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*Shows Self* The Mouse Slipped, I meant to give it an ok. Constructivly, It's A Bit fast paced. Paragraphs Help. Some Grammatical Mistakes. Overall,however, It stands out.
Barker, i was only teasing. i always say that when people vote sucks on my friends story. no biggy, it's your opinion, though you didn't mean too...he's right though, a bit fast paced, and you asked for help dana, and i'm here.
"LOOK HARRY, I HELPED FIGHT VOLDERMORT WITH YOU REMEMBER, I'M NOT A KID ANYMORE OK!"Ginny screamed so loudly Harry winced.
"I know, I know, but I don't want you in danger" Harry pleaded
"Danger, smager, who cares? I want to be at your side when you fight Vol.. Volder.. Volermort!"
"Wow. But anyways, I won't allow you to go, sorry!" Harry said like that was case closed
"Look Harry, I'm a big girl now! I can fight for myself" Ginny was made now and you could tell in her voice.
"No!" Harry said sternly
"Just because I love you and..." Ginny said quietly
"You love me" Harry grinned.
"Yes harry, I love you" Ginny said queitly
They hugged each other and Harry gave her a soft kiss on the cheek. Ginny giggled and smiled, the way she always did when she was happy.
"Hey, Harry," Ron punched Harry playfully.
"Come on, you 3," Hermione said like a mother
"Mum, wants us home at 1:15" Ron said
"Well, it's 12:45 and it will take us at least 20 minutes to get to the burrow" Hermione said, smilling at Ron.
"Ginny hold on to my hand" Hermione said sternly "I'll take Ginny and you two can take each other. OWWW!" Hermione now had a tiny scar for were Ginny had pined with her long fingernail.
"sorry" Ginny said as she switched the other hand
Before you knew it they were down the street, waving at Harry and Ron.
"Come on Harry!" Ron yelled
"Huh?" harry noticed that Ron already was down the street and waving, too.
"Down the street" Harry whispered
Harry was down the street in not time, with his broom.
"We only have 10 minutes, come on!" Hermione said and at that she said "Acio Nimbus 2000"
"You fly, now" Harry asked
But Hermione, Ginny, and Ron were already in the sky flying on their brooms.
Harry kicked off the ground with his feet and was in the sky. Harry missed Quiditch and the feeling that he got in the sky as much as Ron and Hermione. He looked around and then put his eyes on Ginny. She was coming, there was no way around it. He still had the feeling of butterflies in his stomach whenever she smiled at him.
He love her, but he didn't want her dead.
By the time, he stopped thinking of Ginny, they were at the Burrow. He missed the Burrow and the Weasleys so much. Ron, Hermione, Ginny, and Harry mounted their brooms on the ground and landed. Harry noticed that there were lots of white decorations and rose petals everywhere. Then Harry remembered that Bill and Fluer's wedding was in a couple of days.
Harry followed his friends in the house and noticed on the Weasley clock in the middle of Ron and Hermione's name was Harry's. All four of their names clicked to 'home'. The next, thing Harry noticed was that beside Bill and Fluer was Tonks and Lupin, and a big congrats sign saying 'Congrats Bill and Fluer and Lupin and Tonks'
Tonks now had a blackish, grease, hair color. Tonks had a white flower ruffle dress on and it reached her knees. Lupin had a green suit with a purple dotted tie on and had a pink hat with a blue bow on it.
Bill was wearing a normal black suit on with a white tie and Fluer was wearing a baby blue dress which went to her thighs.
Lupin whispered to Bill "Your clothes are so boring."
Harry laughed while he looked at Lupin.
"What's so funny?" Lupin asked
"Nothing" Harry forced out while he was laughing "Just love your suit"
"Why thank you Harry" Lupin said while smiling "See, people know when someone has a fashion statement on" Lupin told Bill
Mrs. Weasley hugged Harry so tight, he thought he was dead. Mrs. Weasley had her hair in pigtails, which was unusual and she had a yellow smily tie on with a bright firehouse red dress on.
"You like it Harry, it's the new fashion" Mrs Weasley asked, twirling her dress around.
"Um. Well it's something that I've never seen before"
"I just wanted to get in the spirit of wedding" Mrs. Weasley said, "Oh Dear It's so late, off to bed you four"
There were four moans but Mrs. Weasley gave them a evil stare that could kill you, so they ran upstairs like they were on fire.
When they were upstairs, Harry just laid in the spare bed, Ron put there.
"Good night" Ron and Harry said together to Hermione and Ginny.
"How can I sleep, when my mind is packed thoughts and Voldermort is out there." Harry asked Ron, but Ron was already asleep and snoaring.
"Good night, Ron" Harry turned off the lights and tried to go to sleep.
'Yes Master' a faint voice said that sounded evil and close to death
'THEN TELL ME WHERE IS THAT STUPID LITTLE BOY WHO COULDN'T FOLLOW ORDERS" This voice was a demented voice, who sounded full of life.
'I don't now master''Probably in the alley way"
The faint voice whimpered, and then sounded like he fell on the ground.
"NOW THAT'S WHAT YOU GET, SEVERUES WHEN YOU CAN'T FOLLOW THROUGH'
"Yes, Master"
A few minutes past and Wormtail brought Draco back.
"Now tell me Draco, what is wrong with you?"
"Snape interfered" Draco looked down and saw the 'unconscious' Snape, who looked pale.
"Don't lie to me. Never lie to the Dark Lord"
"Yes, Master" Draco pleaded
"You let that pathetic old man, wear you down. and then you listening to him compromising"
"No, no, my lord, nothing of the sort"
Voldermort lifted his wand and said...
Harry bolted right up and was sweating all over his body. By this time, it was morning and he saw that Ron was not his bed, so he got dressed and walked down stairs.
When he walkd down stairs , no one was there. Complete silence.
"Ron" Harry yelled out "Hermione"
He then thought the only place they could be was outside, so he went outside and was frightened and suprised of the massive noice, that his friends were making.
"HAPPY BIRTHDAY" everyone yelled
The front yard was decroated with stremers, balloons, and 4 stacks of presents.
All his friends were there, Ron, Hermione, Ginny, Neville, Dean, Charlie, Fred and George, Percy, and to his suprise Cho Change was there to.
'This is going to be a long party' Harry thought as he walked over to Cho and smiled
Out of the corner of Ginny's eye she was watching them move every bone in there body very carefully.
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Oct 18th, 2005 12:34 AM
Mrs. Weasley hugged Harry so tight, he thought he was dead. Mrs. Weasley had her hair in pigtails, which was unusual and she had a yellow smily tie on with a bright firehouse red dress on.
