Futility
I try to tell you
but you don’t listen
you don’t understand
what is going on
you never give up
even when you’re wrong
making no sense
raising your voice
I simply want to
scream. I want it to
stop, but you keep
going, never stopping
you say things
that with never be true
I have no clue what I
can do to make
the whole thing stop
Crushing me
The walls draw tight
around me as I weep
my only refuge from the pain
are my tears
A pillow to scream in
through the anger
a pillow to cry in
when the sorrow comes back
a pillow cannot comfort
a child bereaved
Slowly I cry myself to sleep
Who?
Who will be the one
Who shows us the way to the light?
Who will be the one
Who ends the neverending fight?
Who will be the one
to finally open our eyes?
Who will be the one
to shake the stars from the skies?
Who will be the one
who stops us all from
keeping the freedom
under a blanket of lies?
Wow U know ur stuff mate I wouldnt b able 2 do any of that even if i wanted 2
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[SPOILER - highlight to read]: You see, when we left Jack, marooned on the ship with a cuffed wrist and a hungry kraken, we forgot one very important thing mate-he's Captain Jack Sparrow... savvy?
If I had to make a constructive criticism, I'd say the lines are too short... But that's ok if it's just you're style... It's just that I'm not used to it.
Yeah, I know, I write short lines. But my Creative Writing teacher likes it, and it works for me. I guess it's just my style. Once (when doing a critique on Lonely Refuge), she said that I "said so much with so little."
Yeah.......as most of you might know, I'm really a peppy, very happy guy. I'm always that way, in fact. You'd be hard-prssed to find me at a time when I'm not in a good mood. I suppose that means I had issues in my childhood, but whatever.
Anyway, despite my always-happy mood, my poems are so serious. And I know I could write hilarious poems if I wanted to. But when I right, it's like all of the pain, or hatred, or whatever unhappy things I'm feeling flows from my hand onto the paper. It's a great experience.
Apr 24th, 2004 06:57 AM
it sux
