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Brandino's personal poem section

imperial neo corporate fascism

My thoughts are not my own
We sit huddled being told what to do and what to believe by a mere box
I once had a thought but my individuality was squashed upon like every ant
America the shining emblem once filled with promise and truth and peace
now i see paved causeways dirty liars cheaters fathom plague
We seek to control all others of fear of becoming controlled ourselves
boys adn girls its happened your thoughts and existance is controlled by this imperialist weapon Fight for Freedom and fight for a non existant tomorrow, oh youll have there tomorrow iam sure of this but is it your tomorrow no YOU will BUY THIS KEEP THIS FIGHT AND DIE FOR THIS BELIEVE US IF YOU DONT YOU ARE A PROBLEM EASILY CORRECTED
I sit and cry not knowing why our country has been taken down this path
Liberals conservatives stupidest things ive ever heard it isnt those parties it is the socialist and neo corporate fascists that are in war
fight for us die for us why cant i live for me?

a lil critism would be nice
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romans,greeks,germans,russians all fell WOOT HERE COMES AMERICA

Last edited by brandino on Jan 31st, 2005 at 03:21 AM

Jan 31st, 2005 03:17 AM

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Humanity in perspective

BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH
i know im right no your not yes iam no your not yes iam
BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH
i know im right no your not yes iam no your not yes iam
BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH
i know im right no your not yes iam no your not yes iam
BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH
i know im right no your not yes iam no your not yes iam
BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH
i know im right no your not yes iam no your not yes iam
BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH
i know im right no your not yes iam no your not yes iam
BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH
i know im right no your not yes iam no your not yes iam
BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH
i know im right no your not yes iam no your not yes iam
BOOM

Jan 31st, 2005 06:00 AM

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The first one is cool, but the second erm

I guess you were aiming for something raw and effective but personally, you just missed your target. How about you actually write a different line between all the 'Blah blahs'? Just a thought wink

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Jan 31st, 2005 05:09 PM

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thought about it but it served its purpose of humanity in perspective hence the name
so that poem is complete its perfect in its purpose

Last edited by brandino on Jan 31st, 2005 at 08:58 PM

Jan 31st, 2005 08:47 PM

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some haiku all in 5,7,5 form

tides
watching the tides come in
washing away bad memories, cleansing the mind
ever caught in translucent dreams

humans
look at these small creatures
running like rats stuck in a cage
these rats are odd, look

peoples hearts
behold this rock its round
lush with life and constant frozen hearts
behold this fireball its dead

super weapon
ignorance the ultimate life destroyer
with it i can sway and topple
keep them unaware to reality

change
spinning on the edge of insanity
gleeming eyes defining its own realities, truth
no one talks but listens

Feb 3rd, 2005 02:27 PM

Syren
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quote:
Originally posted by brandino
thought about it but it served its purpose of humanity in perspective hence the name
so that poem is complete its perfect in its purpose