The only problem I saw was the Chapter when Scrimgeour died. I would have done pages 2-15 instead of saying them all. Most paapers would do that. Well i figure it that way. Otherwise the rest if VERY good!
BRI
Brit531Senior Member
That was really good!!
ILU
iluvhp1_7Fourth Year
I thought of another lol. Um it would be neater if you made bigger posts. Like save them up on Word. Cuz it'll be hard to tell whats comments from the story if they're short. Once again It's VERY GOOD!!!