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Paradoxical
S.T.A.R.S.
Gender: Male Location: everywhere |
Paradoxical's Poetry
PAPAYA
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There's a pappaya hangin from a mango tree
it seems so lonely
but only... to me
seperated from pappaya friends
left only with strange mango things
presuming it will never be alright
until on day when it is old and ripe
there was a man picking fruits
he says, "I can't wait to eat you"
so pappaya sits in fear and anger
why should pappaya diserve this danger
and then slowly....
..he..dies..
(odd^)
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Feb 20th, 2008 11:49 AM |
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Paradoxical
S.T.A.R.S.
Gender: Male Location: everywhere |
wealth is nothing
Some people tell you
they tell you things
that are about
life and money
they say that these
go hand and hand
but don't you dare
trust any o' them
'cause you should know
that even though
they have money
they have nothing
Some people tell you
they tell you things
that are about
life and money
they say that these
are seperate
but let me tell you
this is not true
because with money
people love you
These people tell you
that you can buy
a brand new home family or wife
and this is true
but what is the price
the price is your soul
it goes down in a hole
at the bottom there is pit
and you were
gets stuck in it
Those people tell you
that you can lose
your very soul
I say it's bull
with my money I have what I want
I go to church so do you know what
that makes me perfect
they say thats not true
so everyone asks you
what person are you
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Feb 20th, 2008 11:59 AM |
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Paradoxical
S.T.A.R.S.
Gender: Male Location: everywhere |
What can you do
You can do alot without doin anything
you can do nothin and still do something
is trying really worth it
if not
is lyin really worse then
there can be a million causes and no damned effect
and even more effects, havin no cause
not everything that happens is always supposed to
something can be nothin
and nothing can something
that's just the way world turns
*(comments appreciated *
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Feb 28th, 2008 12:31 AM |
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King of Blades
The King
Gender: Male Location: The South |
I like the papaya, made me laugh. the third poem has a good story/message and I like the second poem though I don't like it at the same time. It's true and yet false, should be called "non-contradicting"
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Feb 28th, 2008 11:34 PM |
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Paradoxical
S.T.A.R.S.
Gender: Male Location: everywhere |
thanks
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Feb 29th, 2008 01:13 AM |
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Sweet Escape
Paparazzi
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I like the message in the third one a lot, but the poor grammer is a little distracting. To become a better writer, you might want to invest a little time into the minute details, such as grammer.
But a really good start. Goodluck
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Feb 29th, 2008 02:16 AM |
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Paradoxical
S.T.A.R.S.
Gender: Male Location: everywhere |
Thanks for the advice! I'll definately work on that.
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Mar 15th, 2008 04:58 PM |
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