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Punkyhermy
like memory in motion
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seep
silence.
creeps.
night.
shines.
two dots.
of light
glows.
cursive.
prints of
hands.
seep.
through the
glass.
alphabets.
glisten the
skin.
dark.
almost thin
path.
door.
partly closed
secret.
white.
chalky pasty
glistens.
laughter.
sneaks.
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Nov 1st, 2006 04:12 AM |
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~Forever*Alone~
Empress
Gender: Female Location: EveryWhere And NoWhere |
wow that sounded pretty.
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Nov 2nd, 2006 01:01 AM |
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Punkyhermy
like memory in motion
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thankies.
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Nov 2nd, 2006 01:29 AM |
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Punkyhermy
like memory in motion
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*bumps*
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Mar 31st, 2007 01:23 AM |
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King of Blades
The King
Gender: Male Location: The South |
bumps
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Mar 31st, 2007 06:42 PM |
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Punkyhermy
like memory in motion
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Apr 24th, 2007 04:29 PM |
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chillmeistergen
Restricted
Gender: Male Location: United Kingdom Account Restricted |
It sounds like you're just saying every thought that goes through your head. Also two light does not 'glows' they glow. Keep it up though, you just need to inject a more exciting topic into this rythm structure.
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May 4th, 2007 10:28 AM |
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pcp
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It certainly unique, stylistically. Artistically, however, I'm afraid it is not.
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