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xEsaulx
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Attempts at Poetry

Well I'm a little both, poetry and songs. here it goes.

Okay, I just made this, and I'm dedicating it to someone I care about too. stick out tongue
For this is how I really feel

The Whisper

Doves were flying all about
You were sitting there, starting to pout
You had not realized what you have missed
When you said that you had already kissed
Kissed some other guy who didn't care about you
Not as much as I truly do
I could not believe when you spoke those words to me
You had great trouble trying to see
Tears were clouding up your beautiful eyes
No matter what I did, no matter how many tries
I could not stop you from crying
The insides of me were slowly dying
Even though it seemed so hard, I never stopped trying
I know that you may find it hard to be true
But I never have stopped loving you

So softly someone says to me
While I'm here on one knee
Am I praying to be with you?
I really don't know what to do
It tells me to be honest and true
To tell you how I love you

The voices were all in my head
From the time I get up, until I go to bed
I feel guilty when I lay my head down
Seeing you in my mind, with a sad little frown
All I want to do is make you happy and to smile
Even if I have to walk a hundred miles
I would do anything, anything for you
No matter what I have to ****ing do
I have been meaning to say this one thing
This one thing that has made my heart sing
Truth be told that I love you
I don't know if you really need a clue
For five long years I have had this feeling
Even if you have a hard time believing
Ever since my eyes looked upon your face
My mind slowly started to erase

So softly someone says to me
While I'm here on one knee
Am I praying to be with you?
I really don't know what to do
It tells me to be honest and true
To tell you how I love you

What exactly was that voice that spoke?
Was it really some kind of joke?
I could have swore it was something real sweet
Something that made my heart nearly skip a beat
It was a low whisper that I had heard
While chirping noises came from a bird
I really don't know who it was
Though I really don't wanna know 'cause
It was like a guardian angel you see
That brought us together, just you and me
Though waking up from my day dreams I see
That none of this happened, I'm still on one knee


So softly someone says to me
While I'm here on one knee
Am I praying to be with you?
I really don't know what to do
It tells me to be honest and true
To tell you how I love you


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Nice job Esaul! (again) Hope you plan to post the other poems too you are really good at poetry, better than me.


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xEsaulx
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hehe...thanks. I just honestly write whatever comes to my mind.


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I liked it too happy


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xEsaulx
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oh! thank you!


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You're welcome happy

Do you have any more for us??


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xEsaulx
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yep. sorry for taking so long

The sun slowly sets and you are not here by my side.
Today it must have been the hundredth time that I cried
That I died, knowing that you aren't here waiting for me.
Knowing that you are never going to be breathing
It's so hard believing that you are really gone
that the whole world ended with just one fatal shot
Your heart stopped, and I no longer hear it beating
It's hard believing that I will never see that lovely smile
So wait a while, think back of what just happened
Reminiscing to that last good bye
I cried knowing that it was the end
Knowing that it was the very end.

Summer's gone and I'm alone
I walk along this dreaded road
hoping that I can see your smile
That will make me last for miiiiles

Summer's gone and I'm alone
I walk along this dreaded road
hoping that I can see your smile
That will make me last for miiiiles

Yeah, I remember that first day that we met
It's kinda hard to ever forget
It was sorta like love at first sight
Shit maybe it was love at first sight
that brought me there to you,
there to you
In my arms safe out of harm
You didn't look too alarmed
When I told you that I was charmed
That I was charmed
And that I would keep you from harm
so safe so sound but I never came 'round
so clear so far I never ran so hard
So quick so fast even though I was the last
to see you to feel you, to touch to kiss to hear you
to walk with you talk with you no matter what I did with you I still loved you
but now...

Summer's gone and I'm alone
I walk along this dreaded road
hoping that I can see your smile
That will make me last for miiiiles

Summer's gone and I'm alone
I walk along this dreaded road
hoping that I can see your smile
That will make me last for miiiiles

Last night I had this dream
This dream it seemed to be of you
Shit I don't know if it was really true
Or if it was just a ****in clue
to get closer to the one who I really adore
who is my number one who shines like a golden sun
That person is you, but I lost you, I lost you
and you ain't coming back you ain't coming back
Yeah I know but it's hard getting over that
I can't help blaming myself
That it was my fault for your death
Forget that
It's too late to go back into the past
Though I know the truth, no matter what you do
I know it was me who was to blame
for I'm the one who was jealous of your fame
Forget that
Forget that
Forget that
(that that that that)

Summer's gone and I'm alone
I walk along this dreaded road
hoping that I can see your smile
That will make me last for miiiiles

Summer's gone and I'm alone
I walk along this dreaded road
hoping that I can see your smile
That will make me last for miiiiles


Summer's gone

Summer's gone

Summer's gone

Summer's gone


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Hmmm... It was pretty good, yes, but the rhyming scheme involved was... interesting. I had to go back a couple times and see if there really was still a rhyme in it... but then again, maybe that's just me lol.

I really liked this part in the first stanza, however:

Knowing that you are never going to be breathing
It's so hard believing that you are really gone
that the whole world ended with just one fatal shot
Your heart stopped, and I no longer hear it beating
It's hard believing that I will never see that lovely smile
So wait a while, think back of what just happened
Reminiscing to that last good bye
I cried knowing that it was the end
Knowing that it was the very end.

It was one of the most original I've seen on here so far, so nice job on that happy

Well I hope that makes sense, anyway. Sorry, I'm a bit tired today lol. omg that was a horrible unintentional rhyme laughing out loud


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xEsaulx
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Thanks a bunch. I'm working on more songs. That part is the best part i think in the song. I think it is a really fun thing to do. And you don't have to be sorry at all stick out tongue lol


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Great job !!i didnt know you write poetry!!!nice !


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i love them, they are all soooo good! I could never write that good! big grin , awesome job!


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xEsaulx
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Thanks!


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Originally posted by Esaul
Thanks a bunch. I'm working on more songs. That part is the best part i think in the song. I think it is a really fun thing to do. And you don't have to be sorry at all stick out tongue lol

ooo awesome hehe big grin And that does look fun happy

Haha alrighty stick out tongue


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xEsaulx
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Location: The Land of Quar

Losing You (not finished)

Losing you was the hardest thing I ever had to do
My mind is running so fast
I didn't want to be the ****ing last
Who would have to hold you in my arms
Because I couldn't keep you from harm
Or to be the one to witness your last breath
And now I have to grieve over your death
Such a tragedy that you had to go
So carefree and sweet, that is what I will remember you for
Trying to ignore the pain that is in my heart
It won't depart, it will never heal
It feels so real, I was hoping for it to be a dream
A dream where I can wake up at any giving time
I'm not sure if I will ever move on

Why did you have to go?
Why did you have to leave?
So many things left unsaid
I didn't even get to say good bye
I just wanted to fall down and die
Instead I am here left alone
Trying to figure out what to do
Wishing I could've told you I loved you


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Originally posted by l.saratn
Losing You (not finished)

Losing you was the hardest thing I ever had to do
My mind is running so fast
I didn't want to be the ****ing last
Who would have to hold you in my arms
Because I couldn't keep you from harm
Or to be the one to witness your last breath
And now I have to grieve over your death
Such a tragedy that you had to go
So carefree and sweet, that is what I will remember you for
Trying to ignore the pain that is in my heart
It won't depart, it will never heal
It feels so real, I was hoping for it to be a dream
A dream where I can wake up at any giving time
I'm not sure if I will ever move on

Why did you have to go?
Why did you have to leave?
So many things left unsaid
I didn't even get to say good bye
I just wanted to fall down and die
Instead I am here left alone
Trying to figure out what to do
Wishing I could've told you I loved you


Why you feel so sad???awww you need a hug???


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I didn't know you had The Whisper done since May.

You, Saratn, are very good at this.


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xEsaulx
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Thanks

And technically it was April.

Summer's Gone has been done for ages. Way before April stick out tongue


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Yes I remember reading that a while ago...I think a while ago...I forget. embarrasment

Oh well. Watching for more big grin


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xEsaulx
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*yawns* it's early again


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