Ya Krunk'd Floo
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ROBERT DAVIDSON, if that is your real name, I like it. I like it a lot.
The structure is interesting and challenging, even if the rhyming scheme is occasionally inconsistent. I also like the sentiment, even if it doesn't ring as true to life as I would like it. Unless, of course, each stanza is the dream and the 3 line intervals are reality, as you perceive it. If this is the case, then I find it a little too pessimistic, but still highly interesting and a welcome break from the ususal dirge that is slopped around here.
Good stuff.
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Full fathom five thy father lies;
Of his bones are coral made;
Those are pearls that were his eyes:
Nothing of him that doth fade
But doth suffer a sea-change
Into something rich and strange.
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A New World Is Rising From The Dust
Nov 7th, 2005 10:49 AM
