Its called Clashing Forces: Reclamation, its gonna be 246 pages long, and it should be mid-summer!! thanks for checking it out!
__________________ Witness the power of the human spirit in Clashing Forces - Reclamation! A novel by Wesley Belk (that's me!) Here's a sneak peek of the book! The power of the Human Spirit should never be underestimated!Clashing Forces Check the site out for more details!
I enjoyed the read, but some sentences didn't sound right to me. They read as run-on sentences. For example: "The last one stop, and turns to Warren’s direction, he sinks lower into the bushes, he pulls his cloth hood further onto his head. It scans the immediate area."
Personally, from a writers stand point, I would have written it like this: "The last one stopped, and it glanced in Warren's direction. Warren sank lower into the bushes. He pulled his cloth hood further over his head. The cyborg scanned the immediate proximity for lifeforms."
Your chapters also read from a third person point of view. Is this your intention? I'm pleased you've gotten published. Wish I would.
Hey man that's great thanks for the feedback, you're like the first to give good feedback like that, and yeah most of my stuff is like, its mean to be like fastpaced, like you're watching unfold like movie, that's how I see it in my head, and I try to describe it as best as I can. Sometimes it comes out all at one like that, and I want the commas, because I want it to be as fastpaced to everyone else. To me, a period stops the action, and starts it again with the next sentence. So if the action or series of actions is happeing that quickly and that intense, then let it flow! Although I have made it a bit more coherent in the second part of the trilogy, which I should be finishing up here in about 3 or 4 months! Thanks again for the input, I sincerely appreciate it.
__________________ Witness the power of the human spirit in Clashing Forces - Reclamation! A novel by Wesley Belk (that's me!) Here's a sneak peek of the book! The power of the Human Spirit should never be underestimated!Clashing Forces Check the site out for more details!
Oh, sorry I just now saw that you posted here, and also sent the PM, so i didn't know. But anywho, yeah the book is "out", but I'm having trouble getting it in bookstores. I plan on getting a new publisher for my next two books, perhaps they will be more helpful in gettint the book into bookstores so it can be available everywhere!!
__________________ Witness the power of the human spirit in Clashing Forces - Reclamation! A novel by Wesley Belk (that's me!) Here's a sneak peek of the book! The power of the Human Spirit should never be underestimated!Clashing Forces Check the site out for more details!
thank you! Any feedback is appreciative, and positive feedback is admired! Thank you again! And just wait 'til next year when Clashing Forces-Battles 2: Preservation & 3: Revitilization hit the shelves!
__________________ Witness the power of the human spirit in Clashing Forces - Reclamation! A novel by Wesley Belk (that's me!) Here's a sneak peek of the book! The power of the Human Spirit should never be underestimated!Clashing Forces Check the site out for more details!
My advice is let the writing stage how the action happens and not the punctuation; the run-on sentences distract from what's happening and the last thing you want is your readers annoyed at you. The present tense also seems awkward. But otherwise, it's good--the action is well-done, and I wish you best of luck in your future endeavours.
What book stores can i buy Clashing Forces at? And I know this is a personal question, but I was just wondering how old you were? I wish I could get my stories published...
Unfortunately the only place you can purchase the book is online either at Amazon.com or at publishamerica.com. I'm 21, and it wasn't as hard as thought PublishAmerica was the first publisher i sent my stuff to and they approved. I guess it was luck, or they actually liked the book, who knows? But just keep trying!
__________________ Witness the power of the human spirit in Clashing Forces - Reclamation! A novel by Wesley Belk (that's me!) Here's a sneak peek of the book! The power of the Human Spirit should never be underestimated!Clashing Forces Check the site out for more details!
I think the material inside of it is okay, but it seems familiar somehow. The way its written is way to fast paced fora book, you need to slow down, build up some kind of setting or tension. The action scenes were described with no direction or thought out plan so they seemed like a childish representation of a fighting sequence.
"The last one stopped, menacing in its overall appearance and glanced unnervingly in Warrens direction. Warren sank lower into the bushes making himself small as possible and waited. It was torture. The silence tore through the surroundings as the cyborg emitted a slight sound and a blinding beam erupted towards him. Warren quickly ducked and pulled is camo-cloth hood tightly over his head and activated the sensor disrupter hidden within his belt. The cyborg scanned for life forms as it surveyed the area around him. Minutes seemed like hours for Warren as he fought to steady his breathing. Finally the cyborg's light blinked off and it stalked off, disatisfied at not catching any prey."
Wow that's really great man! Say do you have any books published. Yeah I know my writing still has a lot of work, but I feel I'm maturing along with the writing and story. I'm just a novice to all this author stuff. I'm sure one i get this trilogy started, and get a few more books written, I'll be a pro, besides I'm still young and still have plenty of time to get experience. Thank you for the feedback it was really good!!
__________________ Witness the power of the human spirit in Clashing Forces - Reclamation! A novel by Wesley Belk (that's me!) Here's a sneak peek of the book! The power of the Human Spirit should never be underestimated!Clashing Forces Check the site out for more details!
No unfortunately, still just writing short stories in biro. I probably need to find some publisher who will look at my work because I do want to join the author ranks and see my name in between the writing greats.
I'll post some stuff of my own when I have the time and let you read it.
that sounds, look forward to seeing some stuff in print from you! Good luck with everything, fellow writer!
__________________ Witness the power of the human spirit in Clashing Forces - Reclamation! A novel by Wesley Belk (that's me!) Here's a sneak peek of the book! The power of the Human Spirit should never be underestimated!Clashing Forces Check the site out for more details!
HEY WESLEY! THIS IS AMBER HENDERSON (BURKHALTER). I HEARD YOU HAD PUBLISHED A BOOK AND WAS SOOOOO EXCITED FOR YOU! I HAVE BEEN WRITTING BUT HAVNT FINISHED YET. THIS IS AMAZING!!! YOU GO BOY! YOU CAN EMAIL ME AT [email protected]. AGAIN THIS IS GREAT, AND GOOD LUCK WITH YOUR SALES!!! AMBER
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Apr 26th, 2004 06:08 PM
hi wesley!
