Anyway, I'll post any poems/rhymes that I write and feel like typing up in here, they're not great (as poetry isn't my forte), and when I do write poetry it seems that I'm better at hiphop style rhymes than actual poems (and they go very much along the RATM style of things) So I'll post stuff here, and you can post comments in here or in the Constructive Criticism thread thanks!
Walked through the door
Fell to the floor
Opened up my eyes
And then I realized
That I couldn't see
What was in front of me
And now here I lie
Wondering, why?
This one I originally wrote in the Rhyming Game thread over in the OTF (or whatever the hell it was originally called), it was my first attempt at an actual hiphop rhyme and I think it turned out pretty good
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Watch out, here I come, get outta the way
If you don't look out I'm gonna make you pay
So what if you think that I'm only a girl
Time for you to get out and see the real world
I know who I am, I know what I can do
And if you don't like it then I say **** you
You're all just mindless non-thinking drones
Don't think for yourself may as well be clones
Time to get out, time to rebel
Time to stop taking what they have to sell
May as well be a sheep led to the slaughter
Tryin' to save yourself you give them your daughter
Get out of this mindset learn to think for yourself
Open up your mind with the key off that shelf
The one that says this way to freedom
But beware there'll always be some
Who'll say that people always need to be lead
Don't realize one day they'll end up dead
Run down by us who're sick of it
Don't want to deal with this spineless shit
So what I have to say is throw your fist in the air
Stand up shout out take a risk take a dare.
Gender: Female Location: every which way but loose
OMFG we should have a battle
But, I can see it now, we'd be rapping obscenities and apologising profusely at the same time, it totally wouldn't work. I lover you too much Great stuff babes
My entry for the poetry contest...it's about suicide, which isn't exactly my favorite subject in the world (due to a close brush with it I had), but I had an idea...
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no one knows
why she did it
but she did
and everyone is left
to pick up the pieces
"she had everything
going for her" they say
not knowing how she
really felt
not knowing at all
there could have been
a million things
that led her down
this road
but no one will ever know
the note was simple
it didn't say much
"don't blame yourself
there was nothing you could do
it's not your fault"
nothing else it said
no peek into her mind
no hint of what could have made her
pick up a knife
and end her life.
Wrote this two nights ago, when I was in a really depressed mood for no apparent reason whatsoever...I got teased a lot in high school, so that was kinda the inspiration for this, I guess....
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alone
in the center of the circle
everyone is staring
pointing and laughing
what have I done now?
what it something I said
or did?
why do they single me out?
I try to run
to hide away
but they won't let me
jeering and taunting
finally I can take no more
a crack appears in my facade
of nonchalance
a single tear runs down my cheek
I try to hide it
but they notice
their teasing continues
gets stronger
I cover my face
and run
finally I escape
but their lauging still follows
Umm, yeah, just wrote this out of nowhere... it's not a depressing poem for a change!!!
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Anticipation
Only a few days left
I don't know how much longer
I can wait
As it gets closer
Time seems to slow to a crawl
I wish it would speed up
Let the remaining days
Melt away
Disappear into nothing
But I know
That all too soon
My long wait will be over
And my dreams will come true
this just came out of nowhere...another spur of the moment poem like the last one...
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Bliss
Every moment
Nothing but happiness
I never thought
I could feel this way
All I can hope
Is that it lasts forever
But of course it wonn't
We can't yet be together
For a few wonderful days
But not forever
And now I'm alone
Once more
Missing you
But all I need to do
To feel happy once more
Is to remember
Our time spent together
And look forward
To being together once more.
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So I'll post stuff here, and you can post comments in here or in the Constructive Criticism thread 
thanks!
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Jan 13th, 2005 02:05 PM
Great stuff babes 
this just came out of nowhere...another spur of the moment poem like the last one...
