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my poems (though not too great)
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my poems (though not too great)

I just want to post a poem that i write every now and then. If you like it, please tell me. If you dont like it, please tell me as well. I appreciate criticism just as much as praise because i really want to improve. Hope you like reading them. Some are just emotional pieces of writing. They basically explain themselves and ou can most likely guess why I wrote each one by reading them.

Don’t want to be here.

I don’t want to be here, I want to be gone.
No more upset, but no more song.
For eternity, here I lie.
No one is around to hear my cry.
Do people really care about me?
The way I feel or the way I think?
Do I matter to the universe?
I’m really feeling at my worst.
Am I just a friend to help them?
What happens if I need someone again?
Will they be there to help me carry on?
Will they be there to help me get along?


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It's a good start, although it might sound better if you completed the rhyming scheme you have going... gone and song, lie and cry, me and think?


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