I came up with this in English while I was supposed to be taking notes. I only consider it a poem insofar as it rhymes. You judge it. I'm interested to see what you think.
A watchman stands upon a ship,
A pistol rests upon his hip,
He's on the deck on a cloudy morn;
His posture, straght; expression: forlorn.
His lover's who he's thinking of,
A true beauty from above.
He sees her within his mind's eye,
Her morose stare and passive sigh.
She haunts him in his dreams at night.
Her image follows a flash of light,
But disappears, as quick as it came,
And her face is never quite the same.
The expression remains as a photograph,
But the image changes from wheat to chaff
As creases appear on her once smooth face,
And a hobble conquers her former grace.
What a curiosity
Which befuddles our man at sea
To see his lover age one year
per every passing day
...His thought escapes and floats away...
A watchman stands upon a ship.
A pistol rests upon his hip.
He's on the deck on a cloudy morn,
His posture, straight; expression: forlorn.
40 fathoms below...
__________________ Hey papi, Hey ese, Hey whiteboy,
Tell me what you need!
What's good? Talk to me. Work with me, man!
I got everything!
Right, I was saying that, at the moment this poem is looking more like a "poem". Are there any areas that you think need special improvement or just the whole thing?
__________________ Hey papi, Hey ese, Hey whiteboy,
Tell me what you need!
What's good? Talk to me. Work with me, man!
I got everything!
I jumped through your hoops of fire,
Driven by a dark desire.
To see your pale face in the dead of night,
To learn your ways of wisdom and flight.
And now, Mr. Owl, a question I propose
To you in the most direct form of prose:
Mr. Owl, how many licks does it take to get to the center of a tootsie pop?
Written By: Tom Kelsey
Poet Laureate of the imagination of Tom Kelsey
And those bastards can't take that from me! MWAHAHAHA!
__________________ Hey papi, Hey ese, Hey whiteboy,
Tell me what you need!
What's good? Talk to me. Work with me, man!
I got everything!
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Jan 27th, 2011 09:22 PM
