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Harry Potter and the Prophecy Fulfilled

Okay ive decided to wright my own version of the 7th book and i hope u enjoy it and plzzzz dont mind my grammer and spelling!!!if u have major problems with reading my story then plzzz post about it but if theres just a few grammer/spelling errors then ignore them!and plzzz tell me how i can make my story better!
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Chapter One-The New assignment


It was a dark cold stormy night and there were two men standing

outside a old dark mansion. The two men had Death Eater masks on and

hoods up therefore you could not see there face. The taller man

knocked three times on the door and a cold high shrill voice spoke.

"Enter," it said from a room far down the hall.

The taller man opened the door and walked down the hall with the

shorter one stumbling after him.


The taller man entered the room and beant down and kissed the hem

of Voldemorts robes. The shorter man followed suit.

"Is he really dead?" Voldemort asked hopefully.

"Yes my lord!" Severus Snape replied taking off his mask and hood

revealing a hooked nose and very greasey black hair.

The other man did the same revealing bleach blonde hair and a very

pale face.

"now Draco do you have anything you wish to tell me?"Voldemort

asked Malfoy.

"umm...I....Well..."Draco stuttered.

"Spit it out boy!"Voldemort snapped.

"IdidntkillhimSnapedid!"Draco said in one breathe looking scared to

death.

"Now Draco you know you must be punished right..."

"yes my lord!" Draco said unsurely.

Voldemort lifted his wand"crutio!"

Draco fell to the floor in pain screaming then he stopped.

"Now severus I would punish you but I found out from one of my most

loyal Death eaters the Narcissa put you up to it but let me just say she

will never interfere again trust me!Now get out I will give you a new

assignment tomorrow and if you fail I will kill you!"

"My lord what happened to Narcissa?" Severus questioned.

"It has nothing to do with you but I may say if you fail you will end up

like her! now get out!" The two men did what they were told and left.


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well i think you could've have made a bit more descriptive and longer but otherwise it was ok


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ya well its kinda my first fanfic but i couldnt really think of anything else to add 2 it ill try and make the next posts mur descripyive and just 2 tell u ill prob be able 2 post at least 2-3 times a week...


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Chapter 2 Weasleys return

It was a dark cold clear night and it was very dark the only light came

from a window on number 4 privet Drive. it was 11:46 PM everyone

was asleep exept Harry Potter who was lying on his bed waiting. He

stood up and went over to his desk looked at his alarm clock it flashed

11:47 on the screen. He sat down and picked up the nearest letter it

made him happy to read. It was from Ron and Hermione about them

picking him up on his birthday he read it again.

Dear Harry,
We will get you when we planned before so please be ready we cannot give anymore information but we hope to see you soon. We hope yourwell and that the muggles are treating you fairly. A week after you get here the wedding will be heald so be prepared for caois(sp?) see you soon.
Love,
H+R



Then he looked at the clock again 11:50 10 more minutes he thought to
himself.Then he reached down and picked up the other letter on his desk

It was writtten in very neat hand writing and everytime he looked at him it made him sad yet he read it again over and over again.

Dear Harry,
I miss you! please rethink everything I dont want to loose you!I will stand by your side no matter what. I want to be with you no matter what!
Love for always and foreever,
G


She new not to write to much and from now on they only signed with the first letters of there names to keep it safe. Harry read her letter

over 4 times in a row then looked at his clock it flashed 11:58. He looked on his floor to find random stuff that he hadnt packed yet and

picked it up and threw it untidely into his trunk. Then he heard a loud familiar pop! he grabbed his trunk and hedwigs empty cage and

went into the hall to find Mr.Weasley at the top of the stairs surrounded by the Dursleys Vernon shutgun in hand.

"Harry, Quicly I think you remember how to apparate?" Mr.Weasley said grabbing his hand.

"What the hell do you think your doing?hes not going anywhere!" Vernon yelled!

"Oh yes I am im not staying here in this hell hole!" Harry yelled back.

"Let him go!" Aunt Petunia said in a low quiet voice"good luck Harry." Harry nodded in respose and took a step forward and felt the familiar

feeling of being sucked through a rubber tube. Harry hit the ground hard gasping for air and looked up at the place he thought of as the best in

the world (besides hogwarts). He smiled to himself and stood up and followed Mr.Weasley into the kitchen. When he got into the kitchen

he saw Ron, Hermione, Fred, Goerge, Mrs.Weasley, Lupin, Tonks, Bill, Fluer, Charlie, Mad-Eye, and to his surprise Percy! he looked them all

over and they all hugged him and said hi but he noticed immediatly that Ginny wasnt there and he wondered why...

Everyone wished him a happy birthday and informed him they would be having a little party the next day with a group of order members!

about 10 minutes later Mrs.Weasley made Harry some soup and left Harry Hermione and Ron in the kitchen to talk while everyone else went

into the living room for tea and cake. Harry looked at Ron and Hermione who smiled at himwhile he ate his soup.

"wheres-" Harry started but Hermione cut in.
"upstairs,"she replied sadly. Harry looked down at his bowl and frowned

"I had to do it I had to!" Harry said feeling the need to explain this to them.

"Harry Ginny still has feeling for you, you know how determined she gets when she wants something she wont take no for an answer!"Ron informed.

"I know thats what bugs me shes not going to exept it!" Harry said sadly "Thats why I had to do it Voldemort will take our feeling for eachother to his advantage!"

They were all quiet for a minute then Hermione broke the silence.
"When are we going to search for the horcruxes?"

"Im not sure yet...Do you know yet if-"Harry started but Hermione cut him off again.
"Yes it is!"Hermione said referring to Hogwarts.
"Then I geuss ill be alone,"Harry said slightly desapointed yet still glad.
"What the hell are you talking about we're going with you!"Ron said.
"No your not!"Harry said.
"Harry you cant do this by yourself you'll need us there too!" said Hermione.

Harry new that they wouldnt take no for an answer so he just stopped the convorsation there and ate some more soup.

"What are you going to do about Ginny?"Hermione asked
"What do you meen?"Harry asked her uncertainly.
"Shes not going to give up so..."Hermione replied.
"I cant go out with her I care for her to much!"Harry replied.
"Stop being the Hero!"Ron said agitated"Do you know how much she misses you I dont think shes been happy all summer!"
"Ron-"
"No Harry she-"
"Ron I cant go out with her you want her to be safe right?" Harry questioned.
"I want her to be happy and your the only thing that will do that!"Ron replied not looking Harry in the eye.
"When are you going to tell her?"Hermione asked.
"Tell her what?"Harry asked.
"About the horcruxes,Voldemorts past, The prophecy she-"

Ginny entered the kitchen
"What prophecy?"she said directing it to Harry.
"how much did you hear?"Harry asked unsurely.
"about...all of it!"
"oh..."Harry replied looking down at the floor not even daring looking at Ginny.
"What Prophecy...wait the one from 2 years ago?I thought it was-"
"It was,"Harry said not looking up.
"Then how...how did you-"
"Dumbledore,"Harry replied his voice going dry as he said his name.
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Good, but it needs work. IMO, I think it's a big strong for a first chapter.



Hopefully you didn't copy my fanfic, the Malfoy/LV encounter seems awfully familiar.


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Good, but it needs work. IMO, I think it's a big strong for a first chapter.



Hopefully you didn't copy my fanfic, the Malfoy/LV encounter seems awfully familiar.


I made it that strong because well there 17 now Dumbledores dead and everythings changed...and I didnt copy ur fanfic I just put what I thought Voldemort would do to him which I guess other ppl had the same idea...


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okay so heres a little bit of Chapter 3

Chapter 3 The Truth

"Dumbledore...Harry What do you meen how would-"Ginny started but Harry cut her off knowing she would never let this go knowing he would
have to tell her eventually.

"Dumbledore was the one that the prophecy was told to," Harry said still looking at the floor his voice barely above a whisper.

"but who-"
"Trelawney thats why she was even hired because of the

prophecy,"Harry said still not looking up.

"oh..."Ginny said and moved forward and sat down next to Harry Harry

could feel her staring at him and he felt very uncomfortable.

"What are horcruxes?"Ginny asked suddenly breaking the silence

Harry finally looked up at Ron and Hermione who were looking at each

other. Harry new they were thinking the same thing he was should they

tell her? Harry didnt want to he new she'd want to help them but she

couldnt, he couldnt let her come he cared to much about her.

"Just tell me!"Ginny said turning Harrys head so he was looking directly

at her beautiful face but he turned away not wanting to tell her the truth.

Ginny looked at Hermione and Ron but they wouldnt look at her either.

"Ginny go upstairs!"Ron said strictly to Ginny.

"No," she replied simply.

"Yes!"Ron said getting angry not wanting his sister to know anything.

"Not until I know!"She replied looking back at Harry who was now looking

at the floor again.

"Im almost 16!I can know!"Ginny protested.

"You might be 16 but you dont act it crying all the time-"Ron started

but stopped as soon as he saw the look on Ginnys face. Ginny stood up

slapped Ron across the face and ran upstairs and slammed the door shut.

"What was all that about!"Mrs.Weasley said coming into the kitchen seeing

Ron rubbing the red side of his face.

"Just Ginny being Ginny!"Ron replied.

"I think you should all go to bed and Hermione check to see if Ginnys aright will you dear?"

"Yes alright,"Hermione replied and Mrs.Weasley went back into the living room.

"Nice Ron!"Hermione said sharply hitting him across the head

"Ouch that hurt!" Ron yelled at Hermione.

"Well good!"Hermione yelled back.

ill finish the reast of chapter 3 tomorrow or so...


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I just typed the rest of chapter 3 it took me like 40 minutes and then i accidentally deleted it!!!!!!ahhhhhhhh!!!!!!!!!!ill try and re-wright it by thursday!!!!!!!!!


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well i highly highly highly suggest you use Spell check because no offense but it kinda looks bad if you spell things wrong all the time.


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I just typed the rest of chapter 3 it took me like 40 minutes and then i accidentally deleted it!!!!!!ahhhhhhhh!!!!!!!!!!ill try and re-wright it by thursday!!!!!!!!!


ya sry i know spelling isnt my strong suit!


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okay so heres the rest to chapter 3!

"Harry what do you meen Dumbledore?"Ginny asked eagerly.

"He was the one the prophecy was told to,"Harry said still looking at the

floor as Ginny came and sat down next to him.

"ohhh,"Ginny said as she sat down. Everyone was silent for a moment then Ginny spoke.

"What are horcruxes?" she asked looking at Harry who finally lifted his head away from the floor and looked at Ron and Hermione.

Both of them were looking at each other then Harry. He new what they were

thinking the same thing he was.should we tell her? No. Harry made up his mind

they would not tell her it would be dangerous for her to know to dangerous for

some one he cared so much for!

"So..."Ginny said staring each one of them down."Just tell me already!"Ginny said

lifting Harrys head so he was looking at her beautiful face but he turned his head

back to the floor.

"Go to your room!"Ron said his voice barely above a whisper Harry knew Ron

didnt want her to find out this information either.

"No," she replied simply "Not until you tell me!"

"Just go upstairs Ginny!"Ron said his voice raising slightly from before.

"No im almost 16 I can know Ronald!"Ginny yelled at Ron but making sure she didnt yell to loud she didnt want mrs.Weasley to come in.

"Well you sure as hell dont act it!all you do is sit up in your room all day and cry-"Ron started but stopped as soon as Ginny slapped him across the face.

"SHUT UP RONALD!"Ginny yelled at him and ran upstairs.

"What is going on in here?" Mrs.Weasley asked seeing Rons red face and hearing Ginny yelling.

"Nothing mum just Ginny being Ginny!"Ron muttered and mrs.Weasley looked at him coldly.


"I think its time you all go to bed and Hermione Dear will you check on Ginny?and see if shes alright?"

"Yes mrs.Weasley,"Hermione replied and mrs.weasley went back into the living room.

They started walking upstairs and Hermione slapped Ron in the back of the head.

"Ouch!that hurt why'd you do that?"Ron yelled at her.

"Good, you know how emotional Ginny has been it's not her fault her boyfriend broke up with her and Dumbledore-"Hermione started but couldnt finish her sentence.

Harry just kept quiet as they started to argue he was used to there arguing and he started feeling bad after Hermione mentioned him.

They stopped in the middle of the hallway not knowing they were in front of Ginnys room.

They didnt know anything except that they were furious at eachother!

Ginny opened her bedroom door the only one that noticed was Harry but he pretended not to and leaned against the wall not wanting to go through Ron and Hermione in fear of getting slapped.

Ginny new Harry saw her and was ignoring her she new she needed to talk to him.ALONE. and now was the perfect time.

She new Ron and Hermione wouldnt notice and Harry disappeared and she wanted to talk to him desperetely and find out what was going on.

Before Harry new what was happening someone grabbed him and threw him into a room and he landed hard on the floor.

"Ouch what the hell-"Harry started but stopped when he realized it was Ginny who had pulled him in.

She put her hand down helping him get up he took it and then sat on the edge of her bed.

Ginny was pacing the room then stopped and sat down next to Harry who was yet again looking at the floor.

"Whats a horcrux?"Ginny asked after a moment of silence she asked again this time adding a threat "What is a horcrux and if you dont tell me ill...ill hex you!"

Harry looked up at her and replied"your not allowed magic outside of school!"

"Harry do you think I care?"Ginny said and Harry knew that she could care less about ministry rules.

"But you wouldnt hex me Gin its me!"Harry told her.

"How do you know what i would do and what I wouldnt?"Ginny asked raising her wand.

"Gin-"

"Ex-"

"alright,alright!just drop the wand!"Harry said grabbing the wand away from Ginny she smiled pleased with herself and made him tell her.

He made sure he only told her the basics of what a horcrux was not reaveling anything about Voldemort.

But she was to smart and figured it out that he was looking for Voldemorts and that Voldemort had them.

As soon as he finished telling her she said.

"Im coming with you!"

"Oh no your not!your already in enough danger knowing this!"

"Harry do you think I care how much danger im in as long as im with you?" when Ginny said this he new she meant she wanted to get back together but he couldnt let into her again not even if she threatened him.

Gin-"

"No Harry just leave it!Dont give me all of your being a hero stuff im sick of it!"

"Goodnight,"Harry said getting up and walking to the door.

"Goodnight," Ginny replied.

Harry opened the door to the hall way and was about to go upstairs to his and Rons room but stopped dead in his tracks.

"Whoa!"

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tell me what you thought and since ive posted 3 chapters now you can vote or you can wait for a few more chapters!R+R please and ill post more!
I hope the spelling is better I no its not perfect but get over it!


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good i like it but there are alot of spelling errors but i can deal with that.
keep going its great.


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good i like it but there are alot of spelling errors but i can deal with that.
keep going its great.


Yes ive been told by many ppl many places many times as i said before spelling is not my strong suit (u should have seen the grades I made on spelling tests in elementary school!!!)ill try a little harder next post so sorry 2 everyone!


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OK! I know spelling is not your strongest suit but so what just push the spellcehck button and then your good. and by the way mean is spelled >MEAN< like ive told you to use spellcheck and you dont listen.


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OK! I know spelling is not your strongest suit but so what just push the spellcehck button and then your good. and by the way mean is spelled >MEAN< like ive told you to use spellcheck and you dont listen.
Hey, calm down. She has used spellcheck, but it's hard because all the names aren't recognised, and you have to go through every little detail. Also, you made a spelling error in your post. I don't hold anything against that, but I find it a little funny that you make complaints about spelling and then make a typo. I don't mean to be a cow, I'm just saying.

Keep up the good work, Dark. I like the story, and the detail. One improvement I would suggest is that you use exclamation marks a lot. Try to reduce that. Do you have a plot? I'd recomend you write down stuff in a notebook or something, some kind of plan. I tried not doing that and it didn't work out.

I like it a lot; keep writing and you'll get a lot better. When I read over H+G now I'm like "Okay, that was kind of rubbish." And in a few months I'll look over what I wrote now, and think the same thing.


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Hey, calm down. She has used spellcheck, but it's hard because all the names aren't recognised, and you have to go through every little detail. Also, you made a spelling error in your post. I don't hold anything against that, but I find it a little funny that you make complaints about spelling and then make a typo. I don't mean to be a cow, I'm just saying.

Keep up the good work, Dark. I like the story, and the detail. One improvement I would suggest is that you use exclamation marks a lot. Try to reduce that. Do you have a plot? I'd recomend you write down stuff in a notebook or something, some kind of plan. I tried not doing that and it didn't work out.

I like it a lot; keep writing and you'll get a lot better. When I read over H+G now I'm like "Okay, that was kind of rubbish." And in a few months I'll look over what I wrote now, and think the same thing.



Thank you so much for the advice!!!im glad that some people like my story and iluvhpsomuch1_7 I do use spell check but not on these forums but in word because it doesnt reconize some words as Diamonds said like Voldemort!and Diamonds I have written some things down that I hope I will be able to fit well into my story!and thank you again about the advice I shall have a new post up by Sunday...


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