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Tha C-Master
Zitz! Rash! Pimple!

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Location: Kicking pigs out of the screen.

I feel ya bro... I really do...

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Dec 16th, 2005 01:18 PM

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XjainaX
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Gender: Female
Location: City of LIfe

quote: (post)
Originally posted by T.V.O.T.I.
Searching For Words To Explain

Lately I have not had a lot to write about
It would only be me being me
To question why that might be
It is a saddening thought to think
That my life has lost all of it's spontaneity
I remember times when smiling came easy
And although crying isn't pleasant
At least I felt some type of emotion
I guess my life could be
Summed up as a ballad-less ballad
Confusion has been a part of me for such a long time
That now I cannot shake the feeling
That a piece of me is somehow forever lost
How am I ever to be whole in the proverbial sense
When what I am missing is forgotten

wow, that really reminds me of how I feel some of the time, smile

good one

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Dec 16th, 2005 08:09 PM

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Dante Vlada
Living My Last Days

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Its always nice to write something someone can relate to.

Dec 21st, 2005 04:56 PM

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Dante Vlada
Living My Last Days

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The Way She Feels Inside

It always starts the same way
With a random hello between strangers
Moment pass and you find yourself
Captivated by the hope that this could be the one
Your walls become paper thin
Still he doesn't see through the masquerade
Just like the black and white waterfall in your dreams
No one ever seems to see the beauty inside

Dec 28th, 2005 01:48 PM

Tha C-Master
Zitz! Rash! Pimple!

Gender: Male
Location: Kicking pigs out of the screen.

I know what thats like... and not just for myself... ironically.

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Dec 28th, 2005 04:07 PM

Dante Vlada
Living My Last Days

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I dont think it's that ironic. Initially I was going to write a general piece, but I let a friend's emotions influence this poem.

Dec 28th, 2005 09:03 PM

Coldfire
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Gender: Female
Location: Vancouver, Canada

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Originally posted by T.V.O.T.I.
I dont think it's that ironic. Initially I was going to write a general piece, but I let a friend's emotions influence this poem.

Hey, haven't talked to you in a while!

How you been hun?

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Dec 29th, 2005 05:32 AM

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Dante Vlada
Living My Last Days

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Originally posted by Coldfire
Hey, haven't talked to you in a while! How you been hun?

I thought you were avoiding me like a lot of people around here. I am bored atm, but happy. I had my fave pie just a few mins ago. APPLE!!

Dec 30th, 2005 03:05 PM

Dante Vlada
Living My Last Days

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Differences

You push me away
She starts to fall as it all fades away
She surrenders her everything to him
There's beauty in goodbye
Broken with nothing left to say
In silence I will love her still
You push me away
She loses herself in his touch
She feels comfort wrapped in his arms
There's beauty in goodbye
Broken with nothing left to say
In silence I will love her still
You push me away
She says that he completes her
She believes with him is where she belongs
There's beauty in goodbye
Broken with nothing left to say
In silence I will love her still
You pushed me away
I have no reason left to fight
"Where is the beauty in goodbye?"

Dec 30th, 2005 03:41 PM

Tha C-Master
Zitz! Rash! Pimple!

Gender: Male
Location: Kicking pigs out of the screen.

I just went through that, I see so much more meaning in your poems now... yes

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Dec 30th, 2005 03:52 PM

Dante Vlada
Living My Last Days

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thnx C

Dec 30th, 2005 04:04 PM

Coldfire
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Location: Vancouver, Canada

quote: (post)
Originally posted by T.V.O.T.I.
I thought you were avoiding me like a lot of people around here. I am bored atm, but happy. I had my fave pie just a few mins ago. APPLE!!

Avoiding you? I wouldn't do that!

Apple pie?!?! eek!

Yummers!!!

And keep up the good work happy

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Jan 1st, 2006 04:22 AM

Dante Vlada
Living My Last Days

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quote: (post)
Originally posted by Coldfire
Avoiding you? I wouldn't do that!

Apple pie?!?! Yummers!!!

And keep up the good work

well I still havent seen much of you? messed

Jan 20th, 2006 02:48 PM

Dante Vlada
Living My Last Days

Gender: Unspecified
Location:

hello ppl this is a song about my friend Dara. smile

I am sharing it with you guys first in hopes of getting some feed back before I present it to her. embarrasment

she woke up monday mornin'
still confused from yesterday
how could she trust the boy
who made her hate today
Sitting in an empty room
She doesn't know what to do, but...

(Chorus)
'though she's lost her way
Her beating heart won't die
Lost in her pain
her starry eyes will sing
I'll find my way through
I'll find my way through
I'll find my way through

she finds comfort in her dress of black
What does it matter that her soul is masked
No one can see beauty she holds inside
Alone she waits for the heartache to pass
Strumming her guitar under the night sky
She doesn't know what to do, but...

(Chorus 2x)

Jan 20th, 2006 04:11 PM

Sancty
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Gender: Female
Location: -

quote: (post)
Originally posted by T.V.O.T.I.
hello ppl this is a song about my friend Dara. I am sharing it with you guys first in hopes of getting some feed back before I present it to her.

she woke up monday mornin'
still confused from yesterday
how could she trust the boy
who made her hate today
Sitting in an empty room
She doesn't know what to do, but...

(Chorus)
'though she's lost her way
Her beating heart won't die
Lost in her pain
her starry eyes will sing
I'll find my way through
I'll find my way through
I'll find my way through

she finds comfort in her dress of black
What does it matter that her soul is masked
No one can see beauty she holds inside
Alone she waits for the heartache to pass
Strumming her guitar under the night sky
She doesn't know what to do, but...

(Chorus 2x)

That's great! I love it!

Jan 20th, 2006 04:17 PM

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Kharhmah
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quote: (post)
Originally posted by T.V.O.T.I.
hello ppl this is a song about my friend Dara. I am sharing it with you guys first in hopes of getting some feed back before I present it to her.

she woke up monday mornin'
still confused from yesterday
how could she trust the boy
who made her hate today
Sitting in an empty room
She doesn't know what to do, but...

(Chorus)
'though she's lost her way
Her beating heart won't die
Lost in her pain
her starry eyes will sing
I'll find my way through
I'll find my way through
I'll find my way through

she finds comfort in her dress of black
What does it matter that her soul is masked
No one can see beauty she holds inside
Alone she waits for the heartache to pass
Strumming her guitar under the night sky
She doesn't know what to do, but...

(Chorus 2x)

That's brilliant.

I'm sure she'll love it. happy

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Jan 20th, 2006 04:44 PM

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XjainaX
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Gender: Female
Location: City of LIfe

It is very sweet - its great BUT ummm the first and last stanzas/verses have completely different feels to them - ie short vs long etc.... so it doesn't quite flow

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Jan 20th, 2006 05:31 PM

Dante Vlada
Living My Last Days

Gender: Unspecified
Location:

to all of you who know Stacey...I have some very bad news.

Stacey was hit by a bus today. I don't know too much about the specifics. Hell I dont even know if she made it or not. I will keep you guys updated.

Jan 23rd, 2006 05:14 PM

Coldfire
<3 <3 <3

Gender: Female
Location: Vancouver, Canada

quote: (post)
Originally posted by T.V.O.T.I.
well I still havent seen much of you?

I know, cuz I've been soooo busy

quote: (post)
Originally posted by T.V.O.T.I.
hello ppl this is a song about my friend Dara. I am sharing it with you guys first in hopes of getting some feed back before I present it to her.

she woke up monday mornin'
still confused from yesterday
how could she trust the boy
who made her hate today
Sitting in an empty room
She doesn't know what to do, but...

(Chorus)
'though she's lost her way
Her beating heart won't die
Lost in her pain
her starry eyes will sing
I'll find my way through
I'll find my way through
I'll find my way through

she finds comfort in her dress of black
What does it matter that her soul is masked
No one can see beauty she holds inside
Alone she waits for the heartache to pass
Strumming her guitar under the night sky
She doesn't know what to do, but...

(Chorus 2x)

omg it's great! big grin

quote: (post)
Originally posted by T.V.O.T.I.
to all of you who know Stacey...I have some very bad news.

Stacey was hit by a bus today. I don't know too much about the specifics. Hell I dont even know if she made it or not. I will keep you guys updated.

omg no way!