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The Uprising Imperial - A Star Wars FanFic
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Dusty
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Originally posted by lordzeb
okay, i've just started to read it, and you may want to check into this.

tense was a slight problem but has gotten better.

numbers usually from one to twenty, (give or take a few numbers) are typed out, never like



especially when it is like that you should really type out Especially one man.

a little bit more could be done with the detail, but it's looking great. captilization was a bit of a problem, not capitlizing Imperial once, and having capitals after when someone talks. what i mean is Said. it should be said after quotation marks.

another mistake was when someone different talks, a new paragraph is started.

other than that, great job, and i'll continue to read your story.

btw, the mistakes i pointed out are in the first post, so i don't know if it has improved or not.


Meh, It's not an essay. I'm just writing what I'm imagining. Enjoy happy

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i know. just thought i would be helpful. i don't worry about that stuff in my story, and i take no time to check over my work, and here i am telling others about their mistakes.........oh well. going to read more.


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MOre more more! lol... its very good except for a few typos....


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There's one thing I hate more than life, and you've guessed it, it's fan fiction.

But this seems to be one of the better ones I've read. Hope that was an inspiring piece of feedback.

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Thanks?

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I'll get to it. messed

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I'll get to it. messed

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