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Tattoos N Scars
Modern Day Drifter

Gender: Male
Location: Deep South

She IS

She is
The reason God made moonlit gardens.
She is
The reason I'm not broken hearted.
She is
The reason the robin sings on a window sill.
She is
The reason my heart beats still.
She is
The reason men made diamond rings.
She is
The reason God made angels sing.
She is
The reason I never gave up on love.
She is
The greatest give from heaven above.


Darlin', you are many things to me
And all the reasons are plain to see
You complete me in every way
And only in your arms will I stay
I just want to say I love you
And I will till this life is through


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TheMercurial
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Gender: Male
Location: Ireland

Very nice, I like it.

My only criticism would be that the fourht line of the last stanza seems a little off. It seems a bit too long when I read it.
Maybe something like "And in your arms, I'll always stay"?

That said, overall, it's very nice work.


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vivando-loca
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Location: Airports to Amsterdam...

they're good! smile

on the last line of the first poem, i think you meant "gift", not give.


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Tattoos N Scars
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Location: Deep South

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Originally posted by vivando-loca
they're good! smile

on the last line of the first poem, i think you meant "gift", not give.



yes, i do...just a typo

Thank yall for the comments.


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