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DarkRaven
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Rate my poem.. please?

Hey there.... A very special freind wrote this a long time ago... rate my poem? what do you think?

The memory of you
I値l never let go
The feelings I hold
Are more than you know,
I live to breath easy
Thanks to you
To wait for you soon
I know I値l pull through,
Your just so great
Your all I adore
I致e given you a hug
You deserve more,
To kiss your lips
Would be a treat
Warm yet so tender
Lovely and sweet,
Look in your eyes
As I hold you tight
Whenever I知 with you
The world seems right,


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doomsday49
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simple, a little sappy, but pretty good. i'm impress.


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DarkRaven
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yeah I know it sounds like an obsession to me but it's still a pretty poem
thanx


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Coldfire
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"Your just so great
Your all I adore"

watch the yours. Should be "you are" or "you're" smile

But other than that, yeah it was quite sappy (even though I shouldn't talk! haha stick out tongue ), but I enjoyed it happy


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DarkRaven
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Yup I made that point too yes


The memory of you
I値l never let go
The feelings I hold
Are more than you know,
I live to breath easy
Thanks to you
To wait for you soon
I know I値l pull through,
You're just so great
You're all I adore
I致e given you a hug
You deserve more,
To kiss your lips
Would be a treat
Warm yet so tender
Lovely and sweet,
Look in your eyes
As I hold you tight
Whenever I知 with you
The world seems right.

There we go tat's much better isn't it? yes


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Originally posted by Coldfire
"Your just so great
Your all I adore"

watch the yours. Should be "you are" or "you're" smile

But other than that, yeah it was quite sappy (even though I shouldn't talk! haha stick out tongue ), but I enjoyed it happy
laughing


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tuyenasaurus
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short and nice

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DarkRaven
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Thank you


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MistressofSnape
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Prettyful.


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ThorinWoofer
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I thought it was a very nice poem.


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DarkRaven
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Thank you guys a friend That I was really close to wrote it for me....


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