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TheOnes2
I am The Ones
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X-men 4
EDIT - look for restart
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TheOnes2
I am The Ones
Gender: Unspecified
Location: UK |
Ok, ive decided to restart as the begining wasnt that great.
Opening Logo’s
The screen is filled with darkness. Then in the centre of the screen a white light appears, as it grows brighter, a strange voice is heard, like pro X but deeper
“Tragedy. It is an element of life. One we must all learn to face. It is only natural for us to bury it into the past, kept as secrets and forgotten only to be uncovered. But some secrets were never meant to be found…”
The music kick’s in with the X-men theme tune as we are rocketed into the light, blue wisps form on the screen creating DNA strands more of these strands are created as the background is now filled with red smoke. The blue DNA begins to be filled with a transparent liquid we are sent into the blue liquid as the words:
X-MEN 4: DAWN OF RECKONING
Are embossed from the rushing liquid, the words atomise as the liquid turns black and we are rocketed out. 2 doors slam in front of the titles forming a metal circle with a blue light in the middle. The camera pan’s into the blue light as the centre of the door turns around
Int. Setting: School Gym
We are in a Gym, clearly redecorated into a disco as teenager’s all in formal wear are dancing like there’s no tomorrow. The camera pan’s down to reveal a 15 year old kid. He has jet black hair and hazel brown eyes. He is lounging against the wall on the far side, alone. He is clearly focused on something in the crowd. We get the view of this lonely child and we find out he is focussed on a girl. She has light brown hair and dark blue eyes, dressed in a white dress clearly made of a light fabric. He starts to set of into a daydream when someone call’s to him
Teen:
Hey Scott.
Scott is broken out of his fantasy and turns to see his mate
Scott:
Hi Greg
Greg:
What’s a charming young man like you doing all on his own
Scott:
If you want to dance just ask
Greg:
Hey, you may be handsome but I have better tastes, girls for instance
Scott and Greg laugh in unison, both dismissing the previous comments as a joke
Scott:
Nah,
Scott becomes mesmerised by the same girl again, Greg looks in Scott’s eye view and sighs
Greg
Look, we all know you love Olivia, just ask her for a dance. You got nothing to loose.
Scott:
If it’s that simple you ask her
Greg:
Fine, your loss mate
Scott's eyeline follows Greg walking up to Olivia and immediately begins to regret it. He starts walking toward a door. He walks into it and is in the men’s bathroom.
Int. Men’s room
Scott runs the tap and cups his hand under the water, he puts his hands to his face submerging his face in water, he looks at the mirror as the water slowly drips of. The door bursts open and breaks Scott’s concentration.
Scott:
Stop doing that!
Greg:
Sorry, I just humiliated my self
Scott (smirking):
Why? What happened?
Greg:
I asked her to dance, the nerves got to me and I ran for it
Scott laughs at Greg; Greg is starting to get annoyed
Scott:
Not so easy is it?
Greg:
Well at least I tried, what have you done about it?
Scott:
Well…..um…
Greg:
Oh stop being an immature prick and move
Scott inhales and exhales deeply, he walks to the door and stops
Greg:
What’s wrong? Don’t tell me you’re nervous already?
Scott:
No, my eyes hurt for some reason.
Greg:
Happens to me all the time, try going to bed earlier.
Scott:
No, it’s not like that, this really hurts.
Greg:
Oh for god sake go on.
Scott begins to scream in agony, his eyes are starting to become red
Greg:
Dude, how much did you smoke?
Scott:
I didn’t smoke anything
Scott’s eyes are beginning to glow red by now
Scott:
ARGHH! IM BLINDED
Greg pushes Scott out the door into the disco.
Int. Disco
Scott looks to Olivia. Just then a powerful red beam escapes his eyes at a tremendous force it pushes him back a few cm. Scott hears a loud, echoing scream throughout the gym from many people. He closes his eyes and duck’s. He begins to hear a number of cry’s and yells from many people. In the midst of the panic, he picks up a number of voices:
Man 1:
Oh my god! What did that freak do to her?
Man 2:
Olivia!!!
Man 3:
No, don’t go. Please!
Scott realises he has injured Olivia. He screams in tremendous angony
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Jul 22nd, 2006 02:19 AM |
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TheOnes2
I am The Ones
Gender: Unspecified
Location: UK |
Part 2 (this is not quite as good as i hoped it would be, but further comments and advice would be greatly appreciated):
20 years later:
Ext: Forrest
A middle aged man, with one arm over his eyes and the other arm out is staggering through a forest, yet trying to walk forward, trying to remember what happened to him…
Flashback:
Scott and Jean are kissing. Scott’s face begins to bubble. Scott opens his eyes, the beam’s come rushing back to him with the same pain he experienced that night 20 years ago. Red optic blasts are propelled from Scott’s eyes and fire toward Jean’s face. With split second timing, Jean puts up a telekinetic barrier around herself. The force from the beam at such close range propels both Jean and Scott in opposite directions in an aura of bright red energy. Jean lands on the floor by the lake unconscious; Scott is sent flying into the forest and hit his head on a conveniently placed rock. He too is unconscious
End Flashback
Scott remembers the recent incidents. A tear somehow manages to escape his eye's. Secretly, under his breath
Scott:
No... Jean…What have I done to you
Int. Xavier Mansion- Kitchen
Students are enthusiastically running around in there pyjamas, bumping into each other and squeezing past to get breakfast. They are all laughing and are using there mutant power’s to there advantage to get food. Kitty Phases through everyone pushing and shoving and steadily walks through the crowd. We cut to Rogue and Bobby, who are on a sofa in the room opposite, in each other’s arms.
Bobby (to the students in the kitchen):
Quiet in there!
None of them respond. Bobby sighs and stretches his arm out to the kitchen. A beam of ice blasts from his hand in a crashing sound. The ice stops just inside and forms a wall as a replacement to the door. The noise is heavily reduced but we can hear student’s playful laughter turn to sounds of distress and cursing at Bobby. Bobby turns to Rogue and leans in for a kiss. They both stare into each others eyes as they draw nearer. There lips are hovering over each other. They are both distracted at the same time at the sound of a soft *swish* sound coming from the ice wall. Kitty Pryde comes out of the ice wall
Kitty:
Bobby, that was uncalled for.
Kitty sees Bobby and Rogue in each others arms but decides not to mention it
Bobby:
Kitty, could we have a little privacy please?
Kitty looks around in confusion as there clearly was never any privacy with all the students walking down the hallway. She looks at bobby in disgust
Kitty:
Sure, whatever
Kitty walks off angrily. Bobby gets up and runs after her, leaving Rogue looking on. Bobby grabs kitty on the shoulder.
Bobby:
Kitty…
Kitty’s shoulder phases through Bobby’s hand.
Bobby:
Kitty wait,
Kitty slowly stops and turns around. Her eyes are clearly filling with tears.
Bobby:
What is wrong with you? Rogue took the cure for me. I can’t just dump her now
Kitty:
Or maybe you loved her all along and I was just a substitute
Bobby:
Don’t think that
Kitty:
Why not, it’s the truth
Bobby:
Come on Kitty, you know that’s not true.
Kitty:
Well you haven’t shown me anything to prove you love me. Ever since she’s returned you’ve just been spending time with her and not…
Bobby grab’s kitty and kisses her. We cut to Rogue, looking on in a sad, yet horrified state. She starts to cry, gets up and walk’s off. Bobby and Kitty finish kissing and gradually separate. Kitty looks down and cracks a smile. Bobby strokes her chin and leans to her face
Bobby:
Im just doing it for Rogues benefit.
Kitty attempts to say something but just walks off. Bobby turns around and sees Rogue gone. He runs back into the room and looks around. He closes his eyes and puts his hands up to his face.
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Jul 23rd, 2006 12:04 AM |
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TheOnes2
I am The Ones
Gender: Unspecified
Location: UK |
Comments? Do you even like it?
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Jul 23rd, 2006 08:14 PM |
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TheOnes2
I am The Ones
Gender: Unspecified
Location: UK |
Part 3 (please give comments):
Ext. Mansion
The camera pan’s down across the school. As it pan’s down, 2 headstones come into frame. The tombstones read: Scott Summer’s and Jean Grey. A shadow is cast over Jean Grey’s headstone, we cut to Logan looking down. His face is filled with sorrow and grief. He lay’s a flower on Jean Grey’s headstone. He is about to say something but the grief overcomes him and he start’s crying. A voice from behind him surprises him
Voice:
Well, I never thought I’d see the day when an animal show’s emotion
Wolverine draw’s his claws in anger. we see his face, clearly pissed. He turns around to attack but is frozen in shock when he sees who said those painful words. We don’t see anyone, we are focused on Wolverine. Wolverine retracts his claws slowly, Wolverine is scared to death.
Voice:
Good Boy
The screen goes black, 2 eyelid shapes open on the screen. We see a forest in those eyes, coated with a red hue. At this moment we hear a massive concussive blast rip through. We cut to a forest normally to see tons of trees get uprooted by a red beam of energy. We cut to Cyclops shooting a red beam from his eyes. He closes his eye’s and the beam of energy is gone.
Scott:
Good news, No one was there. Bad news….No one was there
He continues to walk forward but he hears voices behind him
Man:
Come on Jane, that light was this way
Scott turns to the estimated direction of the voices. He lets out a powerful scream…
Scott:
HELP ME!!!!
He waits for an answer but nothing comes. He continues to stagger but he hears someone running to him.
Man:
Oh my god, are you ok?
Scott:
Yes, please…take me home…I live…
Man:
No, the only place you’re going is the hospital.
Scott:
No! I can’t. Im blind!
Man:
Must have been that strange red light we saw. Who could do something like that
Woman:
You poor thing, we’ll take you there, wont we Geoff?
Man:
Yea, sure
Scott knows better than to fire at humans, at least there trying to help.
Int. mansion
Bobby is running past students in the hallway
Bobby:
Rogue! Rogue!
He runs down the hallway. He gets to a window and see’s Rogue walking down the path to the main gates of the X-mansion, carrying her bag of personal items, tears coming from her eyes. Bobby, after seeing this, run’s down stairs, hoping to get to the main exit in time. Bobby meets Kitty on the way.
Kitty:
Hey Bobby…
Bobby run’s through Kitty in a rush
Kitty:
Why are you rushing?
Bobby stops, turns and answers
Bobby:
I’ve got to get to Rogue
Bobby turns back and runs off
Kitty (under her breath):
So much for being around for her benefit
Bobby gets outside. He yells:
Bobby:
ROGUE!!!
She’s nowhere in sight. Bobby turns slowly and walks back into the X-mansion.
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Jul 24th, 2006 04:59 PM |
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TheOnes2
I am The Ones
Gender: Unspecified
Location: UK |
Well its been through lots of rewrites but here it is (finally)
Part 4:
Int. Hospital
Scott is lying on a bed with doctors tending to him.
Doctor 1:
What’s the problem?
Doctor 2:
He was hit with a laser and is now blind. He also has some head injury
Doctor 1:
Concussion?
Doctor 2:
We can’t tell, he won’t let us near him
The first doctor walks over to Scott
Doctor 1:
What’s your name?
Scott (lying):
David Sunders
Doctor 1:
Ok Dave im going to take a look at your eyes for any signs of concussion
Scott:
NO!!! DON’T!!
The Doctor opens Scott’s eyes and is blown back by a powerful red beam. The beams smashed open the ceiling and brought the debris down around them.
Doctor 2:
IT’S A MUTANT!
Doctor 3:
KILL HIM!
Scott gets up, not knowing where he’s going. He listened to where the angry doctors were and runs to the opposite direction. He runs into a wall, he open’s his eyes and blasts a hold in the wall, He runs through it and the terrain is changed, he is outside, He makes a run for it with no visual whatsoever.
Int. Bus
The camera pans over passengers. As it gets to the back of the bus, a familiar face comes into view. It’s Rogue. He eyes are filled with tears. She is in deep thought but is shaken out of it when the bus violently pulls to a halt. She looks out the window and see’s a corner shop. Hungry, she steps out of the bus and walks into the shop. It only has 2 people browsing round the shop. She reaches into her pocket and feel’s around for some change. She doesn’t have any money. Slowly she moves toward the stack of fruit. She picks it up and puts it into her pocket. She walks out but is stopped by the shop keeper
Shop Keeper:
Hey! Are you going to pay for that?
The shop keeper grabs Rogue’s hand to stop her from leaving but is frozen when he touched her hand. Veins are now being exposed on his face, he is gasping for air. Rogue realises what’s happening and pull’s away. The shop keeper slumps to the ground spasming. Rogue looks in horror at the shop keeper, she realises one thing. The cure isn’t permanent. She runs out in shock. A 6 ft.1 man with red eyes follows her.
Int. Mansion
We see a distraught Kitty sitting on the sofa clearly crying, being comforted by Peter Rasputin. We cut to Storm, Beast, Angel and Bobby sitting in front of the TV watching the news.
News Announcer:
The body of an Ancient Egyptian ruler has been uncovered today, amazingly, still preserved. It is being escorted to the National History Museum right now.
During this announcement, a woman enters the Mansion, dressed in white. She surveys the area and spots the X-men watching TV.
Woman:
Ororo!
Storm turns around, along with the other X-men
Storm:
Emma? Why are you back here?
Emma:
I heard Scott was dead, I had to come and see for myself.
Beast walks up to Storm and Emma.
Beast:
Who’s this?
Storm:
Emma Frost, she was an old classmate of Scott and graduated and moved on. Scott stayed here to teach though.
Emma stretches out her hand for a handshake to Beast. Beast reluctantly returns it
News Announcer on TV:
And this just in, mutants attack a hospital.
All of the mutants in the mansion immediately crowds round the TV.
News announcer:
The mutant was believed to be a human and was taken in for care. The mutant then fired at the doctors with, what eye witness’s claim: Red lasers from his eyes. He then broke down a wall and escaped
All of the Mutants are in shock with the report; they all gradually come to the same conclusion. Scott Summers is alive
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Jul 27th, 2006 02:27 PM |
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TheOnes2
I am The Ones
Gender: Unspecified
Location: UK |
Part 5:
Ext. City’s streets
Rogue is walking down a street filled with people, still in shock of what has happened. She turns a corner and ends up in a dark alley way. She puts her back up to a wall and slides down, her knees are up to her face, She puts her head on them and starts crying. At the end of the alleyway, a tall stranger with red eyes in a long trench coat walks down and stops in front of Rogue. Rogue looks up with curiosity.
Man:
What’s the matter Cherie?
Rogue turns away, still in tears
Man:
Don’t feel bad, a fine turkey like you shouldn’t feel bad.
Rogue turns back, her face is red. In a stuttered voice she asks
Rogue:
W…wh…who are you?
Man:
The name’s Remy LeBeau. Me mate’s call me Gambit
Rogue:
I’d like to be alone Mr LeBeau
Gambit:
For what? What you did to that shop keep was mighty fine
Rogue looks up with a horrified look on her face. She stands up and lifts up her hand to Gambit’s face
Gambit:
You wouldn’t hurt me
Rogue:
What makes you so sure?
Gambit:
You’re not the kind of couyon that goes around killing people for fun
Rogue turns around and puts her hands up to her face. She turns back.
Rogue:
I guess it doesn’t matter to you that I was cured of this curse and wouldn’t endanger people again
Gambit is getting pissed. He pushes her against the wall hard
Gambit:
Being a mutant isn’t a curse, it’s an opportunity
Rogue:
Well you seem pretty positive about it, what can you do that’s worth being a mutant?
Gambit pulls out a playing card from a pocket inside his trench coat.
Rogue:
A playing card? What you work in a casino or something
Gambit gives Rogue a nasty look. The card spontaneously starts to emit yellow aura, like fire but not as violent or bright. Gambit looks around, he see’s a bin. He flicks the card in the direction of the bin, the card fly’s forward. As it hits the bin is gets blown away in a devastating explosion. The sound is ricocheted down the alleyway.
Gambit:
You like?
Rogue clearly does but doesn’t want to give gambit his satisfaction of pleasing her.
Gambit:
Come on, I can take you to a place where you can be accepted and not feared.
Rogue:
Forget it. I already know a place where im accepted.
Gambit:
You do? Then why, pretty lady, are you not at that place right now?
Rogue looks to Gambit and starts to think about his offer
Ext. Mansion
Storm is walking down the garden. She looks up to the sky and her eyes turn white, the sky turns cloudy. Rain drops start to fall down in small numbers. Then suddenly massive droplets of water start flying down like a tropical storm. Voices from inside the mansion start to ensue:
Student 1:
Thanks Miss Monroe
Student 2:
Yea it was too hot
Storm:
Enjoy it while you can, im just watering my plants.
Int. Mansion
We cut to Kitty Pryde and Piotr Rasputin (Colossus) sitting on a couch. Kitty is just starting to stop crying. Piotr, however, still has his arm around Kitty for comfort.
Kitty:
No one understands me.
Piotr:
Don’t me so sure, I think I do
Kitty:
Oh come on Pete, how much do you understand me. I can’t even keep my own boyfriend.
Piotr:
I understand you because you’re just like me: Quiet, smart, resourceful.
Kitty:
And how many girlfriends have you lost?
Piotr looks away for a moment then looks back at kitty.
Piotr:
All im saying is, I know what you’re going through, and if you need someone to talk to, im here for you.
Piotr leans in and kisses Kitty lightly on her forehead. Kitty smiles at him and Piotr walks off.
Int. Museum
We are now in a museum filled to the brim with fantastic artefacts and historical monuments. We pan through it and 2 men come into view
Man 1:
So when is it coming
Man 2:
Soon, oh man I can’t wait to analyse it
Man 1:
Why?
Man 2:
Because this isn’t any normal mummy, that corpse has just not rotted, and no one understands why
Man 1:
Well Egyptians have been second to none when it comes to preserving their dead
The second man casts a weird look at him. He is about to say something but is interrupted by a 3rd man running down the opposite end.
Man 3:
Doctor Essex!
The 2nd man turns and looks at the 3rd man
Man 3:
It’s arrived
Essex:
Good.
With that, the second man walks of down the hallway with the 3rd man, only to have the 1st man call after him.
Man 1:
Nathaniel, are you sure it’s safe?
Nathaniel continues walking down but still replies
Nathaniel:
I’ve been studying human genetics for years. Nothing can still be alive after 5000 years. I’ll be fine.
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