this is my version of the seventh booki always get board so i am going to start it i will tri to post 1 every 3-4 days and it is all off the top of my head soi mite stop writing a bit some times... u r welcome to give suggestens at any time and i will tri to reply to ur pms if my story is any good... im not a good speller or with grammer... to the story...
chapter 1: the death eaters
harry potter was lieing in bed waiting to start his journy to destroy the remaining horcuses it was 11:59 then it changed to 12:00 when 3 wizards appariated with a crack and then the door was smashed down.
an owl pecked his window harry let it in then went downsteirs to find draco malfoy, with his father lucios and manchire(sp). they had sent stuners at him but harry blocked them,and ran upsteirs said "ament orio" (a spell to pack all his things in to his trunk),he then blasted open his window then his bed room door opened and uncle verman walked in started to yell "what d..."he then was hit by a green light and fell to the floor dead, harry hid behind the door then draco and lucios came in he stunned both of them sent the owl that had come to to him from the ministry back to the aurors office recesting that they send a couple of aurors to number 4 privet drive to assist him then went back to the door and heard dudley scream then a minet later heard aunt putuna scream then manchire entered harrys room and went to revive the molfoys but was stunned in mid spell then harry waited.
two mintues later harry heard 2 more crackes then some 1 walked through the door and harry said imperio and made him tell the truth about who he was it was kingsly shackelbolt then another person came in and harry repeted the prosess and found out that it was a nother death eater and stunned him too, kingsley then disapperiated and returnd with 3 other aurors and they all then left harry with nothing cause they took the four death eaters with them harry then made his trunk fether light and flew to the burrowafter sending hedwig first. with letters to ron saying that he was coming over. he flew off to see the dark mark over the derslys house.
yah it would be alittle easier to understand if the grammar was correct and well...it wasn't so jumpy..which even i have problems with but good effort! I like the stroy idea!
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I would read it, but judging by the first sentence, your grammar is completely horrible. I can't be bothered to spend time reading something that the author himself doesn't spend time on.
Take your time, revise your work, and for goodness sake, if you're going to write, follow the rules of your language!
Sorry if I sound harsh, but alas, it is the truth.
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Dec 20th, 2005 04:10 AM
