Gender: Female Location: at the second star to the right
pirate poem for class
My assignment is to write a poem about an obsession I have, and as of right now, my obsession is pirates. Will you tell me if this is any good and really makes you feel like it is an obsession of mine? I welcome any and all suggestions.
“Under the Black Flag’s Spell”
To hear the waves whoosh
and waves of wind rush by
amid clangs of bottles
of syrupy rum.
To learn more than one way to tie more than on knot
as the grinding, rubbing rope
consumes the hands with calluses
Anne Bonney
William Dampier
Calico Jack
Mary Read
Henry Morgan
Bartholomew Roberts
James Cook
Francis Drake
Insert name here?
It hurts to be marooned, landlocked,
while longing for wet salt.
Longing to see the porpoise fins
on the way to Portobello
To listen to the sweet unfolding of
roughened paper charts
covered in rolling white veins from use.
To hear the call of adventure
while unsheathing my cutlass
as blood-curdling as a hanging
It hurts to have no eye patch
yet unable to find Tortuga.
Realizing no one cares what the difference is
between buccaneer and corsair
I’ve been shanghaied to their world
And no one can buy me back.
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Gender: Female Location: WheRe JacK is I'M There By His Side
Omg U sold me at the Title....this poem is so great!!!....im assuming it has something to do with Jack being in Davy's Locker yerning to be alive in the World....or at least thats what i got from it! lol.....But i absolutely Loved it!!! Great Job Willo!
SO ****ING AWESOME!!!!!!! the title was so great! i really loved the part where you had all the pirate names and then insert name here?. that was so cool! Great job!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Gender: Female Location: at the second star to the right
Thanks. No suggestions for improvement? PirateDiva, I really wasn't trying to make it about POTC, but I'm so glad you interpreted it a different way than I did. I love that when that happens because it makes the poem/story able to transcend personality and taste differences. I really am not a fan of poetry, so I was hoping people would think it was okay Thanks a lot!
Gender: Female Location: WheRe JacK is I'M There By His Side
Lol...i figured u werent trying to make it potc...lol...cause u mentioned actual Pirate Names and not from the movie....but i still saw it as something Jack would say...lol! Open for Interpretaion!
Gender: Female Location: at the second star to the right
Dudes! I have to critique someone else's poem, and it mentions POTC! I wrote a poem not long ago about how much I love to play the piano and hers is about playing the piano too, so I'm really overcome with the similarities. I think we should invite this girl to join the board. I have her permission to post her poem, so here it is.
Rhythm
by Kylie
"I flirt with ivory and sable
my fingers quest for keys
like Alice after her white rabbit
and Barbossa his cursed Aztec gold."
I won't write the rest because that has to be a copyright violation or something, but I thought that was really neat.
Gender: Female Location: at the second star to the right
I did think of Liz as I wrote those last two lines. I just wanted to use "shanghai" because it's cool.
We talked about her poem in class today and most everyone liked it and liked the reference to Barbossa. "You have the extended metaphor of music being like an adventure or quest and you give us a classic example with Alice, and then a contemporary one we can all relate to."
Gender: Female Location: at the second star to the right
Thanks. The teacher really liked it, too. She said it had a lot of fresh images and she could see why it would be such a good obsession. She then started talking about how she was "dragged" to the premiere of DMC and she didn't think she would be able to get in, but she did and she loved it AND she mentioned how much she loves "Johnny Depp and Keira Knightley together in it."
the poem was really beautiful... i liked how it felt free, the pacing was good. i really, really enjoyed it. i know what a fabulous writer you are, but you are truly the jack of all trades there! brilliant.
for the record, the 'calico jack' line was savory... oh anything JACK!!! hahaha
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