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My new poem....(opinions please)
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canadian_girl45
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Gender: Female
Location: Ontario, Canada

Love My new poem....(opinions please)

With You

You are the only person
The one that I hold true
The one who's always by my side
To whom I say "I love you"

Every time we share
Seems endless, swept away
Yet it goes on forever, love
In every single day

Whenever I have left you
You're the one I truely miss
But when I have returned to you
We share loves sweet kiss

You are the one and only
The one that I hold true
For love is ever with us both
Because I am with you


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Fëanor
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no offense, but when i read this it reminds me for some reason of a hallmark card - i gather that was not your intention

otherwise, your poems are a work in progress...but on the right track

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canadian_girl45
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Location: Ontario, Canada

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no offense, but when i read this it reminds me for some reason of a hallmark card - i gather that was not your intention

otherwise, your poems are a work in progress...but on the right track

No it wasn't but critisism is always appreciated smile


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DreamingWarrior
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hahhaha mebbe a card, but a better one than most i have seen. which brings up a great topic, send it to hallmark and profit from your talent! haha! nice work overall.


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Fëanor
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too true.....if i weren't so prosaic i may just do that as well

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no offense, but when i read this it reminds me for some reason of a hallmark card - i gather that was not your intention

otherwise, your poems are a work in progress...but on the right track



I kinda thought it did too, though it is good yes


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canadian_girl45
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hahhaha mebbe a card, but a better one than most i have seen. which brings up a great topic, send it to hallmark and profit from your talent! haha! nice work overall.

Interesting suggestion. I might just be crazy enough to do it lol. laughing


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