero (misunderstanding a situation) and even hurt cops who come to get him and identify he is a mutant. (he tries to show them he is a hero. Lifts a car or he bends a pole blah blah) they can even open fire on him in a pure panic and he flees. Drifts from place to place doing some good, some bad until he learns of the x-men school. He can quote older shows and movies when he speaks and retain his 'good guy' nature by retaining a innocent outlook and values (be it a little shaken by the harsh world around him) sort of like captain America being a man out of time. Hell him being a bubble boy could of been seen as a blessing by his family and they kept him isolated from the realities of the world because they hated what it had become. (maybe older parents who missed those 'leave it to beaver' days) so they kept him separate because 1) he would never have a place in it anyway due to being a bubble boy and 2) they weren't ashamed of him but the world around them.


Sorry if it's not easy to understand I just wrote it quick.

I like ur backstory better. But i wouldn't reduce his strength. Not enough strong characters to fight hulk or mags

Character is too boring and a Gary Stu. His backstory blatantly disrespects the 616 continuity and it seems like a self-wank character and you want him to be that strong just so he can trounce Hulk and Magneto. Your character just out of nowhere, with no training whatsoever or any real skills just whoops on Hulk. He's powered by the moon and sun so he's always at full strength throughout the day? Where are the challenges in this character, seems like he doesn't have any problems, he stalemated the entire brotherhood. He's just boring and really has nothing unique going for him.

Some ideas? Granted i have written a full backstory yet which i probably should

Tone him down, being a nice match for Hulk after maturity and years honing his powers then sure but off the bat able to beat Hulk, Magneto and the Brotherhood? That's just self-wank. The entire background needs to be redone, Shackles made a much better one.

Ok that works. I have better one i thought that involves a major accident with him fighting hulk and misunderstanding the situation and hulk and leaving to hide in shame coming back later on.

Thanks for liking my little attempt at a backstory lol.
Honestly your trying to make him fit into the x-men but the x-men is a team book and your character operating at the lvl that you want isn't a real good fit for the team. I'd you dialed his lvls down and maybe gave him super strength for sunlight and flight for moonlight (keeping super durability for each) he could be a interesting character and it can give his powers a more interesting plot device to take advantage of where certain forms of light develop different powers in him, or not. But yeah x-men has always been a team driven story and when the need for the team is taken away by a 'I can do it alone' type character then it might as well not be a x-men story. Even juggernaut was toned down when on the team and fell into the 'colossus' role of the team.
His full potential can be what you want but not what he starts off with because in all actually that kids life will be hell as shown in x-men often, the children have limited control of their powers. He will accidentally kill someone, even fighting the brother hood if he is tanking the team do you really think it's all that believable for him to be beating on blob, stressing out magneto and still find it in himself to hold back when toad lunges at him? It will be like superboy prime, he will hit him into a mist cloud of blood and be traumatized.
If he does have such precious control of himself then he doesn't need the school and even in a fanfic it's hard to just insert some random kid inside the core x-men team.

Do I make any sense?

Problem is he is like superman, that's a little overdone. Id rather look into his nature Ok he is African American, what could have transformed him is he a mutant?
Maybe celestial bodies like the moon and sun have nothing to do with his power but instead maybe he is an answer to an ancient prophecy given about one who would come from the past with all his peoples woes and lead the oppressed to the homeland and its dream.
Seeing a rare artifact The Spear of Sumahsra from the Manhyia Palace while on sebatical in Kumasi. Overcome you lose consciousnesses and your mutant ability is triggered by the symbol of your family. In a dream you are reunited with your ancestors and see the tragedy that would become your people through slave trade and colonization. The faces and color of skin blur as you begin to see signs of mutant hate and genocide, out of the fog of the past you see a strong warrior walking in the jungle a large black cat beside him. He looks down at you offers his hand, as you take his hand he lifts you off the floor, looking intently into your eyes he simply says in the ancient tongue of your people "Guard them you people, succeed where the past failed, take the spear of justice into your heart, and let it guide you with the purpose of good".
You come to leaning on a bronze statue of a warrior named Sumahsra and there is a burning above your heart, what looks like a deep scratch resembles a spear.
You run faster than normal speeds, capable of great physical prowess able to leap like a panther, and strong enough to lift a car, your spatial awareness acts constantly allowing you near danger sense perception.
Your metabolic rate forever altered and your body is capable of carrying greater amounts of oxygen allowing you feats of endurance that are superhuman. You heal most wounds within a night, and emit an empathic aura of fear when engaging combat, through time you have learned to control this to allow it to target rather than broadcasting it solely in a radius.
A strong pull lured you to westchester New York where you met another ororo Monroe here she and a bald man in a wheel chair offered you help but asked you to work as a silent member in third world countries with three others in an attempt to subvert threats that might challenge the World at large.

Originally posted by Salthasha
Problem is he is like superman, that's a little overdone. Id rather look into his nature Ok he is African American, what could have transformed him is he a mutant?
Maybe celestial bodies like the moon and sun have nothing to do with his power but instead maybe he is an answer to an ancient prophecy given about one who would come from the past with all his peoples woes and lead the oppressed to the homeland and its dream.
Seeing a rare artifact The Spear of Sumahsra from the Manhyia Palace while on sebatical in Kumasi. Overcome you lose consciousnesses and your mutant ability is triggered by the symbol of your family. In a dream you are reunited with your ancestors and see the tragedy that would become your people through slave trade and colonization. The faces and color of skin blur as you begin to see signs of mutant hate and genocide, out of the fog of the past you see a strong warrior walking in the jungle a large black cat beside him. He looks down at you offers his hand, as you take his hand he lifts you off the floor, looking intently into your eyes he simply says in the ancient tongue of your people "Guard them you people, succeed where the past failed, take the spear of justice into your heart, and let it guide you with the purpose of good".
You come to leaning on a bronze statue of a warrior named Sumahsra and there is a burning above your heart, what looks like a deep scratch resembles a spear.
You run faster than normal speeds, capable of great physical prowess able to leap like a panther, and strong enough to lift a car, your spatial awareness acts constantly allowing you near danger sense perception.
Your metabolic rate forever altered and your body is capable of carrying greater amounts of oxygen allowing you feats of endurance that are superhuman. You heal most wounds within a night, and emit an empathic aura of fear when engaging combat, through time you have learned to control this to allow it to target rather than broadcasting it solely in a radius.
A strong pull lured you to westchester New York where you met another ororo Monroe here she and a bald man in a wheel chair offered you help but asked you to work as a silent member in third world countries with three others in an attempt to subvert threats that might challenge the World at large.

Originally posted by Salthasha
Problem is he is like superman, that's a little overdone. Id rather look into his nature Ok he is African American, what could have transformed him is he a mutant?
Maybe celestial bodies like the moon and sun have nothing to do with his power but instead maybe he is an answer to an ancient prophecy given about one who would come from the past with all his peoples woes and lead the oppressed to the homeland and its dream.
Seeing a rare artifact The Spear of Sumahsra from the Manhyia Palace while on sebatical in Kumasi. Overcome you lose consciousnesses and your mutant ability is triggered by the symbol of your family. In a dream you are reunited with your ancestors and see the tragedy that would become your people through slave trade and colonization. The faces and color of skin blur as you begin to see signs of mutant hate and genocide, out of the fog of the past you see a strong warrior walking in the jungle a large black cat beside him. He looks down at you offers his hand, as you take his hand he lifts you off the floor, looking intently into your eyes he simply says in the ancient tongue of your people "Guard them you people, succeed where the past failed, take the spear of justice into your heart, and let it guide you with the purpose of good".
You come to leaning on a bronze statue of a warrior named Sumahsra and there is a burning above your heart, what looks like a deep scratch resembles a spear.
You run faster than normal speeds, capable of great physical prowess able to leap like a panther, and strong enough to lift a car, your spatial awareness acts constantly allowing you near danger sense perception.
Your metabolic rate forever altered and your body is capable of carrying greater amounts of oxygen allowing you feats of endurance that are superhuman. You heal most wounds within a night, and emit an empathic aura of fear when engaging combat, through time you have learned to control this to allow it to target rather than broadcasting it solely in a radius.
A strong pull lured you to westchester New York where you met another ororo Monroe here she and a bald man in a wheel chair offered you help but asked you to work as a silent member in third world countries with three others in an attempt to subvert threats that might challenge the World at large.

Huh?

Lol what was that?

Decided on any changes rox?

Originally posted by SevenShackles
Decided on any changes rox?

I have I will post my backstory tomorrow. It involves his fight with the hulk being a bad misunderstanding causing him to comeback after he has matured with his powers being rivaling the hulks but being weaker during there earlier fight. Also I will have him in a deliema between lyal to emma or professor x

it was an example of a back story, one that doesn't implement near omega level powers constantly, its a story that takes advantage of ethnic history ties into discrimination and provides the primal abilities of a super hero. it was an example nothing more sorry so many could not follow.

Originally posted by Salthasha
it was an example of a back story, one that doesn't implement near omega level powers constantly, its a story that takes advantage of ethnic history ties into discrimination and provides the primal abilities of a super hero. it was an example nothing more sorry so many could not follow.

It was stereotypical and racist if not insensitive.

Originally posted by Salthasha
it was an example of a back story, one that doesn't implement near omega level powers constantly, its a story that takes advantage of ethnic history ties into discrimination and provides the primal abilities of a super hero. it was an example nothing more sorry so many could not follow.

My character pitch is to introduce a young wet-behind the ear character who is new to the world of hate around. His unique freakish strength at his age was to make for a far more dramtic drama since everyone would be instantly afarid of him and hate him. Also his fiight with the hulk was to be a misunderstanding causes him to hurt someone after trying to be hero when he did not need to be.Therfore he would go into self exile until being recruited by emma than having him have to turn on her because of her wanting to hurt people reguardless of mutant or human.

The story you posted is more based on his skin color. With my version, it just so happens he is black nothing more. Need some positive black characters that are powerful(i am black if anyone is wondering) but not a sterotype like what you just posted.

Originally posted by Salthasha
Problem is he is like superman, that's a little overdone. Id rather look into his nature Ok he is African American, what could have transformed him is he a mutant?
Maybe celestial bodies like the moon and sun have nothing to do with his power but instead maybe he is an answer to an ancient prophecy given about one who would come from the past with all his peoples woes and lead the oppressed to the homeland and its dream.
Seeing a rare artifact The Spear of Sumahsra from the Manhyia Palace while on sebatical in Kumasi. Overcome you lose consciousnesses and your mutant ability is triggered by the symbol of your family. In a dream you are reunited with your ancestors and see the tragedy that would become your people through slave trade and colonization. The faces and color of skin blur as you begin to see signs of mutant hate and genocide, out of the fog of the past you see a strong warrior walking in the jungle a large black cat beside him. He looks down at you offers his hand, as you take his hand he lifts you off the floor, looking intently into your eyes he simply says in the ancient tongue of your people "Guard them you people, succeed where the past failed, take the spear of justice into your heart, and let it guide you with the purpose of good".
You come to leaning on a bronze statue of a warrior named Sumahsra and there is a burning above your heart, what looks like a deep scratch resembles a spear.
You run faster than normal speeds, capable of great physical prowess able to leap like a panther, and strong enough to lift a car, your spatial awareness acts constantly allowing you near danger sense perception.
Your metabolic rate forever altered and your body is capable of carrying greater amounts of oxygen allowing you feats of endurance that are superhuman. You heal most wounds within a night, and emit an empathic aura of fear when engaging combat, through time you have learned to control this to allow it to target rather than broadcasting it solely in a radius.
A strong pull lured you to westchester New York where you met another ororo Monroe here she and a bald man in a wheel chair offered you help but asked you to work as a silent member in third world countries with three others in an attempt to subvert threats that might challenge the World at large. I don't see anything relevant to Rox's character being black. Yeah, you mentioned slave trade but what has that got to do with Rox's character? Many nationalities were abused and misused in slave trades, not just blacks. You shouldn't just make up something and say it's related to "ethnic history" and discrimination just to try to make a character passable. That's borderline ignorant and DEFINITELY offensive.

Nothing makes sense because we have no idea who this "Suma-whatever" is, what's his story, why he's important, and why he doesn't show up to EVERY OTHER black person. It shouldn't matter that the character is black.

Maybe you didn't mean it the way it came off but it was really ofgfensive to blacks. It seemed like a sterotype of the highest form simply because you wanted the character to have super powers because he's black and nothing more.

Originally posted by The Big O
I don't see anything relevant to Rox's character being black. Yeah, you mentioned slave trade but what has that got to do with Rox's character? Many nationalities were abused and misused in slave trades, not just blacks. You shouldn't just make up something and say it's related to "ethnic history" and discrimination just to try to make a character passable. That's borderline ignorant and DEFINITELY offensive.

Nothing makes sense because we have no idea who this "Suma-whatever" is, what's his story, why he's important, and why he doesn't show up to EVERY OTHER black person. It shouldn't matter that the character is black.

Maybe you didn't mean it the way it came off but it was really ofgfensive to blacks. It seemed like a sterotype of the highest form simply because you wanted the character to have super powers because he's black and nothing more.
This guy knows what he is talking about.

the relevancy as you must have somehow missed it is tying an idea of the bigotry of yesterday to the bigotry mutants face today the ethnic issue is drawing strength form the culture of an ancestry.
The idea is not racist and only a simpleton would perceive it to be so, no more than tying Orroro monroe as a godess to the inhabitants of Africa circa 1970.

Give me a break with the bigotry nonsense, anyone reading that story would see what i was driving was a tone down of roxxes superman. An alternative to the uber powerful, how ignorant are you people to call that bigotry. So ridiculously stupid.
Whatever i see i am probably dealing with adolescents here so I will drop it.

I don't see anything relevant to Rox's character being black. Yeah, you mentioned slave trade but what has that got to do with Rox's character? Many nationalities were abused and misused in slave trades, not just blacks. You shouldn't just make up something and say it's related to "ethnic history" and discrimination just to try to make a character passable. That's borderline ignorant and DEFINITELY offensive.

Nothing makes sense because we have no idea who this "Suma-whatever" is, what's his story, why he's important, and why he doesn't show up to EVERY OTHER black person. It shouldn't matter that the character is black.

Maybe you didn't mean it the way it came off but it was really ofgfensive to blacks. It seemed like a sterotype of the highest form simply because you wanted the character to have super powers because he's black and nothing more.

Hmm I hear liberal.

ok, i really don't get racist out of what i wrote, and if so are the two calling that black and if so do you enjoy the black panther? Since your post i forwarded it to a friend of mine who is black and asked him if he would be offended by what I wrote, He stated he would not.
So lets talk about concepts Marvel themselves used, There is the Black Panther, originally was pressured to take the name black leopard, due to the militant organization of the same name, his major story arc included a fight with the KKK, yet there is no Panther in Africa so by what you have labeled insensitive and even racist by an example of a back story introducing a common element in story telling such as ancestral identification as stereotypical, is well nonsense! if it were stereotypical it would be about anger and a sense of social injustice on the mean streets of the usa and a need to show he can overcome and be better than... That is racist insensitive and stereotypical. As per the ghost of the ancestor again a literary tool allowing the reader to determine what that was and not central enough to the main character leaving ones own mind to identify it.
I realize I am probably explaining this to high schoolers or even junior high school age people.
In that case good luck as you age andf I hope your narrow view of hate and racism can broaden some, what is funny is I could have been black for all you know, might want to research the city i detailed maybe you can all grow up some.

It's laughable that you think we're kids because we don't like your idea. Yeah, only children can deem something as stereotypical, insensitive and whatnot. The fact that you're insulting us shows who the real immature child is.

I don't really think you understand stereotypes, there are more than one for every race although the one you just used as an example is basically what you're doing with this character just based out of Africa.

Originally posted by Salthasha
Problem is he is like superman, that's a little overdone. Id rather look into his nature Ok he is African American, what could have transformed him is he a mutant?

Why does his race have to be a major component of his character? We need more Black characters that everyone can identify with, a character with morals, flaws and ideals who just happens to be Black. We don't need someone who's supposed to be tailored for the Black community to like although most wouldn't like this.



So we make a Black guy that just goes out to battle as Moses and leads all the Black people back to the motherland or mutants to their motherland?



He's Black so there has to be a spear in there somewhere. Throwing slavery in there and making him some guy who's just ready to take it to Whitey and anyone who is ready to mistreat mutants or Blacks, I'm still not sure.



Again with the whole jungle theme, some big black warrior is there speaking to him and turning him into a spear chucker who fights to right the wrongs of his tribe or mutants? Who's going to identify with this? He's not even a good Black character. I doubt even Africans would like this and I know one on this site that I could ask. Just because he would now be closer to African descent doesn't mean he would need or should have a spear, that's a stereotype.



Here's where a lot of the Black stereotypes are introduced. First is that spear again.... He runs fast and is great at jumping. Once again how do we, the reader identify with this character? What about him would make him successful?



Hopefully now you see what's wrong, the fact that he also meets Storm as the one of the first people is also laughable. He's not going to be on the main team or work beside the X-Men instead he's shipped off to go fight oppressed third world countries? This all seems like a tale of Buck The Wonder Slave and how he fights back against The Man and his global oppression of minorities.

Mmmmyeah Wei pretty much hit it on the head. And for that he gets chicken and waffles from the black guy.(I'm black by the way)

But seriously, Rox's character is black. He's just black, there's no...prophecy that needs to be fulfilled or him shuckin and jivin. He just happens to be black, and that doesn't need some over convoluted African temple of doom type backstory.

you really have no idea about the intent of what the x men were in the 60's and your ignorance is profound here. You have taken every little bit of a story and twisted it to your perception not the intent of this author. I guess if I choose to I could have just as easily called it an Irish hero who while visiting Caishel was greeted by a vision of Finn Macool and with his "spear" in hand or even I could have made him Polynesian, the emphasis on the race was made that was as a backdrop because roxx stated he was a young black male. I really could care less what your issue is, that type of story is atypical of many heroes including the Black Panther Wonder Woman etc. Holly wood is famous for such origins!
Like most super sensitive people you throw race and banter like its something at the drop of a hat.
You know nothing about me and obviously your just pulling what you choose to derelict in a sample story.
My mistake was to give an example using a black person trust me that will never happen again. I will stick to the Irish which is what I am.
People like you want to see hate behind every shadow you create that in your own reasoning not in mine and nor am I nor my story derived by such, As i will not continue this debate any further with you I wish you the best of luck, something tells me you will need it in your cynical little life.

Originally posted by Salthasha
you really have no idea about the intent of what the x men were in the 60's and your ignorance is profound here. You have taken every little bit of a story and twisted it to your perception not the intent of this author. I guess if I choose to I could have just as easily called it an Irish hero who while visiting Caishel was greeted by a vision of Finn Macool and with his "spear" in hand or even I could have made him Polynesian, the emphasis on the race was made that was as a backdrop because roxx stated he was a young black male. I really could care less what your issue is, that type of story is atypical of many heroes including the Black Panther Wonder Woman etc. Holly wood is famous for such origins!
Like most super sensitive people you throw race and banter like its something at the drop of a hat.
You know nothing about me and obviously your just pulling what you choose to derelict in a sample story.
My mistake was to give an example using a black person trust me that will never happen again. I will stick to the Irish which is what I am.
People like you want to see hate behind every shadow you create that in your own reasoning not in mine and nor am I nor my story derived by such, As i will not continue this debate any further with you I wish you the best of luck, something tells me you will need it in your cynical little life.
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Real Name: Jamal Jones
Aliases: Mr. Powerhouse
Notable aliases: Dominance Tusk, J.J. Powerhouse, The Paragon
Identity: Secret
Occupation: Adventurer
Legal Status: Citizen of the United States with no known criminal record
Place of Birth: Buffalo, New York
Marital Status: Single
Known Relatives: Steve Jones (father), Anita Jones (mother) Maggie Jones (Sister) Robert Jones (brother)
Base of Operations: (current)Professor Xavier's School for Gifted Youngsters, Salem Center, Westchester County, (former) Massachusetts Academy (Part Time) X-Force headquarters,
Group Affiliation: (current) X-Men (former) New Mutants (PartTime) X-Force
First Appearance: NEW MUTANTS

History: Jamal Jones is young mutant alpha level mutant with paragon like abilities. During jamals fathers military years, his family traveled all over the world and lived in various places. Jamals father became weary of what the world became after his duty years therfore jamal was sheltered and didn't know to much outside his home life. When Jamal was a senior in high school his powers manifested after two bullies pushed him into the road unknowing that an 18 wheeler was coming towards him. The 18 wheeler crashed into Jamal's body, however when the semi crashed into Jamal's body the semi crumbled into pieces. Several people were stunned at jamals unharmed body. However as the sun continued to radiate, jamal felt enriched with power. The crowd however feared that jamal was a mutant and a mob formed. The mob attacked jamal and as the mob piled on top of him, with a simple shrug several people as many as thirty were thrown several distance and later hundreds of people began to storm towards jamal, with jamal analyzing that his strength was super human he pounded the ground causing it to cave in with shockwave energy collasping several walls and shattering several glass windows. As people fail into the ground jamal ran for cover after being chased by the authorities. As jamal ran he was cornered by two people from the mob in cars, as jamal jumped in the air he realizedd that he was floating in the air. He then realized he could fly but not control his speed and crash lands in a park playground with a bunch of kids surrounding him asking if he is a mutant. One of the children then coined the name yelling "bye Mr. Powerhouse". Jamal from then on kept a low profile by wearing hats and shades daily. Jamal was unaware he was being watched by professor x. Also jamal was monitored by a sentinel sent by Bolivar Trask that determained he was an alpha level mutant.

Sometime later but not to distant jamal had finished college near westchester. After his graduation he found himself in an unexpected battle fending off a powerful enemy however jamal was in for the shock and fight of his life when the enemy was revealed to be the hulk. Because of jamals sheltered life he was not aware of the hulk's actual existence and only percived him to be a myth. However jamal mistook the hulk for a savage monster and perceived the hulk as endangering lives not realizing the hulk was there to help. Jamal engaged the hulk in a heated battle in which jamal lost due to him being unable to manifest his full strength at his young age. Embarrassed, jamal returned home only to be scholded by his family for exposing his identity to the rest of the world. Jamal then went into exile moving around to different places in new york. Jamal decided to try and redeem himself by fighting crime as a viglante until one fatal night where he accidentally punched one guy into a coma. Afraid of his actions and powers jamal fled the scene only to be noticed by the Friends of Humanity. After a brief struggle jamal is spoken to by a female voice who turns out to be emma frost. Emma explains her powers and for jamal to flee and head to her academy. It is then where jamal is trained to become more aggressive however because of jamal background he feels uncomfortable with the hostile acts and missons that he leaves academy only to be confronted by professor x alone. Spoked by the professor jamal at first runs but is stopped by storm and shadowcat who befriends jamal to much of piotr jealously. After some time during training with current x-men team jamal becomes a permant member becoming better at teamwork. On his first major misson with the team, they are attack by the brotherhood. After two team members are in danger jamal is force to comfort the master of magnatism himself magneto. Jamal and magneto viciously fight until the fight goes outside. Jamal doubting himself almost loses and is almost killed but professor x calms jamal and reminds him of his training, jamal is able to fight magneto to a stand still. Magneto retreats after not being able to beat jamal but declares that the two are enemies and will battle again. Wolverine congraulates jamal on standing up to magneto after overcoming his fear of danger and battle but warns that magneto is a poweful enemy and he will need to be on his guard.


During his early training with the team, professor x explains to jamal that his abilites are super-strength, flight and physical invulnerability and shockwave generation. Professor X explains that jamals x-gene allows him to utlize the radiation from the sun and the moon to grant his powers and that his powers increase the closer he is to each making him almost impossible to defeat. Xavier also explains that his body is still human and can suffer damage. A full eclipse would render jamal powerless and he would become like a normal human. Jamal's powers are also drained if underground to deep as when accompained to storm to the morlock tunnel. With his extreme strength jamal has to endure heavy stress to keep his strength in check. Wolverine remarks after jamals first big mission against magneto that someday he will be able to give the hulk a run for his money as he is told by the professor
that his strength will become unlimted in the future. Jamal has been on several small to medium missions since his battle with magneto but remains a student at the school for awhile.

Height: (6 ft. 1 in.)
Weight: 190
Eyes: Brown
Hair: Black
Distinguishing Features: His signature Tan long coat with brown jeans a tight fitted black shirt with a white X across the front middle and stealtoe brown boots.

Weapons: Jamal has crafted a custom 600 pound 5ft steel warhammer to aid him in battle when the team faces extreme enemies This help Jamal greatly in a battle with the sentinels.

Strength Level: Superhuman Class 70 (with potential unlimetd strength due to exposure to the sun and the moon)

Known Superhuman Powers: Mr. Powerhouse is a mutant who possesses super-strength, flight and physical invulnerability and shockwave generation. Mr. Powerhouse is imune to all physical attacks and external attacks. Mr. Powerhouse has been known to fly at speeds of 1000 mph and survive a brief misson to chernobyl to neutralize a disturbance before the radiation could affect him because of his invulnerability however he still went through the cleanse process to be decontaminated from nuclear poison and sickness.

Weakness: Extreme levels of nuclear radiation, Lighting/Electricity, certain viruses, toxins and dieases. Mr. Powerhouse is vulnerable to telepathy attacks with only mild resistance. Telekinetic attacks can be effective if the mutant is strong enough as in Jean Grey being of the few that can actually stop Mr. Powerhouse.

Personality: Jamal "Mr. Powerhouse" Jones is a young black american male college graduate with a technology degree. Unlike most mutants even though Mr. Powerhouse is one of the strongest mutants he is very gentle by nature and often feels very nice even when dealing with enemies like the brotherhood and Mr Sinester who are very evil and vow to destroy or turn jamal to the side of evil. Jamal has many friends and is considered one of the friendlist of the group dispite his large intimdating statue. Though he is a very private person he is often seen lending an open ear to other x-men who need to vent. Jamal has a personal friendship wolverine who he sees as a mentor in learing how to be at peace with who he is. Jamal has had a rough time dealing with his extreme abilites and often doubts himself in battle. Jamal has a rivarly with Piotr Rasputin because of his friendship with Shadowcat however out of respect for piotr jamal keeps it professional. Jamal now accepts storm as his teacher rather than be afraid after there first meeting. Jamal maintains his friendship with everyone at the mansion despite him disagreeing with the teams actions sometime. He is often the leveled headed person of the team often quoting old movie lines or old tv shows showing off his bubble personalty that everyone loves.

The venture into Chernobyl sort of undermines radiation being a weakness. For it to be a weakness doesn't mean he falls over in a single instant like superman with kryptonite but that he is weak to exposure like any other human ( kind of like supermans 'weakness' to magic, he isn't any more weak against it than a normal person but he doesn't have invulnerability to it like he would any other damage inflicted by other means)
Also it's kind of odd given his body absorbs radiation threw the form of sun/moon light. If anything maybe changing his weakness to mean only certain types of radiation can poison him causing alternate effects such as weakness, amping, hallucinations, sickness, temporary blindness, vertigo and the such. It's a nice plot device to undermine his super stats given how many villains can manipulate various forms of radiation and it will allow him to remain as strong as you Want him to be and still have a means to be defeated by someone who isn't his equal.

The story needs a bit more flushing out. The mob that attacks him suddenly becomes hundred and also chase him with cars. Then somehow he is able to goto college and is in contact with his family. Feels a bit off. More so given how usual x-men stories go.
Maybe something like this..
The kids who were bullying him push him in front of the truck unknowingly after Jamal finally stands up for himself, Jamal takes it head on and survives. Being sheltered he panics and doesn't know what to do, he sees the driver hurt and runs away. (a normal kids reaction) then the two bullies who might be the offspring of mutant haters label him a mutant and start telling lies about him (they are bullies after all) and go on the local news saying he did it on purpose to prove how strong he was. (this would attract the attention of prof X and the x-men) Jamal doesn't think he can go back home since he has such a strict military house hold so he just tries to figure things out and doesn't go home.. He thinks about it and tried to test his powers, finding he can push trees over and fly (the 'mr.powerhouse' kid moment) and he thinks he can be a hero. That night the anti mutant adults (bullies parents among them?) rally other scared parents and form a mob to find the kid. Then the numbers of people swarming him are justified and he can throw them off trying to defend himself. The X-men step in with the aid of his worried father (who Jamal thought wouldn't accept him for being different) and help protect him stopping him from hurting anyone with his powers.
The truck driver survives and says he saw the two kids push jamal into the street and it was an accident so now all the adults feel stupid and Jamal moves.
Jamals powers leave him, unknown to him his father and prof X had a meeting and given how strong Jamal was they decided he was ready for all that power and put a mental block on him. (prof x in agreement he would come back for him eventually and help him learn to use his powers effectively) He can still do some stuff but not on the level he could before until years later in college where a mix of over coming the mental block (to protect ppl id imagine) and gamma radiation being emitted by the hulks body is Jamal Able to tap into that power and fight the hulk back. (gamma radiation being a plot device)

It makes no sense for him not to know who the hulk is because he was sheltered more so if he is in college. He is on the news, he was a founding member of the avengers and is/was widely hunted by the government. He almost Sank manhattan and all that stuff so him being an urban legend doesn't really fit if he has access to modern day tech like computers and tv. Him buying into the media/military hype that he is a mindless monster who does nothing but hurt people might fit better. Given his military father it wouldn't be a large leap to thing his father has alot to do with his outlook on such things.

Everything else including the magneto feat sounds fine. Well Colossus being jealous made me 'lol' given his humble and caring nature but it's your take on it. I'd come up with a possibly deeper reason for him to distrust Jamal.

You limited his powers so he looses them underground, how do they work indoors? Curious if you thought that threw. The flight speed as travel speed looks fine.

I'm open to have conversations about this.

You have a lot of good ideas

Since this thread is dead I'm gonna use it as my boredom shelter.


Noticed the unscrambled acronym when jotting these down so added an uninspired S to finish it. Gonna keep text to a minimum.



Degenerate - compressed relativistic matter rocking a degeneracy pressure

Ironic - coats surfaces with your favorite metal on the periodic table but suffers from iron deficiency

Coward - partitioned tail on a taurine figure. all the cow looks. none of the typical animal enhancements. sister act to Mosaic

Knowbody - smart limbs

Stasis - static biology


This mostly feels like abrasive self aware redshirts who don't care what their codenames imply.

Planning on dropping ideas here from time to time. It'd be nice if some writer from Marvel were inspired by these.

Its too much big Brother make it short