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iKinneas
Black Swordsman
Gender: Male Location: Aincrad II |
The Ripper's Cuts
Scarlet Crimson, Bloody Red
She sat awake one soundless night.
The room was dark, devoid of light.
Her vision blurred, eyes full of tears.
Today she suffered all her fears.
Her boyfriend gone, her family dead.
These thoughts all echoed in her head.
She never flinched nor felt the knife.
All feelings gone, as was her life.
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Jun 30th, 2007 01:19 AM |
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TheMercurial
Unmythical mortal
Gender: Male Location: Ireland |
Nice, it has a really good rhythm to it!
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Jun 30th, 2007 01:35 AM |
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iKinneas
Black Swordsman
Gender: Male Location: Aincrad II |
Thanx. I wrote it a few weeks back when my sister was contemplating suicide and such. Made her read it and she completely dropped the idea. Anyway, thanx again. I'll add more as I come up with them.
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Jun 30th, 2007 04:40 PM |
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vivando-loca
untitled
Gender: Unspecified Location: Airports to Amsterdam... |
awesome poem! i love clever rhyming schemes.
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Jul 1st, 2007 09:25 PM |
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iKinneas
Black Swordsman
Gender: Male Location: Aincrad II |
thanks... i'll post more soon... i've got writer's block...
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Jul 3rd, 2007 05:59 PM |
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Selphie
you teasing like you do
Gender: Unspecified Location: The Land of Bernie Sanders |
Wow, that's amazing Jacc.
I usually don't like other people's poetry, but this was definetly amazing.
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riding high on love's true bluish light
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Oct 24th, 2007 12:00 PM |
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Syren
dreaming
Gender: Female Location: every which way but loose |
I hope your sister's feeling better now, good job
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Oct 24th, 2007 12:03 PM |
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XvampbenjiiX666
Commander Cadaver
Gender: Male Location: Whiskey River |
kick ass jacc...i love the whole thing i can relate to it too...when writer's block is done seriuosly send more
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Thank you Scythe. "Take one last look at your shining Heaven, Imperius. For soon, nothing of it shall remain, but my laughter..."
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Oct 24th, 2007 12:34 PM |
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iKinneas
Black Swordsman
Gender: Male Location: Aincrad II |
Jesicka, Dearest
Dedicated in loving memory to Jesicka Lorraine Donovan, lost but never forgotten. May you find peace in your passing.
She sat with eyes crimson as blood
Inside her mind, drowned in a flood
The room bright blue, though looked quite grey
Today itself seemed far away
The needles scattered 'cross the floor
Seemed to affect her nevermore
As all drew dark and breathing ceased
She felt her soul itself was leased
Hell's Reject or Heaven's Outcast
It seemed her pain would always last
Father beat her day and night
Mother never put up a fight
She felt the sweet embrace of fate
And then, she left behind the hate
The fears all gone, the pain no more
She'll feel their anger... nevermore.
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Oct 24th, 2007 05:54 PM |
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The Big O
The Original O
Gender: Male Location: In the midst of it all |
This is some good stuff. It was like I really felt what was going on with Jesicka. You did a good job. I'm sorry for your lost, though.
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Still looking for that sig....
In the mean time, I never DID see that anime where I unintentionally got my name from. Is it any good
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Oct 24th, 2007 06:40 PM |
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~Forever*Alone~
Empress
Gender: Female Location: EveryWhere And NoWhere |
its sweet. you are good.
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does this work?
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