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hplover4eva
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 harry potter
i hope u like this story i aint tha good at writing so tell me if u dont like me story an i will stop writing
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Jan 30th, 2006 08:26 PM |
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hplover4eva
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i have been think on wat to put as a title i have 1n idea
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Jan 30th, 2006 08:28 PM |
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hplover4eva
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its Harry Potter and the crown of fire
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Jan 30th, 2006 08:28 PM |
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hplover4eva
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heres something im goin to start my story off with
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Jan 30th, 2006 08:30 PM |
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hplover4eva
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chapter 1:The long endless summer
Harry is once again back at the derslys for summer , he has only been back there for a week and he is now living back under the stairs as his unwelcoming aunt is coming to stay.
“Harry get up , were going to pick up aunt Marge “ said petunia
“alright I’m up “ said Harry in a angry voice
“ right im warning you now boy any magic used you will not have any food for 2 weeks, do you understand “ said uncle Vernon
“yes uncle Vernon” said Harry with a smile on his face .
“ come on move get in the car” said uncle Vernon
Its now 5`oclock and the have just arrived at the train station waiting, for aunt Marge.
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Jan 30th, 2006 08:33 PM |
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hplover4eva
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will any 1n type her plz tell me wats wrong wiv it
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Feb 19th, 2006 10:41 PM |
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silver_stars
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yes, the story has its potential but im gonna have to give u some criticscim
1. Reread your stories. Make punctuation, grammar, and spelling right
2. Make the quotations right
3. Don't rush! Its better if you slow it down, add a ton more detail
4. Don't use numbers, instead spell it out; two instead of 2 and so on
Hey, plz dont feel bad, i want to be an editor or author some day, so i go around here and criticize just about everyone. The story has potential, just bulk it up!
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Feb 20th, 2006 02:22 AM |
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silver_stars
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oh, but i love the title idea!
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Feb 20th, 2006 02:22 AM |
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hplover4eva
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thanx willu help me wiv the story cos im no good with writen storys
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Feb 20th, 2006 07:11 PM |
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