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When Galaxies Collide
Part 4 - Boarding Parties
Aboard the U.S.S. Zuhkov, NCC-62136
Security Officer - “Captain. Enemy shuttles have latched on and breached out hull. Boarding parties have entered our ship.”
Captain – “Full security response. Lets show these boys the way off our ship. Set phasers to MAXIMUM!”
Storm Troopers poured into the ship showering the halls with blaster fire. Plums of smoke billowed from burning panels as the blaster fire ripped into the corridors. As team one filed out of their shuttle they lined the sides of the hall in anticipation of an enemy response. None came. Slowly the storm troopers began to look around, puzzled that they had met no enemy response. They peered through the smoke and slowly began to move forward. Their forward progress was suddenly stopped by the front troops bouncing into a security force field that had been energized the moment the hull was breached. The rest of the troops backed off as the forward troops placed charges around the corridor.
The corridor imploded as the Imperial charges ripped through the bulkheads and disabled the force shield. Phaser fire erupted from the far end of the hall as the Storm Troopers pressed forward. The front two troopers dropped limp as several blasts from phaser rifles impacted their armor plating. Orange red beams lanced forward from hand held phasers at the following Storm Troopers but merely glanced off their polished armor. Several more hand phasers joined the attack and the combined power was to much for the armor to withstand and blasted the trooper to his knees.
Imperial troops opened up once again with their blaster carbines. Super charged gas energy bolts reigned down on the Federation security forces cutting them to pieces as the troopers pressed forward. More phaser bolts pulsed out from phaser rifles and dropped trooper after trooper. Slowly the phaser bolts ceased as the Imperial blaster fire overwhelmed the small security details that charged to meet the challenge.
Minutes after boarding the six Imperial teams had rendezvoused and combined forces. After a short reorganization the boarding party split into three groups and headed off toward engineering, tactical, and the bridge. This ship was to be captured intact.
Security Chief – “Captain. They have taken out our security details. The few remaining security personnel between them and us is not going to be enough to even slow them down.”
Captain – “What about the security fields? Can we activate them along every corridor?”
Security Chief – “They already are Sir, but they are taking them out with some sort of explosive charges.”
Captain – “Very Well. Helm lock in a course for the nearest star base.”
Helm – “Course laid in Sir.”
Captain – “Engage at maximum impulse. Computer lockout all command and engineering functions, authorization Z01109.”
Captain – “Computer, flood all decks with haloron gas. Authorization Z01109.”
Moments later haloron gas flooded the decks of the ship, knocking out any living creature.
Onboard the U.S.S. Niagara, NCC-58800
Security Chief – “Sir, the first group of Imperial Troops have entered the turbo shaft.”
Captain – “Computer, verify command function lockout.”
Computer – “Lockout Verified.”
Captain – “Defensive perimeter. Form up and take cover at bridge center. All weapons to full power. Hand phasers work as groups. Those of you with rifles lay down covering fire. Nobody takes my ship with me on the bridge.”
Without hesitation the bridge crew moved to the most covered position. In the momentary commotion the Captain tapped in several commands into his command chair and then took cover.
Seconds later the bridge doors parted to a hail of blaster fire. Before the Star Fleet officers could react three of them were laying on their backs with smoldering blaster marks on their chests. The bridge crew opened fire and slowed the Imperial troopers entry onto the bridge. In a flash of light a hand phaser exploded in the turbo shafts entryway. The remaining troopers fell to the deck dead.
Blaster fire erupted from behind them as troopers poured in from the conference room door. Partially stunned from the phaser explosion the bridge crew could not react in time. In seconds they were all dead.
Computer – “Command Alert! All command personnel life signs have been terminated. Initiating Auto Destruct sequence.”
The ship lit up like a super nova as its warp core imploded on its self. The Imperial Forces had over run the ship… but had failed in its capture.
Onboard the U.S.S. Venture, NCC-71854
Captain – “I told you… Its standard procedure to dump our computer core if the ship is in imminent threat of being taken over.”
Imperial Captain – “You are telling me that if you get a little scared you dump your whole computer core! I find that hard to believe.”
Imperial Technician – “Captain, I have never seen a system like this before. It is going to take some time to break this encryption.”
Captain – “The greatest minds in Starfleet developed that code at four different locations so that each would not know what the other was doing. They combined the code and ran it through a unique complex algorithm for each ship in the fleet. No two codes are alike. It will take you years to decrypt that. By then you will be destroyed.”
Imperial Captain – “LT… Take this rebel scum back to the fleet. I am sure that Lord Vader would love to have a look into your mind.”
Back on the Enterprise, NCC 1701-E
Worf – “Sir, the Venture has initiated its capture protocol. The Imperials have it.”
Picard – “Can we intercept it?”
Worf – “Not without a sizable task force Sir. As soon as the Imperials had control they moved a Star Destroyer detachment to its location. We would not stand a chance.”
Picard – “Very well. Send the update to command. Data, Worf, start planning a rescue mission.”
-This is my imagined idea. No one has the right to add, delete, or finish this story. Comments only. -
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Your dialogue is very well-written and individual for each of your characters. I have been reading and I truly appreciate this quiet yet extremely contributive addition to our forum, Mr.TRSundown, sir.
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Thanks... Again I appreciate it. This has all been a quickly typed fast running storyline... I am hoping to finish this and then go back and really write a story for it with more detail and more character development. I will keep everyone posted on the progress... I hope.
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The dark corridors were lit only by a small flame sprouting from a rock carved to make the shape of a rancor. A silhouette walked down the dusty and silent corridor into a room lit by a bright white light in the center of the room was a statue of sith
Lord his arms crossed over his chest griping a lightsaber hilt in each hand. The silhouette of the man could now be seen clearly he was dressed in white robes with a brown hooded robe covering him he looked up at the statue and took off his hood and his blond hair fell down to his shoulders he then walked towards the statue and began to climb it. He put his foot on the knee of the statue then his other foot on to its belt he reached up with is hand to reach the statues shoulder. He then pulled him self up on to the arm of the statue taking the lightsaber hilts and jumping down to the floor. Looking at the silver lightsaber hilts he noticed that they had strange markings on them sith symbol he tucked the hilt into his pocket and began to walk out of the room. “Stop” a voice echoed through the room he turned around to see a man dressed in black robes with strange markings resembling the ones on the lightsaber hilts on his left chest in blood red. “They are not yours they do not belong to you weak Jedi” the man said to him. “Who are you” the Jedi padawan spoke “I am the sith Holdan Krawn” he said in his deep voice. The Sith threw of his black robe and started to run to toward the padawan drawing his red lightsaber he jumped into the air and threw a downward slash at the padawan. The padawan rolled out the way drawing his own lightsaber and blocking a incoming strike from the Sith. The crimson red and emerald green lightsaber’s clashed each combatant pushed with all there power towards the other there blades not moving at all. Holdan then brought out another red lightsaber and swung it towards Flo-Han-Ko Jafan’s mid section Flo-Han leaped backwards just in time to avoid it, the blade just missed him. Flo-Han threw a hand out Holden got flung towards the wall hitting his back off it and collapsing to the floor. The blades if the lightsaber’s retracted and Flo-Han spoke out saying “come to the lightside only death and destruction lay at the end of the path to the darkside” Holdan looked up at Flo-Han-Ko Jafan saying “will the order forgive me”
“The new order will forgive you Master Quodur is a very forgiving master come with me” Flo-Han-Ko Jafan walked over to Holden a stretched out his arm Holdan took hold of Flo-Hans hand Flo-Han pulled him up. As the two Jedi walked out of the temple hall Holdan said to Flo-Han “what’s your name kind Jedi” “Flo-Han-Ko Jafan” Flo-Han replied
As the blue blade came hurtling towards Revan he dived out of the way and knocked it to the floor with a force push the he threw his other hand out in the direction the exile was. The dark and gloomy sith temple was lit by a strong blue light the force lightning hit the exile in center of his chest throwing him to the floor Revan continued to electrify the now bloody and batted man that lay on the floor until a screams of pain and the buzz of electricity were all that filled the dark corridors and halls. Then he stopped and turned a round the exile looked at the man in his black hooded robes as Revan withdrew the blade off his red longsaber and said in a cold dry voice another Jedi master not worthy off there title.
The exile watched as Revan strode off into the darkness off the sith temple.
the story above and this story are my first goes at SW writing so please tell me what you think and tell me what you think i can aprove upon
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Nice man awesome stories really sick job dude
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Darth Yoda... Nice stories. Your descriptions of the scenes are good and it flows pretty well. You need to work a bit on puncuation and run-on sentences though... Over all its pretty good.
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I guess I'll write a story to breathe some life back into this thread.
This is NJO Luke vs. Lightside KOTOR ending Revan. Revan has brought himself back to destroy the Jedi. The reason I put Revan as KOTOR LS is I am unsure as whether or not he was ever actually really LS. He may have been surving his own goals the whole time.
NJO Luke vs. Revan LS-KOTOR
Revan, “Are you Luke Skywalker?”
Luke, “Yes, I am.”
Revan, “I shall fight you, now, here in Exar Kun’s former meditation temple.”
Luke, “Who are you?”
Revan, “Revan.”
Revan through a massive wave of force energy at Luke to try and knock him off balance. Luke blocked it and used his body as channeled it back into the Living Force. Revan tossed force lighting at Luke which Luke also channeled back into the Living Force. Luke then tossed a powerful force push at Revan. Revan did the same thing that Luke had done and released it into the Living Force.
Revan, “I am most impressed. You have learned well from you teachers.”
The next second Revan pulled out both of his lightsabers and covered the twenty feet between them in less than half of a second. Luke dodged to the right and drew his own lightsaber. Luke was one who took every chance he got and he threw another force push at Revan. Revan blocked most of it, but still some of it got threw and he was thrown several feet back, but he landed on his feet.
Revan, “So indeed you are powerful. I know you are the Son of the Chosen One. Or at least the most powerful of them.”
This statement caught Luke of balance. What did Revan mean by the one of the Chosen One’s. Was there more than one of them?
Revan, “I can tell that you are confused by this. Your Father, Anakin Skywalker was one of the Chosen One’s. He was the most powerful of them that I know of. Or at least he had the potential to become the most powerful of them. Obi-wan Kenobi, one of your teachers, was forced to seriously damage his body when Anakin became Darth Vader. His power after this was not even a full shadow of his possible strength. I was also one of the Chosen One’s. And I believe another Chosen One is coming.
Luke, “Who is this next Chosen One?”
Revan stabbed followed by blocking Luke’s attack to his left. He then swung his lightsaber at Luke’s legs.
Revan, “I don’t know. But, I do believe he or she is already alive and learning the ways of the Force.
Luke stabbed at Revan then flipped over Revan’s head. Luke this tried to cut off one of Revan’s hands. Revan was fast though and blocked it.
Luke, “The Light or the Dark?”
Revan used the force to throw some debris at Luke, but Luke was able to block them all.
Revan, “I am unsure. Probably both.”
Luke, “How powerful will this next Chosen One be?”
Luke blocked a force push from Revan. Luke then swung at Revan’s legs. Revan blocked and force jumped a good ten feet away.
Revan, “That is another thing I do not know. I am sure that he, yes, the next Chosen One will be a he, will be more powerful than anyone you have yet trained. Kyp Durron and Anakin Solo both appear to me to have more natural force affinity, but they will not be as strong. He will be more powerful than you are now. Much more powerful. You need more training. We will teach you.”
Revan then decided to let Luke have it. He swung at Luke’s legs then used his other lightsaber to go for Luke’s head. Then he stabbed at Luke’s chest and spun and kicked him in the side. Revan didn’t wait a second though and then he continued his spin and elbowed the side of Luke’s head. By the time he landed he had stabbed at Luke with both lightsabers.
Luke wasn’t defenseless though. He parried Revans stab and went in close and shouldered him in the face, breaking his nose. Luke then tried to hit him with a force push, but Revan blocked his strike and countered with force lightning. Luke didn’t get the chance to block this and was thrown backwards.
Suddenly, Revan stopped.
Revan, “We must not destroy ourselves. I must leave now, but I will be back. Here, take this holocron. It contains many things that will help to strenghthen your New Jedi Order.
Luke looked at the gift and wondered what was in there.
Revan, “It is from many of us, including you old teachers, Obi-wan and Yoda.”
Luke, “Obi-wan and Yoda? Where are they!”
Revan, “They are still one with the Force, but now they can come back as I have now.”
Luke, “But Obi-wan told me that he would no longer be able to come back, that the distance had become to great.”
Revan, “It was, but now it is smaller. Even me, a Jedi from four thousand years ago, is now able to come back.”
Luke, “Obi-wan always came back as a “ghost” type thing, yet hear you are and your a person.”
Revan, “This also has to do with the distance. Well, that and the reuniton of us in the force.”
Luke, “What do you mean by reuniton.”
Revan, “I am sorry, but I can’t answer anymore of you questions right now. Read the holocron, you will find many answers in there.”
Without another word, Revan was gone.
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